CELPIP Essay Correction Service

Using our CELPIP Essay Correction Service

When you have completed your essays, you can send them to my CELPIP essay correction service for evaluation. I’ll provide my feedback within 24 hour on business days.

How to Submit Your Essay

Just:

  • choose your package
  • make your payment
  • paste your essay into an email to angela(at)ottawa-english(dot)com

Within 24 hours after you submit your essay, you will know your score and have lots of feedback on the mistakes you are making, and the things you need to do to get a better score.

When you use our Writing Correction Service for your CELPIP writing practice, you get lots of practice material to help you understand and fix the specific area of greatest concern. In other words, we’ll help you fix the thing that is having the greatest impact on your score.

Pricing & Packages for CELPIP Essay Correction Service

1 Task

CAD $20

One writing task for correction. You can send
One Task 1
OR
One Task 2

This option does not include any combinations

Use any question, but please include it when you send your email.

5 Tasks

CAD $90

Five writing tasks for correction. You can send
five Task 1s
OR
five Task 2s
OR
any combination

Use any questions, but please include it when you send your email.

10 Tasks

CAD $ 170

Ten writing tasks for correction. You can send
ten Task 1s
OR
ten Task 2s
OR
any combination

Use any questions, but please include it when you send your email.

15 Tasks

CAD $ 240

Fifteen writing tasks for correction. You can send
fifteen Task 1s
OR
fifteen Task 2s
OR
any combination

Use any questions, but please include it when you send your email.

20 Tasks

CAD $300

Twenty writing tasks for correction. You can send
twenty Task 1s
OR
twenty Task 2s
OR
any combination

Use any question, but please include it when you send your email.

Please note that all payments are processed through our parent company Chinook Solutions

CategoriesFactors
Content and Coherence:Number & Quality of ideas
Organization of ideas
Examples and supporting details
Vocabulary:Word choice
Appropriate words/phrases
Range of words/phrases
Precision and accuracy
Readability:Format and paragraphing
Connectors and transitions
Grammar & sentence structure
Spelling and punctuation
Task Fulfillment:Relevance & Completeness
Tone & Word count
CELPIP Rubric: Writing Requirements

What does the feedback include?

The feedback from our CELPIP essay correction service includes comments, corrections, and concerns along with practice materials that target one important problem.

Can I get a free CELPIP Writing Evaluation?

If you just want a score, you can paste your letter into the comments section at the bottom of this page.

What do examiners look for?

When CELPIP examiners correct your essays, they look for coherence & organization, vocabulary & language efficiency, cohesion & grammar, and punctuation & completeness – so that’s what the CELPIP Essay correction service looks for too.

Your response should be complete! In other words, when you send your essay to my essay correction service, I shouldn’t need to look at the question to know what your essay is about; however, it’s worth including the writing prompt so that I can make sure that you’ve covered all the components.

What is Coherence & Organization?

Coherence is the way that your writing forms a clean, neatly wrapped package. It has a strong introduction, paragraphs with developed topic statements, and a conclusion.

Organization is the way you lead your reader through your ideas developing your statements with details and examples.

What is Cohesion & Grammar?

Cohesion is the way you use cohesive devices to glue your ideas together. It’s the way you show the relationship between your ideas. Obviously, there are many ways to do that, but the most common are problem areas are word order, reductions, conjunctions, etc.

Grammar includes your tenses, agreements, word order, conditionals, reductions, and article accuracy. These are all things that make your writing easy to read.

What is Vocabulary & Language Efficiency?

Vocabulary is the range of words, synonyms, phrases and collocations that you use to express yourself.

Language efficiency is the way you combine words to express yourself concisely.

What is Punctuation & Completeness?

As they complete their CELPIP essay correction, examiners look at your punctuation and the completeness of what you’ve written.

Punctuation is the length of the pause you want your readers to take in order to maximize their understanding of your writing.

Completeness is the attention you give to each part of the question.

CELPIP Essay Correction Service

If you would like to submit more than one essay, or would like more feedback on what you have written, please choose one of the packages at the top of the page and submit it to our CELPIP Essay Correction Service.

Please call/text me, Angela,
613-614-6460
for more info about tutoring.

If you would like a free CELPIP evaluation for one of your written tasks, please paste it into the comments box below. I will check it and provide a score.  Your free evaluation will only give you a score!

36 thoughts on “CELPIP Essay Correction Service”

  1. To whom it may concern,

    I am writing to express my dissatisfaction toward public transport of our city.

    I live in Scarborough, and use public transport for commute to my work place daily. Over the past six months, I faced plethora of problem due to buses. First and foremost is frequency. In morning, in my route bus frequency is 45 minutes, if someone miss bus than they have to wait another 45 minutes to catch next one! Apart from this, there is no night bus, last bus is around 10:00 PM. Sometime due to workload if we do overtime then we have to book cab to reach home.

    In order to rectify problem, I would suggest to decrease duration time between two buses in rush hours. Moreover, start some night buses so people of my area can use, and they do not have to book cab. Apart from this, there are number of buses required service, so do service on regular before some major incident happen!

    I appreciate if you could step in immediate and make appropriate step to handle this situation.

    Regards,
    Keyur Patel.

  2. Dar Bank Manager,

    I am writing this letter to get an extension on my loan instalment for this month. I have taken a loan of 50,000$ from your bank last year, the loan was taken out to repair my house damage happed due to a storm passed by the town last June.

    The month of December if normally hard, however I have lost my job early this month, and I am still waiting for full and final settlement from my previous employer. As a result, I am struggling with my financial aspect. As I am surviving on the social benefits provided by Government, I am applying and interviewing for various positions and I believe I will get the opportunity very soon.

    As I never missed any payment so far, I beg you to grant me the extension for 60 days to replay the defaulter amount.

    I am looking forward to hear back from you.

    Thank you,
    Shripad

  3. You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.
    Option A: Shopping Complex: This shopping mall would include restaurants, a large supermarket, and a movie theatre.
    Option B: Recreational Park: This park would include a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo.
    ——————————————————-
    In my opinion building a Shopping Complex in the center area of the city is a better investment that government can do to further develop Phelam City.

    There are two main reasons why I support this idea.

    First of all, constructing a shopping mall with multiple facilities will revitalize the area. Since there are just a few recreational opportunities in our city, having some new restaurants and a movie theatre will be nice spots for entertainment. Moreover, these will attract citizens not only to have fun, but at the same time the large supermarket will offer them the chance of buying food at a more competitive price as opposed to small convenience stores. All these will increase the number of visitors making it more crauded.

    Another important advantage that comes from the shopping center is that it will contribute in decreasing the level of unemployment of the city as more people will be hired to run these facilities. That will not only bring revenues back for the city but also will improve the economy of many families that live in low-income.

    Even though building a recreational park seems to be an environmentally friendly solution, I strongly believe that the shopping center will serve more to our citizens.

  4. You recently made reservations for dinner at a very famous and expensive restaurant in town. However, the meal and the service were terrible. The restaurant manager was not available to solve the problem, so you left without a resolution.
    State what problems you had with the food you ordered.
    Complain about the service.
    Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction.
    ———————————————————————————————————————

    Dear manager of The Geg Restaurant,

    I am writing to express my complains regarding my recent unpleasant experience at your restaurant this past Friday. My husband and I had a reservation there to celebrate our tenth anniversary but it turned out to be not as we expected.

    To begin with, there were some issues with the food. I ordered your home specialty stake and my husband chose local lobster, which are known as top rated dishes at your location. However, they both were cold and not fully cooked that made the food very difficult to chew. Furthermore, what disturbed us the most was the fact that I found hair in my dish.

    On top of these, the staff was not friendly and cooperative at all. They did not took time to explain the content of the dishes when asked, and also disregarded our concerns about the quality of the food that we were served. We both tried to talk to them and their attitude was quite unpolite for a prestigious eatery like yours.

    I think that we deserve a refund for the nonhygienic dishes that we had. Also, I would recommend you to organize staff training programs about behavior towards costumers.

    Sincerely,

    Ana Smith

  5. You recently stayed in a hotel where the service was slow and the room was dirty. Write an email to the hotel manager complaining about the accommodation and suggesting how the issue might be resolved.
    ——————–
    Respected Sir,

    I am writing this email to you regarding my stay at Hilton Residency, during my Toronto trip, to express the endless dissatisfaction that I had experienced.

    Firstly, I was given a room that was different to the one that I had booked and the Wi-Fi access and air-conditioner were broken. When I had informed the receptionist about the same, he said the room was arranged as temporary since the room I booked was being cleaned. Nevertheless, somehow I managed to check-in to the room after long hours of waiting. But then I found that they had messed the room numbers with another customer. Upon being questioned about the muddle, the receptionist was rude and adamant to not to apologise for the chaos he created.

    Moreover, I was aghast because despite waiting for long hours, the room was in a complete mess. Again, I had to encounter the receptionist to clean my room but he was reluctant to send a room service immediately.

    Secondly, the room service did not meet the hotel standards. The room was still cluttered, cans and newspapers littered in the balcony were not cleaned, bathrobe and few toiletries were missing and the room had a pungent smell. In spite of informing at the reception repeatedly, none of the above said things were taken care on time. I had also marked my feedback at the suggestion register as well.

    As this experience came out as a bolt out of the blue for me as I am a regular visitor at your other facilities. I would like to get a partial amount as a compensation for the inconveniences caused by your staffs. Additionally, I suggest you to call in for a meeting with the staff coordinator to train the staffs about customer service, cleanliness and code of conduct so that you don’t lose valuable customers.
    Kind Regards,
    Jade

  6. Option A – Stop producing the print version of newspaper
    Option B – Keep producing both the print and online versions

    Both options have some advantages and I see my colleagues might choose option A. However, there are several reasons why option A would be my preference.

    Many people would agree that running the print version for a low demand increases the expense of the company. I have different views as per my understanding. Firstly, there are still youths and elderly people who still loves the paper based reading although millennials are quickly moving towards consuming information on the mobile or computers. To cater paper based need, I strongly feel that it should not be discontinued. If cost of printing is a concern for the newspaper companies, then there are alternate ways to overcome it such as by adding a extra page of advertisement or by increasing the cost of newspaper. Secondly, on mobile people only tends to read those information in which they are interested as the mobile applications and websites are designed based on feeds. These websites even track the users to display only relevant or unwanted news. But by reading paper, there are high changes that the reader would read more data and unknowingly cultivate interest in a different sections. Since people spend more time on read information on mobiles, the eyes would get ruined at a long run.

    Based on above reason I think many would agree and support both forms of newspaper.

  7. Write an email to the community picnic organizer. You email should do the following things:-
    1)Express your overall enjoyment of the last week’s event
    2) Explain why each potluck dish needs a list of ingredients
    3) Describe how the potluck could be differently organized next year.

    Hello John,

    I would like to thank you for organizing a wonderful community picnic. All my friends who attended were expressing good things about the event especially the games section. This was one of the best picnics I had in last few years.

    As per my understanding, potluck was an innovative idea. I believe this can be even better when we organize it next year too. Here are few suggestions on making potluck the best section next time. Here in Canada, we have people from different cast, religion and countries. Due to this, some can have restriction on type of food they eat and others might have some allergies with milk, nuts or seafood. Because of this I thought of including the list of ingredients when I was preparing potluck for this year picnic. As a result, people were confidently eating it without hesitation. If this idea is implemented by other people attending the picnic next year, I can definitely say that it would be the perfect thing.

    To make a best section of the event, we can arrange different tents based on type of potluck and obviously with list of ingredients. And at the end, we can have a special price for the best potluck. I think you would like this idea and request you to add more if I have missed out anything.

    Regards,
    Darshan

  8. You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City
    Museum shop during the holidays.
    You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
    • introduce yourself
    • explain what experience and special skills you have
    • explain why you are interested in the job

    Dear Mr. Williams,

    I hope this message finds you well. My name is Leo Syd Alex currently enrolled as a post graduate student in Tourism and travel course at University of Waterloo. I recently saw your advertisment in Toronto star newspaper regarding a seasonal holiday job vacancy at the city Museum shop and would like to express my interest in applying for the position.

    This job vacancy gets allingned to my passion in kowing and understanding the historical artifacts and information of the country. I love gathering valuable insights about different countries, their culture and its significance. I am a certified tour guide in helping people to educate them with local interests and information.

    To understand, educate and share the diverse values of this country to others, all from under the hood, makes me feel happy and proud to apply for this position.

    Being a proactive person, I am confident that I will be a good fit for this position and would love to hear back from you.

    Thank you so much for your time and consideration.

    Your’s Sincerely,
    Leo Syd Alex

  9. Your apartment building is getting old, and the owners of the building are planning to do some renovations this summer. They have decided to conduct a survey to see what the tenants would like to have improved this year. Which option would you prefer?
    Option A: New paint and carpets
    Option B: New elevator

    In recent years, more and more old buildings get rennovated considering the safety concerns that it brings to their tenants. However, I firmly believe that a new addition of elevator would be an ideal choice to the building reconstruction plan.

    Currently, the major occupants in the building are senior citizens, families with children under the age of five. They are more vulnerable to accidents walking up and down the stairs and it will be a time consuming process as well. Last week itself there had been 2 accidents reported due to slips and falls from the stairs.

    Another reason is competition, all nearby apartments has added their modern touch to its ammenities, so it would be a real neccessity to have an elevator constructed in my bulding to have a sense of feeling and comfort.This will surely boost up the measures to counter competition by keeping your tenants loyalty unwaived.

    In conclusion, keeping up with the new trend by not compromising on the safety aspect of tenants, I personally think the elevator option to be the best fit.

  10. A local news paper is conducting a survey to know whether their paper should have more news or more discounts and offers Local News Paper Survey : Option A: Your newspaper should have more Local and International news, then discount coupons, etc. Option B: You think you can access news online but you need more of Discount coupons and offers section.
    ———————————————————————————————————-
    Both options have some advantages and I see why my colleagues might choose option B. However, there are several reasons why Option A would be my preference.

    Firstly, reading Local and International news keeps us up to date on what is happening around us. I believe every newspaper gets weekly flyers from which they can know what is sold at discounted rate in stores. Now a days mostly all people are connected to internet, and it is a very rich source of information as all companies has online presence. So, through Facebook, Twitter and emails we get up to date sales notification. At the end people are not required to wait till the newspaper reaches us in the morning

    Secondly, by reading international news, we can read about other countries conflict and know about our beloved ones if there are affected by it or not. Now a days people are very keen in investing and thus by reading that extra information about companies performance, we can invest in stock markets.

    Because of above reasons, I strongly believe Local and International news should be printed rather than discounts and offers.

  11. To my opinion student safety is always an uncompromised priority for the parents and considering the fact I would recommend use of school buses for field trips. This will also improve teachers’ surveillance along with different activities to keep them entertained during the journey. While on the contrary, it will be a difficult time for them to watch all the kids as they might scattered on the public transport.

    On top of that students will have enough time to bond with each other and lot of them will make new friends. The situation will be quite scary if they open up with strangers on public transport and we can not imagine someone taking advantage of it to satisfy their diabolical intentions. Public transit may be a cheaper option to avail. However, as a responsible parent I cannot risk my offspring safety to save a few bucks. It is always a better option to have a secure and entertained trip for kids. I am confident that maximum parents will agree to what I have opt for.

  12. Your company is considering offering new fathers paternity leave. The company has sent you a survey asking for your opinion.
    Explain why you support or object to the suggestion.

    Thank you for including me in this survey and giving me a chance to provide input on this issue. Conspicuously parenting leave for new fathers is one of the most discussed topics in today’s modern world’s workplace. I completely support this idea as this needs serious attention.

    I passionately believe that both parents have an equal commitment and duty to their child, especially since the first few months are too hectic and strenuous for a new parent. Usually, the orthodox people think that for the newborn child mother is always needed chiefly. But on the contrary, a father requires to devote the same time as the mother. Thus, for example, a father needs to be present at the regular doctor’s check-up or continuously changing the nighttime routine with mom.

    So being a new father, this becomes almost impossible for them to cope with the pressure and maintain the balance between work and personal life. Additionally, in this process, they lose their productivity, and their performance intensely gets affected.

    Based on the above discussion, I strongly encourage the parental leave idea for new fathers; therefore, I vote in favour of this.

  13. You are organizing a group trip to a museum.
    Write a letter asking for information about
    • upcoming exhibits,
    • local attractions, opening times,
    • and group rates

    To whom it may concern,

    I am writing in connection with a forthcoming trip to the city museum with our middle school science students. I wonder if it would be possible for you to provide some details regarding the below-mentioned particulars.

    We are looking for some detailed information on upcoming exhibits and opening times of the same. Other than the inside museum activity, if you could suggest any local attraction could be included within a ten-hour long itinerary. Additionally, anticipating the heavy traffic on the weekend, these suggestions will help us to plan a successful and crisp tour. Last time we were not able to finish on time due to the lack of planning.

    Since the individual ticket price is slightly higher, I wondered if any student discount or group rate will be available for the group size of 20 students. Furthermore, it will be appreciated if you could respond at the earliest so that the school authority could make a nice enjoyable trip for students.

    I Look forward to hearing from you soon.

    Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

  14. You are a volunteer at the local community theatre group. You have been asked whether the group should spend its money on costumes or storage.
    Which alternative do you support? Explain your position.
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    According to last year’s annual budget, we received a substantial spending amount for our drama group. In my opinion, we need to spend the fair share of the fund on our storage facility, if not the whole amount.

    Storage is a one-time expense, where we can keep the costumes yearlong, which will help us maintain the quality. In addition, we can always make a good deal on rent or lease with the real estate company, ensuring our long-term space. Finally, since every year we perform the same set of drama, we almost need to use a similar collection of costumes, and very seldom we change the character. Hence the storage option will be the best way to maximize the fund.

    On the other hand, spending money on the costume will only increase the expenses, unnecessarily all the old costumes need to be discarded. Moreover, after using the new ones, we will have to find out storage space too. Considering our drama pattern, we do not need to discard the old costumes if appropriately maintained.
    Although storage will initially cost us more, in the long term, it will help us out to save and spend for next year too. So, therefore, let us spend on storage.

    Thank you for giving me a chance to provide input on this issue.

  15. You want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Volunteer Abroad, which organizes such travel.
    Explain why you want to volunteer.
    – State your skills and experience.
    – Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
    Response:

    Dear Sir,
    My name is Soma Sarkar, would like to apply for a volunteer position in your esteemed organization, where I can offer my service to any developing country. To begin with, I had a very rough childhood and gone through a lot of adversities. Since my childhood, I am deeply passionate about helping needy people. My own experience taught me to become an empathetic and patient human being.

    I completed my graduation in Social Science with several other certifications. Since my early school days, I always volunteer for many community activities and fulfilled all required commitments. In high school, I was the monitor for our “Girl Child Education” project and successfully raised $ 20,000 on behalf of our school. In addition, I organized a fundraising project for the victims of the Fort McMurray wildfire. I am associated with Red Cross Canada and have been working with them for the last three years.

    I am available for four months incoming fall season and can be placed in any country as per your organization’s requirement.

    I will be sincerely honoured to have an opportunity to render my service.
    Regards,
    Soma

  16. You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by
    the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
    Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
    • Say what the problem is.
    • Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
    • Ask the provider to solve the problem.
    Response:
    Dear Sir,
    I am writing this letter to express my extreme dissatisfaction with the provided arranged accommodation.
    According to my understanding, you promised me to offer a quiet and respectable living arrangement; unfortunately, it is not close to that. As per our agreement, my room was supposed to have an attached bathroom; however, upon arrival, I was astonished this apartment consists of three rooms with just one shared bathroom. The entire living space is stinky, and the kitchen area is filthy and not cleaned for several days. People are disrespectful, no personal space at all, and too loud to each other. On top of that, almost every night, other housemates have their guests coming and partying, causing tremendous sleep disturbance.
    Even though I liked the present accommodation’s location, I immediately need you to change it considering the reasons mentioned above. So this time, please stick to the agreed arrangement; otherwise, arrange for the full refund.

    Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

  17. You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City
    Museum shop during the holidays.
    You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
    • introduce yourself
    • explain what experience and special skills you have
    • explain why you are interested in the job

    Response:
    Dear Sir,
    My name is Soma Sarkar, a final year student of Ancient History of McCarthy college, would like to apply for the temporary position at City Museum.
    I started working in our high school library from an early age, which helped me pursue my career in the right direction. Since my early childhood, I have had immense influence by the greatest historians of the world and their fabulous work. I finally found my calling, and in college, I became the youngest library associate for the history section by the Head of the Department. In addition, winning the best student award on the unique project of cataloging the books is one of my significant accomplishments. I am confident, hardworking, possess excellent communication skills, am good at time-bound tasks, fast learner, and a fantastic team player.
    I am optimistic that I will gain a plethora of knowledge for my future endeavours from your reputable organization.
    I will be sincerely honoured to have an opportunity to work in your esteemed organization.
    Best Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

        1. You’re very welcome. You should feel very confident about writing generally, it’s just that you need a few extras for the examiners.

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