CAEL Test Essay Sample – Short Writing

CAEL Writing Sample

The CAEL writing sample below should give you some ideas of what to do, and what not to do, as you respond to the short essay in part 5 of the CAEL test.

This is Sam’s response to the the short writing prompt in CAEL practice test 1:

Based on the reading passage, summarize in your own words the early modern period and its lasting influence

Sam’s Essay

The early modern period developed some concepts that are still applicable until now. These concepts were influenced by social and cultural  changes that took place in Europe during Middle Ages. People’s points of view became more based on science rather that a religious way of thinking.

Today’s philosophy were built on a lot of idebetable inquiries about politics, science and ethics in the past. Therefore, nowadays we can relay on the past terminologies but not necisraly believing in all those past writers’s concepts.

For example, one of the main ideas of the modern philosophy is Cartesian dualism. Although the older philosophers have tackled the dilemma, the 1st philosopher who clearly defined it was Rene Descartes which will definetly will impact the upcoming centuries.

Corrections:

As you read this CAEL writing sample, you probably noticed some errors. This is what we found:

Original

CAEL Short Writing

Looking at a CAEL Writing Sample against a Rubric

When examiners check your essay, they use a rubric like the one below. Using this same rubric can help you identify which areas of your writing you need to improve. For Sam, the rubric revealed weaknesses in his phrasing and grammar that affected the effectiveness of his response; however, his structure was excellent.

CAEL Short Writing Rubric for Sam

How we helped Sam achieve his score.

We started by cleaning up Sam’s punctuation by looking at the 3 different types of connections and the punctuation that goes with them.

Next, we looked at introducing some sentence variety to make Sam’s writing more interesting to read…and a lot more concise.

With that done, we reviewed Sam’s past tenses to make sure he didn’t lose any points by making simple errors like using ‘was’ when he should use ‘were’.

Before long, Sam was able to go to his test with lots of confidence. Knowing where he was making errors allowed him to be very focused during the five minutes of editing time that he left at the end.

Being able to narrow down your mistakes to something you can correct yourself can make all the difference between getting or missing your score. We can help you identify those things through our CAEL writing correction service, but if you need more help, please take some classes with an online CAEL tutor. We also offer several stand-alone classes for grammar, punctuation, and tenses.

Can I get a free CAEL Writing Evaluation?

When you finish your long or short writing task, send it to my CAEL writing correction service for feedback.

If you just want a score, you can paste your description for the short writing task into the comments section at the bottom of this page.

What do examiners look for?

When CAEL examiners correct your essays, they look for coherence & organization, vocabulary & language efficiency, cohesion & grammar, and punctuation & completeness – so that’s what the CAEL Essay correction service looks for too.

Your response should be complete! In other words, when you send your essay to my essay correction service, I shouldn’t need to look at the question to know what your essay is about; however, it’s worth including the writing prompt so that I can make sure that you’ve covered all the components.

What is Coherence & Organization?

Coherence is the way that your writing forms a clean, neatly wrapped package. It has a strong introduction, paragraphs with developed topic statements, and a conclusion.

Organization is the way you lead your reader through your ideas developing your statements with details and examples.

What is Cohesion & Grammar?

Cohesion is the way you use cohesive devices to glue your ideas together. It’s the way you show the relationship between your ideas. Obviously, there are many ways to do that, but the most common are problem areas are word order, reductions, conjunctions, etc.

Grammar includes your tenses, agreements, word order, conditionals, reductions, and article accuracy. These are all things that make your writing easy to read.

What is Vocabulary & Language Efficiency?

Vocabulary is the range of words, synonyms, phrases and collocations that you use to express yourself.

Language efficiency is the way you combine words to express yourself concisely.

What is Punctuation & Completeness?

As they complete their CAEL essay correction, examiners look at your punctuation and the completeness of what you’ve written.

Punctuation is the length of the pause you want your readers to take in order to maximize their understanding of your writing.

Completeness is the attention you give to each part of the question.

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