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CELPIP Writing
Email Topics
The email may be formal, semi-formal or informal.
The question tells you exactly what to write about, and you must write something about each specific point. If you only write about 2 out of 3 points, your maximum score will be 66%!
You may be asked to write an email that:
- complains
- requests
- advises
- shares information
- apologizes
CELPIP Writing
Survey Response Topics
The second CELPIP Writing topic is an essay expressing your opinion about something. In general, this essay often takes the form of a survey response.
When you write your response, you must have a clear structure and a variety of sentence structures. Furthermore, you must include a:
- complete introduction. Specifically, your introduction paraphrases the questions and introduces your main ideas.
- well-developed paragraph for each of your main ideas. Basically, these two paragraphs include a statement, and explanation, and an example.
- conclusion. Generally speaking, this restates your main ideas and answers the question.
“…When I started class with Angela, I was so confused. I understand much better now…”
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CELPIP Writing Topics
Below you’ll find a selection of CELPIP writing Topics.
There are a few things to remember. Firstly, make sure that you practice writing your responses on a computer keyboard because that is what you will use in the test. Secondly, remember that both writing tasks have a word allowance of 150 to 200 words. And thirdly, the total amount of time for each writing task is 30 minutes.
If you would like to practice the writing section with a timer, try these two CELPIP Mock writing tests on my YouTube channel
CELPIP Writing Topics – Email
CELPIP Advice Email
1. A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
2. A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
CELPIP Complaint Email
1. You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and the time keeping of the other students.
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
2. You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
3. You recently ordered a book from an online bookseller. The book you’ve received is not the latest edition, even though you paid extra for the latest edition version. Write an email to the bookseller complaining about the service ,explaining the urgency for the latest edition, describing why the earlier edition is inadequate.
4. You recently visited a zoo where a man died after falling into the tigers’ enclosure. You were unable to do anything but wanted to show your concern for visitors’ safety. Write an email to the zoo’s director describing the incident, complaining about the short fencing, and showing concern for visitors’ safety.
CELPIP Apology Email
1. You work part-time as an Uber driver but forgot to pick up a customer that you had agreed to transport to the airport. Write an email to the client apologizing for not picking him up, explaining why you didn’t pick him up, and offering him a free ride.
2. While shopping in the supermarket, you accidently hit a display with your shopping cart. The display fell onto an young child and hurt him. Write an email to the child’s mother apologizing for hurting her child, explaining what happened, and expressing concern for the child’s welfare.
CELPIP Request Email
1. You have registered for a six-month computer training program at Sambro Community College. Therefore, you want to rent a room from the Sambro Housing Agency. Write an email telling them when you need the room, the type of room you would prefer, and the reason for your request.
2. During your upcoming vacation, you will be visiting a new city. As a result, you want some information about the area. Write an email to the tourist bureau asking them to provide some suggestions for where to go, what to see, and how to get there.
3. You work in a manufacturing unit where your coworkers have been harassing you. Write an email to the HR department describing who harassed you and their relationship to you , when each instance occurred – date, time, and location, and the evidence you have of the situation
4. You and your friends are planning to go to Dubai on vacation. You have to arrange hotel accommodation and need details about hotel rooms and other facilities before making a final decision. Write an email to the hotel managers requesting details about the hotel, describing the type of room, and identifying any special needs (i.e. smoking or non-smoking room)
5. You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write an email to your landlord explaining why you are writing to him, why you cannot pay the rent, and when you will pay the rent.
6. At the end of the term, your old teacher will be leaving your school and taking maternity leave. Since you no longer attend the school, you would like to arrange a leaving card through a friend. Write an email to your friend asking him to organize a card for your teacher, to circulate it for signatures, and to get it to your teacher before she leaves.
CELPIP Application Email
You’re looking for a part-time job in an office. In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the office manager in which you apply for the position. As you write your email, you should:
- introduce yourself
- explain your experience and special skills
- tell him or her when you think you could start
You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company / museum / art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
- introduce yourself
- explain your experience and special skills
- tell him or her when you think you could start
CELPIP Writing Topics – Survey Response
Funding
- Your city’s administration is considering allocating funds to two possible projects. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for bikes lanes or a pool. Indicate and explain your preference.
- Option A: bike lanes – build new separate lanes for bikers
- Option B: renovate gym – fund a swimming pool and spa centre in an existing gym
2. Every year, your company sponsors a float in the local parade. However, this year has been difficult, and it’s wondering just how important this event is to its staff. Your superiors have sent you a survey asking you to tell them whether you think this is a good investment, or not.
- Option A: Spend money on the parade float
- Option B: Do not spend money on the parade float
3. For years, you have volunteered for a local theater group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
- Option A: Spend money on costumes
- Option B: Spend money on storage
Security
The management of your apartment building has decided to upgrade the security. It has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have as their new security measure.
- Option A: New night vision cameras covering the area around the apartment building
- Option B: installing biometric locks on the doors
Workplace
1. You work in a company offering IT services. Your company is conducting a survey to understand employees’ work environment preferences.
- Option A: give a salary hike to all the employees on the basis of experience
- Option B: give a salary hike to all employees on the basis of educational qualification
2. A local NGO for gender equality has sent out an opinion survey to know about the general public’s views on pay-equality and gender-specific job placement.
Respond to the survey offering your opinion about either option a or option b.
- Option A: Women are capable of doing all jobs
- Option B: Women are good in some jobs but not fit for all types of work
3. The company you work for would like to ask employees to work on Saturdays for the next two months in order to catch up on its backlog. Therefore, it has circulated a survey asking your opinion about two possible options.
- Option A: Half the staff would work for four hours every Saturday.
- Option B: All the staff would work for two hours every Saturday.
Technology
1. A local NGO, working for the betterment of school children, has sent an opinion survey to see what people think about the presence of multimedia gadgets in kids lives.
- Option A: kids should have no access to gadgets like smartphones or iPads etc.
- Option B: kids should be encouraged to read books in their free time.
2. Your local school is considering implementing an online blackboard so that elementary school children can submit their homework online. They’ve already experienced some opposition to the suggestion, so they are now seeking insight into the issue from the broader community. The school has sent you a survey asking you to identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: kids should submit their homework online
- Option B: children should continue to hand in their homework on paper.
Immigration
1. An independent agency is conducting a survey on immigration policy. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for the government’s immigration policy. Please identify and explain your preference for:
2. An independent agency is conducting a survey on immigrant services. It has sent out an opinion survey to discover whether immigrants need more support during their transition to Canada. Please identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: increasing the amount of support provided to immigrants
- Option B: maintaining the current level of support provided to immigrants
Agriculture
Your government is proposing a new agricultural policy, but some organizations oppose it because they feel it is against local farmers. You’ve been asked to to identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: importing cheaper grains and vegetables from other countries
- Option B: increasing the amount of land under cultivation and supporting local farmers
Construction
1. The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
- Option A: Build a Factory
- Option B: Do not build a factory
2. Your government is trying to decide between two projects. One project is to build a nuclear plant, the other is a forestation project that would result in a park. You have received an opinion survey asking you to identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: the nuclear plant project
- Option B: the forestation project
3. Your apartment manager needs to turn off the hot water to your building for maintenance that will take 6 hours. For 6 hours you will be without hot water. He has sent you an opinion survey asking you to identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: Scheduling the maintenance in the morning from 6am to noon
- Option B: Scheduling the maintenance in the evening from 5pm to 11pm
Facilities
1. You work in a very big office building that has a cheap, and very popular, restaurant. However, the building manager is thinking of removing the restaurant because he would like to replace it with a childcare facility. Since he doesn’t want his final decision to result in businesses moving out, he has asked which option you would prefer:
- Option A: a Childcare Facility
- Option B: Keep the restaurant
2. After a series of complaints about dogs running off-leash in the community’s parks, your city’s manager is reviewing the rules. You have been asked to explain your preference for:
- Option A: public parks should be primarily for people and dogs should be leashed at all times.
- Option B: public parks tend to be very quiet, so dogs should be allowed to roam freely off-leash provided they are not aggressive
3. Your supervisor would like to reorganize the workspace and is trying to decide who to put in windowless offices. She has sent you an opinion survey asking you to identify and explain your preference for:
- Option A: A personal office with no window
- Option B: A shared office with a window
An independent agency is conducting survey on immigration policy of the country. The agency has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like the government to plan good immigration policy
A) Number of immigrants coming to our country should be lowered
B) New easy to Immigrate policy, to bring in more immigrants.
Response:
In my opinion, bringing reforms in the immigration policy would be a better choice. Even though having less foreign nationals has its own benefits; however, my choice offers more practical advantages for the country.
One of the key gains of having faster and easier methods for immigration would be to attract foreign talent from across the globe. It will make Canada a top-notch choice for the skilled workers to settle in. Moreover, the country is lacking in terms of technology and healthcare; Nevertheless, if we allow the international students to migrate, it will not only help the nation progress in these fields but also create ample job opportunities.
In contrast, since the rate of aging among indigenous people is higher, the country might experience a drop in the population in upcoming years, which could create economic problems. The businesses and manufacturing units may shut down due to a labor shortage. For example, Switzerland faced similar issues in 2012 which led them to take serious steps to attract people from across the Asia continent.
On the basis of above-mentioned points, I still stand by my stance. That is, my opinion is a good initiative for development of the nation.
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You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and the time keeping of the other students.
Dear Mrs. Deepa
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
I am writing to express my annoyance at a situation that I have recently been encountering in my English language learning course.
To begin with, I have discovered that the course offered is highly expensive as it is arduous for the students to pay this huge amount of fees. Further, English teachers are less educated, and their teaching strategies and mode of instruction are inferior to my expectations. apart from this, before his course, we were told that reading materials would be provided by the institution. however, I have not received notes and reading materials from any online platform. Nevertheless, latecomers showed up late in the class which also affected the other students in the class.
To suggest improvements, I would recommend hiring highly qualified teachers and revising the fee structure based on the student’s financial needs in order to attract more students.
your cooperation in this matter is highly appreciated. furthermore, an open line of communication from your side, in this case, would greatly help out.
Yours Sincerely,
Nitasha
Score 8
A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Thank you for including me in your survey to identify your residents’ preferences for constructing bike lanes Gym, and swimming pool. I would prefer to renovate the gym, pool, and spa center rather than building bike lanes. the reasons for my preferences are physical and mental health.
In terms of physical health, I feel that the gym is good for people’s physical health as it can strengthen bones and muscles and combat health conditions. Moreover, it also helps in improving our ability to do day-to-day activities.
In addition, it is highly beneficial for people who suffer from psychological disorders. According to perspective, constructing a spa center in an existing gym would be the best option to relieve the stress level of the residents and also promote relaxation which helps in the growth and development of an individual.
I believe my preference is shared by almost everyone in the building and hope the best decision can be taken in terms of allocating funds for bike lanes or gym renovation.
Score 8
A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Thank you for including me in your survey to identify your residents’ preferences for constructing bike lanes Gym, and swimming pool. I would prefer to renovate the gym, pool, and spa center rather than building bike lanes. the reasons for my preferences are physical and mental health.
In terms of physical health, I feel that the gym is good for people’s physical health as it can strengthen bones and muscles and combat health conditions. Moreover, it also helps in improving our ability to do day-to-day activities.
In addition, it is highly beneficial for people who suffer from psychological disorders. According to perspective, constructing a spa center in an existing gym would be the best option to relieve the stress level of the residents and also promote relaxation which helps in the growth and development of an individual.
I believe my preference is shared by almost everyone in the building and hope the best decision can be taken in terms of allocating funds for bike lanes or gym renovation.
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Your city’s administration is considering allocating funds to two possible projects. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for bikes lanes or a pool. Indicate and explain your preference.
Option A: bike lanes – build new separate lanes for bikers
Option B: renovate gym – fund a swimming pool and spa centre in an existing gym
Thank you for including me in your survey to identify your residents’ preferences for constructing bike lanes Gym, and swimming pool. I would prefer to renovate the gym, pool, and spa center rather than building bike lanes. the reasons for my preferences are physical and mental health.
In terms of physical health, I feel that the gym is good for people’s physical health as it can strengthen bones and muscles and combat health conditions. Moreover, it also helps in improving our ability to do day-to-day activities.
In addition, it is highly beneficial for people who suffer from psychological disorders. According to perspective, constructing a spa center in an existing gym would be the best option to relieve the resident’s stress level and promote relaxation which helps in the growth and development of an individual.
I believe my preference is shared by almost everyone in the building and hope the best decision can be taken in terms of allocating funds for bike lanes or gym renovation.
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Your city’s administration is considering allocating funds to two possible projects. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for bikes lanes or a pool. Indicate and explain your preference.
Option A: bike lanes – build new separate lanes for bikers
Option B: renovate gym – fund a swimming pool and spa centre in an existing gym.
Thank you for including me in your survey to identify your residents’ preferences for constructing bike lanes Gym, and swimming pool. I would prefer to renovate the gym, pool, and spa center rather than building bike lanes. the reasons for my preferences are physical and mental health.
In terms of physical health, I feel that the gym is good for people’s physical health as it can strengthen bones and muscles and combat health conditions. Moreover, it also helps in improving our ability to do day-to-day activities.
In addition, it is highly beneficial for people who suffer from psychological disorders. According to my perspective, constructing a spa center in an existing gym would be the best option to relieve the resident’s stress level and promote relaxation which helps in the growth and development of an individual.
I believe my preference is shared by almost everyone in the building and hope the best decision can be taken in terms of allocating funds for bike lanes or gym renovation.
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A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Hopefully, you are doing amazing. My apologies for being late to express gratitude for your parenting. Many congratulations from my side to both that you are blessed with a baby. well, this is the best news that I have ever received since this year.
Talking about the parenting role, I would say, this is the hardest part of any parent to nourish their child. So far as my experience is concerned, parents play a pivotal role as instructors in the growth and development of the child. They provide guidance that will help them to choose the right path in their life.
Moreover, I would recommend some organizations that will be really worthwhile during parenting. care.com is one such website that delivers home and childcare services. Additionally, this provides the nannies and babysitters that you truly need because I know that it will be challenging to care for the child alone.
I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon!
Best regards,
Nitasha
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A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Hopefully, you are doing amazing. My apologies for being late to express gratitude for your parenting. Many congratulations from my side to both that you are blessed with a baby. well, this is the best news that I have ever received since this year.
Talking about the parenting role, I would say, this is the hardest part of any parent to nourish their child. So far as my experience is concerned, parents play a pivotal role as instructors in the growth and development of the child. They provide guidance that will help them to choose the right path in their life.
Moreover, I would recommend some organizations that will be really worthwhile during parenting. care.com is one such website that delivers home and childcare services. Additionally, this provides the nannies and babysitters that you truly need because I know that it will be challenging to care for the child alone.
I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon!
Best regards,
Nitasha
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A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Dear Ankita,
Hopefully, you are doing amazing. My apologies for being late to express gratitude for your parenting. Many congratulations from my side to both that you are blessed with a baby. well, this is the best news that I have ever received since this year.
Talking about the parenting role, I would say, this is the hardest part of any parent to nourish their child. So far as my experience is concerned, parents play a pivotal role as instructors in the growth and development of the child. They provide guidance that will help them to choose the right path in their life.
Moreover, I would recommend some organizations that will be really worthwhile during parenting. care.com is one such website that delivers home and childcare services. Additionally, this provides the nannies and babysitters that you truly need because I know that it will be challenging to care for the child alone.
I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon!
Best regards,
Nitasha
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A family member has recently had a baby and is overwhelmed by parenting.
Write an email encouraging the young couple in their new parental role, explaining why you think that parents are the best teachers, and offering support (suggestions for organizations they could turn to, financial, babysitting, etc.)
Dear Ankita,
Hopefully, you are doing amazing. My apologies for being late to express gratitude for your parenting. Many congratulations from my side to both that you are blessed with a baby. well, this is the best news that I have ever received since this year.
Talking about the parenting role, I would say, this is the hardest part of any parent to nourish their child. So far as my experience is concerned, parents play a pivotal role as instructors in the growth and development of the child. They provide guidance that will help them to choose the right path in their life.
Moreover, I would recommend some organizations that will be really worthwhile during parenting. care.com is one such website that delivers home and childcare services. Additionally, this provides the nannies and babysitters that you truly need because I know that it will be challenging to care for the child alone.
I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon!
Best regards,
Nitasha
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Your city’s administration is considering allocating funds to two possible projects. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for bikes lanes or a pool. Indicate and explain your preference.
Option A: bike lanes – build new separate lanes for bikers
Option B: renovate gym – fund a swimming pool and spa centre in an existing gym
Thanks for including me in your survey to identify your residents’ preferences for constructing bike lanes Gym, and swimming pool. I would prefer to renovate the gym, pool, and spa centre rather than build bike lanes. The reasons for my preferences are physical and mental health.
In terms of physical health, I feel that the gym is good for people’s physical health as it can strengthen bones and muscles and combat health conditions. Moreover, it also helps in improving our ability to do day-to-day activities.
In addition, it is highly beneficial for people who suffer from psychological disorders. According to perspective, constructing a spa centre in an existing gym would be the best option to relieve the residents’ stress levels and promote relaxation which helps in the growth and development of an individual.
I believe my preference is shared by almost everyone in the building and hope the best decision can be taken in terms of allocating funds for bike lanes or gym renovation.
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Television Survey
Your local TV channel wants to decide on either creating a new family sitcom or a documentary series for the evening slot between Monday to Friday.
Choose between options A and B. Why do you prefer your option? Explain the reasons for your choice, and write about 150-200 words.
Option A: Family Sitcom: The sitcom will feature comedy topics about daily life with famous actors.
Option B: Documentary Series: The documentary will cover a wide range of topics including animals, human psychology, and the solar system.
Dear Indi Channel,
Personally, I would prefer the Option B-Documentary Series because its provides the better knowledge about content for all of us because some endangers species of animals becomes extinct day by day.
Additionally, We have different people of all age group form different nation. I believe maximum audience love to watch short information videos rather than large family shows.In this way our youngsters get chance to gain some knowledgeable data from television instead by stick on their mobile phones.
Nonetheless, People watch television to relax and de-stress, in the current fast pace life most of us uses their mobile phone to watch movies and informational videos, television play a vital role to unite the family members at one place. Additionally, information content by visual effect would be beneficial to retain the knowledge for the longer period of time.
Based on the aforementioned reasoning, I still stand by my Stance. That is option B: Documentary series is more clearly feasible over family sitcom. I thanks to allowing us to get involved in this survey.
Best Regards
Minder Singh
score 7
You work part-time as an Uber driver but forgot to pick up a customer that you had agreed to transport to the airport.
Write an email to the client apologizing for not picking him up,
explaining why you didn’t pick him up, and
offering him a free ride.
Response:
Dear Mark,
I hope you’re well. I am writing today to apologize for the inconvenience that you had to go through because I mistakenly missed picking you from 24 North Street, Kitchener yesterday.
Usually, I get my car checked before going for the rides; however, I was running late the previous day which led to the negligence. In consequence, when I accepted your ride on uber, I observed an oil leakage from my car and got tensed about it. Since it was a serious issue, I immediately went to the car repair shop and got it repaired but forgot to inform you about the same.
To make up for my fault and the time you had to wait, I offer you a free ride whenever you book my cab again. I understand that this will still not make up for yesterday, but I assure you this error won’t happen again.
You are a valued customer, and I hope you continue to trust me with your pickups. Please don’t hesitate to contact me if you want to discuss this further.
Yours Sincerely,
John.
Score 9
You recently ordered a product online. When it arrived, you found that the product was not as shown on the website and it had some defects. You would like to return the product and seek a refund.
Write an email to the customer care of the website in about 150-200. Your email should do the following things:
• Describe the details of the product including the date and time of the order and delivery.
• Mention how it was not similar to the product you ordered and the problems you came across.
• State how you would like the representative to resolve the issue you have faced.
Response:
Dear Amazon Representative,
I recently purchased a Samsung Galaxy M14 phone from Amazon on 12th August 2023 at 12:53 pm and got it delivered at my home address i.e., 24 North Street, Kitchener, ON N2M4E3.
The purpose of my writing today is to lodge a complaint about the problems that I encountered while using the product. The mobile phone I ordered was supposed to have 16 GB RAM; however the one I received had 8 GB. In addition, while testing the product, I felt utterly disappointed when I found scratches near the front camera sensor, leading to bad quality pictures.
In light of this issue, I seek your cooperation in initiating the return of the product and providing a full refund of my purchase. To compensate for the unsatisfactory service that I received from a customer centric company like Amazon, I expect an additional discount on my next purchase.
I am looking forward to seeing how my suggestions translate into prompt actions from your side. Your kind cooperation would be most appreciated.
Yours Sincerely,
Mr. R Smith
Score 10
You recently purchased a fitness program online which did not help you lose any weight.
• Mention when and where you bought this course
• Describe why you were disappointed
• Urge the instructor to remedy the situation
Dear Instructor
I purpose of writing the mail to inform about mu journey to lose weight. I purchased the elite package from your website 2 months ago. My registration number is GR-78.
I am very disappointed with your guarantee claim to lose weight if someone follow your package exercise and took your prescribed diet. You can crosscheck by presence I attend morning yoga session, regular morning walk , completed jumbo classes on weakened from the day one!
When I enroll with your package I was 68 kg and after on the way to your package instructions for 2 months still I am at 67kg. I think the package you design is not suits everyone. Loosing weight is really important for me.
Considering what happened, I believe you look into this matter personally and meet in person to design some other remedy which suits me.
I am looking forward to your response.
Best Regards
ABC
Score 6
You have recently moved to another province and need your internet service set up. You chose the company you would like to go with and made an appointment. However, nobody arrived at the scheduled time.
Write an email to the company in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:
• Explain the problem.
• Tell them why you need internet service.
• Suggest what the company should do now.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this email to you in connection with a service request that I have made on July 24, 2023. It is extremely unfortunate that my request has not been entertained.
Firstly, let me give you some background of my request. I have moved to Alberta from Nova Scotia and I work remotely. Therefore, I requested to setup an internet connection at my home so I can work from home.
For this purpose, I had scheduled an appointment with your service crew at 10:30 on July 25, 2013. To my surprise, no body showed up for the appointment. Moreover, when I contacted your customer helpline, I was not given any satisfactory response. My frustration has increased since I am unable to do my job.
Despite of the fact that I have been given worst customer service, I want to stick with your internet connection because of its reliability and speed.
Hence, I strongly urge you to please personally look into the issue and set up an internet connection for me on priority.
Sincerely,
Wahaj
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During your upcoming vacation, you will be visiting a new city. As a result, you want some information about the area. Write an email to the tourist bureau asking them to provide some suggestions for where to go, what to see, and how to get there.
Dear Sir/Madam,
As you aware that summer vacation is round the corner and corona pandemic has finally come to an end. Therefore, I want this summer vacation to be fruitful. In connection with this plan, I want the bureau to assist me in choosing the right place. Since it is summer season so I want to visit some place cooler, preferrable an area having tropical weather, not to mention my love for rain.
Additionally, it will be great if an Itinerary can be made. This will help us plan our tour in much more structured way. On the other hand, it will also tell us the places we are going to visit and at what time.
Lastly, the most important thing how are we going to get there? Do we need to have visas to travel? Can you please supply the list of documents you want us to prepare.
Looking forward to have a resposnse at the earliest.
Sincerely,
Wahaj.
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You live in a house near a park. Recently, a lot of teenagers have been meeting in the park at night. They are very noisy.
Write an email to the local government in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:
• Provide information about where you live.
• Explain the problem and how it affects your life.
• Suggest a way to solve the problem.
Dear Sir
I am writing you to complain about an issue that I have been facing since last 5 days. I am resident of 23rd Park Way Street, Milton. The problem that I have been encountering is that lot of teenagers at night gather in the park, right in fornt of our residence and they have been extremely noisy lately.
In order to solve the issue, I tried telling them personally to keep the voices low, but to my surprise, they tried to threaten me.
Although, it is a public place and it is open to everybody but these late night noises are hampering our daily life routine. My kids go to bed at 9:00 Pm, but with this situation, they are not able to sleep properly. As a consequence, we have received a note from school that our children sleep during classes.
Furthermore, I have to leave early in the morning for work, which I haven’t been able to do due to my sleeplessness.
To solve this, I would strongly request you to please send some petrol officers during night time to put these kids in line.
I look forward to hear from you at the earliest.
Sincerely,
Wahaj
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You’re experiencing problems with your heating and hot water. Write an email to your landlord, Draw his attention to the failure his attempts to resolve the problem, express your concerns about the low temperatures, and suggest a solution.
Dear Mr. James,
I am a resident in your apartment no 124 and I have been living in this apartment for last 3 years. I would like to draw your attention towards an issue witnessed by me lately. I have been facing a problem with heating in the apartment.
Thinking of it as a temporary problem, we pulled out blankets and sweaters to keep ourselves warm. Additionally, I have contacted the service crew assigned for this building maintenance but all I have provided are empty promises. As you are aware of the temperature change, the situation has just got worst. Temperature will reach as low as -30 degrees. Thanks to our neighbors for heaters the apartment’s temperature sits at +5.
To add further to our misery, hot water has now become unavailable in the apartment. This situation has now changed from bad to worst. I would really like you to personally intervene to get things in order and help in keeping ourselves warm in this harsh weather.
Moreover, moving us to a vacant apartment until heating issue is solved would be the best alternative, I can think off right now.
Yours sincerely,
Wahaj.
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Your employer has asked you to organize a trip for a group of foreign students who are visiting from other countries. Write an email to a local museum asking about their exhibits, opening times and prices.
Dear Mr. Morris,
I hope to find you well. I am writing you in connection to inquire about certain details of museum.
Let me give you a brief background to get the best response. We have a group of some foreign students willing to visit museum.
Firstly, can you please share the opening and closing timings of museum, though I have already visited museum before but that was 6 months ago. Furthermore, Is the museum open 7 days a week or do you close on weekends.
Additionally, are there any other exhibits on or around the museum to complete a full day trip, museum visit will be over in few hours. Apart from museum, are there any place nearby we can visit to make the day more productive.
Finally, please also tell the ticket prices and are there any discounts available for students that we can avail. We will be a group of 15 person.
Looking forward to hear from you soon.
Sincerely,
Wahaj.
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You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company / museum / art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
introduce yourself
explain your experience and special skills
tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear Sir/Madam,
Please accept this email as an expression of interest for the position of IT Specialist posted on LinkedIn on January 12, 2023.
Firstly, let me give a brief introduction. This Wahaj. I hold an Engineering degree in information technology from University of Victoria.
Furthermore, I have a decade of experience in different multi-national companies backed by prestigious certification in information technology. I have worked on data mining, network analyst, and as a network security specialist during my tenure of 10 years. However, my core area of expertise is systems and security analysis.
In addition to that, I have excellent communication skills which enables me to deal with every situation. I am currently open to opportunities and willing to relocate anywhere in Canada.
Secondly, My notice period with my current employer is 60 days but this can be reduced as the employer is lenient and release employees mostly ion 40 days.
I am sure that I can be a great asset to your organization.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Wahaj
Score 8
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
Dear Mark,
Hopefully, you are doing well. My apologies for not being in touch, but I am making up for it via this email; at least I hope so.
I have heard your interest in university for higher studies. well, this is the best decision from my perspective. Studying in university would be great to get new experiences in life. In addition, it provides a wide range of opportunities to expand our knowledge through various courses which will also help the students to grow substantially.
Moreover, most of the learners are likely to get admission to a university that is far from their residence. Staying away from home would give them a great chance to become independent and gain more confidence in life.
So far as courses are concerned, I would say that information technology has significant career options in the future. I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Talk to you soon!
Best regards,
Nitasha
Score 9
Dear Sir,
I am writing to complain regarding harassment from my co-worker Mr. Joe. He is currently working under my supervision as a lab Assistant. Moreover, he is sitting in room number HS-12.
Although, I have been working in your organization for the last five years as a lab coordinator. I arranged a usual monthly meeting with the lab Assistants. During the meeting, he started shouting at me in front of 15 other lab staff and Mr. Joe threatened to kill me. I was scared of him which was a very embarrassing time for me. Moreover, the Lab in charge saw the whole situation. Therefore, the Lab in charge was trying to stop his bad behavior.
In addition, all the evidence is currently available in your organization. Because they are working as an employee you should investigate them and take official action against Mr. Joe.
I will be very grateful to you. Please look forward to this matter as soon as possible
Yours sincerely,
Alice.
Score 7
City Development Survey
You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.
Option A: Shopping Complex: This shopping mall would include restaurants, a large supermarket, and a movie theatre.
Option B: Recreational Park: This park would include a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo.
I personally feel that Recreational Park is more suitable for our society considering multifarious reasons. In the following paragraph, I would elucidate and justify my choice.
No doubt, building shopping complex will appeal and attract people more, as it is more entertaining. However, what seems more convincing for me is that, building recreational park would indulge people in healthy activities. As we live in a era, where people don’t have time for maintaining their health, this option will lead them towards better and effective life.
Additionally, the small petting zoo in the park will add healthy entertainment for the children. How can we forget, sports complex and a large green area, which will not only engage older people as well as the youth also for meditation exercises in an open area. The sports complex is a mandatory part for maintaining balanced life. Nowadays, youth should indulge them into some exercises, so that they can have healthy life. However, the other option seems worthless, since it will take people far away from nature.
Considering all the assertions, I am of the opinion that Recreational Parks are far much better than the Shopping complex.
Score 8
You recently made reservations for dinner at a very famous and expensive restaurant in town. However, the meal and the service were terrible. The restaurant manager was not available to solve the problem, so you left without a resolution.
State what problems you had with the food you ordered.
Complain about the service.
Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction.
Dear Manager,
My name is Peter, and I am a regular customer of your restaurant. I am writing this email in dissatisfaction faced by me and my family members, when we recently visited your restaurant.
I recently made reservations for dinner, but the services and food served to us, was terrible and not acceptable. We reach your restaurant before the time, However there was no available staff to entertain us. We ordered Chinese food, as it was your hot selling food, but the services was too slow that we got our food 1 hour late. Additionally, it was cold and lacks taste.
Although, we immediately lodge the complain against the meal and poor services, but there was no one from the staff to look for our inconvenience. I then, personally went to look for restaurant manager, but got to know that he is currently unavailable. That leave us with no resolution and we were extremely disappointed, by the time we reach home.
I know, your restaurant has best taste in town. Therefore, I would like to address my issue personally, and re-embrace me with some meal vouchers for another day, so that I can still bring my family for the best taste in town.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
regards,
Peter
Score 7
1. A local NGO, working for the betterment of school children, has sent an opinion survey to see what people think about the presence of multimedia gadgets in kids’ lives.
• Option A: kids should have no access to gadgets like smartphones iPads etc.
• Option B: kids should be encouraged to read books in their free time.
Thank you so much for including me in your survey to identify the betterment of school children. Personally, I would prefer to access gadgets for students’ free time. The main reason for preference is the technological era and knowledge enhancement and it’s also helpful for study.
Nowadays, everyone using technology for serving for traveling, online shopping, and Social media. Moreover, social media is helpful in improving student knowledge. They can easily update their self-anything regarding t fashion, jobs careers, and different languages by using multimedia gadgets.
Secondly, after covid pandemic online access is familiar and students are using devices while traveling and studying Some students prefer to read books in their free time.
To sum up, schools should allow devices such as mobile phones, laptops, and iPads that would be more helpful for teaching so students can learn in an attractive manner. In addition, it would be beneficial for promoting online reading and encouraging people to build dramatic knowledge to meet global challenges.
Total word 163
Score 8
1. A local NGO, working for the betterment of school children, has sent an opinion survey to see what people think about the presence of multimedia gadgets in kids’ lives.
• Option A: kids should have no access to gadgets like smartphones iPads etc.
• Option B: kids should be encouraged to read books in their free time.
Thank you so much for including me in your survey to identify the betterment of school children. Personally, I would prefer to access gadgets for students’ free time. The main reason for preference is the technological era and knowledge enhancement and it’s also helpful for study.
Nowadays, everyone using technology for serving for traveling, online shopping, and Social media. Moreover, social media is helpful in improving student knowledge. They can easily update their self-anything regarding t fashion, jobs careers, and different languages by using multimedia gadgets.
Secondly, after covid pandemic online access is familiar and students are using devices while traveling and studying Some students prefer to read books in their free time.
To sum up, schools should allow devices such as mobile phones, laptops, and iPads that would be more helpful for teaching so students can learn in an attractive manner. In addition, it would be beneficial for promoting online reading and encouraging people to build dramatic knowledge to meet global challenges.
Total word 163
Score 8
mam ,i dont have words to telling you thanks but being a muslim i always pray for you…………may .God bless u.
Thanks
During your upcoming vacation, you will be visiting a new city. As a result, you want some information about the area. Write an email to the tourist bureau asking them to provide some suggestions for where to go, what to see, and how to get there.
Dear Sir,
I am writing to ask for some information regarding your city trip for an upcoming vacation for relaxing. I particularly need to know about the best places to visit, rates; traveling availability; hotels.
Although I have been to your city. I am coming for a short time period. I have a little concerned that I will not fill the whole month. With this in mind, It would be useful to know about any upcoming schedule of exhibitions, music concerts, and shows for enjoyment; when they will start and finish, Can you recommend any other attractions that might help to make the trip successful? The nearer the better.
I am wondering to know discountable rates. Moreover, how many best places are available to visit in your city? What would be the cost of this visit including a fascinating location for view, rooms, and traveling?
I look forward to your reply.
Best Regards,
Joe.
Total words
156
Score 6
2. An independent agency is conducting a survey on immigrant services. It has sent out an opinion survey to discover whether immigrants need more support during their transition to Canada. Please identify and explain your preference for:
Option A: increasing the amount of support provided to immigrants
Option B: maintaining the current level of support provided to immigrants
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Newcomers faces various hurdles during their migration process and often have difficulty to meet their ends due to this circumstance I opt for the former option.
To begin with, new immigrants should have an opportunity to expand their horizons which can be achieved by offering couple of workshops, volunteer seminars and community involvement. In addition to that, those events should enlighten the key areas such as guiding them to choose for a right career, encourage them to develop interpersonal skills. Likewise, during the transition process lot of settlers are oblivious of the policies of the government which might leave them in jeopardy.
Additionally, finding a decent accommodation is a dauting challenge for the migrants concerning authorities should radiate the key consideration for the people surfing for the house. Despite being able to communicate in the nation language they might have trouble reaching out to people, to eliminate this class for English proficiency can be held by the community centre.
To conclude, I strongly recommend the concerning authorities to enlarge the services offered to the immigrants for the betterment of the economy.
Score 8
Can you please include, letter to classmate to bring card for teacher? I want to see ideas to include for this topic.
I’ve added one to the request section.
You recently switched service provider for Internet but soon realized the service is not working properly, internet company did send a technician however the problem persists, write an email to the customer service manager
a. describing the problem
b. inform that technician was not able to resolve the problem
c. suggest what you would like to be done
Dear Mr. Ronald,
My name is Rozi and I writing this email for need help for currently going on Internet technical issue.
Complain Number: 7878078899
I have explained what exactly the problem, I have using Internet since long. And my last Internet provider is very good, and I have not any problem with them. But Due to your new launching discount scheme and your company is well known for me so I thought for let’s change then provider and approach your company and done agreement with your company.
So once everything is done in starting of the day you Internet is going well and after 5 to 6 days, I have seen speed is not well and I have also check in online with internet speed tester but It is showing low till date. So, I have contact to customer care with your register toll free number -1800-000-889 then your executive has note complain.
After that your technician has assign and give some online instruction like switch of the Internet router and etc. but till is not working and I have requested to your team for in person check the what exactly the issue so he will come and change the router and also check all connection but he has not resolved the problem so he has told me “ Mam I have check everything but your Internet problem is not resolve and I think it has a major issue with the line”. So, He has suggested for request to my senior customer service manager and he will get resolution.
Mr. Ronald, I have requested to you kindly understand the situation, I am working from home and my child is also doing some important work throw the internet. So kindly do the needful on priority basis and resolve this technical problem.
Your Faithfully,
Rozi.
Score 6
Your children’s school provides free school lunches. Usually the lunch is a hamburger, hot dog, or pizza. The children really enjoy the lunches. Some parents want to change the lunches so that the children eat salad or vegetables every day. The school asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
-Option A: I would prefer the lunches stayed the same.
-Option B: I would prefer they changed the lunches.
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I would prefer they changed the lunched as per the below reason.
First reason basic reason is children has required healthy food during the school and without school. So basically, as per the physician has recognize and suggested kindly void the junk food like (Hamburger, Hotdog, Pizza).
Children has enjoyed the junk food, but they did not know their suggest food is not good for their health.
So as per the multiple well know doctors and social news junk food is not good for children but they also suggested if School has provided the lunch, then go for milk, fruits, and some other healthy food else parents will take responsibility for give a lunch from their side because parents know what they children required and healthy and suitable for that.
Otherwise, one option do the parents meeting and do the random survey for what their children like and as per them what is healthy for their children.
Why food is required healthy for children because if food is good then children’s study is going fine without any disturbing the routine work and study. So basically we can’t ignore their health and study and not go with the opinion -1.
Score 6
You recently switched service provider for Internet but soon realized the service is not working properly, internet company did send a technician however the problem persists, write an email to the customer service manager
a. describing the problem
b. inform that technician was not able to resolve the problem
c. suggest what you would like to be done
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Dear Service Manager,
I am writing this letter to bring it to your notice that my internet connection is not working properly. Internet is stop working intermediately and not responding. I must complete my project on time otherwise my university will not allow me to appear for the intern exam. However, I have lodged the complaint and your technician visited the place and try fixing the issue but still problem persisting, I believe technician was not enough equipped with skills to solve the problem. I have fair idea that given router LED is now glowing and may need to replace it. Still, my internet is not working I want to resolve it on immediate basis.
Moreover, I would require you to address my problem within next 24 hours; or else I will go with other service provider, and you must compensate me for such a bad service and service I had purchased.
Looking forward to hear from you soon on.
Regards,
Balramsinh
Score 6
Your children’s school provides free school lunches. Usually the lunch is a hamburger, hot dog, or pizza. The children really enjoy the lunches. Some parents want to change the lunches so that the children eat salad or vegetables every day. The school asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
-Option A: I would prefer the lunches stayed the same.
-Option B: I would prefer they changed the lunches.
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I found out that the school has raised the survey for lunches they provide to the children on a regular basis, while some parents are keen to give the green vegetable and salad in routing lunch.
To begin with, since school is serving food like hamburgers or pizza will make the child’s health poor. I personally feel that schools must provide green vegetables and salads as lunch.
Nevertheless, Vegetables are good for health, and especially at tender ages, kids required more nutrition for all-round development. Moreover, taking the same lunch will promote equality in the young generation. Kids will understand the importance of nature and different types of vegetables. I strongly believe that vegetables have more advantages as food and there will be no artificial add-ons or chemicals involved which might affect the kid’s health.
In conclusion, hamburgers, and pizza will not be a good option as food to sever kids in school. However, green vegetables are very natural and will enhance the kid’s health.
Score 6
You’re looking for a part-time job in an office. In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the office manager in which you apply for the position. As you write your email, you should:
• introduce yourself
• explain your experience and special skills
• tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear office manager,
I am contacting you regarding the opened opportunity you have for a part-time administrative assistant. Let me introduce myself, I am currently in the 4th period from my Business Administration course at SAIT, I have been working into the student department in an administrative roll.
Once my course is near the end, I feel I already have most of the skills needed to apply to your position such as good type speed, excellent word and excel abilities, strong organization with documents and precise time management. I gathered all the experience acquired through these years in my volunteer job, and as a result, I can guarantee I am worth to be considered.
We are in the winter break now, then I can start as soon as you need. I have available time to do any kind of necessary training as well. Feel free to contact me anytime.
Yours sincerely
Fernando
Score 7
You live in a small city. The city administration is planning to allocate funds for two possible projects.
Your city is funding ONE of the given projects:
Option A: Bike Lanes: Planning to build new separate lanes for bikers
Option B: Renovate gym: Planning to add a swimming pool and spa center in an existing gym.
The idea of municipal grant investment for either separate two-wheeler lane construction or a gymnasium renovation has sparked recent debate and controversy. I opine that renovating the Planet Fitness gym is a more apropos option due to its probable to benefit the physical well-being of our citizens.
Conspicuously, since our city consists of limited masses who possess bikes, expenditure of funds on building lanes for bikers may seem senseless. On the other hand, the swimming pool’s addition to the current gym will become a source of cardiovascular exercise and recreation. During summer, not only does the water pool will attract masses of all ages to beat the heat but will also allow residents to have a fun time together with their family members and neighbors. Moreover, swimming is an excellent way of exercising which will considerably improve the physical health of citizens because regular physical activity is essential in maintaining a healthy body. In fact, doctors advise working out at least three times a week for 20 minutes. Interestingly, spa centers will induce relaxation and muscle recovery which is equally crucial after exercise.
Based on the aforementioned reasoning, I still stand by my stance. That is, transformation of gym is clearly more feasible considering long term physical health benefits of our natives.
I appreciate the opportunity to provide input on this issue.
Score 7
Dear Nil,
Hopefully, you and your family are in great spirits! My apologies for not being in touch, but I am making up for it via this letter; at least I hope so!
I am delighted that you are interested in studying further and I thought I would give my two cents on your situation. There are myriad reasons why people consider university for their masters. One of the main reasons is the job opportunities available after completing your masters degree. Remember Ishita from our school, she completed her Master’s in Computer Science and got placed in Amazon.
A recent study conducted by Harvard stated that people who prefer universities far from home become more independent and self-reliant. Furthermore, their decision-making power is far better than those attending universities nearby their home.
We have known each other for a very long time, I think the Computer Science course would be the best choice for you as you have been more inclined towards technology and gadgets since you were a baby. Also, the market for Information Technology is booming around the world.
I am hoping this letter finds you well. Do get back to me whenever you get a chance. Can’t wait to see you soon!
Best Regards,
Kate
Score 10
1. The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
• Option A: Build a Factory
Option B: Do not build a factory
I must appreciate the city administration for its commendable efforts to contemplate on the development and seeking indigenous advice. Although building a factory at St Marie’s road would have umpteen benefits. It will rise in the employment opportunity, economic development & helps in increasing per capita income of an individual.
Establishment of industry will create new opportunities for all classes of individuals. It will bring new business and lead to a greater flow of money. With more people coming into the city will enhance avenues for other business. Incline in the grocery stores, entertainment shopping complex, convention centers, more housing schemes, improved transportation across the city. It will have a significant positive impact on the city’s growth with no brain drain.
With the benefits, I understand there would be demerits as well, however an attempt should be made to balance out, as the town has ample green belt which can be expanded by declaring green zone on the other part of the city.
In nutshell, increase in the income & socio-economic development uplifts the mental wellbeing of individual is equivalent to happiness. Furthermore, I anxiously wait for the final verdict on this.
Thanks
Harshit Goyal
2-You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late.
Write an email to your landlord explaining why you are writing to him, why you cannot pay the rent, and when you will pay the rent
Hi Jack,
I am writing this email to inform you with grief that I am going through a financial crunch which will result in the delay of rent for the month of July.
Furthermore, the company I work with is unfortunately on the verge of bankruptcy. All the employees have been given an ultimatum to find a new job. However, the company will pay me two-week additional salary as a part of compensation. I have been trying hard for survival as it is uphill to manage the expenses of a 5 people in a family. Moreover, my son’s education loan instalment is getting bounced which is putting me under grave stress.
I am restricting the monthly outlay for groceries and entertainment. Albeit this is a temporary phase of life and hope this too shall pass. In order to meet end needs I have started working as a cleaner in Walmart on part time basis meanwhile I am actively looking for a full-time job.
I will get my full and final settlement in the third week of July, my humble request you to consider this timeline for the rent payment. Thank you for understanding my situation and supporting me in this hardship.
Thanks
Harshit Goyal
Score 7
Task 2
The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
Option A: Build a Factory
Option B: Do not build a factory
For the growth of the city, development is inevitable. Although some residents may argue that constructing a Kia Motor workshop in Mississauga, will be detrimental for the city, I would prefer building the factory as it would increase the job opportunities and development of infrastructure.
Approving the project by the city administration will result in the city to evolve and be economically advantageous for the government in the long run. It would create different kinds of job opportunities for the population. This would result in an influx of cash in the city.
The surrounding area will see a bloom in infrastructure. The nearby land space would be occupied by residential complexes, restaurants, and convenience stores. Thereby, significantly increasing and stabilizing the financial aspect of the city.
It is imperative that constructing an industry will bestow considerable advantages. I eagerly anticipate the final decision of the city administration and wholeheartedly support the cause.
Task 1
You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late.
Write an email to your landlord explaining why you are writing to him, why you cannot pay the rent, and when you will pay the rent
Dear Mr Goyal,
Hope everything is fine at your end. I am writing this email regarding the delay in payment of the rent for the unit 1208, Daniel Town Center, Toronto for the month of May, 2023. Apologies for last minute notice but an unexpected financial issue has arisen at my end and request you to grant additional days.
I understand the last day of making the payment is by the 10th of every month. But unfortunately, due to the recession, I was laid off from my company, Walmart, Toronto; last month. Moreover, there has been an emergency situation in my family. Due to which my savings in the bank have been exhausted to support my parents in these unforeseen circumstances.
I would be obliged if you could extend the due date and do not levy any penalty for the delay. I assure you that it will be paid by the 20th of this month without any further delay.
Thank you for understanding the situation and helping me in this hard time. I would anticipate a positive response from your end on this matter.
Regards,
Jack
Score 8
Question : You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
Dear Hotel Manager,
Hope this email finds you well. I am writing today, to express my dismay on my recent stay at your hotel “The Taj” located in Toronto. After a busy month at work, I was looking for a staycation. Due my distress, the hotel did not turn out as expected based on the google reviews.
We arrived at the scheduled check in time, but since the receptionist was not available , it delayed our check in process by 45 minutes. Furthermore, when we entered the room, it had a pungent smell and the bed linen had stain marks and was torn from some places. Adding to it, toiletries were missing from the washroom and one of the tap was not in working condition.
The whole experience was depressing and frustrating. I would request you to take immediate actions on the services provided by the hotel. Due to my dreadful stay at you hotel , I demand a full refund of the accommodation charges and compensation for ruining my leisure time.
Looking forward for a response at your end.
Regards,
Priyanka
Score 8
To Whom It May Concern,
In the past few years, I discovered my passion for programming, computer systems, and mathematics; therefore, after a vast amount of research, I found out that Sambo College has the best curriculum in the state. As a result, a few weeks ago I enrolled in the six-month intense course. However, it is a four-hour drive from where I currently live to the campus, so I am writing to request student accommodation for the fall semester.
Let me point out that I would prefer a shared unit with another student, preferably from the same program. Essentially, being new to the city, it would be an incredible opportunity to socialize and have emotional support, for the challenging months ahead of us. Moreover, it would also ensure I save some money, given that the cost of a private unit is double the price.
Given that my classes start on the 3rd of August, it would be of immense advantage if I could get the room a week before that date. In the grand scheme of things, I want to take advantage of this opportunity by visiting museums, buying merchandise, and exploring all around the city.
Kind regards,
Martha Peres
Score 9
You work part-time as an Uber driver but forgot to pick up a customer that you had agreed to transport to the airport. Write an email to the client apologizing for not picking him up, explaining why you didn’t pick him up, and offering him a free ride.
RESPONSE:
Dear Jessica,
I am writing to sincerely apologize on not meeting up with the scheduled appointment to transport you to the airport yesterday. As we all know, the requirement on road safety is getting more stringent by the day.
I had set out for your place an hour before the scheduled time, but I got caught up in a heavy traffic about 10 kilometers away from your residence, where I spent about forty minutes in total. After driving past the traffic area, I increased my driving speed so as to be able to arrive at your place on time, but unfortunately, I was stopped by the police. The situation escalated and was asked to report at the nearest station to pay a fine and also claim my vehicle which. My vehicle was finally released to me in the early hours of this morning.
I am deeply sorry for the inconvenience this might have caused you. To compensate you for the disappointment, I am offering you a free airport drop off on your next travel.
I hope my apologies are accepted.
Yours sincerely,
Simon.
Score 9
1. Your city’s administration is considering allocating funds to two possible projects. It has sent out an opinion survey to gauge residents’ preferences for bikes lanes or a pool. Indicate and explain your preference.
• Option A: bike lanes – build new separate lanes for bikers
• Option B: renovate gym – fund a swimming pool and spa center in an existing gym
Our city administration should be commended for continuously devising means to make the lives of residents more comfortable over the years. The newly proposed projects of gym renovation and bike lane creation are also very important ideas to improve the quality of life of residents in the area. Although some residents may argue that renovating the gym would be more beneficial, I would prefer bike lane creation on roads as it would decrease mortality rate and create road safety for residents.
Mapping out new bike lanes would decrease mortality rate in the city. The percentage of lives lost due to road accidents are increasing at an alarming rate. Creating a separate, well demarcated and secured bike lane for bikes and bicycle would increase road safety for bikers and also minimize road accidents in general.
On the other hand, swimming pools and spa centers are services already been offered by private gyms at an affordable rate, and as such, renovating the gym to include these services would not make a significant difference in the lives of residents.
In my opinion, the significance of bike lane creation is more profound than that of gym renovation.
Score 10
You work in a small office. After a great financial performance this year, your boss wants to reward the staff by offering more perks. He has sent out an opinion survey for the team to choose between:
1. One additional week of paid vacation
2. Improved health insurance coverage.
Employee benefits are employee investments. It not only shows employees their efforts are deeply appreciated, but it is also a way to show that the company also cares about the general welfare of its employees. I would suggest that the company grants an additional week of paid vacation as it would afford us ample time to spend with their family and also improve overall productivity.
An additional week of paid vacation would increase family time. We work so hard and barely have enough time to spend with our families, creating a work-life imbalance. An additional week to our paid vacation would make room for employees to travel, bond and make unforgettable memories with family.
Furthermore, an additional paid vacation will also increase the overall productivity of employees. More family time is a good way to relax and relief ourselves from accumulated stress from work, making employees refreshed, rejuvenated and in the right state of mind to take on work after vacation.
In my opinion, work-life balance is very important to lead a healthy life. An additional week of paid vacation should be considered rather than an improved health insurance coverage.
Score 9
You live in a small city. A local internet service provider is planning to launch 5G technology in your area. Company is conducting a survey to know public opinion.
Telecom company survey:
A. Company should launch 5G for better internet services
B. Introduction of 5G means more expensive internet services.
Information technology has indeed made the world a global village and has also brought about convenience and efficiency in the way we communicate these days. It is also imperative to stay abreast of changes in technologies around the world. Although launching a 5G network in the city might increase internet costs, I strongly believe that its advantages outweighs the disadvantages.
Lunching 5G network in the city would bring about better internet services. Internet services are very necessary to connect locally and internationally, as it makes communication seamless and more efficient, thereby bringing about increased productivity at the workplace, businesses and at home.
On the other hand, poor internet communication reduces the speed at which information is received, decreases the possibility of information reaching its target audience, decreases productivity and overall performance in both our personal and professional life.
In my opinion, launching a 5G network in our city is more beneficial to the city as a whole despite the challenges involved, and should also be embraced by everyone.
Score 10
At your workplace, recyclable materials, such as juice boxes, are not separated from the regular garbage. You would like the company to start a recycling program, at least in the cafeteria.
Explain the problem.
Suggest ways to solve the problem.
Offer to volunteer and help.
Mr. Matt,
The purpose of my writing today is to grab your attention, regarding a terrible gap which we have in our office and promote the idea of reuse, reduce and recycle.
To begin with, recently a terrible ordeal caught my attention, astonishingly we don’t have facility to separately dispose off garbage and recyclable waste in our office premises .As a result, all the recyclable materials from our office are going to landfill.This is extremely detrimental for our environment.
Inevitably,I feel we should be taking some precautionary steps to avoid this disturbing affair. I suggest to arrange separate bins in our cafeteria to segregate recyclable waste. Moreover, we should encourage and spread awareness regarding this in our office.
Conspicuously, to support this initiative, I could arrange a meeting with the city council; who can provide bins free of cost under a government supported scheme. Likewise, I could create some posters which we could display in the hallway, so that this noble idea can reach out to everyone.
I am looking forward to seeing how my suggestions translate in to prompt action from your side . Your attention in this matter is greatly appreciated .
Sincerely,
Tom Hart
Score 8. ‘Conspicuously’ means to stick out from the background like a sore thumb – it makes no sense whatsoever in this context.
Your daughter is in elementary school. The teacher is planning a school trip this year. He has sent out an opinion survey to all parents in order to make known their preferences.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice?
A. A trip to the parliament buildings
B. A visit to the organic farm in the countryside
Extracurricular activities are very essential for an all-round development. It is also highly commendable to know that the school values the opinion of parents in the planning of the school trip for the current year. I would prefer the children visiting the organic farm in the countryside, because they are rather too young to fully understand and appreciate the significance of visiting the parliament buildings.
A visit to the organic farm would help the kids appreciate how foods are grown. Here, the children will be able to see first-hand, how farmers plant and harvest the food they consume daily. They will also get to know the importance of eating healthy and organic foods as opposed to non-organic foods.
Furthermore, visiting the organic farm could spark up interest, direction and inspiration for their future career path. Some of the students could get inspired to want to pick up careers related to healthy living, such as being a nutritionist, chef, health educator or writer, health coach and so on.
I strongly believe that visiting the organic farm in the countryside will be more beneficial to the student as it will help them appreciate and cultivate better eating habits.
Score 9 – use the 2nd conditional when you have minimal control over the result
You would like to take a part time course at the university, but don’t have the money to do it. Write a letter to an organization that supports students financially and ask for help. Write an email and include-
– Describe your qualification and degree.
– Provide some details of the course.
– Explain how this course will help you in the future.
Dear Mr Matt,
The purpose of writing this letter is to seek monetary help from your esteemed company under generous scholarship program in which you provide aid to deserving candidates.
To begin with, I have completed my bachelors of engineering from University of Toronto in 2016. Since then, I have been working with a top notch company as a software programmer. During my work, I have got a chance to gather experience with multiple business domains like telecommunication and insurance.
Furthermore, In future, I envision to work with cutting edge technologies; Moreover, I aspire to join a part time course which Chicago University offers for artificial intelligence and machine learning.The course not only meticulously provide details of the cutting-edge technology, but also enables students with hands-on experience. Needless to say, the tuition fee is substantially high and out of my budget.
Apparently, if I get a chance to enroll myself in this course , I will promote entrepreneurship and set up my own start-up company. Undoubtedly, my goal is to provide services to common people at affordable cost . Anticipating you would consider my application and reply optimistically.
Sincerely,
Tom Hart
Score 9
You live in a city with vast campus. Every year, the city provides funds to support students. This year, the city has sent out a survey to all residents in order to decide how the funds should be spent:
Choose the option you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice?
A. By giving vouchers on books and transportation to all students
B. By giving grants for students from low income families.
One of the responsibilities of the government is to continuously devise means to improve the lives of its citizens. Our city government must also be commended for its unending support, especially towards the area of education. While some may argue that giving vouchers and transportation voucher would be more beneficial, I feel that giving grants to students from poor families would reduce the level of illiteracy and improve the quality of life of residents in the city.
Illiteracy is one of the leading causes of poverty in our city. Children hawking and roaming about rather than be in school has become a usual sight in our city. Giving grants to students from low income families will help decrease the percentage of school dropouts in the city.
On the other hand, giving vouchers on books and transportation to students will only be accessible to the middle and high class in the society, who to a large extent, can afford to go to school.
I strongly believe that by giving grants for students from low income families, the government would not only reduce poverty and illiteracy rate, but also increase the overall quality of life of its residents.
Score 11
Your children’s school provides free school lunches. Usually the lunch is a hamburger, hot dog, or pizza. The children really enjoy the lunches. Some parents want to change the lunches so that the children eat salad or vegetables every day. The school asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
-Option A: I would prefer the lunches stayed the same.
-Option B: I would prefer they changed the lunches.
The question of the use of the same meal in school every day has recently sparked debate and controversy. I have a strong preference that the school should change the lunch pattern as per parents’ choice.
Conspicuously, since their school serve the same food to children for a long time such as hamburgers or pizza will be monotonous for kids. Furthermore, consuming the same junk food on a daily basis perhaps have a detrimental impact on child health. For instance, eating wheat flood regularly may cause obesity at such a tender age.
Nevertheless, allowing different food menus in school not only does it reduces parents’ stress but it does encourage kids to go to school regularly. Ramifications, their peers are free about warning their attendance. However, some parents might be working so in this case it’s a win-win situation for them providing that nutrient food is given in school. Moreover, taking the same lunch will promote equality among the young generation.
Here is my version given the aforementioned scenario, I still stand my stance that the school lunch does not remain the same for a long time as everyone needs change in life as well as eatable things too. Therefore, the school ought to change the lunch.
Score 8
. You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and the timekeeping of the other students.
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
Dear Principal,
The purpose of my writing today is to lodge a complaint regarding the inconvenience faced by myself after a regrettable experience studying at your school.
Primarily, when I enrolled in your school, I was so delighted and ecstatic to study English at the most reputed institution, as I have heard about the amorality of appraisal in the past. However, I was so unfortunate and stressed after a few unpleasant lectures; as the quality was so basic and scruffy.
Moving on to the dilemma with the materials provided, it barely has some new innovative chapters which can help me to improve my English language. On the other hand, the cost of your course is very sensitive; in response to the coaching sessions you provide and the timekeeping manner for students.
In order to therapy the situation, I would encourage you to implement new tactics and versatility in the education system you provide. Nevertheless, English is a universal language; if provided with precisely it can help youths to portray themselves in the outer world. Since It is quite a predicament for me, I would need to appeal to corporate if I am unable to receive your timely response.
Conclusively, your cooperation in this matter is greatly appreciated. Furthermore, an open line of communication, from your side, in this case, would greatly help out.
Yours Sincerely,
XYZ.
Score 8
Your government is proposing a new agricultural policy, but some organizations oppose it because they feel it is against local farmers. You’ve been asked to express your opinion.
• A: import cheaper grains and vegetables from other countries
• B: increase the amount of land under cultivation and support local farmers
I was recently informed that the government is considering a new agricultural policy that could affect the local farmers. While some argue that importing cheaper products would benefit be more beneficial, I feel that providing more land to incentivize local farming would improve the product we consume and benefit the farmer’s business.
Firstly, increasing the land that can be cultivated would positively impact our local business. Canada is a country with a lot of unused land. If the government helps increase the amount of land that can be cultivated, then more jobs for farmers would be created and their business would expand.
On the other hand, nowadays exported grains and vegetables are filled with chemicals. This is a result of wanting the products to last longer so that they can be exported. Improving our local production of foods would ensure that chemicals are not used for their cultivation because they would be going to local stores. Consequently, this could improve our community’s health due to the nature of the products.
All in all, I strongly believe that increasing the land to cultivate would benefit the farmer’s wealth, increase the number of farming jobs and provide health benefits for the community.
Score 11
You recently switched service provider for Internet but soon realized the service is not working properly, internet company did send a technician however the problem persists, write an email to the customer service manager
a. describing the problem
b. inform that technician was not able to resolve the problem
c. suggest what you would like to be done
Dear Customer Service Manager,
Greetings, my name is Kritika Soni, and last week I ported my internet connection to Bell service provider. The purpose of my writing is to inform you about the internet’s intermittent issues and suggest a solution for it.
On 18th May, a new hundred-speed fiber-to-home internet connection was configured by one of the technicians in my apartment at Maverick Street. Surprisingly, the same night, we saw a drop in the broadband speed till 10 Mbps for four hours constantly, which we assumed could be a situation due to the bad weather conditions. However, every day the same behaviour was noticeable in the evening that is, 5 pm to 9 pm.
After filing a complaint for the interrupted service, a technician visit was scheduled on the 20th of May; he assured about the smooth connectivity going forward but no luck, the issue still persists.
Since internet is an everyday necessity for a working information technology professional like me, I would like to request you to kindly escalate the matter to high priority and arrange another technician to investigate the issue in the evening hours.
Your cooperation in this regard is highly appreciated.
Warm Regards,
Kritika Soni
Score 8
Dear Preeti,
Greetings of the day! Hopefully, you are doing well in your exams as always. I have a huge piece of news to share with you, I will be visiting your city for a month in May for my university-organized summer camp.
Definitely, my entire day will be occupied with the classes at the camp, but we have entire nights to ourselves, which we can utilize to party. How are the nightclubs there? I hope some of them have themes of our favorite TV series. Please share the details of a few best night club in the city, and I will shortlist a few for our hangouts.
Additionally, I will need your help to organize a weekend birthday for one of my close friends at a fine dining restaurant nearby to the camping venue. The restaurant should be big enough to hold 20 people at a time. He is a nerd and likes to read comic books, so can you please order a superhero theme cake as well. Right away, I am sending you the collected funds now i.e., $500 for the bookings.
Thanks a lot in advance and can’t wait to see you soon!
Yours lovingly,
Kritika Soni
Score 8. Use more complex sentences.
Thanks for your valuable feedback Angela.
You are a student at an English language school in Calgary and are living in private accommodation with other flatmates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord.
State your reason for writing.
Describe the problems and explain how you feel.
Propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action.
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am the tenant of your building 3A, flat #21, Calgary. The purpose of my writing is to lodge a complaint about the central heating system has not been functioning since last week.
We are studying in an English language school and we have to go there everyday. Owing to trouble with geysers, my roommates and I are facing difficulties taking baths with cold water and you are well aware how weather is in Alberta. One of our friends’ condition is getting worse by sneezing and cold due to not getting hot water in the washroom. I am feeling pathetic because of this inconvenience.
Unfortunately, Despite having experience, the plumber you sent for fixing this issue didn’t get success, he told us this machinery is too old to get repaired. If we try to repair, it could be a blast in the future and a risk for the tenants. Personally, I would share with you that I received quotations for the new unit from one or two wholesalers. I have attached in mail please intervene into this matter and resolve it.
I am looking forward to seeing a positive response from your side. Your kind cooperation would be most appreciated.
Sincerely,
Adam Bill
Score 7
Dear Johnson,
I was recently informed that you are considering to reorganize the shared workspace with a window. While some people argue that it is an appealing idea, I strongly disagree with the following reasons.
First of all, we are a huge design company that requires detailed projects every month. Each employee has a different responsibilities and we need to complete them within a limited time. However, it took a way longer time to finish one simple project when we used a large room together last year. It would be certainly efficient if we have a personal space to do our own roles.
Secondly, building a big window in our office requires a large amount of money. I know we are now a short budget and we also need to save some for the upcoming project. I personally think investing money on project will be more beneficial than spending money on window in this period of time.
I totally understand sharing an office with window would bring some benefits, however, we can alternatively use our break time to have a fresh air. Additionally, hanging a beach wallpaper on the wall would make employees feel less stuffed without a window.
Sincerely,
Molly
Score 7
Dear HR Manager,
I am writing this email to express my deep interest in full-time front desk position at Ontario Museum.
My name is Lily Wang, and I worked as a concierge at my current workplace Ontario Resort for past ten years. I have demonstrated the capability to meet customer needs and prided myself on my customer service. I strongly believe my professional experiences will definitely be beneficial to Ontario Museum with my commitment to cross-cultural interaction. Furthermore, I instilled my confidence in communicating and handling customer’s needs and complaints across all ages. In addition, I am fluent in four languages, which are Chinese, Korea, Japanese and English. The customers would certainly feel comfortable when explaining them in their own language. I am well aware of that the OM area is close to the airport, thus majority of guests would be be non-English-speakers.
If I am considered for the full-time placement, I would be extremely grateful, as it has been my dream to work for your esteemed company and can start working from March 20th, onwards. I have provided details of my current resume attached. I am eager to hear from you todiscuss a potential position within the OM company.
Sincerely,
Lily
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Application Email
You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company / museum / art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
introduce yourself
explain your experience and special skills
tell him or her when you think you could start
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Dear HR Manager,
I am writing this email to express my deep interest in full-time front desk position at Ontario Museum.
My name is Lily Wang, and I worked as a concierge at my current workplace Ontario Resort for past ten years. I have demonstrated the capability to meet customer needs and prided myself on my customer service. I strongly believe my professional experiences will definitely be beneficial to Ontario Museum with my commitment to cross-cultural interaction. Furthermore, I instilled my confidence in communicating and handling customer’s needs and complaints across all ages. In addition, I am fluent in four languages, which are Chinese, Korea, Japanese and English. The customers would certainly feel comfortable when explaining them in their own language. I am well aware of that the OM area is close to the airport, thus majority of guests would be be non-English-speakers.
If I am considered for the full-time placement, I would be extremely grateful, as it has been my dream to work for your esteemed company and can start working from March 20th, onwards. I have provided details of my current resume attached. I am eager to hear from you todiscuss a potential position within the OM company.
Sincerely,
Lily
(202 words)
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Complaint Email
You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and the time keeping of the other students.
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
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Dear Principal,
I am writing this letter to request a prompt process of full refund of my course.
My name is Danielle and I recently enrolled a three-months Pathway Program at Celp school. However, I am very disappointed that the curriculums were not completed in advance of course start date, which was yesterday. Furthermore, the instructor Kim came into the classroom late, and struggled to answer students’ questions as her English was not fluent at all. My classmates and I had a doubt if she really graduated University of Toronto.
Unbelievably, I paid $1,400 for the whole course and everything is totally different from what I was explained at the front desk. Our textbooks and language books should be included in the total amount, however, Kim handed out some printouts and said we will be using these for the course. Most importantly, she paid attention only to the English-speaking students so I was not encouraged. She almost ignored me when I started to speak out loud murmuring. At the end, the students at our table were neglected throughout the entire class.
I hope you are aware what’s going on in the classroom. I look forward to hearing from you in terms of this issue.
Regards,
Robert
(206 words)
Score 7
Advice Email
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
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Hi Sabrina,
I recently heard that you are concerning to go to University in Hamilton. I’m so happy for my little sister and I’d love to give you some advice as I were in your shoes couple years ago.
First of all, I understand some of your friends are applying for the universities as they want to broaden their perspectives. I believe it’s a great idea to step forward. As a University student, you can experience lots of courses you can choose to focus and enjoy a campus life with the people you love. On top of that, you will have a plenty of free time if you go far from home. Majority of people decide to leave because of these reasons. Last but not least, I suggest you take some language courses at University of Hamilton. Those courses are only provided to freshmen, so you better not miss the opportunity to learn different cultures and unique languages. It will be helpful when you get a job after graduation, especially if you’re interested in working at an international company.
I hope above suggestions would be beneficial for you when you make a decision. I’m always here to help you!
Love,
your sister Min
Score 8
During the storm last night, a large tree fell on the road in front of your house.
Write an email to the City Council in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:
Tell who you are.
Explain how it has created trouble for you.
State what you want the City Council to do.
To whom it may concern,
My name is Simrandeep, a resident of house number 312, North town. l am writing this email to inform you about the road blockage in front of our house due to the thunderstorm the previous night.
As everyone in the city is well aware about the storm that hit the city last night. A large palm tree fell down in the middle of the road in front of my house, causing a lot of trouble. Since it has been over 15 hours no team has reached here to clear the path. Furthermore, l am not able to reach my place of business owing to the incident. In addition, it is morning time and office hours has begun; this road remains always bustling due to the commuters everyday. Hence creating a lot of trouble for the residents in the neighborhood including me. On top of that I have a crucial meeting today. As a result my reputation would suffer greatly if I could not make it.
I kindly ask you to send the concerned team to clear the blocked path in our area as early as possible.
I look forward to your prompt and positive action.
Yours Sincerely,
Simrandeep Kaur
Score 7
You are looking for a part time job at a Soccer club.
Write an email in about 150-200 words to the manager of the football club. Your email should do the following things.
Introduce yourself
Explain what experience and special skills you have
Tell him/her when you think you can start
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to express my interest in a part-time job as a team staff in your soccer club which you advertised in the local newspaper.
My name is David Millar, I was born and brought up in Ontario; I did my Bachelor from Thomas University which was situated at Brampton. Presently, I am Assistant Coach of the Ontario Football Club.
I have been practicing soccer since I was in middle school, also I was captain of the University Soccer team which played many domestic leagues and most of the time I took the ‘Man of the Match’ award. My experience and energy will help your club’s young talents as I do practice hard for two hours on a regular basis to fit myself. Moreover, don’t worry about strength and stamina of players, I have also taken a course of Nutrition and Health Supplement that would help them.
As per my current schedule it allows me free for three days in a week that would help me to join your prominent club on Friday to Sunday.
Based on my profile and credentials, I would appreciate it if you could appoint me for your Soccer Club.
Yours Sincerely,
David Millar
Score 9
Thanks a lot Ma’am…for your valuable feedback.
You’re welcome
You work in a small office. The boss wants to reduce vacation time by two days, but send everyone in the office to a nice beachside hotel for 4 days of job training. Some of the staff are very happy with this idea, others are upset. The boss asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Option A : I think we should keep our vacation time instead of going to training.
Option B: I think we should do the training and cut back our vacation time.
Dear Sir or Madam,
Greetings of the day! I appreciate that the company has taken initiative for employees to either train at a hotel on the beachside or take vacation. I personally opine that the former choice would be the more apropos option
due to life balancing and improving mental well-being.
Evidently, since everyone is busy with their official lifestyles, most of the people want to take allotted vacations to spend gala time with their family and friends to refresh himself. Alternatively, spending the whole day in a work drill with co-workers might not make you feel energetic at evening time to explore the beauty of the hotel.
Interestingly enough, taking the vacation option would help to enhance skills to join some part time courses. Due to getting less leisure time, busy with work schedules, workers are not able to improve personal development and save time for meditation to keep fit mental well-being. Despite spending much on training at beachside venues, organizations should give bonuses to staff to keep them happy and loyal to the office.
Based on the aforementioned reasoning, I am of the opinion that taking a vacation would be the preferred choice. However, I am positive that office authorities will make the best decision in the interest of the larger members of the workplace.
Ma’am how could I get more then 9 in writing. Please suggest
For a higher score, you need to zero-in on your language efficiency – possessives, participles, referents, and parallels.
You live in a small town, the town administration is planning to allocate funds for two possible projects.
Option A: Bike lanes, planning to build new separate lanes for bikers.
Option B: Renovate gym, planning to add a swimming pool and spa center in an existing gym.
To whom it may concern,
I appreciate the city authorities for taking an initiative to allocate funds for our township. Despite the fact that both options would be equally valuable for us, I personally opine that constructing a bike lane is a more apropos option due to the road safety and help to reduce pollution level.
Conspicuously, since bikers are facing challenges about safety while riding on roads, the implementation of this project will give relief from safety measures. Furthermore, it would also benefit inhabitants to be fit. For example, repetitive motion of paddling could also improve our cardiovascular health by increasing our heart rate and breathing; also it would help in mental well being of us.
Interestingly enough, the concept of constructing different lanes could help with traffic jams. Due to it being a small town most of the roads are not wide and packed with vehicles all the time, people could be encouraged to opt for bikes rather than cars. Moreover, it would help to decrease pollution levels and make our city air clean.
Based on the aforementioned reasoning, I am of the opinion that a bike lane would be the preferred choice, However, I am positive that town authorities will take the best decision in the interest of the larger population of the city.
Score 9. Watch your use of ‘conspicuously’. It means ‘to stand out from the background’. I know Hzad suggests using it, but it really males no sense to use it in this way. You can just start this paragraph with ‘Since’ because you use plenty of connections throughout your essays.
Ok Ma’am…Noted !
Thank you for your valuable feedback.
You’re very welcome.
You were charged for items which you have not purchased at the local grocery shop.
Write a letter to the manager of the grocery shop in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:
• Describe the problem that you have faced,
• Explain the items you have purchased
• Suggest what the manager should do to resolve it
Dear Mr. Manager,
My name is Kritika Soni, I am a consistent customer at your store for the past 2 years. Every Thursday, I schedule a visit to the shop for purchasing weekly essentials, and my shopping experience has always been smoother than butter. However, it was not the case during my last trip.
Yesterday i.e., 12th of March, I encountered a technical glitch in my bill generation system. Since, there was an enormous queue at the manual sales counter, I opted for self-checkout. Even though the clothing section was closed for renovations, my bill had charges for four products which were not in the basket. Luckily at home, my son noticed the issue and informed me about the miscalculation of extra dollars, which were spent at the supermarket.
Surprisingly, the invoice for all the twenty-five grocery items purchased that day, was still with me. Attaching its snap with the items bought for your reference.
To remedy the situation, I would recommend to either refund the additional amount in the original payment mode or share store points of the same value.
Your cooperation in this regard is highly appreciated. Furthermore, an open line of communication, in this case, will definitely help out.
Thanks & regards,
Kritika Soni
Score 7
You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow, and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
Dear Hotel Manager,
My name is Kritika Soni, and recently I have stayed at your hotel – Mirage in Mississauga. The purpose of my writing is regarding unpleasant experience at your hotel.
After reading multiple promotions, I reserved a luxurious Premium suite with a mountain view from 21st to 23rd March in Ladakh. Luckily, the room was available for targeted dates; the booking was confirmed through a third-party app, VisitMo.
On the arrival day, even though check-in timings were mentioned as noon on the website, waiting time was enormous. We were asked to hang around in the lobby for more than 2 hours, which further delayed our schedule. What’s worse, the suite’s washroom was not at all sanitised after previous occupant’s stay. A bunch of tissues and hair were found near the drainage. This unhygienic practice is not expected from such a branded hotel.
I will recommend performing quality checks for each room to make sure nobody else’s lodging experience is ruined like ours. Additionally, if you can provide intensive management training to the staff, it might work as a charm for you.
I hope you might be able to benefit from my suggestions and feedback.
Regards,
Kritika Soni
Score 8
The company you work for would like to ask employees to work on Saturdays for the next two months in order to catch up on its backlog. Therefore, it has circulated a survey asking your opinion about two possible options.
A: Half the staff would work for four hours every Saturday.
B: All the staff would work for two hours every Saturday
Some workers have been debating about the work schedule on weekends to clear off the backlog. Though working with lesser staff for four hours on every alternate Saturday seems a feasible idea, I tend to feel that requesting all employers to work for a couple of hours every Saturday would be more beneficial to the company because this policy would promote equality and boost employee morale.
Firstly, adhering to the policy of requesting all staff members to come Saturday for overtime would represent that the company is not encouraging any disparity and treating all their employees equally. It further means that the company is not taking advantage of dedicated employees and giving some slack to non-performers.
Secondly, asking employees to come only for a couple of hours would not hassle them much. Most of the employees are preoccupied with their weekends doing home chores. Therefore, spending 4 hours on the weekend would aggravate them into thinking that they are overburdened in their work.
Given these propositions, I feel that two hours of work is a better idea than spending long hours on the weekend in the office.
Score 9
For years, you have volunteered for a local theater group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
Option A: Spend money on costumes
Option B: Spend money on storage
Some volunteers have been debating about spending the lump sum money on costumes. Though it has some benefits in bringing more vividity into the theatre, I tend to feel that spending money on improving the storage unit would facilitate the theatre group extensively to become more versatile and keep a spare space to expand the sitting area.
Spending money to increase the storage unit would give some leverage to the artists in making their plays more extravagant. Currently, performers do not have enough space on the stage to act in a grandiose because some stage space is being occupied keeping other items. Therefore, investing money in the separate storage unit would give leeway to expand the stage performing area.
Secondly, the sitting area in the theatre is not adequate to accommodate the large gathering because some space is dedicated to the backstage area. Therefore, expanding the storage unit would help to shift the backstage from the sitting space, further allowing the organizers to put some extra chairs to accommodate more people.
Given these reasons, I feel that spending money on the costumes would not be beneficial to the organizers.
Score 10
Option A: Scheduling the maintenance in the morning from 6am to noon
Option B: Scheduling the maintenance in the evening from 5pm to 11pm
I personally think that the maintenance of our building should be scheduled in the evening time because the usage of hot water is minimal in the evening, and the weather condition would be more pleasant in the evening than in the morning. Even though the resident would face issues with dinner preparation, I believe it would be manageable.
Primarily, The residents in the society are working professionals, and their children are schoolgoers. Therefore, they need to perform their daily indulgences in the morning, in which hot water plays a vital role. Therefore, having the hot water turned off would make the day for residents difficult as they would be unable to complete their quotidian activities.
Secondly, the weather condition is extreme in the morning as the temperature usually drops in the range of -8 to -16 degree celsius, and the hot water plays a significant role in keeping the house warm. Therefore, turning off the hot water in the morning makes the resident incapacitated to keep their home in a liveable condition.
Given these propositions, I believe it would be more feasible if the maintenance of the building would be occurred in the evening.
Score 7
The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
• Option A: Build a Factory
• Option B: Do not build a factory
You recently announced that you are considering to build a factory in the city. I personally agree with this idea since it will be beneficial for generating employment and contributing to the economic growth of the city.
It is well known, that the city has been in a continuous development with the construction of more residential places, but there are not sufficient employment sources and people need to commute to the surrounding cities to work. Therefore, this factory will allow to many of our citizens to have one opportunity to work near their homes. Moreover, it will provide a better-quality life to them who currently expend many hours away their loving ones.
In addition, this factory will allow an exponential economic growth for the city, placing it in the top producers of biodegradable products. Since it will bring an extra source of revenue, we can continue improving other community places, for instance parks, schools and roads.
To sum up, I strongly support building a factory in the city due to the fact it will bring social and economic benefits. Creating more job opportunities and having additional revenue will help us to achieve the city we deserve.
Score 7
Your opinion about facilities
Dear Manager,
First, I would like to thank you for keeping us in the loop of evaluation of the common area. As representative of the accounting department, I’m reaching you to tell that we would like to keep the restaurant rather than building a childcare facility.
Our first concern is inconvenience of going outside for grab a bite. It would be lost of time and we won’t even make it in our 30 minute break since there are no place to eat nearby. Lunch break is not only for filling our stomach, but also is a great time for relaxing and having conversations with coworkers. Hurrying up and getting stress will not help this process and reflect our work performance negatively.
Our second concern is a noise that will be caused to build a daycare facility. To construct a daycare facility, restaurant needs to go under demolition first. During this time, it will be impossible to work in the building, and it’s not only demolition, which cause unbearable noise, but also the renovation process too.
Overall, if we put these two options in a scale, we think that keeping the restoration weights heavily by a high margin. At the end of the day, we will respect your decision.
Score 7
Your opinion about facilities
You work in a very big office building that has a cheap, and very popular, restaurant. However, the building manager is thinking of removing the restaurant because he would like to replace it with a childcare facility. Since he doesn’t want his final decision to result in businesses moving out, he has asked which option you would prefer:
1. Cheap and affordable
2. A place where employees go to relax, have business conversation etc.
RESPONSE:
The office building restaurant has been up and running for about 15 years now, making it one of the oldest and most popular restaurants in its environs. Since the unmarried population account for majority of the employees who work in the building, I would suggest that it be maintained, rather than being replaced with a childcare facility.
The restaurant provides very affordable meals when compared to other restaurants in the area. There are varieties of mouth-watering dishes, drink and snacks for both employees of the building and people from the area at a very low cost making it one of the most popular restaurants in the area.
The building restaurant has a good ambience, which makes it a very good spot for relaxation. People from all works of life, within and outside the office building also come to the restaurant to unwind, carry out meaningful business discussions and meet new people.
Having the restaurant has proven to be beneficial to everyone, that is, people that are with or without children. In my opinion, it should be maintained rather than having it replaced with a childcare facility which will only serve less than 10 percent of the population in the area.
Score 10
1. For years, you have volunteered for a local theater group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
RESPONSE:
Our local theater group has recorded tremendous growth and has also received both local and international recognition over the years. As a volunteer for this group, I would suggest the donation from our organizers should be used on storage rather than on costumes, as large donations like this do not come too often.
Channeling the donation to building storage facilities will help decongest the theater area. Theater equipment, costumes and other materials lying around the backstage area can be moved into the storage facility, thereby giving more room for theater activities.
In addition to decongesting the stage area, availability of a proper storage facilities will also increase the durability of the equipment and other theater materials. The lifespan of these materials and machines can be extended by reducing exposure to dusts, air, rusts and so on. Furthermore, providing designated area or shelves for different material will also increase its accessibility.
In my opinion, it is more advantageous to channel large donations to long term and capital-intensive projects.
Score 9
Your opinion about construction
The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
One of the responsibilities of every government is to continuously find ways to enhance the general well-being of their people. I support the notion of approving the construction of a factory, as it will bring about increased employment opportunities and improved living standards of residents.
Building factories will create jobs for residents of that community. Approval for factory construction will not only create jobs for people in the construction industry, that is, the bricklayers, engineers, architects and so on, but will also create employment opportunities for people to work and run the machines and equipment used in the actual production of goods.
Furthermore, building of factories will also enhance the standard of living of people in that area. A situation where residents are gainfully employed results in increased spending and causes a positive multiplier effect, which helps to increase economic growth and standards.
Job creation and quality of living are major determinants of economic growth and development and as such I think the approval for the construction of factories should be largely supported.
Score 10 but watch your articles!
You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company / museum / art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
• introduce yourself
• explain your experience and special skills
• tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear Jessica,
I am writing to indicate interest on the job advert I came across on the Guardian newspaper, for the position of an IT specialist in your firm.
My name is Chika, a graduate of computer science in one of the most prestigious universities in Nigeria. I am a practicing IT personnel with a 10 years’ work experience. I have worked and contributed significantly in industries such as banking, telecommunication, manufacturing and entertainment during the course of my job. I am a good communicator, mentor and team lead, and have led a group of individuals to build and maintain servers and systems of various departments within companies. I am also an independent thinker who can and is willing to deliver and meet tight deadline and schedules. I have also been recognized locally and internationally for competence in delivering my work and as such I am confident that I am the best candidate for this position.
I am currently employed; hence, I will need a month to conduct a proper work handover for the incoming staff, if given an opportunity to work with your reputable company. However, I will be glad to join your organization afterwards.
I patiently await your positive feedback.
Yours Sincerely,
Chika.
Score 7
You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
Dear Hotel Manager,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction of your hotel, I online reserved my room at your hotel. During our stay, we encountered a number of unsatisfactory service levels .This letter is an attempt to bring these issue to you notice and request immediate notice
Firstly, I booked online reservation to my room at your hotel. I check in bit earlier as per given schedule but I got keys after two with messy and clean less condition that was very unpleasant experience for me.
Secondly, when I entered at room was getting smelly. I requested to staff for my room cleaning but they came late even though the food was not timely ready also reception turn down my request in rude manner.
Furthermore, your staff need to your kind of attention too, the restaurant service did not meet the hotel standards. Additionally, I would like to suggest you that should arrange weekly meetings for collaboration and staff training Also, you must give opportunity to enrol them in hotel management course about customer service, cleanliness and code of conduct so that you don’t lose valuable customers.
Your kind attention for those matters for hotel service issues it is highly impacted to your business.
Regards
Sobia Asher
Score 7
1. You have registered for a six-month computer training program at Sambro Community College. Therefore, you want to rent a room from the Sambro Housing Agency. Write an email telling them when you need the room, the type of room you would prefer, and the reason for your request.
Dear Mr. Smith,
I recently enrolled for a six-month computer training course at Sambro Community College and I will be needing assistance from your reputable Housing Agency in looking for a suitable accommodation during my stay.
I would like a well-furnished one-bedroom apartment in a serene and tidy neighborhood, bathroom, sitting room and kitchen all en suite. I will not be working during my stay there in Sambro, so an affordable apartment between the range of 300-400 dollar monthly would be perfect. I would also prefer an apartment not too far from Sambro Community College so as to save myself some transportation cost.
The course does not begin until second half of the year, precisely on the 23rd of July, but I will be arriving Sambro in the first week of July to enable me settle in fully before the program begins. I trust you to get a suitable place for me before my arrival.
Looking forward to hearing from you soonest.
Yours sincerely,
Ubong.
Score 8 – Watch your punctuation!
Dear Ann,
It gladdens my heart to hear that you finally have a baby to call your own after so many years of waiting. This is a major milestone for you and I am happy to be part of it.
Although parenting may seem overwhelming sometimes, it’s nothing that can’t be handled when you have a good support system around you. There is no one best way to parenting, so I’d advise you pay close attention to your words and actions bearing in mind that the home is the first point of learning for every child. Be careful not to display behaviors that you don’t want your child exhibiting.
There is a club offering support and lectures for new parents just down the street, I hear its very helpful, so do give it a try. I am also available on Wednesday and Friday nights, so if you need help with babysitting, feel free to drop off my little niece at my place.
Wishing you all the best in this new journey sweet sister.
Your sister,
Naomi.
Score 11
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
Dear Peter,
It gladdens my heart to finally know you thinking about going to the university, I have always seen great potentials in you and deciding to further your education is a good way to unleash them.
There are various reasons why people choose to go to the university. Majority go to acquire skills that will help them compete favorably in the labor market, some chose to go to the university just for the certificate or even because they were forced to by their parents. Most people also prefer to study far away from home as it helps them become more independent and gives them some level of freedom. I am sure you would have a better experience far from home too.
I have also observed your interest in calculations over the years, and I think studying Finance, Business or Data analytics would be a good fit for you. These professions are also very lucrative and sort after locally and internationally too.
Wishing you all the best in whatever decision you take dear brother.
Your sweet sister
Ifeoma.
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You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow, and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
Dear Johnson,
I got into the country from Mexico two days ago and have been staying at the hotel since then. I must say, I haven’t quite enjoyed my stay here as the hotel rooms are dirty, and the hotel services are very slow and unpleasant.
On my arrival here, I noticed that the manner at which I was welcomed and showed around the hotel facility was not very professional. The room I was offered was also very untidy with neither a heater to warm up the room in the cold nor a television. I also noticed some stains which seemed permanent on the bathroom walls and one of the taps was not functioning properly.
The condition of the hotel facilities, accommodation and services is a major determinant of its long-term survival, and as such I would suggest that:
1. Maintenance be carried out where necessary.
2. Rooms be thoroughly cleaned, bedspread washed, and waste bins emptied after checking out.
3. Training be conducted regularly for every staff of the hotel.
I hope my suggestions are being considered and implemented.
Yours sincerely,
Ifeoma.
Score 10
You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty. Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
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Respected Sir,
I am writing this email to you regarding my stay at Hilton Residency, during my Toronto trip, to express the endless dissatisfaction that I had experienced.
Firstly, I had requested for an earlier check-in as I had arrived a bit early than expected but the receptionist turned down my request in a rude manner even though the room was available. Nevertheless, somehow I managed to check-in to the room after long hours of conversation. But then I found the room to be in a complete mess. Again, I had to encounter the receptionist to clean my room but she was reluctant to send a room service immediately.
Secondly, the room service did not meet the hotel standards. The room was still cluttered, bed spreads had stains, cans and newspapers littered in the balcony were not cleaned, bathrobe and few toiletries were missing. Despite informing at the reception repeatedly, none of the above said things were taken care on time. I had also marked my feedback at the suggestion register as well.
As this experience came out as a bolt out of the blue for me as I am a regular visitor at your other facilities. I would like to get a partial amount as a compensation for the inconveniences caused by your staffs. Additionally, I suggest you to call in for a meeting with the staff coordinator to train the staffs about customer service, cleanliness and code of conduct so that you don’t lose valuable customers.
Kind Regards,
Jade
Score 8
You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and the time keeping of the other students.
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
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Respected Mr. Berkley,
I’m Caroline Augustus, second term English student at your Abacus Language School. This email is regarding my utter disenchantment with the current education level, resources and regulations.
As an international student, English was never my first language and hence, I had joined this esteemed institution even though the courses are expensive when compared to the other private schools. Nonetheless, I’m thoroughly dissatisfied with the class of education provided by the professors as they’re purely basic and easily accessible in any social media. Besides, the study materials provided are old school. Moreover, there are no case studies or assignments given to enhance the knowledge. Additionally, few of the students fail to follow the code of conduct and the teachers seem to be unaffected.
I would request you to conduct a monthly teacher’s review meeting and ask them to follow advanced level of teaching that involves real-time knowledge transfer. And, I would also suggest you to put up a notice for the late comers. Furthermore, I would recommend you to update the library as latest editions, famous books and many of the required materials are missing.
Yours Sincerely,
Caroline Augustus
Score 8
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
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Dear Andrew,
It’s so good to hear from you after such a long time. Congratulations on your high school graduation! I’m elated and proud of you, Andrew. Moreover, I understood from your mail that you’re going to the university and a bit sceptical on which course to choose especially when the options are enormous.
Firstly, there are students who join university and take up courses following a herd. While others chase their passion, there will always be a crowd that needs just a degree certificate.
Secondly, a large number of students prefer to join universities that are far from home so as to enjoy their youth as well as to get exposed to the real world independently. Not just that, moving to different cities would definitely build your network that in turn would get you access to greater career opportunities.
I would recommend you to identify your need, set a goal and follow it passionately. As far as I know you, I would suggest you to consider Economics as I have seen your desire to understand its concepts and relate it. Furthermore, I have also seen you learn coding and design a fully functional website. Either of the choices you make would not only help you attain heights but also quench your knowledge thirst. As an additional tip, you can create a board of pros and cons of your interests and pick one that aligns your objective.
Looking forward to hear from you on your choices!
Love,
Kathy
Score 8
Dear Lucy,
Congratulations for your little human! I’m sure Daniel is on cloud-nine as he was the one eagerly waiting to hold Lia. I feel sorry that I couldn’t make it on time as I had already mentioned you about my Calgary project. But, the good news is that I’m flying back soon and I can’t wait to hold my angel and shower her with kisses until she cries for help.
Moreover, during our zoom call I noticed that you and Daniel seem to be a bit overwhelmed by parenting. I completely understand this is a new phase for you both and know how tiresome it can be at times. But, I’m so confident that you and Daniel would be the best parents. Kids learn from their parents and I’m sure Lia will not only learn to be a passionate baker but also a great archer as parents are always the best teachers.
Besides, I recently came across an article of an organization called First-Cry that provides various assistance programs to young couples like from counselling to financial aid, baby healthcare to babysitting, etc. I would suggest you and Daniel to enroll in one of their free sessions to gain detailed knowledge on all the benefits covered.
I’m looking forward to hear from you on the organization. And, once again I wish you both a happy parenting!
With Love,
Amy
Score 8
Q:you made an online purchase and the product was not same as the description on the website
Dear Sir,
I am Pooja, a regular customer of your renowned website. The main purpose why I am writing is to lodge a complaint regarding the trolley which I recently bought from your official website.
To brief more about the purchase details, order id was #12345, and the date of order was 1st November. Since I have been ordering from your website from long time, I have never faced such issues after receiving the products.
However, this time, on the arrival of my order I found that the color of my trolley was totally different, and shape of the wheels was not as per the pictures being displayed on the product page .In addition to this, there were scratches on the trolley which suggests that either it has been already used or returned to your online store.
In an attempt to resolve this matter, I would be grateful to you if you could accept the return request and refund my money to the original payment mode, or better yet, resolve the aforementioned problems and replace the product.
Hoping to get a prompt resolution from you soon.
Regards,
Pooja
Score 8
Practice task. You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
The answer:
Dear Fairmont Hotel Administrator,
I am writing to complain about the service of your staff and the cleanliness of my room.
I checked into the Fairmont hotel 3 days ago, and I lived there 1 night, from 25 till 26 October. As it is a 4-star hotel with a very high price, which is 450 CAD per 2 days, I was waiting for the best service ever.
Unfortunately, I was totally disappointed, because my room was not cleaned. For example: I found hair in the bathroom, the table was sticky and moreover my blanket had a lot of spots!
I called and asked service room to fix these problems, but I was absolutely ignored. They were able to answer only when I went to the reservation desk.
After 10 minutes of waiting, one girl tried to help me. She cleaned really badly, so I decided to do an inspection. I still found some hair in the bathroom and the blanket was not changed. I have to admit your worker did wipe the table, but, again, a wiper smelled awful!
I suggest you increase the quality of your service and cleaning of rooms, because I felt uncomfortable. Now I see that my money was wasted and my small vacation was spoiled because of this accommodation. I would like at least part of my expenses to be returned. I hope, you will approve the refund for me.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Score 8
Dear Johnson,
I got into the country from Mexico two days ago and have been staying at the hotel since then. I must say, I haven’t quite enjoyed my stay here as the hotel rooms are dirty, and the hotel services are very slow and unpleasant.
On my arrival here, I noticed that the manner at which I was welcomed and showed around the hotel facility was not very professional. The room I was offered was also very untidy with neither a heater to warm up the room in the cold nor a television. I also noticed some stains which seemed permanent on the bathroom walls and one of the taps was not functioning properly.
The condition of the hotel facilities, accommodation and services is a major determinant of its long-term survival, and as such I would suggest that:
1. Maintenance be carried out where necessary.
2. Rooms be thoroughly cleaned, bedspread washed and waste bins emptied after check out.
3. Training be conducted regularly for every staff of the hotel.
I hope my suggestions are being considered and implemented.
Yours sincerely,
Ifeoma.
Score 10
You work in a very big office building that has a cheap, and very popular, restaurant. However, the building manager is thinking of removing the restaurant because he would like to replace it with a childcare facility. Since he doesn’t want his final decision to result in businesses moving out, he has asked which option you would prefer:
Taking a decision on the use of the restaurant space in the building as a childcare facility needs to be considered thoroughly. Running a child care centre within the building, considering the location being the city centre, would be fine, but I think having the existing restaurant in place would be better, as moving it would cost you some customers and probably lead to shut down of the business.
Considering the location of the office building, which is at the centre of town it had attracted customers from nearby offices who had chosen the restaurant to be a good choice for lunch during break. For example, it’s close proximity to A&T Technological Institute had brought about their partnership with the restaurant, as they have signed a lunch deal with the restaurant for 200 plates daily at $5 per plate.
Furthermore, there is a possible downside to moving the restaurant. Getting another space of this size, within the city centre, would cost more than what you have here, which might cause you to move out of the city centre to a more remote area, and this could possibly lead to a shutdown of the business.
I hope you would give this a thought, and retain the restaurant rather than having a child care facility in it’s stead.
Score 8 – Sentence variety is important, but you have too many gerunds going on here.
its stead (not it’s stead) because its is a pronoun!
You work for a garden maintenance company. You want to motivate people towards gardening; hence you conduct a survey from the residents of society.
Choose from the two options
Option A – Donate plants to community to inculcate love for plants
Option B – Conduct a workshop to create awareness among residents
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In my perception, conducting a workshop and provide all awareness information will motivate people more than donating the plants for community.
In the workshop, people will learn about the role of plant in the continuation of human life as a source of oxygen and the absorption of carbon dioxide that spread in the air due to pollution. Therefor the environment must pe preserved by participating in planting more trees and encountering the process of planting and taking care of the trees in our surrounding and not throwing garbage or destroying tree branches and cutting them.
However, every month some politicians and NGO visits our Rockwell society to promote their well-being behaviors and they donate some plants but due to lack of knowledge about plant development process we were not able to save them. Though nowadays technology has been grown leaps and bound over past years and every resident can get required information through one click but attending workshop will give them real feel and they can be able to cultivate the knowledge into real scenarios and their tremendous efforts help to grow the plants.
I firmly believe that workshop would be excellent idea than donating plant.
Regards,
PS
Score 7
You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company / museum / art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
introduce yourself
explain your experience and special skills
tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear HR Manager,
Sequel to your advertisement on 4th October, 2022 for the vacant position of a graphics designer, I am writing to show my interest in filling the available position. My name is Akin, and I am a graduate of computer science with specialisation in graphics design as a major from the University of Lagos. I possess the required years of experience as stated in your advertisement.
I have had five years work experience with A&T Technological Institute as I am currently the senior graphics designer for the company. Before that, I had worked as a web designer for Webstar construction as a paid officer, and also as a freelancer for Sadesh Technologies where I developed a functional mobile application for the company and helped design their present-day advertisement board.
Considering the urgency of your need for the services of a graphics designer, I could begin work with immediate effect if my application is looked into and I am considered for the position.
Kindly find attached, with this application, copies of my resume and my qualification certificates.
Yours Sincerely,
Akinwumi Oluwadare
Score 8
Writing Task 2:
Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150–200 words.
Option A: The workplace should have a scent-free policy.
Option B: The workplace should allow people to wear scents.
Undoubtedly, both options have a variety of benefits. However, in my opinion, option B makes more sense because of some reasons:
The first reason is about freedom in Canada, which is the most well-known as a free country with a variety of cultures and opinions, in my point of view, all clerks and workers have a right to wear a suitable and acceptable uniform or suit, and perfume.
Another reason is that culture, where some people with different beliefs have traditional behavior about their styles. As a prime example, Iranian strongly believe that wearing perfume means respecting to other side and making them happier and more attractive.
In addition, it should not be forgotten that all people do not have the same smell. Depending on their activity, some people have annoying smells. So, deodorant and perfume can compensate for this issue temporarily.
So according to my reason, I strongly believe that wearing scents should be optional and free to choose it.
I hope my reason could persuade you to choose the best things for our company as always. Although it is just my point of view and I will support whatever decision is made.
Score 8
You’re looking for a part-time job in an office. In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the office manager in which you apply for the position. As you write your email, you should:
• introduce yourself
• explain your experience and special skills
• tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear Manager,
I am John and recently graduated from San Francisco university. I have seen an advertisement about part -time job in your company. Though I am already taken admission for master course but same time I am lacking with some financial crunch. However, I have some time in evening and wanted to do some part time job to utilize those hours which will also fulfil my financial needs.
I have good knowledge in SQL coding and completed many projects during my semester exams which also shows a testimony in my results. I have awarded with one of the best coding awards from university. I had written a program which monitor the health systems for patients and same time it will send the message to respective doctors if any of the measurement parameters getting increased as per the standard units.
I wanted to utilize my skills and can develop program for your company which will help to maximize the company potentials. Kindly consider my profile for the interview. I would be available Monday to Friday during Day time.
If interview and other formalities will go well. I would able to join by next month. Thank you so much for your valuable time, I am looking forward to hearing back from your side.
Regards,
John
Score 7
Writing Task 1 –
Your friends are staying in an apartment, and you are also planning to move into that same apartment but you have to take permission from apartment manager whose contact details have been provided by your friends.
Write an email to the manager in about 150-200 words.
• Explain why you are writing this email
• What facilities are you looking for
• When you are planning to move
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Dear Manager,
Myself P. Mark staying near to downtown area, I got your contact details by my friend Mr. John who is staying in your Maplewood society, Unit# 1011. I am writing this email to express my interest to move into Maplewood apartment and stay with john as his sharing partner has already been left.
Although I have already visited specific unit earlier with john but still, I wanted to know all the facilities which you generally offer for new tenants. Usually, I do not get much time on weekdays due to huge office workload therefor I am looking for a dishwasher and a washing machine inside the apartment unit if possible. In addition to that GYM and badminton court inside the boundary wall will be advantage.
Before making any decision, I am seeking your permission with due diligence so onboarding process would be hassle free. If you concur, I will give notice in my apartment and will be able to shift in your apartment by first week of next month.
I would appreciate if you able to reply by this week. If any other information required, you can call my direct on my number or you can also reach to my friend.
Regards,
Prabhu
Score 7
You’re looking for a full-time job at an IT company/museum/art gallery.
In about 150 to 200 words, write an email to the HR Manager in which you apply for the position. In your email, you should:
• introduce yourself
• explain your experience and special skills
• tell him or her when you think you could start
Dear Mr. Hopskin,
My name is Tina and I recently graduated with a bachelor’s degree in History from the University of Alberta. I am writing you a letter to express my interest in becoming the customer representative at the Royal Museum.
During my university years, I have been working as a sale associate at the university bookstore. At first, I had many challenges trying to pick up the workload at the bookstore, especially during the start of the school year. However, with dedication and team support, I slowly adapted to the fast-paced work environment. I even got recognition from my manager for having the best customer service which was nominated by our customers.
Aside from my work experience, I am passionate about history, and I desire to become a history professor one day. Since little, I have been collecting stories of all kinds of history. For that reason, families and friends often bring me souvenirs that are history related. For example, my bestie brought me back a collection of ancient rocks from China.
Since I don’t have any major plans this summer, I am ready to start this position as soon as I get your offer. Thank you very much for your time and consideration, and I am looking forward to hearing back from you.
Best regards,
Tina
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The company you work for would like to ask employees to work on Saturdays for the next two months in order to catch up on its backlog. Therefore, it has circulated a survey asking your opinion about two possible options.
• A: Half the staff would work for four hours every Saturday.
• B: All the staff would work for two hours every Saturday.
In my opinion, it would be ideal if we have all the staff work for four hours every Saturday because it emphasizes the importance of fairness and increases the efficiency of our work.
Being a core member of the representative committee, I have heard a lot of concerns about fairness. Some of our new staff feel like they were being bullied by their senior colleagues. For example, worker A mentioned that the workload was not divided equally between themselves and their colleague. Thus, having only half the team working might make it sounds biased unless we have a policy implemented in selecting our staff randomly.
Since this is a company problem, it is important that we all take part in solving the issue together. This helps increase the spirit of the team effort, encourages collaboration, and builds a stronger bond among our staff members. Plus, when teamwork is placed on the top, it motivates everyone to work harder and provides a better outcome. As result, our company might be able to resolve the backlog issue earlier than our expected time of two months.
As a long-standing staff member, I value our dedication to solving problems together; and for that reason, I believe that all hands on deck are the best solution.
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The company you work for would like to ask employees to work on Saturdays for the next two months in order to catch up on its backlog. Therefore, it has circulated a survey asking your opinion about two possible options.
• A: Half the staff would work for four hours every Saturday.
• B: All the staff would work for two hours every Saturday.
As a mom of four kids, I prefer to have my weekend off, especially when Steven has his taekwondo class every Saturday. In addition, I know that some of our keeners love to work extra hours, so it makes more sense to have only half of our teamwork for four hours every Saturday.
Due to the backlog of our work, our vacation has already been cut back so much that I can even recall the time when I have to work 50 hours per week and barely have any time for my family. Although I understand the nature of our work and the pressure that our team has as we are trying to meet many deadlines, I can’t neglect my children all the time when they are still so young.
Nevertheless, half of our team is made of new graduates who are dedicated and hardworking; and I believe that they are the perfect workforce for this kind of occasion. A lot of newbies are trying to establish their career, and some needs the money to pay the bills, so why not offer them the opportunity?
It’s a tough decision that our company must make; and as a long runner of our company, I hope my opinion will aid in helping you make the final call.
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Dear Andrea,
Once again, congratulations on the arrival of Baby Edna. I can’t wait to hold and kiss her until she cries for help. After our zoom call last week, I kept remembering how overwhelmed you and Leo looked, so I decided to email you and tell you how proud I am of you and Leo.
Being a parent is probably one of the hardest jobs on planet earth. I applaud you and Leo for taking that step in your marriage. Also, I believe Edna would learn a lot from you because I think parents are the best teachers. I say this because parents give knowledge in several ways, and I do not doubt your ability to teach Edna things she would need when she grows up.
Furthermore, I suggest you get as much help as you need. There is an organization called Help for New Parents at Kingston Street. They offer babysitting and counseling services and even give financial assistance. I think you should consider getting a babysitter so you and Leo can have some parent time.
I look forward to hearing your thoughts concerning the organization.
Love,
Kay
Score 8. Nice email, but your sentence variety is inadequate for a higher score.
Dear Jane,
I was elated when I saw your email last night regarding your intention to attend college. I think you are on the right track if you wish to advance professionally in life. Furthermore, since I have obtained my bachelor’s and master’s degree, I am more than happy to address any questions you may have.
Going to college is a like a trial run at adulting. You’re mostly responsible for your own life and the choices you make. However, it is also a place for people to learn and grow. Additionally, people go to university to learn more about a particular subject. I think biology would be a good choice for you because you have loved gardening since you were four. Another course that might be good for you and useful to society is public health. You’ve always had a soft heart for the people around you.
Furthermore, don’t be scared to go far from home. People go far to study because they want to get more opportunities career wise. Sometimes change of environment can help an individual explore more career options.
Looking forward to hearing from you on your decisions.
Sincerely,
Tina.
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Dear Andrea,
Once again, congratulations on the arrival of Baby Edna. I can’t wait to hold and kiss her until she cries for help. After our zoom call last week, I kept remembering how overwhelmed you and Leo looked, so I decided to email you and tell you how proud I am of you and Leo.
Being a parent is probably one of the hardest jobs on planet earth. I applaud you and Leo for taking that step in your marriage. Also, I believe Edna would learn a lot from you because I think parents are the best teachers. I say this because parents give knowledge in several ways, and I do not doubt your ability to teach Edna things she would need when she grows up.
Furthermore, I suggest you get as much help as you need. There is an organization called Help for New Parents at Kingston Street. They offer babysitting and counseling services and even give financial assistance. I think you should consider getting a babysitter so you and Leo can have some parent time.
I look forward to hearing your thoughts concerning the organization.
Love,
Tina
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For years, you have volunteered for a local theatre group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
Considering the huge amount gifted to this theatre group, I think it will be wiser if we expend the cash on costumes rather than storage. This would avail us the opportunity to have a wider array of costumes and to also showcase diverse cultural heritages in our presentations.
In my opinion, having a larger stock of costumes will help encourage participation. we’ll have more actors on stage, and thus, bring beauty to our drama. This will also avail us the chance to relay in-depth message to our viewers.
Another advantage of investing in costume is that we’ll be able to demonstrate an expanse of cultural heritages, showcasing the beauty of various traditions across the globe, thus giving us wider range of viewers and followers of our theatre group.
Lastly, I would like to state that spending the group’s money on costumes will bring us fulfilment for the purpose of the donation rather than on storage.
Score 8 – Use the second conditional to make a suggestion when you have minimal control over the result – I think it would be wiser if we expended the cash on costumes rather than storage…having a larger stock of costumes would help encourage participation. We would have more actors on stage. This would also avail us…we would be able to demonstrate… money on costumes would bring
Thanks for the prompt reply ma’am, I do appreciate. Please, what would’ve been my if I had used the second conditional in my write-up? Just asking for improvement sake ma.
Your writing’s lovely. With the second conditional, you’d score 9. For more than that you need to watch your articles and parallels.
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
Hello Mike,
I got your mail on your intention to go to the University. I think that’s a wise decision, as a degree from the University will give you a better chance to compete in the evolving opportunities out there.
Firstly, undergraduate studies, to some, is just to obtain a certificate, while others see it as an avenue to have intellectual development and obtain skills in their chosen career. I’m sure you’ll have a more robust understanding of your purpose of furthering your education.
Furthermore, while certain people see schooling far away from home as a chance to explore the outside world, some view it as an opportunity to stay away from the hustles and bustles of their environment. Your own reason should determine your choice of school.
Lastly, on your choice of course of study, I think it will be advantageous for you to study Business Analytics as you will find it very interesting and you’ll also have a large window for career progression.
Looking forward to read from you on your decisions.
Best Regards
Akin
Score 8 – Use the second conditional to make a suggestion – I think it would be advantageous for you to study Business Analytics as you would find it very interesting and you’ll also have a large window for career progression.
Gerund – Looking forward to hearing from you on your decisions. (‘hearing’ would be better than ‘reading’)
Thanks for the prompt reply ma’am, I do appreciate. Please, what would’ve been my if I had used the second conditional in my write-up? Just asking for improvement sake ma.
Your writing’s lovely. With the second conditional, you’d score 9. For more than that you need to watch your articles and parallels.
Thanks for the prompt reply ma’am, I do appreciate. Please, what would’ve been my if I had used the second conditional in my write-up? Just asking for improvement sake ma.
Your writing’s lovely. With the second conditional, you’d score 9. For more than that you need to watch your articles and parallels.
You have registered for a six-month computer training program at Sambro Community College. Therefore, you want to rent a room from the Sambro Housing Agency. Write an email telling them when you need the room, the type of room you would prefer, and the reason for your request.
Dear Mr. Huang,
My name is Tina, and I am registered for a six-month computer training program at Sambro Community College. I would like to rent a room from your housing agency, and wonder if you have any vacant rooms for this September?
I am looking for a single room for a period of 6 months, with an inclusion of a single bed, a desk, and a wardrobe to store my luggage. I have a small Chihuahua coming along with me, and I wonder if your agency allows pets in the building. In addition, I am comfortable with a communal kitchen and shared laundry room. It would be great if there’s a space for a bathroom in my rental room, but if not, I’d be happy with a shared bathroom on my floor.
I choose your agency because it is a 5-min walk away from my campus, which would save me tons of time in commuting. I also love the variety of services you offer at your agency from the fitness room to a community garden built in the facility.
My class is starting in about two weeks, and I would really appreciate it if you can get back to me by next Monday. I am looking forward to hearing back from you.
Thank you,
Tina
Score 8 – Inadequate sentence variety – (a small chihuahua will be accompanying me. leaving me to wonder whether or not your building allows pets.)
‘choose’ in the past tense only has one ‘o’ ‘chose’, but it would be more grammatically accurate to say: I have chosen your agency…
1. You are an international student studying English at a private language school. Your courses were expensive, and you are disappointed with the quality of instruction, materials, and timekeeping of the other students.
In an email to the School Principal, complain about the situation, and suggest how you would like the issue to be resolved.
Dear Mr. Findlay,
My name is Truc, and I am currently attending ESL-30 offered by our school. Today, I am writing you an email to express my concern regarding the quality of our course last Winter 2022 term.
Mrs. Brunner was our instructor last term, and despite her extraordinary effort in supporting our class, I find her accent makes the lecture extremely difficult to understand. On top of that, because of the large size of the class, she couldn’t provide details feedback on our assignments. I also noticed that the syllabus of the course was unorganized, and I assumed this was because Mrs. Brunner is a new professor, which is understandable. In addition, I recalled that Mrs. Brunner was struggling to offer one-on-one support to students due to her limited office hours for our class.
I understand that it is a challenge to be a new professor and take on teaching a class of 200 students. Thus, I suggest that for the following term, our school can hire a teaching assistant to help Mrs. Brunner with the course load. Not only a teaching assistant can help with her grading assignments, but perhaps they can help her with supporting the students during one-on-one office hours.
I hope you find my feedback helpful in improving the quality of ESL-30.
Best regards,
Truc Huynh
Score 8 – Past tense – Mrs. Brunner…., I found her accent made… (you’re describing how you felt about it last term)
Present tense – I recall that Mrs. Brunner (You’re remembering it now as you’re writing the email)
Subjunctive – no ‘can’ – Thus, I suggest that for the following term, our school hire a teaching assistant to help Mrs. Brunner with the course load.
Inversion – Not only would a teaching assistant be able to help with her grading assignments, but perhaps also help her with student support during one-on-one office hours.
Salutation – Capitalize both words – Best Regards,
For years, you have volunteered for a local theatre group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
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Considering how Mr. Chen recently expanded our storage space last year, I don’t think we need to spend more money on storage. However, I have heard a lot of concerns from our group about our costumes, particularly because they are worried about the overall look of our show if our group wears the same costume every time. Thus, it would be worth our money to invest in costumes.
Our current storage space is double the size of its previous space which is enough room to store everything we need for our show. We even get a new wood floor, mainly because it keeps the room warmer during winter and sometimes, we can use this space to do make-up.
Nevertheless, perhaps we were too busy last year to have time to check on the quality of our costumes. Some of the dress linings have started to rip off while others have slowly faded in colour. Plus, if we have the capacity to invest in costumes, why don’t we think of preparing for a new show? I recall our highest record of sales was when we hit the town with our new show “Journey to Jumanji”.
Anyway, that is the first thought that comes to my mind, and I hope that it would give our committee a better idea of what the next step would be.
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Score 8 –
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I hope that it gives our committee a better idea of what the next step should be. (you don’t want the second conditional here because it isn’t a suggestion.)
For years, you have volunteered for a local theatre group. The organizers have just received a large donation, so they are circulating a survey to find out whether they should spend the group’s money on costumes or on storage.
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With the plan of growing our theatre this year, I think it would be a good idea to spend some money renovating storage which provides us with enough space to store all the equipment. Plus, we have so many donated costumes from last year that we probably don’t need to buy more yet.
I recalled that Mr. Chen mentioned to us that we were going to increase the number of our performance by double. That would mean that we will have a pretty tight schedule in terms of preparing and running the show. Therefore, to help run the show more efficiently, it makes sense that we have everything we need for our performers to dress up. With our current storage, we will not have the capacity to do that, which hints at the reason why we always need to rent another trailer in the back of the theatre to store our costumes.
Moreover, seeing how we recently got a lot of donated costumes and bought some new costumes last year, I don’t think we are urgent to buy new costumes. The performers are content with their dresses and there has not been a complaint about the overall appearance of our show.
With that note, I highly suggest that we invest our money in expanding our storage.
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Score 10
The performers are content with their outfits
Your city wants to improve the traffic situation in the city. The roads are narrow now so there are traffic jams every day. And there are buses only so the city is thinking of introducing a metro train system, however, it would be expensive. They want to know your opinion. Which choice do you prefer? Explain why you prefer that choice. Also, explain the problems with the other choice.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option 1: Widen the roads.
Option2: Improve the public transit system.
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I would like to opine in favor of option B as this seems to be a far better and convincing choice for me. Though, the other option is quite admittable, but I would like to present a couple of reasons to substantiate my argument.
To begin with, there has been escalated trend in traffic over the past years across the globe. Improving the public transit will eventually help in controlling pollution as well. With the facility of public transport, everyone will be motivated to use it which will be beneficial for the environment. This will gradually reduce the private car on roads. Therefore, the significant changes could be seen especially during traffic hours.
Moreover, stronger public transportation system would boost our economy. Every resident will be elated to use public transport than their own private vehicles. It would also result in cost-effective while budgeting their salaries. Metro system will be the fastest means to commute while sitting and relaxing rather than worrying to drive. However, widening the roads will not solve the problem of traffic as well as the pollution.
Having discussed all the arguments, I believe improving the public transportation will certainly reap more benefits to the residents in numerous ways. Again, these are my personal beliefs, but I will support whatever the city decides to do.
I appreciate the opportunity to provide input on this issue.
Regards,
PS
Score 8
The faculty at your university is considering a new course policy. The faculty is asking students to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
=> Students need to take a final exam to pass the course
=> Students need to complete a research project to pass the course.
A final exam is a more structured and standardized procedure that students have been familiarized with. A typical final exam involves multiple questions under different formats such as multiple choice, short answer questions or sometimes long question style. Students know the trill of preparation for exams and the rules they must follow as they enter the exam room. For many, this reduces the level of uncertainty compared to completing a research project.
On the other hand, a research project involves a long period of time to complete. For certain subjects, it might not be feasible for students to conduct research in a short period of time. For example, in the mathematics field, it becomes a bit uncertain how students can come up with a research question and complete the whole project within a period of 3-4 months. In addition, research itself is a completely different skill set that students are expected to acquire on top of their course material.
Thus, I believe that the final exam is a better option to pass the course because it directly reflects the understanding of the knowledge students are tested for and it allows students to prepare for better.
Score 8 . Lovely response, but for a 9+ use the second conditional in your conclusion because you’re making a suggestion!
The faculty at your university is considering a new course policy. The faculty is asking students to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
=> Students need to take a final exam to pass the course
=> Students need to complete a research project to pass the course.
Research is a challenge that some students fear while others face head-to-head. While research does not directly test the knowledge that ones might learn in class, it is much more representative of the typical type of work that individuals will take on after they graduate. Research requires not only your comprehension but rather your curiosity and a critical mind in solving problems. In addition, doing research is a lengthy, arduous procedure, which involves a multi-step procedure before one obtains the results, which sometimes ones can never predict.
Research is more realistic about the world and helps students develop a growth mindset about their work. For example, if you are studying marine biology, a research project would engage students in collecting data in wild environments. They might be going to a natural habitat like the pond, or river to observe the behaviour of aquatic animals. Eventually, they will run into problems such as finding the right location to observe animals, bad weather, and missing technical equipment to conduct testing. These are the points that a final exam will never be able to test students on.
Thus, I believe a research project is a better way to pass the course because it is better at reflecting students’ understanding of their knowledge and the application of knowledge in their future workplaces.
Score 8 . Lovely response, but for a 9+ use the second conditional in your conclusion because you’re making a suggestion!
You are employed by a large restaurant chain. Your line manager has written to you to ask your opinion on plans for the yearly staff trip in the coming winter. There are two options to choose from and your manager would like feedback on which you think is best.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option A: Take all the employees to a local restaurant with a small charge to each employee.
Option B: Have a ‘pot luck’ dinner at the office, where everyone brings a dish that they have bought or prepared
In my opinion, organizing a pot luck dinner is a better choice mainly for two reasons.
Primarily, it is an economical choice. Some of our employees work at minimum wage, so the contribution for dinner might hamper their monthly budget. On the other hand, the pot luck dinner will allow them to prepare only one dish for everyone at their home which can be cost effective.
Furthermore, our office staff belongs to different nationality and culture, so everyone can cook their local dish in the pot luck dinner. Sharing cultures and food with each other will strengthen the bond between colleagues. This will help our workplace.
In conclusion, although inviting all workers in a nearby hotel with a nominal contribution is a good choice, organizing the pot luck dinner at the office is an ideal option. Lastly, I would like to thank you sir for conducting this survey and allowing us to assist you in reaching a final decision.
Score 8
“You live in an area downtown where there are some schools. In some of these schools, using the internet is getting more popular. Is this a positive or negative development?
“ Option A: Positive Development
Option B: Negative Development ”
In my opinion, wide use of the internet at the school level is a negative development mainly for two reasons.
Primarily, it will hamper children’s concentration level. Students mainly use the internet to chat or post pictures on online planforms. Pop-up notifications from their social media accounts lure them to unlock their phones rather than paying attention to the professor. Scrolling through the Instagram and Facebook feeds causing lack of concentration in the respective subject.
Furthermore, the internet provides ample information within a second of a search. However, that information is not always correct. As teenagers are vulnerable, they trust this information without confirming it. As majority of the schools in our community are in the downtown area, which is higher in a crime rate, widespread of any false news can cause a destruction at any level.
In conclusion, although the internet is a blessing to a mankind, using it more often at the school level in a negative development. Lastly, I would like to request the school authority for a in-depth investigate on such an arising issue.
Score 8
You are employed by a large restaurant chain. Your line manager has written to you to ask your opinion on plans for the yearly staff trip in the coming winter. There are two options to choose from and your manager would like feedback on which you think is best.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option A: Take all the employees to a local restaurant with a small charge to each employee.
Option B: Have a ‘pot luck’ dinner at the office, where everyone brings a dish that they have bought or prepared
In my opinion, organizing a pot luck dinner is a better choice mainly for two reasons.
Primarily, it is an economical choice. Some of our employees work at minimum wage, so the contribution for dinner might hamper their monthly budget. On the other hand, the pot luck dinner will allow them to prepare only one dish for everyone at their home which can be cost effective.
Furthermore, our office staff belongs to different nationality and culture, so everyone can cook their local dish in the pot luck dinner. Sharing cultures and food with each other will strengthen the bond between colleagues. This will help our workplace.
In conclusion, although inviting all workers in a nearby hotel with a nominal contribution is a good choice, organizing the pot luck dinner at the office is an ideal option. Lastly, I would like to thank you sir for conducting this survey and allowing us to assist you in reaching a final decision.
Score 8
– Internet In Schools Survey
You live in a CELPIP TIP downtown there are some schools. Some of schools, using the internet in schools is getting more popular. Is this a positive or negative development?
* Choose the option that you prefer in about Write about 150-200 words.
– Option A: Positive Development
– Option B: Negative Development
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I would like to opine with option A, as there is multifarious reason behind it.
In recent technology era, most of the things went digital over internet.
Earlier schools used to depend only on limited resources of books and way of knowledge, though It was good according to that scenario but nowadays circumstances has been changed and school also need to adopt the digital study methodology to provide up to date information to their students.
while using the internet, desired information getting in one click, all teachers and staff are UpToDate with knowledge which those are lacking earlier. This all happened due to internet. In addition, School does not need to keep all records on papers, now due to internet they can have own software and database where they can access all information globally however, there are some data loss risks are associated as cybercrime cases are increased repeatedly.
I believe all the internet uses are getting monitored through logs and only those sites are allowed which is related to study and should be approved by schools’ authorities. I hope this security measure already taken care by all schools.
As discussed above arguments, internet is major role to develop knowledge, I would recommend that every school should use the internet.
Regards,
PS
Score 7
Your company wants to allow some employees to work from home. Not everyone can have this choice because some jobs must be done at the office. The company wants to know if this is fair by surveying your opinion about working from home.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option A: A work-from-home choice is fair.
Option B: A work-from-home choice is not fair.
It is a great news that company is offering work from option for few employees who do not need to be in office for routine job or not working on any important assignment. However, I feel that organization should not have work from option for anyone.
To start with, a company works on team spirit and bonding. Sometimes they may feel that they are not able to opt work from home option due to jobs responsibilities because of that, they will not take crucial responsibility in next project, and it will affect the team coordination and company.
Additionality, data security is major concern for all the companies and always have the fear of leaking of sensitive data. Possibility of data leakage is higher if someone is working from home, and it may affect the company credibility.
In conclusion, to maintain the harmony between employees and to keep the data secure, companies should not allow to work from home. It will be always in favour of a company treat all the employee in same way in all the conditions.
Score 7
Your apartment building is getting old, and the owners of the building are planning to do some renovations this summer. They have decided to conduct a survey to see what the tenants would like to have improved this year. Which option would you prefer?
Option A: New paint and carpets
Option B: New elevator
Dear Society Managers,
I would prefer to replace the existing elevator with modern and high-class lift system. I understand that society should be eye catching so that it will increase the status of members and would increase the market value of premises.
Although, I feel that elevator is one of the important parts of building and should always be as per the safety norms of the government policies. Additionally, we have observed that existing system breaks very frequently, and couple of time, member got stuck in the elevator more than 30 minutes.
Along with that, as this elevator has basic feature and responses very slow which annoy to the society member who is getting late for their office or coming back from a tired day. Moreover, it doesn’t allow to take the weight of more than 3 members so remaining member must come through stairs or need to wait for elevator to take remaining members.
I hope my suggestion would be appealing to society management and would be taking judicious decision in this matter. Please let me know if you need more information me.
Regards,
John
Score 7
You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
Dear Mam or Sir,
I am writing this email to express my dissatisfaction with my experience when I stayed in your hotel last June 21, with my mother to celebrate her birthday.
I booked one room with 2 beds available on the first floor because my mom is old and she doesn’t like to ride inside the elevator. Yet, when we arrived at the hotel the receptionist told us that our room is not yet ready and we have to wait in the lobby. We waited for more than 2 hours to be accommodated and no single personnel approach us to explain why there is a delay.
In addition, when we finally get inside the room it was dirty and seems like the bed linens weren’t changed at all. The restroom has no toiletries available, and I kept calling reception to provide it, at the end, we did end up buying our own.
In conclusion, I would like a full refund of our one-night stay and I would recommend that you should update your reservation process and improve your overall hotel service to avoid this inconvenience for your customers.
I look forward to your response.
Regards,
Amy
Score 8
The city administration is considering whether to approve the building of a factory. Since it wants to know how residents feel, it has sent out a survey to get input on whether people would support or oppose the factory? Write a response explaining your position.
Both Options has advantages and disadvantages. Some people might prefer Option A. However, my preference will be Option B. There are reasons and the same was mentioned below.
Firstly, Some people say building the factory in the city is good idea and provide jobs to the local people. Remaining people will say the building the factory in the residential area is bad thought and it will have adverse effects. Factories will release lot of waste in to the water and air which will effect everyone’s health. Even recent article shows increase in numbers of diseases such as Cancer, Asthama among young children are due to factories which are build with in the city.
Secondly, Factories required enormous land and this will be created only by cutting down trees. By doing so, Primarily, this will create imbalance in our echo friendly environment in our city. We are seeing in the news and social networking sites about the global warming where countries are severely effected due to deforestation. Instead of building a factory, we should go with park which will benefit for all ages. This will provide more value addition to our city than the factory. Consequently, i feel benefits of Option B will outweigh the advantages of Option A.
Conspicuously, Based on the reasons outlined, i will feel Option B is better choice than Option A.
Score 7
Your apartment building is getting old, and the owners of the building are planning to do some renovations this summer. They have decided to conduct a survey to see what the tenants would like to have improved this year. Which option would you prefer?
Option A: New paint and carpets
Option B: New elevator
I would strongly prefer setting up a new elevator. Even though the other option of arranging new paint and carpets for the building is an appealing option, but option B would certainly outweigh the advantages.
To commence with, replacing the old elevator with a new one would immensely help the older generation to move freely from one floor to another. If the elevator is not working properly, aged tenants are more likely to face difficulty while using stairs. Moreover, it would benefit other renters while reallocating, and shifting their stuffs without any hassle. It has been observed that when people were moving their heavy furniture through stairs; it has caused damage to the walls as well as the edges of the furniture also got broken.
Another factor to be considered is that changing the elevator would be time saving for the working tenants while heading to their work locations. Since there is no requirement for painting the building, it would be better if the elevator is operational for every individual. Is it imperative to paint the building or to change old carpets, if it doesn’t have any practical benefits?
Considering the elucidations outlined above, I firmly believe that option B seems to be the viable selection.
Score 8
You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays.
You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
• introduce yourself
• explain what experience and special skills you have
• explain why you are interested in the job
Dear Sir,
My name is Jenna Sharma and the purpose of my writing today is apply for an opening in the City Museum shop during summer vacations. I am a graduate student at London School of History and Arts, perhaps you have heard about it as one of the Ivy league schools. Nothing could be more exhilarating for a history student than getting to work with historically significant artefacts.
If given a chance, it would be an honor and privilege to work for state-of-the-art museum. It could give me first-hand experience to learn and share information with visitors about the masterpieces at the shop. Additionally, It is also an opportunity to boost my resume. As far as I remember, my seniors from college have worked for you and they shared how they landed wonderful museum jobs after working for museum shop.
As far as my credentials are concerned, I have worked for history and arts museum store in the downtown for 2 year thus, I have ample experience in public relations to deliver my best duties if I am considered for this job. Once I was facilitated as spectacular employee of the year for best sales in the store. Moreover, my previous boss and colleagues can vouch for my work ethics.
I am looking forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.
Best Regards,
Jenna Sharma
Score 8
You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
• Say what the problem is.
• Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
• Ask the provider to solve the problem
My name is Jenna Sharma and I am certain that you remember me from last week’s airport pick up at the New York city. I am highly grateful to you for arranging last minute accommodation for me since my previous booking got cancelled. It was quite a disappointing experience, however, my current housing doesn’t seem pleasing as well.
As far as my study is concerned, it is getting compromised as my neighbors are really noisy. They party frequently and all night which upsets my sleep, therefore, I am mostly sleepy in the mornings during my class hours.
Furthermore, my place is quite far from the school, thus, it takes me over two hours commuting back and forth. I could use those two hours accessing library and other resources on campus if I were closer.
I request you to provide me with a housing either on school area or in vicinity. This could also help me participate actively in student activities after school hours, given that I spend lesser time travelling. I am ready to wait for better lodging until there is a suitable place for me. Meanwhile, if you could have a word with my neighbors, it might resolve some problems for me.
Kindly, let me know if you have any question for me, I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
Jenna Sharma
Score 8
You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty.
Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved
Hi,
My name is Jenna and I am writing today concerning my stay at your hotel. As a matter of fact, I frequently travel to Toronto and have stayed in many five-star hotels, however, I had terrible experience staying at your facility.
I highly appreciate you accepting my last-minute booking but I was not expecting to get a messy room. The Floor of the room was wet and bedsheets were soiled as if someone just checked out of that room a minute before I checked in.
Additionally, I received an unsatisfactory service from your staff members. One of my luggage bags was misplaced by a member of the staff, on top of that he hardly cared to inform me. Fortunately, it was found later. Nevertheless, they were rude and unprofessional at most of the times. They never provided room service on time eventhough, I made multiple requests for the same.
I would like to suggest that you should consider replacing your untrained team with more skillful and experienced employees. If given a chance, professional training should be provided to the current personnel as they could improve and perform their job responsibilities efficiently.
I am open for any discussion further.
Best,
Jenna.
Score 8
Dear Amazon Support Team,
I have a complaint to lodge about a portable massager that I purchased on 18-05-2022 from your website. The order id is #123-456-789 for your reference and perusal.
The Firstly I was so annoyed that the delivery timing mentioned for my pin code was 2 days but I received the product almost 7 days later after completing the order on the website. I specifically bought this product due to the great features and short delivery period.
Apart from that, I was most disappointed with the massager when I opened the box and found that it does not appear the same as it was described on the website. It was mentioned online that massager comes in black color, it can be charged with dc charger, and there is no need for AAA batteries. While this product which I have received only works on AAA batteries that are not even rechargeable and also, massager is in brown color.
I request a replacement of the product with correct one or please refund my money on return of this massager. Hoping for a positing reply from your side as soon as possible.
Regards,
Dipak Prajapati
Score 7. Watch your sentence variety
You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a email to the course provider. In your email:
• Say what the problem is.
• Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
• Ask the provider to solve the problem.
“Answer”
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am David, I have enrolled for one year PGP Program in your college, and I am writing this email to express my concern regarding the accommodation provided by you.
Firstly, after my college enrolment, I applied for the college residential facility, and I opted for a single person occupancy. However, unfortunately I was given sharing occupancy, which i am sharing with another college student, in which I have been living for last couple of weeks, which is quite unexpected for me. In addition to this, the room provided to both of us is not enough for two people, and it has a lot of ventilation issue.
Moreover, I have paid the higher fees for my accommodation on single occupancy basis, and the facility I am living is double sharing, as per your college brochure the price for that is quite cheaper than single occupancy rooms.
Therefore, I would like you to kindly shift me to preferred accommodation or refund my money on for the days I am living in this accommodation.
I hope you consider my request on priority basis, and take appropriate action on this matter.
Regards
David
Score 7
Dear Sir,
I would like to draw your attention towards the issues that readers face in the public library. I think this could be a big problem for book worms and those who are fond of reading. To add more, this is a big concern for students during their exam time and looking for peace.
Yesterday evening, my friend and I visited the public library to grab a book of History of Canada to learn more about the nation. I was astonished to see that the sitting area of the library was a complete mess. All the chairs were broken and it was hard to sit on them. Somehow, I found plastic chairs but their condition was pathetic as well.
Besides that, my friend was looking for books to prepare for her banking entrance exam and then she found out that all the books available were not up-to-date. Books were not even organized Properly.
In the end, I would like to request you to resolve this issue as soon as possible. Firstly, the sharp nails on the chairs should be hammered properly. After that, the library should be cleaned and updated with new edition books. I hope this information would help to create a better environment for the readers and students to study.
Regards,
Mary Singla
Score 8. Watch your punctuation
Childcare Survey
You work in a very big office. There is a popular and cheap restaurant in the building. The boss is thinking of removing the restaurant and replacing it with a childcare facility for the working parents in the office. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey.
Option A: I think we should keep the restaurant.
Option B: I think we should replace the restaurant with a childcare facility.
After thoughtful consideration, I believe that the presence of the popular restaurant in the office building is comparatively more useful and convenient for the staff members and other visitors. However, the thought of introducing a childcare facility for the working parents is appreciative but it would not be helpful for all the people working in the office.
Restaurant is much popular amongst the employees, and everybody use the services of it whereas the childcare facility will only help the employees who have children.
Hence, it will be useful for limited people. On the other hand, majority of staff members are used to spend their lunch time or free hours at the restaurant because it helps them keep refreshed and surfeited. Also, it is no secret that, everybody loves the food and reasonable prices that the restaurant has been offering from past few years.
In the conclusion, I would prefer using the facilities of restaurant in the office building over opening a new childcare facility because the decision to keep the restaurant will be fair and reasonable to the employees as well as for it owners who have been serving in our office building from long ago.
Score 8. Watch your articles and punctuation
You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
1. Say what the problem is.
2. Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
3. Ask the provider to solve the problem.
Dear Sir,
I just moved to Canada to pursue the Computer Science course, and the purpose of my writing is to take your attention to my awful housing condition.
First of all, I want to point out the size of the room; Since, It’s extremely tiny, It makes walking quite arduous . In order to move from one place to another, I have to hop over the furniture. What’s more, when there are daily power cuts for several hours, studying or doing any household chores at night becomes out of the question.
I anticipated(expected) a cosy and spacious 1 BHK apartment with a supplemental(extra) study room, where I can go through my course. Moreover, due to the overwhelming population of bugs, my expectation of having a clean and well-maintained area is also doomed.
In order to mend the situation, It is highly urged that you make it a top priority to shift me to a better place. Considering it’s quite a predicament for me, I would need to appeal to the University if I don’t get a timely response.
Your cooperation in this matter will be greatly appreciated. Furthermore, an open line of communication from your side, in this case, would greatly help out.
Yours Sincerely,
John Doe
Score 8. Watch your capitalization and don’t sign off as ‘John Doe’. A John Doe is an unknown dead person .
Your children’s school provides free school lunches. Usually the lunch is a hamburger, hot dog, or pizza. The children really enjoy the lunches. Some parents want to change the lunches so that the children eat salad or vegetables every day. The school asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
-Option A: I would prefer the lunches stayed the same.
-Option B: I would prefer they changed the lunches.
To whom it may concern,
I hope you are having a wonderful day. The following is my personal opinion explaining why the free lunches daily provided by St John’s Elementary School should remain as currently offered.
As a parent of Mathew from fourth grade I have heard several complaints from other parents regarding the actual lunch selection presented by the academy’s cafeteria, however I recognize the possibility that all parents are free to provide their own homemade lunch to their children, and considering that I grew up without having any kind of free aliments at school, I feel entirely grateful with this institution for the service provided.
Besides the former reason, I have always noticed positive comments from my son and many of his classmates regarding the actual choices they have, I believe it is completely acceptable to let them enjoy their favourite meals because it’s our responsibility as parents to primarily take care of our children diet and nutrition. I understand it would also be unsustainable for the institution to supply the options requested by multiple parents, such as organic based lunches.
I will continue appreciating your consideration towards this matters.
Kindest regards,
Marcus Weber
Score 9
punctuation: “…daily provided by St John’s Elementary School should …” (daily, provided by St. John’s Elementary School, should) -interruption
“…As a parent of Mathew from fourth grade I have…” (As a parent of Mathew from fourth grade, I have) -subordinating conjunction
“…cafeteria, however I recognize…” (cafeteria; however, I recognize OR cafeteria. However I recognize) – conjunctive adverb
“…they have, I believe it is…” (they have. I believe it is OR they have, and I believe it is) -missing connection
possessive: “…our children diet and nutrition…” (our children’s diet and nutrition)
Thank you very much Angela! you’re the best,
Have a wonderful day ahead 🙂
You and your family visit the local shopping mall every week. However, it has become more and more difficult to find a parking spot recently. You would like to let the shopping mall manager know about this problem.
Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking.
Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now.
Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.
Dear Manager,
This is Adam, a regular comer to the national shopping mall and lately it has been becoming tougher to park the car.
Whenever I visit the mall with my family, I had to park my car in the paid parking lot behind the street, and walk 1 km all the way, which is terrible to do specially when coming with kids. This is also creating an other problem in carrying the purchased items bags when returning from the mall.
I do believe there are ways easy to implement and cost effective solutions which would solve the problem to some extent.
Firstly, there are no parking separator lines in the last two basements resulting in parking vehicles in their own way. As a result, the space is not effectively utilized, and fixing this would a quick remedy. Secondly, in the first basement, half of the space is reserved for trucks, possibly to unload items. As you may know, these trucks mostly arrive in the early morning hours, you could mention allowed parking hours in those slots in the first basement.
I am hoping my view points are going to help shoppers.
Best Regards,
Adam
Score 8
You have registered for a six-month computer training program at Sambro Community College. You want to rent a room from Sambro Housing Agency.
Dear Sambro Housing Agency,
My name is Danh, and I am contacting you about renting a room because I am going to study at Sambro Community College for the next six months from January to June 2023. There are some criteria that I want to list:
It is better if the accommodation nears the school or bus, so I can walk or take a bus since I do not have a car. About the room, I would prefer an apartment with one bedroom, one kitchen and one bathroom. More importantly, the building must have no pet policy because I have to wake up early every morning for classes, so I do not want to hear the noise of pets that significantly affect my sleep.
Moreover, my budget will be around $1000 to $1500. It would be great if you can provide me with a list of available rooms with images then I can decide which one the suitable for me and also the rental documents so I can read policies in advance.
Please let me know if you have any questions or new information.
Regards,
Viet Danh
Score 8 Watch your conditional
Question: Survey on class duration. 1.5 hours or 3 hours
The duration of classes is still an ongoing discussion topic amongst college students, and many of them think three-hour classes once a week are convenient. However, in my opinion, 1.5-hour classes twice a week is a more suited option, because of the learning experience they can provide.
Conspicuously, short duration classes allow the students to focus better. This is because an adult’s average attention span ranges from 32 minutes to 48 minutes, and it starts to diminish after that. Furthermore, consuming the material or information in small chunks would allow the students to grasp the concepts better. For example, it would give them time to reread the material before the next class, so that it is easy for them to build upon whatever they have learned already.
On the contrary, some individuals think that three-hour classes are better because they need to travel to the campus only once. Although it seems convenient, one would miss a lot, if they miss just one class. Furthermore, I have seen students leaving the class after the breaks between hours, since they are overwhelmed, and I believe the professors would also endorse the same.
Based on the aforementioned arguments, I would strongly recommend changing the schedule to 1.5-hour classes twice a week, as they provide the students a more comprehensive learning experience.
Score 8
no comma “…miss a lot, if they miss…” (miss a lot if they miss)
“…between hours, since they…” (between hours since they)
Better transition “…On the contrary…” (On the other hand) – The survey is really asking you to support your opinion with two ideas. It’s not asking you to discuss both sides of the issue.
Hostel management has decided to upgrade the security in and around the campus. The management has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have as new security measure. You are residing in a College hostel :
Option A: New HD Night Vision Cameras covering the area around the hostel.
Option B: Installing biometric locks on the doors.
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I would strongly believe that installing HD Night vision cameras covering the area around the hostel is a better choice compare to installing biometric locks. Night vision cameras provide protection against theft, watch on outsiders and great safety features at the night. Let me eloborate the points further.
Firstly, in last one year there are many instances were we have seen robbery in the hostel. So, night vision cameras will help us to eliminate the theft and keep students belonging safe.
Secondly, some unwanted people would persue the student for any wrong purpose while they are returning back. By keeping a watch, we can safeguard the privacy.
Lastely, in every hostel there are students who break the rules and try to jump the wall for any wrong reasons like drugs, cigarettes, etc. By keeping a watch on this type of people, we can reduce the wrong activites at a very early stage and thus make a safe and healthy environment.
Based on above reason, I would like to conclude that HD Night vision cameras will play an important role in maintaining the safety and healthy place to live.
Score 8
Watch your parallels and conditionals
Thank you
You are a college student. Your school is offering $2,000 to one student: this money will be used to pay college fees. The school is inviting all students to explain why they should get this award.
• a description of what you are studying at college
• why you are interested in your studies
• a statement of how well you are doing at college
• your future plans
Dear Mr. Williams,
Having been accepted to MET for the 2020 fall term to pursue an Advanced Diploma in Computer Information Systems, I am writing to express my desire to participate in the Tuition Award Program. For as long as I can remember, I have had a strong passion for technology and computers, and I believe that technology can make education more accessible to the poor and needy.
During my two years at MET Boston, I have maintained a GPA above 3.85, excelled in all classes, and made it on the dean’s list. In addition to that, I am a member of Giving Back, a volunteer tutor team working with underprivileged school-going children in the community. The students connect to the volunteer tutors using an application that I developed.
Servant leadership is the philosophy that I would intend to follow while chasing my dream as a computer programmer. I want society to benefit from my education and MET Boston to gain prestige as an institution supporting innovation for the greater good. This award will allow me to achieve these aims and put more time, effort and resources into creating more beneficial tools for the community.
Thank you so much for your time and consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Geetha Vasu
Score 9
Preposition: “…and made it on the dean’s list.” (and made it onto the dean’s list)
Second conditional: “This award will allow me to achieve…” (This award would allow me to achieve) The final decision hasn’t been made yet.
Thank you Angela for your suggestions.
Your company wants to allow some employees to work from home. Not everyone can have this choice because some jobs must be done at the office. The company wants to know if this is fair by surveying your opinion about working from home.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option A: A work-from-home choice is fair.
Option B: A work-from-home choice is not fair.
In recent years, more and more companies are shifting towards the work-from-home model, and some people think it is unfair because not all employees can choose that option. However, I firmly believe that the company’s decision to allow some employees to work remotely is reasonable because of increased employee productivity, reduced employee turnover, and lowered operational costs.
Essentially, the work-from-home model would benefit the business financially as it reduces the operational cost to a great extent by eliminating the need for expensive office space proportional to the number of employees. For example, a company with 300 employees operating in San Francisco could save millions of dollars in lease and parking if they shift to a remote working model.
Another reason is, the flexibility that the work-from-anywhere model offers the employees in terms of transportation, comfort, and timing is endless and it directly translates to happiness and productivity. A recent survey by Harvard Business School shows that remote working employees are 1.4% more productive than their in-office counterparts.
In conclusion, I would consider the company’s decision to allow some employees to work-from-home as fair, primarily because of its economic benefits to the company, but also the flexibility it would provide to the staff.
Score 9
incomplete conditional: “…San Francisco could save millions of dollars in lease and parking if they shift to a remote working model…” (San Francisco could save millions of dollars in lease and parking if they shifted to a remote working model) The second conditional combines the past in the condition with would/should/could in the result.
no comma: “…Another reason is, the flexibility…” (Another reason is the flexibility)
missing comma: “…endless and it directly translates…” (endless, and it directly translates) – coordinating conjunction + subject
Thank you Angela.
Your children’s grade 5 class teacher likes to take the children on field trips to museums or parks. Sometimes the teacher takes the children on public buses. Some parents are unhappy. They say the school should always use school buses even though it is more expensive. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey.
Option A: Public Transit: I think it’s okay for children to travel on public transit.
Option B: School Buses: I would prefer children only to travel on school buses.
Lately, the issue of school children traveling in public transport during their field trips has become a concern for some parents because they think that it may not be safe for their children to ride a means of public transport. However, I firmly believe that it is alright for children to travel on public transit sometimes, primarily because the school staff ensures that children’s safety is not compromised during those trips and it helps the children develop necessary life skills.
First, I believe those pre-teen years are a good time for children to practice life skills and independence. Making them travel in a less familiar environment would enhance their confidence, improve their navigation skills, and allow them to learn how to be safe when among strangers.
Second, I have noticed in the past that the teacher was so vigilant in ensuring the safety of her students during the field trips by carefully selecting the timings and venue and by including a sufficient number of adults in the group.
In conclusion, I would strongly recommend that children of grade 5 and above should use public transport for some of their field trips as long as the staff members can guarantee their safety.
Awesome! Score 10
Thank you Angela.
You recently visited a zoo where a man died after falling into the tigers’ enclosure. You were unable to do anything but wanted to show your concern for visitors’ safety.
In about 150 – 200 words write an email to the zoo’s director. Your email should do the following things:
– describe the incident (date, place, people involved; reason for the accident; what action)
– complain about the short fencing(used the old standand, people are getting taller, added wild animal bigger in size)
– show concern for visitors’ safety (climb over, easier to break) replace the fence and put a sign nearby and on the ticket)
Dear Mr. Smith,
The purpose of my writing today is to lodge a concern regarding the potential safety hazards at Assiniboine Park Zoo.
I, along with my kids, paid a visit to your zoo on Louis Riel’s Day and witnessed a man climb and fall over the barrier while he was attempting to feed the tiger. Not only the fence just reached his shoulder’s height, but also the tip of the fence was rusted. The eyewitnesses raced to the security; unfortunately, moments later, the full-grown Bengali tiger has dragged him off by the neck.
Since the zoo was initially designed to be a petting zoo, its fences and barriers were built to meet the standard of farm animals. Even though part of the zoo was converted as a rescue shelter for wild animals from Churchill, the safety measures were not reconstructed accordingly. Undoubtfully, what contributed to the accident is the short fence.
It is imperative that safety measures, such as drills, should be undertaken to prevent throwing stones at animals, teasing animals and feeding them by public or visitors. Warning signs should be placed at a visible spot near wild animals and on the front of the ticket. Immediate action for enhanced emergency response is highly called for.
I am looking forward to your prompt action.
Yours,
Jingzhi
Score 8. Watch your subjunctive
You and your friends are planning to go to Dubai on vacation. You have to arrange hotel accommodation and need details about hotel rooms and other facilities before making a final decision.
150 – 200 words, write an email to the hotel managers. Your email should:
– request details about the hotel (nearby transportation,
– describe the type of room
– identify any special needs (i.e. smoking or non-smoking room) (non-smoking, far from the elevator, higher floor possible with city view)
Dear Hotel Manager,
This is to inquire about the availability of accommodation at Sheraton Dubai Airport in June, this year. Any information, tips and suggestions that might boost our traveling experience would be greatly appreciated.
I, along with two friends, will be coming down to Dubai to celebrate our college graduation during summer holiday. Since we don’t intend to rent a car, we really emphasis the accessibility to public transportation, especially to the Millennium Mall and the airport. Knowing summer can be sultry, we appreciate if you can provide us with information about surrounding restaurants, entertainment, exhibitions, and attractions.
A small but decently furnished and well-ventilated suite would be quite enough for us. Ideally, we prefer a double-bed room with a futon sofa bed, bathroom attached. Additionally, bonus point if the room is on a higher floor with city view.
In particular, we are firm on a non-smoking room since I have asthma. A desirable room would be away from the elevator and ice machine, which could assure the quality of our sleep.
If you can provide the above accommodation, please send me immediately your tariff rates for full board so that I may order for the reservation in your hotel.
Yours,
Jin
Score 8. Nice email, but you need to be consistent with your ‘formal style’ – no contractions.
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
Hi Jana,
Many congratulations for completing the milestone of your graduation, now it’s time to go to a reputed university.
I would like to advise you that you choose a university a little bit far from your home, as it has its own benefits. The first and foremost advantage is that you became independent to handle your own need, as being far from homemade to self-sufficient, also you get more focus on studies as you will be away from social life.
Choosing a course has a crucial role to play in your career growth, hence based on my experience I am suggesting a few of the areas which are in high demand. For example, if persuasion is something your cup of tea, I would recommend going with the sales and marketing field of studies. Nowadays marketing has a booming future.
Apart from that if you are interested in computer technology, go for computer science. Each day world is changing you to change in technology, with that rapid speed, a spike in vacancy for computer engineers are in place nowadays.
The above recommendations are based on my experiences and current market trend, let me know if your thoughts are different so we can connect to find what best suits your needs and interest.
Regards,
Gunja Jaiswal
Some lovely phrases! Score 7.
Watch your tenses and punctuation
I would prefer that a free public transit pass for one year to be given to all employees as a gift on the occasion of company’s 10th anniversary. Below paragraphs would elucidate my opinion.
If free public transit pass is given to employees, it would help to reduce traffic on roads as employees will start using public transit. Also, our public transits are designed in such a way that it provides total comfort and ease to everyone who travels, since it connects all areas with each other. Government has also initiated few regulated programs to control the traffic on roads.
Though, a free underground parking pass also seems to be a tempting gift for employees, however, this offer would encourage more employees to bring their own vehicles to office which would lead to traffic on roads and impact the environment badly. As per an article published in NY Times, vehicles leads to emission of carbon monoxide gases. These gases are very much harmful to our health. Additionally, many of our employees stay at a far distance from office and do not drive to work. Offering a free underground parking will be of no use to them.
In Conclusion, to save our environment and provide comfort to employees to commute to office, free public transit pass is a better choice.
I would be in favor of the park to stay as it is, since it is the only park in our vicinity being used by us and all are neighboring residents. Below paragraphs would elucidate my opinion.
Firstly, City park is the only park in our area having basketball court and a big playground which is being used by everyone around. Before this park was constructed, we had to travel 10 km to take our children to other park which contains Basketball Court. Due to which we were able to travel only twice a month.
Secondly, this park is being used for morning and evening walks and picnics by nearby residents and along with that, many schools used this park for multifarious competitions.
Thirdly, this park is located closer to the main road because of which we use to face lot of traffic jam issues. If an apartment is constructed on this park, it would be highly inconvenient for the elderly people to stay in the apartments due to heavy traffic outside. Additionally, they will be using car for their daily errands which will eventually increase the traffic. On top of that, sound pollution would also increase which would not be suitable for elderly people.
In conclusion, City park being a popular park should be remained as it is and I opine for the same.
Thanks,
Pooja Dalal
Score 8
Identify your main ideas in the introduction and watch your connections.
Score 8
Watch your conditionals
You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.
Option A: Shopping Complex: This shopping mall would include restaurants, a large supermarket, and a movie theatre.
Option B: Recreational Park: This park would include a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo.
After thoughtful consideration, I believe building a recreational park with a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo in the centre of town is the best idea for the town construction.
First, our town is lacking sports areas. Building an area for sports will encourage the people in the town to do more physical outdoor activities, therefore, it will improve the social lives and health of our community.
Secondly, should we proceed with the erection of the shopping complex, we will have to remove most of the trees in the land, which contribute to air pollution and greenhouse emissions. Building a park covered by a large green area will minimize the number of trees being cut down. People of all ages benefit from a nature-oriented environment. The youngsters can make it as their natural playground, whilst the adults can utilize it as their means of taming stress.
Finally, a small pet zoo is always an irresistible attraction for children as they need accompanies to play with. Also, this will be a great opportunity for them to learn about different animals, especially their habitats, and behaviors.
In conclusion, I am confident that the establishment of a recreational park is a better decision because of many significant benefits it brings.
Score 8. Nicely written here too, but the same conditional issue as in your office response. You must use the second conditional (past + would/should/could) when providing an opinion about something undecided.
4. You work in a very big office. There is a popular and cheap restaurant in the building. The boss is thinking of removing the restaurant and replacing it with a childcare facility and has asked whether you would prefer:
Option A: Replace the restaurant with a childcare facility
Option B: Keep the restaurant and let parents make childcare arrangements offsite.
I agree with your decision of replacing the restaurant in the building with the new childcare facility for the workers who have young children for the following reasons:
Firstly, by having a childcare center at the office, the workers will save their commuting time as they can drop off or pick up their kids at their workplace. As a result, it will also increase their punctuality. On the other hand, the children can also benefit from daycare services. At the center, they will have the opportunity to meet with other younglings, which will help them build social skills, connections, and personalities.
Secondly, the parents would feel more at ease when their children are near to them. Should anything bad happen, they can be there almost immediately. Without worrying about their kids, the employees can pay more attention to their job.
In summary, I highly believe that constructing a childcare facility after the removal of the restaurant will be beneficial in terms of time and work productivity.
Score 8. Nicely written, but you must use the second conditional (past + would/should/could) when providing an opinion about something undecided.
Your child is facing an issue at school and is not able to concentrate
-Talk to the concerned personnel and tell them the problem
-Give suggestions
-Ask for a meeting
Ans:
Dear Mr Peter,
I am writing this letter with regards to issues pertaining to predicaments my child is facing, for a few weeks now. I would like a quick resolution for the same.
My child is being bullied by his classmate, James. He posed as a pleasant personality to Rishab, but slowly he started calling him names, because of these demeaning tendencies, he has given up the idea of going to school entirely. Also, I have noticed a decreased interest in studies which can be accounted for by the neglect from the educator’s side.
Since nobody is taking this up, I would like to put forward a few recommendations. Firstly, I would like you to personally intervene in this matter by having a peaceful conversation with the children. If it still escalates, communicating with the parents of the concerned party should help. Secondly, it would be in our favour if you could inspect the quality of individual student-teacher interaction by visiting the specific class: which will help us gauge where Rishab is lacking.
As a parent, I feel one on one communication would help to subside this matter, speedily. Could you please arrange a time out of your busy schedule?
Thank you for your cooperation. An open line of communication will be appreciated.
Yours Sincerely,
Sarah Tiwary
Score 8
“Regards” with an ‘s’ is only used in salutations or third person simple present; otherwise, the word is ‘regard’ without an ‘s’.
Watch your conditionals. When you don’t have complete control over a situation’s outcome, you must use the second conditional (past + would, should, or could)
Your car is hired from a company and while you are driving on holiday, you have a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it.
In your letter:
when and where you hired it
describe how the accident happened
what kind of action did you take after the accident
Dear manager,
I am writing to inform you that I had a minor accident with the Lexus NX which I hired from your company last week.
My name is Mike, and I rented a Lexus NX, 2020 from your company in Guy Street on November 15, with the bill number 4518202. Regarding the contract, I have to return it next Wednesday.
Yesterday morning, while I was driving north towards to Quebec City, a car behind me lost control and hit the back of my car which dented slightly the left-back corner of the bumper.
Since we were driving on highway 40, I called highway police and asked them to come and give me a report so that I could send it to you and the insurance company as well. When the police officer arrived, they requested our driving licenses and realized that the other driver was guilty of the incident. He, then, filled the insurance paper and gave it to me. Moreover, we transferred our contact information with the idea it might be needed. Furthermore, I took some photos of cars, the position and the accident spot in the bumper. All documents are attached.
Your kind cooperation would be most appreciated.
Best regards,
Mike
Nice one Mike. Score 8. Avoid over-using the same type of connection. You’ve used two conjunctive adverbs right next to each other here. “Moreover, we transferred … Furthermore, I took some photos of cars…”. Focus instead on sentence variety – start a couple of your sentences with participles. “After arriving and checking our driving licenses, the police officer realized the other driver was at fault.”
Dear bank manager,
I am writing to express my deep concern regarding my card which I was supposed to receive by mail, while it was missed on the way so that I could not able to receive it at all.
My name is Mike, a client of yours. Owing to the renewal of my bank card, I made a request to receive a new one. After roughly a period of four-week waiting time, I, to my surprise, found out that the card was missing and did not exist in the envelope. This has brought me great anxiety so that I cannot digest the issue any longer.
Based upon either the bank’s policy, the information of card holders must be preserved confidentially; whereas, my personal information is seemingly stolen by a stranger. From my perspective, this is a terrible situation which a client of yours can experience. Honestly, I do not know how you want to avoid releasing my bank information and who is assumed to pay the price due to the fault in this regard.
I would like you to discover the trouble which has affected me severely; moreover, I would ask you to cancel the missing one and reissue a new one. Although this cannot bring my satisfaction, it causes to diminish my concern, at least.
I would deeply appreciate it if you take this matter into your immediate consideration, and your kind cooperation in this respect is highly appreciated.
I look forward to hearing from you promptly.
Kind regards,
Mike
Score 7
Although taking steps for increasing the use of electric cars and bikes have their own benefits such as pollution reduction, I would like to choose the option to allocate money for the development of public transport systems since its benefits outweigh the other option.
Apart from reducing environmental pollution, it is equally important that the traffic is managed efficiently and people can reach their destination on time. Through the use of electric cars, we can definitely decrease the pollution, however, what about the traffic congestion which is already out of control in our city at present? If we start using public transport, we can surely reduce the traffic and can easily and conveniently reach our destination. For example, if we use the metro train from victoria, there will not be any traffic but if we take a road trip, we can encounter heavy traffic.
Hence, I would definitely believe that the government should take steps for improvement of public transport systems.
Score 7
Dear Manager,
I am Mihir, and I have purchased a three chair sofa set for my home on 27th November from your C.G Road outlet of Royal Furniture mart. The purpose of my writing is to lodge a complaint about the inferior quality of the furniture I got.
The complete sofa set has been delivered to me by today morning and I was ecstatic after receiving the delivery earlier than I expected. However, my happiness didn’t last long! As soon as I unpacked the box, I was disgruntled to observe that the right armrest of one of the sofas was broken. Not only did I receive the faulty furniture but also it wasn’t polished properly. I am also attaching the photographs of the faulty goods along with this email for your reference.
Considering the above reasons, I humbly request you to kindly replace these sofa sets or get them repaired immediately.
I am anticipating prompt actions from your end.
Regards,
Mihir
Score 7
If given a choice, I would definitely opt for banning smoking in the Public area considering the health issues as well as a reduction in air pollution.
To begin with, the public road is widely used by all the age group of persons. When some non-smoker, especially the children watch pedestrians smoking on the road, it creates a negative impact on their minds. Furthermore, it is a proven fact that the observation power of children is quite high and there are high possibilities that the Children start smoking by imitating the one who smokes on the road.
Not only to the Children, but the smoking creates adverse impact on the health of smokers himself. Smoking is proven to be the main reason for lung cancer, breathing issues as well as it also creates problems during pregnancy.
Furthermore, Smoking in the public area causes air pollution which may passively affect non-smokers. Why should the non-smokers get suffered just for the sake of enjoyment of smokers for five to ten minutes?
Considering the above, I am strongly of the opinion to ban smoking in the public.
Score 7
If given a chance, I would recommend that the Company should give salary hike to all the employees on the basis of the experience considering their importance as well as the skills that they possess.
To begin with, it is said that experience makes the human best in all walks of life. The senior employees are well versed with the company culture and they are proven to be more efficient than the novice employees. The management skill, as well as the way of communication that they possess, is more beneficial for the Company. For example, while allocating the new project, management doesn’t require elaborating each and every minute detail to the experienced employees as they can handle it on their own and can save valuable time and resources for the Company.
On the other hand, the employees who are educationally more qualified may be advanced in terms of theoretical knowledge but they can’t compete and provide a practical solution when it comes to dealing with the actual situation.
Considering the above explanation, I strongly recommend that management should consider the option to give a remuneration hike on the basis of experience.
Score 8 – Watch your punctuation and don’t mix modals with subjunctives. There wouldn’t be a ‘should’ in this sentence – “I strongly recommend that management consider…”
Dear Sir,
I am Dipti Saboo, and the purpose of my writing today is to register a claim for the missing carry bag which I have lost recently during my visit to Thailand.
I am on my vacation to Thailand and Today morning, I was at the St. Peterson zoo around 10:00 a.m along with my carry bag which consists of my wallet (approx. 50,000 baths), a gold chain, and my Ipad. While I was clicking the picture of the elephant, I put my bag on the floor for a while. I went near to the cage of that elephant and within a fraction of 5 minutes when I came back; I was astonished to find that my bag wasn’t at its place!
I started searching all around but couldn’t find it. I also contacted zoo security to help me with my bag but it wasn’t as helpful as I expected.
Now, as per my policy document, I have to make the complaint within 24 hours of loss of luggage items, and accordingly, I am submitting herewith my policy documents, The Police complaint, and the description of the missing product.
I Request you to process my claim and provide me a compensation of 75,000 baths for my loss at the earliest.
Regards,
Dipti
Score 7
You and your family visit the local shopping mall every week. However, it has become more and more difficult to find a parking spot recently. You would like to let the shopping mall manager know about this problem.
Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking.
Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now.
Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.
Dear Manager,
I’m writing this mail to complain regarding to the lack of parking spots. My family and I visited Yorkdale mall last Saturday after lunch to buy my daughter’s birthday gift. However, we came across a complicated and annoying situation on there. The most serious one was with parking spots. We arrived at 12:30 p.m., but I could not find a suitable location for parking my vehicle. In addition, so many cars entered in the same direction resulting in a traffic jam. My wife and daughters were throwing a tantrum and I struggled to comfort them. The day was hard and irritating; I was really disappointed about /in your mall’s conducts. Therefore, I felt the need to make you aware about the problem. I would to give you some advice to fix it. You should report it to your higher department that extending parking spots for more customers and safety. Traffic guards should be put in place to organize traffic jams. I will be looking forward to receiving good news from you about this problem and hope you have a good day.
Best Regards,
Kenny.
Score 7
Although creating new separate lanes for the bikers have their own benefits, I do believe that allocating funds for the construction of a swimming pool and spa would be a more beneficial option considering the health benefits and relaxation.
Swimming is proven to be the best exercise for the whole body. There is a number of people who avoid going to a gym due to laziness or lack of time. However, if the swimming pool is constructed along with Gym, it will serve a dual purpose for the user i.e enjoyment as well exercise. Swimming also provides the health benefits such as losing fat, muscle building as well rejuvenating inner peace.
Furthermore, as most of the people in our locality have been living busy life due to their job or business, constructing a spa center will provide relaxation to the body from the routine life. Moreover, there is no other spa facility available in our vicinity and therefore it can also be the medium for generating revenue for the authority.
If the bike lane is created for the bikers it will only be helpful for the riders. On the other side, the possibility of increase in road accidents should not be neglected.
Hence, Government should most definitely allocate funds for the Swimming pool and Spa.
Score 8. Watch your tenses, plurals and singulars. Gerunds are singular nouns ; “(the act of) creating new lanes for bikers has its own benefits”
Hi Rohit,
How’s life? I apologize for not replying to your previous mail as I was busy with my final exams.
Well, I have great news for you. Can you guess where our college has arranged a summer camp this year? Let me tell you, it is in your town Delhi for three weeks! Finally, after two years we will be able to meet each other.
We will reach there on the 15th night via flight and our camping will start from the 18th Morning. Our university had already booked hotels near the riverfront for our stay. However, I need your favor. Since you are living there for 2 years, you might be well versed with the nightlife of the city. Can you suggest some exciting dance club where we can enjoy and have fun on 16th? Do let me suggest two-three clubs so that we can finalize one of them.
Additionally, we are planning for the night out on the 17th. Could you please help me to arrange a weekend party and suggest a place for the same?
I am looking forward to seeing you and your family soon.
Yours’ truly,
Jinesh
Score 8. Watch your tenses and punctuation.
City Development Survey
You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the center of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built- in that area.Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
▉Option A: Shopping Complex: This shopping mall would include restaurants, a supermarket, and a movie theatre.
▉Option B: Recreational Park: This park would include a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo
While I recognize, building a recreational park might be a great decision, I believe the city should make the shopping mall since it will kick start our economy with immediate job possibilities.
To begin with, constructing a mall with multivarious amenities will create a substantial no of jobs. Due to the lack of employment opportunities, a large no of people is moving to big cities regularly. For instance, a fresh high school graduate needs an essential job to support their higher study. Unfortunately, the scarcity of job openings is not allowing them to stay and fulfill their dream at the same time.
Additionally, having a supermarket, an eatery, and a movie theatre undoubtedly will attract more investment in businesses from other areas; in turn, there will be a significant increase in revenue. Apart from that, utilizing the extra fund, the administration will be able to create essential infrastructure for further development.
To sum up, I can understand that constructing a recreational park might be an appealing idea; nonetheless, jobs are more important than personal well-being. Therefore, I think building a shopping mall will be a more desirable choice.
Score 8. Watch your conditionals. When you’re talking about a result over which you have no control, you should use the second conditional – past + would/should/could
Thank you so much, madam.
To whom it may concern;
My name is Dipesh and I traveled from Ahmedabad to New Delhi through Flight number AI-768 of Jet Airways on 19th December, 2021. I usually travel through your Airlines and have a pleasant experience every time. Unfortunately, I have to say that the service on board was terrible during my last trip.
After completing my check-in formalities, I reached my allotted seat number C-3. However, to my utter disappointment, the fabric of the seat was having a stain of wine and oily food. Moreover, its bad smell was making me feel more uncomfortable, and when I complained to the crew about the issue, she said that since the flight is full, she can’t allot me another place to sit and she didn’t even bother to get the seat cleaned even after my sincere requests.
Furthermore, after the flight took off, I ordered a vegetable grill sandwich but I was disgruntled after receiving a beef sandwich. Although the crew apologized, it couldn’t compensate since I have already eaten half a sandwich!
Considering the adversity which I have had to face, if I may, I would sincerely recommend you to take steps for maintaining proper hygiene, as well as train your staff adequately.
Thanking You!
Regards,
Dipesh
Score 7. Watch your tenses.
To whom it may concern,
I was stunned by the unfortunate experience which I have had witnessed yesterday when I visited the Kamala Nehru zoo with my friends.
The fencing of the cage of the white Bengal tiger was a shorter one and a man who seems to be in his early forty was near the cage and he apprehend that the tiger would not be able to cross that much height. But that was his misfortune! While he was chatting with their friend near the cage, the tiger was approximately 3 feet away, jumped all of sudden, and fetched the man into his cage! Screaming and hustle-bustle started all around by the visitors for helping that person. However, one could not dare to do anything to rescue the man, and unfortunately, he becomes the meal for the tiger.
Witnessing this unforeseen situation, I strongly recommend that the fencing of the wild animals should be of at least 12-15 feet height. Furthermore, the cage should be properly locked and a security guard shall be placed near the cage who can manage and instruct the crowd about the safety measures.
I hope the management will consider my suggestions and will do the needful.
Regards,
Nilesh
Score 7. Watch your tenses and punctuation
If given a choice, I would choose the option to build a baseball ground which is the most popular sport among youngsters like us.
At present, we have only a baseball ground which is one hour run from our vicinity and it becomes quite challenging for the parents to take their young children to the ground which consumes most of their valuable time, as a result of it, they manage to do it only once or twice a week.
Another feature that would make the community ecstatic about the ground is the large sitting facility which the city is planning to construct. The present ground does not offer reasonable sitting capacity, which is quite disappointing as younger players like to have their parents or grandparents sit in ground and enjoy watching them play.
On the other hand, simply building an athletic track might not be useful for the community as almost 60% population is above the age of 50 and as a result, I personally think that the running track would remain unutilized and its maintenance will put an extra burden on the city and ultimately on the pocket of residents.
Hence, I do believe that constructing Baseball ground is more beneficial for the society.
Score 8. Super response. Make sure you identify your main ideas in the introduction. Watch your punctuation.
Dear Pratatp,
The purpose of my writing today is to complain about several incidences of mental as well as physical harassment happening with me for the last couple of weeks.
Mr. Paulin Shah and Mr. Kinjal Patel, who are working in the stock purchase department, are constantly bullying and using racist words targeting me in particular. Last week, on Friday evening, Mr. Paulin called me by my last name and started using abusive words without any reason and his colleague Mr. Kinjal accompanied him in his misbehavior and he also passed comment on my skin color.
Initially, I tried to avoid such behaviors from the employees of the Company. However, when it continues for 2 more days, I strongly opposed and warned them not to use such kind of words in the future. However, to my utter disappointment, they are still the same and are continuing their misbehavior.
Henceforth, I was left with no other option but to lodge a complaint with you through this Email. The Audio-video recordings of their deeds are also available at my disposal which I can share with you for evidence.
Request you to look into the matter and resolve it at the earliest.
Regards,
Ankit
Score 7. Watch your tenses and punctuation
In my opinion, the Newspaper agency should continue the physical version of the newspaper along with the Digital version.
If I talk about myself, I always enjoy reading physical newspapers early in the morning with a cup of coffee in spite of having access to the Digital version. Furthermore, being a Software engineer, I have to spend most of the time on a computer for my work. Therefore, if I read the newspaper on my mobile and computer, I will not get much enjoyment from it, since I use it as a relaxing tool from my daily job life. Moreover, if the agency stops printed version, the old age readers’ needs might get affected since they may not be well versed with the cell phones and internet links of the websites.
Lastly, the digital version has its own benefits, for example, the reader can have access to the news at his/her fingertips at any time and they can get themselves updated with the latest news without any delay.
Hence, considering the above reasons, the newspaper agency should definitely keep both versions available for their readers.
Score 7. Don’t use yourself as an example – talk about people in general.
Make sure you identify your main ideas in the introduction.
Great grammar!
A member of your family is thinking about going to university.
Write an email to your family member explaining why some people go to university, why some prefer universities far from home, and which courses you think would be interesting and/or useful.
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Hi Claire,
I want to follow up with our conversation on the Thanksgiving family reunion dinner. You mentioned that you really admire Uncle Jackson being a surgeon at St. Boniface Hospital and you wanted to apply for pre-med just like him.
As your aunt and a nursing instructor at the University of Manitoba, I highly encourage you to do so as you cannot bypass a university degree if you want to practice vocations like physicians and nurse practitioners. Also, a qualified degree can significantly increase your career prospects. I heard some honour students from UofM got admitted to the top-notch residency program right after graduation.
Choosing a university far away from home also presents unique benefits. You will inevitably gain more independence as you will be handling the daily errands on your own. You might be also exposed to new cultures and lifestyles if you choose universities like McGill in Quebec. That’s why many universities offer programs for their students to exchange in a foreign country.
Medical school is a long-term commitment. You might only see the bright side of Uncle Jackson but not the effort he invested throughout the journey. Thus, I suggest you start with a Bachelor of Physician Assistant. And let your inner voice make the decision whether to continue pursuing medical school afterwards.
Cordially,
Aunt May.
Nice one. Score 9
In my opinion, you should definitely shift to Mohawk College which is having international repute for your further studies rather than Mosaic college which is only having state repute.
While choosing a college for higher studies, you should prioritize your future prospects and should take career growth into consideration. The exposure for your engineering studies which you will get at the international college will be unmatchable. Moreover, the healthy competition among students from different states will surely benefit you in terms of your career growth. After completion of your graduation, you will stand a way ahead of the other peers who will be taking admission in state repute college.
Apart from the above, the big corporates like Amazon, Facebook, Google will also take part in the placement at Mohawk college which will provide you the financial growth and job satisfaction.
On the other hand, If you choose a state repute college such as mosaic, your growth and knowledge will limit to a certain extent.
Considering the above reasons, choosing a college of international repute will be beneficial for you.
Score 7. Watch your tenses
I strongly oppose the decision of the authority allowing Walmart to build a shopping mall in our vicinity considering the economic interest of local vendors as well as the environmental issue.
The people in our small suburb are engaged in a variety of trades and businesses in order to earn their bread & butter. If the big shopping mall is constructed, people will tend to buy from this store and the business of local vendors will get adversely affected. In my view, we should support the local vendors instead of the giant chain like wall-mart whose revenue already runs into millions.
Furthermore, constructing the big mall would require minimum 10 acres of land and only huge farms can cater to the need of such a large vacant place. If the farm is given for constructing malls, it will be harmful to the environment since a large amount of green space will be used for the building.
Hence, considering the above situation, the government should not permit a wall-mart to construct the mall.
Nice one. Score 8. Use the second conditional when you don’t have control over the result.
Dear Principal,
I am writing to express my deep disappointment toward the quality of delivering the English classes that I am taking at your school right now.
Initially, I chose your language school because the advertisement was shown that there will be quality delivery of the English language classes which will include weekly doubt sessions, regular feedback on writing assignments, and will have supporting teaching staff. However, nothing advertised has become reality yet. Because it’s been 2 months and I am still struggling with my essay writing teachers are not providing feedback on writing assignments and my score is declining day by day. I have asked regarding the feedback classes, but no one is responding well. Consequently, this course has become too time-consuming as I could not concentrate on other activities having unclear doubts in my mind.
I would like to provide a suggestion to either replace the teaching faculty or ask them to conduct proper doubt sessions and provide adequate feedback on writing assignments to improve the quality of classes.
Hope you would take the next corrective step soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Shabnam Malik
Super. Score 8. Watch your modals and leave a line space between paragraphs.
Your Apartment building is getting old and the owners of the building are planning to do some renovation this summer. They have decided to conduct a survey to see what the tenants would like to have improved this year.
Option A: New paints and carpet
Option B: New elevator
In my opinion, the residents of Asher Housing colony should definitely go for new paints and carpet considering cost-effectiveness and necessity.
Firstly, since the building is almost 25 years old and hasn’t been painted any time since its construction, giving them vibrant touch along with attractive carpets would surely give the residents a feeling of a new home.
Furthermore, the painting job and carpet would not cost as high as compared to installing elevators. It would hardly cost around $150 per unit which will be pocket-friendly for the owners.
Lastly, Given that the building is having only 3 floors in each block, the elevator will not be the primary requirement for the tenants. Moreover, the majority of the tenants staying in the apartments are young blood and don’t require the support of an elevator. It may also happen that tenants would require vacating the building for the period till the installation of an elevator is going on in the apartments which will cause undue hardships for them.
Hence, considering the above reasons painting and carpet jobs will surely be a win-win situation for tenants as well as the owners.
Lovely. Score 7. Watch your tenses
I firmly believe that new wall colour and changing of carpets for our A-Block Building can be a great idea because the building is 30 years old that demands a change due to following reasons.
The spray paint is done in a traditional manner. when first time this building was build there wasn’t enough equipment’s to do the paint as compared to the modern tools that has resulted in some crack over the plaster and due to this it seems like the walls are dirty as well.
In addition, the floor carpets are also made of wood. In the winters the heat is supplied in the apartment through the ground wood which is again an old method of generating the heat to the house, that definitely needed to be changed because we notice that annually the heat supply gets lower and lower as compared to the previous year.
I strongly encourage to drop the idea of new elevator as they are still in a great condition and to focus more on the above-mentioned repairs.
Score 7
A Transit company in Vancouver is asking the public to give feedback on a better fare system for its frequent users, they have sent out an opinion survey to see which discounted Fare system is preferred by transit users.
Choose the option you prefer and why?
Option A: A monthly Transit pass for a fixed price
Option B: A discount on prepaid single use tickets.
If given a choice, I would prefer to choose the discount on prepaid single-use tickets considering the convenience and cost-effectiveness.
If the concession is provided on prepaid tickets with unlimited validity, it will lure users to utilize public transport instead of private vehicles. Due to increase in the public transport, Air pollution can be decreased. To exemplify, reduction in private vehicles will ultimately reduce the use of petrol and diesel which will be helpful in reducing the pollution at a certain level. The Problem of traffic congestion can also be solved if the public starts utilizing public transport.
On the other hand, if the monthly pass at a fixed price is issued, it will not be that much beneficial. For example, if there is a summer holiday, then the students using the monthly pass may not be able to take advantage of it. Furthermore, there is a time constraint of monthly validity is there which will put another restriction to its use.
Considering the above, I believe that the monthly discounted pass system is highly beneficial for the community of Vancouver.
Nice one. Score 7. Watch your conditionals and leave a line space between paragraphs.
I firmly believe that a permanent discounted 30 days pass can be an effective idea for those consumers that are using it on daily purposes as it can provide relieve to them and will generate more revenue to the authorities involved in it.
Many citizens depend upon public mode of transportation due to rise in the inflation and if at this challenging time, coast mountain transit can lower their monthly prices than this would give the public some peace of mind and this way more people can start using this means of services that will in result in high revenue to the higher jurisdiction that can be used in several other useful places.
Those human beings who are using these facilities just once in a while, they can just buy the everyday permit at the same value as they are not utilizing it randomly. In addition, the charges of day-to-day ticket is just $5, which is already the least amount that is been taken from them.
I strongly encourage the department of company to focus just on the month-to-month markdown rather than single day rebate as that is more valuable.
Score 8
You recently switched service provider for Internet but soon realized the service is not working properly, Internet Company did send a technician however the problem persists, write an email to the customer service manager describing the problem
a. Mention the problem
b. Explain how the problem continues even after the technician tried
c. Suggest a solution
Dear customer service manager,
The purpose of my writing today is to lodge a complaint regarding the poor bandwidth of my Airtel broadband connection which I have had switched from Reliance Jio a month ago considering the cost-effectiveness and higher speed which Airtel promised to provide.
Initially, the Internet connectivity was consistent and the speed was remarkable. However, from the last week, there is a sudden decrease in the speed of the connection. To make the matter worse, the router also stopped working.
For the solution of the issue, I registered a complaint through your toll-free number and they sent Engineer to resolve the connectivity issue. After the visit of your executive, the Internet works fine for a day, but then again today, the same problem which I was facing initially reoccurred which is making challenging for me to do my crucial work office from home.
Considering the urgency of the matter, I request you to get my Internet connection rechecked and if require, get my router changed within a couple of days.
Hoping for a positive response from your end.
Regards,
Ross Galler
Score 8. Watch your tenses
The company you work for would like to ask employees to work on Saturdays for the next two months in order to catch up on its backlog.
It has circulated a survey asking your opinion about two possible options.
Option A: Half the staff would work for four hours every Saturday.
Option B: All the staff would work for two hours every Saturday.
Working in the weekend is always a lethargic experience for the employees, hence less working hours would be the accurate option. Thus, I strongly support the idea to call the entire office to work in the upcoming Saturdays only for two hours.
To begin with, the obvious reason would be less consumption of time. In other words, an individual can spend the remaining hours other than working in any leisure activity. Consequently, the productivity of each person working the firm will improve tremendously.
For example, one can spend time with family in a movie theater after logging in.
Furthermore, decision of who would work on which weekend will be insignificant as everyone will follow a same pattern causing less confusion among the workers. Not only it reduces to compete with other peers but also promotes unity by everyone working in unison. For instance, according to the survey taken NY times “Working in an environment where all are treated equal improves mental health and a content employee”
To conclude, according to my perception calling everyone to office and punch in for only two hours saves time as well as encourages togetherness in the team.
Score 7. Some nice sentence variety.
Dear Store Manager,
I recently received an advertisement in my mail about the opening of your new department store in the downtown area. the mail has clearly stated that many special items will be on sale promotion with greatly discounted prices as a welcome gesture in the store. Therefore, I and my husband decided to visit the store to take advantage of the promotion.
However, upon arrival, we could not find any of the advertised items on promotion which was really disappointed as we were especially looking forward to making certain purchases. Not only that but the smaller items such as socks and underwear which were mentioned in the advertisement. I enquired with the sales associate, and he informed me that they had received a limited stock of sales items. Therefore. all the goods have been sold out.
I feel that as a store manager, it is your duty to ensure sufficient stock was available, knowing that advertisement may generate significant interest from customers. I would like to make a suggestion to honor the sale promotion prices when more stock becomes available at the store as a token of apology.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Regards
Kamaljeet kaur
Score 7. Watch your punctuation
Both the options have their own merits and I can understand why some workers will want to keep the restaurant. However, if I had to choose, I would prefer to replace it with a childcare centre because of the reasons stated below.
To begin with, although the food served at the restaurant is delicious, it has an obsolete infrastructure and thus, doesn’t attract many customers. Moreover, its maintenance cost is much higher than the revenue it generates. So, I believe it’s a bad idea to continue running it.
On the contrary, the childcare facility will not only aid the employees but also profit our firm as probably all the parents working with us will enroll their wards there. Furthermore, this will relieve the workers of the stress of picking and dropping their kids to other childcare centres. As a result, productivity will increase because the employees will devote their time and concentration fully to work.
Therefore, I believe that it will be wiser to replace the restaurant with a childcare facility.
Score 8. Watch your conditionals
You had cancelled holiday trip last year and you have called insurance company multiple times but no refund yet.
State your situation
Why you have cancelled the trip?
What you are feeling now?
What you need from them ?
Dear Manager,
It behoves me to mention that I had booked the holiday trip to Mexico last year and I took a travel insurance from XYZ company dated 25th August,2020 of $1000. But, due to some medical emergency in my family. I had to cancel that trip. And I informed insurance company two days before my trip.
To my dismay, I called to the customer care of your insurance company multiple times but they have not paid any attention. Initially, the concerned officer said that I had to provide some documents .However, I submitted required documents. I did not receive any refund yet.
It’s been a year now. I am feeling a great dissatisfaction from your company this time. Even though, I have a very busy schedule. I have to call insurance company again and again.
As a solution of this, I feel I am entitled to get a refund for this on priority basis.
I request you to kindly look into this matter and do the needful.
An open line of communication will greatly help out in this matter. And you can contact me on a below mentioned number.
Regards
Sally
4898567578
Score 8. Watch your tenses and punctuation
Your car is hired from a company and while you are driving on holiday, you have a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it.
In your letter:
when and where you hired it
describe how the accident happened
what kind of action did you take after the accident
Respected Sir,
I am a happy customer of your esteemed car rental company, and I am writing to inform you about an accident during the drive.
I rented a Corolla SE ‘GSB498’ from 5th December 2021 for three days and was driving to upstate New York with my family. We weren’t aware of the snowstorm, and after an hour of driving, the weather suddenly got worse. There was zero visibility on the roads, and suddenly another car came and hit the front of my vehicle. Luckily everyone was safe, and it was a small accident.
Furthermore, due to the crash, the engine stopped working, so I immediately called the toll-free number of your company, and the customer service person arranged a towing car. I was so pleased with your representative’s responsiveness, and he was very kind to arrange another car immediately from your upstate branch. I will always be thankful for that, otherwise, we all would have ended up freezing in the cold weather and canceling our trip.
Finally, everything was taken care of since the insurance already included accidental damage and coverage. I am sorry for the inconvenience caused. Thank you.
Kind Regards,
Anna Mathew
Score 8. Watch your sentence variety
Your car is hired from a company and while you are driving on holiday, you have a small accident. You will have to write a report to the company to explain it.
In your letter:
when and where you hired it
describe how the accident happened
what kind of action did you take after the accident
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I recently rented a Car through your esteemed company and, I am writing this to report an accident which recently took place on my trip. My rental was a Toyota Corolla: ABC324 picked up from Miami Airport on Friday at 5 PM for the weekend. I also purchased the roadside assistance package along with the daily insurance coverage from Avis itself.
The incident took place on the 8th of April Saturday while driving my way towards Key West. I was driving cautiously under the speed limit when an SUV came in full speed and ramped the bumper in the rear, making my balance off and eventually hitting the sidebar under extreme force. Fortunately, the vehicle was equipped with airbags and my family and myself are safe but, the Corolla’s back is entirely crushed with the lights broken and the side of the Car has suffered many scratches.
Furthermore, we contacted 911 and roadside assistance immediately and the police took our statements along with the key witnesses confirming no wrongdoings on our end. Eventually, they towed the vehicle to the nearest garage for repairs and maintenance work.
I request you to kindly look into this matter and do the needful.
Kind regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Watch your punctuation
Dear Manager,
My name is John and the purpose of my writing is to express an interest for the post of part-time football coach at Westley football club based on the advertisement on Gulf News today.
During my teenage years, I trained under Coach Jim at Westley football club, hence, it would be an honour to come back and coach the young aspiring footballers. I used to play pro with Manchester city for about 10 years and have led my team to championship titles countless times. At present, I’m coaching the team at Wright football club for the past 2 years and have played a major part in moulding them physically and mentally for the game. Additionally, I have also led the team to many wins over district and national levels.
Please find enclosed my resume and reference letters for your kind perusal. I can start right away as my current schedule is quite flexible.
Looking forward to your response.
Regards,
John Smith
Score 8. Watch your sentence variety
A research suggests that damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of
worldwide improvements in the standard of living.
Write 150-200 words discussing whether you agree or disagree and why do you take that
stance. What effects could it have if the government goes with either choice?
Option A: Support the topic.
Option B: Go against the topic.
In the modern era, technology has conquered humans and their standard of living. Therefore, I second the suggestion for the following reasons:
Firstly, In the 21st century, every home has multiple air conditioners and refrigerators for leisure. These electronic devices lead to emissions of greenhouse gases into the atmosphere. Other than that, every household has a car, and nobody prefers to use public transport. Vehicles emit Carbon-monoxide gas and have proven to be dangerous to human life. Furthermore, research also mentioned an increase in chronic diseases like asthma, bronchitis, and lung cancers in adults and many infants exposed to air pollution.
Secondly, manufacturing industries cut down thousands of trees to build factories leading to deforestation and global warming. The chemicals from these plants are released into the air and underlying water bodies. Any cross-contamination into drinking water could cause an epidemic. According to NASA, the temperature of the earth is likely to rise 2% every year increasing the chances of natural disasters like floods, earthquakes, Tsunamis, etc.
Finally, the government should encourage everyone to use public transports or carpooling whenever possible to reduce pollution and regulate strict laws against factories posing a threat to the ecosystem.
Score 8. Make sure you paraphrase the statement in your introduction. Your conclusion should start with, “In conclusion”, not ‘finally’.
Your manager is surveying employees’ opinions about commuting preferences. It is the company’s 10th year anniversary and your manager would like to offer a gift to all employees. She would like to know if the staff would prefer to receive a free underground parking pass for one year or a free public transit pass for one year.
Option A: I would like the one-year underground parking pass.
Option B: I would like the one-year public transit pass.
Ans:
Respected Madam,
Congratulations on the Company’s 10th anniversary and although, the one-year parking pass seems tempting and a relief to the wallet, I would certainly want to enjoy the benefits of traveling throughout the city and thereby wanting a free one-year public transit pass.
One of the perks of staying in New York is that Public Transport connects the farthest and the most remote corners of the city to the most hustling and bustling ones. Connectivity is efficient and we have a lot of options including the path trains, subways, and buses.
Secondly, driving a car in the city is a nuisance due to increased traffic and a rise in congestion. Moreover, I travel from New Jersey so, traveling in trains and catching a bus to our workplace seems to be a convenient option rather than experiencing daily traffic. Besides, having moved from California a few months ago, I would like to explore the city and what’s better than discovering it on Public Transit.
Furthermore, my parents stay in Philadelphia so, I would like to visit them every few months and having a pass would be the icing on the cake. Lastly, I would like to thank you for offering this survey.
Kind regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Even with the letter format, the survey response should follow the Opinion Essay format. Watch your punctuation.
At your workplace, recyclable materials, such as juice boxes, are not separated from the regular garbage. You would like the company to start a recycling program, at least in the cafeteria.
Explain the problem.
Suggest ways to solve the problem.
Offer to volunteer and help.
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I, Jake Peralta, am writing this email to express my concern over the non-separation of the recycled garbage from the regular one at our workplace.
Currently, we have no separate bins for different types of garbage and all of it accumulates together. Plastic waste such as bottles, soda cans, and boxes is mixed with wet waste causing immense harm to our environment. Besides, the garbage authority has issued several notices and warned us multiple times, but our management seems a little concerned about it and has completely turned a deaf ear to them.
Nonetheless, we can initiate a recycling program by making our Cafeteria implement this policy by segregating the waste along with having separate bins for different types of waste all over our workplace. Having different colored bins for different types of waste will be an efficient and easy way to encourage people to throw away waste in the respective bins. Moreover, as time progresses, we can implement it throughout our workplace.
Furthermore, my team understands the magnitude of the situation and is offering to come forward and create a program on waste management for our employees, thereby making them aware and responsible through various seminars and sessions. I sincerely hope you take the necessary steps to implement this.
Kind regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Watch your conditionals and punctuation.
You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
Say what the problem is.
Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
Ask the provider to solve the problem.
Respected Sir,
I just moved to Canada to pursue the Computer Science course, and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the accommodation provided.
Firstly, I am handicapped, and I had very well mentioned in my application that I would require special arrangements for housing. When I reached the hostel, I was assigned room ‘3A’ located on the third floor with two bunk beds. I had specified that I would require a room on the ground floor, and this came as a bolt out of the blue for me when my roommate refused to switch beds since I wanted the lower section of the bed. Moreover, the main reason I applied to your University was that it assisted disabled students.
Secondly, I was promised a room with two single beds closer to the restroom, since it would make matters easier for me. I paid an extra $500 for the above-mentioned requests, and none of the requirements were fulfilled. Other than that, the room wasn’t clean and was in a complete mess.
Finally, I request you arrange a different room for me as soon as possible since I am concerned about the situation. Thank you.
Kind regards,
Anna Mathew
Watch your punctuation and tenses. Score 8
Office Upgrade Survey
Your company has extra money to spend on office upgrades. Your boss wants to build 5 additional parking spaces for the employees. One of your co-workers, though, suggests building 30 bike stands to promote a healthy lifestyle instead. The company asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Option A: I would prefer to have more parking spaces.
Option B: I would prefer to have more bike stands.
I appreciate you are inviting our opinion on the option of an office upgrade surrey.
If given the choice I would prefer to have more bike stands for the following reasons.
To begin with, by doing office job people hardly indulge in any type of physical exercise and sitting for a long time on chairs employees feel fatigued. Especially for the people who are in the operation department where is a limited scope of customer dealing.
Moreover, many of my co-workers who reside in the proximity of the office want to come by bike to have a healthy lifestyle. Riding a bike even for ten to fifteen minutes may improve health issues. Nonetheless, they have bikes. They can not come to the office by bike because of the non-availability of bike stands.
Additionally, It is also beneficial for the environment as riding a bike will reduce air pollution levels which will also be related to good health. Bikes use a minimal amount of fossil fuels. And there will be less traffic on the roads.
I think for the benefit of society and employees company should spend money on building the bike stands.
Score 7. Watch your conditionals and punctuation
You have borrowed money from your bank. You agreed to repay a fixed amount every month. However, it will be difficult to pay any money back this month.
State the amount of money you borrowed and the repayment schedule.
Explain why you borrowed the money.
Explain the reason you cannot pay any money this month and why you will be able to pay next month.
Dear Manager,
I have availed the business loan of $60000 for ten years in 2015 under loan account no 567890 from your bank. I am paying an equated monthly installment of $600 of aforesaid loan regularly.
I took this loan to expand my footwear business. As I wanted to open two more footwear showrooms at different locations to boost sales and profit. I have three footwear showrooms and my sales were also increased and everything was going well. However, due to the Covid-19 pandemic, my business shut down completely. Somehow I managed to pay EMI from my saving for the last three months.
Actually, this month I don’t have enough balance in my savings account to pay the EMI amount. But I will be able to next month as I tie-up with Amazon for selling footwear online. Moreover, the Government allowed opening the showrooms for a specific time. I hope everything will be on track soon.
Therefore, I am confident that I will be able to resume the installments as per the agreed schedule from the next month onward.
Your cooperation in this matter is greatly appreciated.
Regards,
Kusum Sukhija
Score 7. Watch your punctuation and conditionals
It is my opinion that we should replace China Wok with a childcare facility to support the physical and mental well-being of our employees especially parents.
The benefits of having such an option available nearby highly outweighs its disadvantages. The main reason for believing this is because it is a daily struggle for parents to drop their children to a trustworthy centre and arrive on time for office. No doubt, most of the time it is a physical strain to juggle everything on a daily basis.
It is also possible to say that a working parent becomes more productive when they don’t have to stress out over the well-being of their child. Additionally, it is easier to deal with an emergency if the facility is in the same building. What seems more convincing for me is that my child is bonding with children whose parents I’m familiar with.
On the other hand, the restaurant has not been having good business these days due to the poor quality of food and unhygienic standards. It is not viable to keep it running under loss when there are much better options already available.
Hence, I believe that opening up a childcare should be prioritized. I trust that you will make the right decision.
Score 8. Develop your statements
Printer Survey
Your boss thinks paper is unnecessary because everyone has a computer and access to the internet. Your boss wants to take away all the printers so that people use much less paper. Other people think that this will be very inconvenient. Your boss asked you to respond to an opinion survey about whether to keep the printers.
Option A: I think we should keep the printers in the office.
Option B: I think we should have a paperless office with no printers.
I second the suggestion to have a paperless office with no printers for the following reasons:
Firstly, In the digital era, most people prefer digitized documents rather than prints. Schools and Universities allow students to submit their assignments online. Nowadays, even contracts or leases are digitally signed, and Banks offer paperless statements. Companies have transformed into a paperless environment for cost-effectiveness and to invest in digital equipment. According to a recent survey, companies have saved at least $50,000 by reducing paper.
Secondly, According to an article in “NY Times,” almost ten thousand trees are cut every year to produce paper. This leads to deforestation and increases the level of Carbon-dioxide resulting in global warming and air pollution.
Nonetheless, Employees take advantage of office printers for their personal use. Recently, our company got various complaints about the staff using printers to print essays, notes, etc. for their children. Employees have developed the attitude that printing is free of cost in the office, and they can take a print whenever they want to.
Conclusively, it’s our responsibility to keep our environment safe by removing printers when everything is available online.
Score 10. Instead of “nonetheless, it would be more appropriate to say “Moreover” or “Additionally”.
Barbecues on Balconies Survey
Your apartment manager is surveying your opinion about people using barbecues on their apartment balconies. The apartment balconies are small. Some residents think that because barbecues can cause smoke and catch fire, they should not be allowed. However, others think that using barbecues should be allowed because people like to enjoy summer food at their home. Your manager asked you to complete an opinion survey.
Option A: Residents should not be allowed to use barbecues on their balconies.
Option B: Residents should be allowed to use barbecues on their balconies.
Ans:
Allowing barbeques on personal balconies is not only dangerous but also jeopardizes the safety of the people living and therefore, I feel that barbeques should not be permitted to be used on the balconies for the following reasons:
Firstly, balconies are not equipped with Smoke detectors which is altogether a different matter of concern as we experienced last month where a candle caused a curtain on fire. Besides, enclosed balconies with little room make barbeques even riskier, and if there is a lack of attention on the grill, there are high chances of things going haywire quickly and taking a turn for the worse.
Secondly, many families are not comfortable with the smell and the smoke caused by barbeques in the balconies, and respecting their privacy and concerns should be an important factor before making any decisions for our apartments. Moreover, the balconies are very close to each other and the noise levels caused by barbeques may be problematic to our residents which may cause some heated arguments and give rise to unnecessary fights among the folks.
In conclusion, there is a common recreation space designed for our members where they can enjoy the Summer heat and safely cook some nice barbeque among several other members causing no disturbance and inconvenience to people.
Score 10. Super
You work for a clothing company. Your company has a new style of coat.
Provide information about your company.
Provide information about the new style of coat.
Suggest who might buy this coat and why.
Invite the staff at the magazine to write about the coat.
Respected Sir,
I am a huge fan of your fashion magazine, and I am writing this email to invite you to write an article on our new clothing line which we just introduced.
Firstly, I am the Sales Manager at Fashionista. Our fashion designers recently introduced a coat which is new to the market. It’s a trenchcoat that is waterproof and has an inner lining of insulation for warmth. The coat is designed in a way where it looks classy, stylish and serves its purpose.
Secondly, we have planned to launch the coat soon since the Fall season is right around the corner. Besides, the trenchcoat is waterproof, so we are expecting heavy demand for this coat from all age groups, as no brand has a waterproof trenchcoat out in the market. Moreover, the trenchcoat is also available in 15 different colors of all sizes.
Furthermore, we are looking to advertise the coat through your magazine which would eventually give us some exposure. Our firm would be honored if you could drop by next week and write a small article in your magazine.
I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your time.
Kind Regards,
Anna Mathew
Lovely. Score 10
In the mail, you received an advertisement about the opening of a new department store. The advertisement said that they have many items at special low prices. However, when you went to the store, you could not find the items.
Explain why you went to the opening.
Complain about the store not having the items they advertised.
Describe how you would like the store to fix the problem.
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I, Jake Peralta, visited your newly opened store, and I am writing this to express my dissatisfaction regarding the absence of advertised discounted items in your store.
Last week, I got a mail regarding your new store, and since, I recently moved to this area, it was a perfect opportunity for me to shop. Furthermore, there was a huge discount on Home appliances which tempted me even more to visit your store.
Unfortunately, the items shown in the advertisements were not only unavailable but also some of the furniture and appliances were not in the inventory when I enquired about them with your staff. Besides, the low prices were used to attract customers to the stores as there was no discount available on any items in the store. My only purchase was a Juicer which broke down within a couple of days to which, I am still awaiting a response from your customer care regarding that.
Nonetheless, I would recommend you to get your act together and restock your inventory as false advertising is a crime and you could be in serious trouble if any customer files a complaint against you. I hope you understand the magnitude of the situation and take the necessary steps to correct this.
Kind regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Watch your punctuation
Workplace Commuter Survey
Your manager is surveying employees’ opinions about commuting preferences. It is the company’s 10th year anniversary and your manager would like to offer a gift to all employees. She would like to know if the staff would prefer to receive a free underground parking pass for one year or a free public transit pass for one year.
Option A: I would like the one-year underground parking pass.
Option B: I would like the one-year public transit pass.
I would opt for the one-year public transit pass for the following reasons:
Firstly, Since I stay in the outskirts, I prefer taking public transport, rather than driving myself. With a free public transit pass, I wouldn’t have to wait in long queues every day to get a ticket. Moreover, during the rush hours, I have to wait for a minimum of half-hour to obtain a ticket to the tri-rail. Due to this reason, there have been times when I reached the office late and missed client meetings.
Secondly, our office is located right in the middle of the city which gives huge accessibility to public transport. Hence, most of the employees prefer subway, path trains, buses, etc. Besides, only 10% of the staff get their car and use the underground parking. A free transit pass would allow employees to travel without any costs incurred or spending on fuel.
Furthermore, a free transit pass will motivate others to use public transport, thus reducing air and noise pollution caused by heavy traffic. This would prove to be a cost-effective solution and an amazing gift for all the employees.
Score 8. Identify your main points in the introduction
Printer Survey
Your boss thinks paper is unnecessary because everyone has a computer and access to the internet. Your boss wants to take away all the printers so that people use much less paper. Other people think that this will be very inconvenient. Your boss asked you to respond to an opinion survey about whether to keep the printers.
Option A: I think we should keep the printers in the office.
Option B: I think we should have a paperless office with no printers.
Ans:
There are several other way’s which can be implemented to reduce paper usage therefore, I feel that keeping printers in the office is a viable option for the following reasons:
Our company relies on heavy paperwork so, having no access to printers will be a bolt of the blue for the employees. Besides, Internet access doesn’t justify the fact that paper usage will be reduced. There are several important tasks like printing our monthly invoices, creating the budget plan, sending the Verification forms to our customers, creating copies, to depict a few which cannot be paperless.
Although we can implement several ways to curb the paper usage and change our task management to sending the paperwork online, it won’t necessarily take away the printer entirely from the scenario. Many of our Client’s still have primitive systems and are very skeptical of sending them important and confidential information through e-mail. Furthermore, there is always a threat of Online hacking, and the information is never safe, as experienced last Summer, where our Database was hacked, wiping out our entire Customers Record.
To conclude, awareness about the environment will certainly help in reducing paper usage rather than curbing the use of printers, which is an important part of our setup.
Score 8. Strengthen your introduction by identifying your main ideas
You work for a clothing company. Your company has a new style of coat.
Write an email to a magazine in about 150–200 words. Tell the magazine about the new style of coat. Your email should do the following things:
Provide information about your company.
Provide information about the new style of coat.
Suggest who might buy this coat and why.
Invite the staff at the magazine to write about the coat.
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I work for H&M, and I am writing this mail to bring to your attention, our latest line of Coats called the “Pride Collection”.
Our company has always supported and been an avid supporter of the Gay Community as you wrote about us in your esteemed magazine regarding our float sponsorship in the NY City’s Community parade last Summer. We encountered a lot of demand for a less formal and stylish line of Coats matching the pride’s aura and personality, and keeping in mind those requests, we have decided to launch our new line of Coats targeted toward the beautiful and amazing people of the Pride Community.
The new Coat has various options to choose from: Fur collars, Straight collars stitched with Velvet Buttons, and comes in seven vibrant colors depicting the Rainbow. The Coat has a stylish vibe and is perfect for Winter weather besides, rocking party looks if required. The Coat comes in two different dimensions i.e. the overcoat or the Regular.
Furthermore, the Launch is scheduled for next Friday at Madison Square, and I would like to invite your team to attend the event and write about the Coats, which are already creating a buzz on Social media.
Kind Regards,
Jake Peralta.
Score 8. Watch your punctuation.
At your workplace, recyclable materials, such as juice boxes, are not separated from the regular garbage. You would like the company to start a recycling program, at least in the cafeteria.
Explain the problem.
Suggest ways to solve the problem.
Offer to volunteer and help.
Respected Sir,
I am writing this email to suggest a recycling program for our office cafeteria.
Firstly, I have noticed that the office doesn’t have a separate garbage bin for recyclable waste such as juice boxes, plastic bottles, etc. Such products can be recycled and reused, thus saving our environment from unwanted pollution.
Secondly, it takes many years for paper or cardboard to decompose. Plastic never decomposes, and it will stay in our environment for thousands of years. For this reason, the government has regulated programs for separating waste. According to an article in the “NY Times,” the recycling industry is booming, and it has helped reduce 20% of pollution. Besides, it has led to a cost-effective way of manufacturing recycled products.
Finally, I would like to suggest that our company take stringent measures to save mother earth. One thing you could do is, introduce recycling bins in the cafeteria and other office spaces like near the printers. I would be happy to volunteer for such an important cause and would love to educate others too. I am planning to give a small presentation on a recycling program next week whenever you are available.
I hope you consider my request. Thank you.
Kind regards,
Anna Mathew
Score 11. Gorgeous
You enjoy going to your local coffee shop to work, read, and meet friends. However, every time you go, the seats and tables are dirty and you have to clean them up.
Describe why you enjoy going to the coffee shop.
Explain the problems with the coffee shop.
Suggest how the problems could be solved.
Dear Manager,
I am a regular customer of XYZ coffee shop. I always love to have espresso coffee with Almond and butter scotch cookies while reading. The aroma of that coffee allure me to come at this coffee shop and specially the cup cakes that you often make on weekends. As I am a coffee lover, I feel it is the best place to hang out with friends.
Lately, I noticed that the seats and tables are full of dust. And I could not find any staff to clean it. Whenever I want to sit first I have to clean them up then only I can sit. It gives a very bad impression on customer’s mind. As I love this place so, I think I should bring this problem in your notice.
Considering this, I think you should hire some more staff for cleaning the chairs and tables or you could trained the existing staff.
I am looking forward to see how my suggestion will translate in to a prompt action from your side.
Regards
Kusum Sukhija
Score 8. Watch your tenses
Barbecues on Balconies Survey
Your apartment manager is surveying your opinion about people using barbecues on their apartment balconies. The apartment balconies are small. Some residents think that because barbecues can cause smoke and catch fire, they should not be allowed. However, others think that using barbecues should be allowed because people like to enjoy summer food at their home. Your manager asked you to complete an opinion survey.
Option A: Residents should not be allowed to use barbecues on their balconies.
Option B: Residents should be allowed to use barbecues on their balconies.
Although using barbecues to enjoy time with family is a great idea, I think that residents should not be allowed to use a barbecue on their balconies for the following reasons:
Firstly, apartment balconies in Los Angeles are not designed to use barbecue grills. The balconies in the apartment building measure 300 sq ft, which is pretty much cramped. Moreover, LA is a city that is dry year-round, which increases the risk of fires. The apartments are made of wood, and smoke from the barbecues can burn down an entire building.
Secondly, our apartment has a good clubhouse with an open pool and barbecue grills beside it. The residents already pay for such amenities and should take advantage. Furthermore, the free space in the community can be booked by a family beforehand, and they can enjoy a good barbecue summer with their family rather than barbecuing the apartment and risking the lives of their loved ones.
Finally, According to an article in “LA Times”, almost 25% of the deaths in the city occur due to fires in the apartments that were caused due to barbecuing. There should be stringent measures taken to reduce the risk of fire and to keep everyone safe.
Score 9. Make sure you use your transitions, ie. “…barbecuing; therefore, there should be stringent measures taken to reduce the risk of fire and to keep everyone safe.”
Scent-Free Workplace Survey
Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy.
Ans:
Smelling good is an important Corporate habit, and I believe that people should have the right to wear any scent for the following reasons:
Being in an interactive corporate job, where we communicate with a lot of folks on a day-to-day basis, looking and smelling good is necessary for a good first impression. People prefer a good vibe and better smelling surroundings rather than stinky stale air to breathe. According to ‘NY Times, 66% of the professionals feel confident and presentable in their jobs where they have no restrictions on dressing, applying scent, and having flexible break times.
Furthermore, people more aged complained about having allergy’s and headaches due to scents, as surveyed by our company in the last quarter at one of the after-work events. 71% of our staff consists of young college graduates and engineers under 30 and implementing any restrictions or policy could hamper our relationships with them.
Lastly, companies implementing this policy seem to be hesitant in revealing whether this policy has had any adverse and lasting changes in their company as reported by ‘Times Now’. Besides, being one of the coolest startups in the City, we have come a long way in making our actions speak rather than implementing such harsh workplace words.
Score 10. Lovely
Write an email to the department store manager in about 150–200 words. Your email should do the following things:
Explain why you went to the opening.
Complain about the store not having the items they advertised.
Describe how you would like the store to fix the problem.
In the mail, you received an advertisement about the opening of a new department store. The advertisement said that they have many items at special low prices. However, when you went to the store, you could not find the items.
Respected Sir,
I recently visited your departmental store, and I am writing this email to express my dissatisfaction with the unavailability of the products advertised.
Firstly, I received an advertisement about the opening of your store, and it contained many discounted items and deals on electronics. I was particularly interested in the deal: “Buy 1 Samsung Galaxy 5 and get a free LG Microwave”. But when I visited the store, I couldn’t find the items advertised. I asked the store representative about the offer, and he said that the store doesn’t have the Samsung phone or Microwave in stock.
Secondly, when I asked your salesman about other items in the advertisement, he gave a deaf ear. Moreover, his rudeness to customers came as a bolt out of the blue for me. Your store misled customers through the advertisement and lured us to your store opening.
Finally, As a departmental store, it is your responsibility to treat customers with the utmost respect and customer support. I would suggest you take stringent measures to resolve this issue. One thing you could do is, offer the same deals advertised to the customers and give orientation or training sessions to your salesman.
Thank you.
Kind Regards,
Anna Mathew
Score 11. Watch your punctuation, ie. “…, but when I visited the store,…”
You have borrowed money from your bank. Now your income has changed.
Write an email of about 150–200 words to the bank and explain the change in your finances. Make a request to change the amount of money you pay back each month. Your email should include the following things:
the amount of money you borrowed and the current repayment schedule
why you borrowed the money
how your income has changed and why it has changed
how you would like to change the amount of money you pay each month
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I, Jake Peralta, an esteemed and a longstanding customer of your bank, and I am writing this requesting you to make some changes in my monthly repayment of the Loan.
Last year in August 2020, I was approved of a 20,000$ loan for purchasing a new Car. Currently, I am paying a monthly repayment of 500$ for 24 months with an interest rate of 9.8% due every 5th of the month.
Fortunately, I was promoted to a higher post at my job to a Senior Manager, and by god’s grace, there was a 20% increment in my salary. Although Chicago was a dream city for us, my family has decided to move to New York. Due to this reason, I would like to make some changes to my current repayment structure, starting from increasing the monthly repayment amount to 1000$.
Furthermore, since your bank was just a block away from my current residence, I preferred to paying through a check, but my New York Apartment is far from the nearest branch, so I would also like to change my mode of payment from check to Online Payment.
Attached is my Monthly Receipt of the repayment for my Account Details. Thank You.
Kind Regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Watch your subjunctive
Park Use Survey
Your community centre is surveying your opinion on a new event happening every Saturday in the park near your home. There are two events being considered. One suggestion is a vegetable and fruit market. The other suggestion is a second-hand furniture and appliance market.
I appreciate the opportunity to provide inputs on park use survey.
I strongly believe that vegetable and fruit market in the park on every Saturday is far better and convincing choice because of the following reasons.
Firstly, there is no farmers market in the proximity of our area. Whenever, we want to buy vegetable and fruits. We have to go to a mall ,that is, ten miles away from our society. If every Saturday ,there is fruit and vegetable market in a park it will make our life easy as it has now become whole day task to buy these things from mall.
Moreover, In mall the cost of fruits and vegetable is always high as compared to these market as in these market fruits and vegetable are directly sold to customers, no intermediator is involved mostly and sometimes, only one mediator is involved.
Nonetheless, we are paying more amount. we do not get fresh vegetables and fruits as these mall usually buys in bulk quantity. But having a Saturday market for fruits and vegetable we could get fresh vegetables and fruits at a reasonable price.
Considering this, I hope you will make right decision for our community.
Score 7. Watch your punctuation and tenses
You are a high school teacher. A student of yours has just graduated with excellent marks from high school. This person wants to find work.
Explain how you feel about her high school grades.
Explain why a college education is good.
Explain why going to work instead of college is unwise.
Dear Sam,
Congratulations on your high school graduation. What a proud moment it is ! I am very excited for your amazing grades. Your parents must be thrilled as I am.
I would like to give my two cents that why you should pursue your college studies. Firstly, for building a good career in any profession you need to have a deep knowledge of the subject . In college, you will understand it with the help of projects and practicals.
Secondly, College education teaches you imperative lessons that will help you in living a better life For instance, time management and self discipline. By doing multiple things, at the same time like studying and doing internship will teach you how to manage time for every activity.
Finally, In College days we meet people of different culture and it gives a real time experience for life and also college memories are the life time memories.
However, If you go for work instead of college definitely you will get a job and initially, you will feel financial freedom. But in long run, you will not get a higher position job that you could get after completing your college education.
I hope you will come up with a best decision.
Good luck.
Regards
Anna Mathew
Score 7. Watch your punctuation and sentence variety.
A research suggests that damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of
worldwide improvements in the standard of living.
Write 150-200 words discussing whether you agree or disagree and why do you take that
stance. What effects could it have if the government goes with either choice?
Option A: Support the topic.
Option B: Go against the topic.
Ans:
Improvements in Technology and Modern Science has improved the way people live their life which is ultimately causing harm to our environment and therefore, I agree with the research for the following reasons:
Firstly, mankind is a selfish being and the recent advancements in Tech and the sudden boom in Science have not only helped him to make his life efficient but also find innovative ways to comfort himself. Building concrete Jungles along a booming mangrove, building large structures along with river bodies, disturbing the food chain by animal killings, and consuming unrealistic products are causing greater repercussions than ever imagined.
Secondly, showing off is a virtue in today’s world so people have started using all types of Gadgets and an increase in the number of vehicles around the world has not helped the cause for the environment either. Fuel resources going empty along with Ozone Layer depletion is a real threat, and many cities in the world are already bearing the brunt of that with increasing temperatures and rising sea levels causing uncontrolled natural disasters.
Furthermore, the Government intervention will be fruitful and make people more aware of the environmental problem besides creating some stringent laws going forward as the government should remember that he who pays the piper calls the tune.
Score 11. Watch your conditionals
Scent-Free Workplace Survey
Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy.
Option A: The workplace should have a scent-free policy.
Option B: The workplace should allow people to wear scents.
Although scents make a person smell good, I second the suggestion of a scent-free policy for the following reasons:
Firstly, Every individual has a different taste when it comes to perfumes. Some may like sweet scents, while on the other hand, some may like strong fragrances. Recently, Anna from the sales department fell sick due to a colleague who had worn a strong scent. She had allergic reactions to the perfume and was coughing badly, and hence she had to be taken to the hospital.
Secondly, According to new research, perfumes are harmful to our bodies and have various side effects. The most recent article in the “NY Times” says that doctors suggest not to use too much fragrance due to the high risk of breast, lung, and skin cancers. In the past five years, there have been 5000 cases of such cancers, and doctors blame perfume companies for it. Furthermore, 50 perfume samples were collected last year, and they had specific chemical ingredients that proved to be dangerous to health.
Finally, multinational companies in our city have already adopted this policy, and it would be great if we follow the same path for the well-being of our employees.
Score 11. Well Done!
Write an email of about 150–200 words to the bank and explain the change in your finances. Make a request to change the amount of money you pay back each month. Your email should include the following things:
the amount of money you borrowed and the current repayment schedule
why you borrowed the money
how your income has changed and why it has changed
how you would like to change the amount of money you pay each month
You have borrowed money from your bank. Now your income has changed.
Respected Sir,
I am a customer of your esteemed bank, and I am writing to request a change in the amount of money I currently pay each month for the loan.
Firstly, I had taken a home loan of $100,000 from your bank, and on the 1st of every month, the bank deducts $750 from my checking account. The interest rate for 15 years is 15.1%, and I have been repaying you for one year.
Secondly, I switched jobs three months ago and currently working for a multinational company, and I’ll be relocating to the USA in the next two months. The company pays me a pretty high package than my previous job and therefore, I think I’ll be able to repay you sooner than expected. My income has increased by 45%, and I would like to change the amount being deducted every month from $750 to $2000.
Finally, I recall you offering a lower interest rate if a customer pays back almost 20% of the loan in just three years. I would be happy to receive a lower interest rate in the future. For your reference, I am attaching copies of my current and previous paychecks.
I hope you make the suggested changes to the amount. Thank you.
Kind Regards,
Anjali
Score 8. Watch your sentence variety
Task 1:
You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
Say what the problem is.
Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
Ask the provider to solve the problem.
Ans:
Respected Sir,
I recently enrolled in your esteemed College for a six month Course on Java, staying at the temporary accommodation provided by your University and I am writing this to express my dissatisfaction regarding the place.
Firstly, housing was the least of the concerns coming to a different country to pursue my dream course, and I was prepared to face a lot of challenges related to the culture, weather, and the people around me. But, after arriving at my allotted place, I was flummoxed. The place was completely different from the one shown in the pictures as I was provided with a large room with nine other Students. The beds were adjacent to each other and had a small desk beside them. Besides, we had to share the closet space with everyone making it worse.
Furthermore, the accommodation promised by the University was a studio apartment with ample room for a bed, study table, and closet space along with the basic amenities. On my day of arrival, the Manager of the place turned a deaf ear to all my concerns being rude and adamant.
Lastly, I request you to speak to the Building manager to grant me a better place or kindly refund my accommodation fees.
Thank You.
Kind regards,
Jake Peralta
Score 8. Watch your subjunctive and punctuation. These are really holding you back. Let me know if you’d like a class to clean these up.
Your children’s school provides free school lunches. Usually, the lunch is a hamburger, hotdog, or pizza. The children really enjoy the lunches. Some parents want to change the lunches so that the children eat salad or vegetables every day. The school asked you to respond to an opinion survey.
Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Option A: I would prefer the lunches stayed the same.
Option B: I would prefer they changed the lunches.
Dear Sir,
I appreciate your inviting our opinion on the school lunch survey.
if the given choice I would prefer to change the lunches as it seems a far better and viable option for me. I would like to give a couple of reasons to substantiate my arguments.
To begin with, No doubt food like pizza and burgers are very tasty and student loves it. But it can be harmful to the health of students. As they are in growing age they need more nutritious food for the overall development of their body and mind.
Moreover, having these types of lunches every day can lead to child obesity and that is a very serious issue. Junk food has more oil and salt as compared to other food. It contains more fats and carbs.
Furthermore, It is observed that after having junk food people often feel sleepy as it is hard to digest because of fat substance. As a result, students do not focus in after-lunch classes because of the heaviness in their eyes. it affects their studies also.
After discussing all my arguments, I firmly believe that schools should change the lunches for the benefit of student health.