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CategoriesFactors
Content and Coherence:Number & Quality of ideas
Organization of ideas
Examples and supporting details
Vocabulary:Word choice
Appropriate words/phrases
Range of words/phrases
Precision and accuracy
Readability:Format and paragraphing
Connectors and transitions
Grammar & sentence structure
Spelling and punctuation
Task Fulfillment:Relevance & Completeness
Tone & Word count
IELTS Rubric: Writing Requirements

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What do examiners look for?

When IELTS examiners correct your essays, they look for coherence & organization, vocabulary & language efficiency, cohesion & grammar, and punctuation & completeness – so that’s what the IELTS Essay correction service looks for too.

Your response should be complete! In other words, when you send your essay to my essay correction service, I shouldn’t need to look at the question to know what your essay is about; however, it’s worth including the writing prompt so that I can make sure that you’ve covered all the components.

What is Coherence & Organization?

Coherence is the way that your writing forms a clean, neatly wrapped package. It has a strong introduction, paragraphs with developed topic statements, and a conclusion.

Organization is the way you lead your reader through your ideas developing your statements with details and examples.

What is Cohesion & Grammar?

Cohesion is the way you use cohesive devices to glue your ideas together. It’s the way you show the relationship between your ideas. Obviously, there are many ways to do that, but the most common are problem areas are word order, reductions, conjunctions, etc.

Grammar includes your tenses, agreements, word order, conditionals, reductions, and article accuracy. These are all things that make your writing easy to read.

What is Vocabulary & Language Efficiency?

Vocabulary is the range of words, synonyms, phrases and collocations that you use to express yourself.

Language efficiency is the way you combine words to express yourself concisely.

What is Punctuation & Completeness?

As they complete their IELTS essay correction, examiners look at your punctuation and the completeness of what you’ve written.

Punctuation is the length of the pause you want your readers to take in order to maximize their understanding of your writing.

Completeness is the attention you give to each part of the question.

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  1. Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    It is believed by some that in recent times many options are available so that people can pick any they like. I agree to some extent with this assertion. This essay will explore why this statement is true for some cases not for all.
    To begin with, due to the advancement of technology people have lots of choices in every field such as work, homes, schools , universities and of course the place where they live. Instead of staying in home country, people like to stay overseas to avail lots of opportunities and live their quality of life. Not only give lots of opportunities to avail but also give sense of satisfaction for their achievements too. People who migrate to other countries choose the options that suit them the best . For instance many multinational corporations offer lots of job opportunities, high salary packages and good benefits. So, obviously it’s an individual choice that they like can accept according to their interests and availability’s.
    Furthermore, considering the options of homes, there are variety of designs and styles that people can choose according to their budget and area where they live. In terms of schools and universities, an individual can decide to go to public schools, private schools or charter schools in which they can get best education. All schools have their own education system, study resources and qualified educator which provides not only the growth in academic areas but also overall development of a child.
    However, having lots of options still people have sone limitations to get all those. For instance, a family who is in low income category is not able to afford private schools annual fees including tution fees as well. Moreover getting admission in charter schools need to fulfill the requirements of psychological assessments which is also quite expensive. So in that case only public school is the option that might have left for them. Similarly, high ranking universities fees are also not affordable for all.
    To conclude, although lots of choices are available for the individuals, families and communities but it’s not possible for everyone to get all because of their family circumstances.

  2. In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do u think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

    It is becoming quite common to show insufficient respect to our elders all over the world in the present time we live in. Numerous reasons can be raised for such character; for example improper child-rearing and inadequate moral teaching at school are among the few. As a result, mental health of our elders will deteriorate and the harmony of relations between parents and son plus grand-parents and grand-children will be lost.

    Parents play a pivotal role when it comes to teaching children about a number of personality traits including respecting the elderly. This is because kids tend to look up to their mother and father as their role model and usually incline to copying parents’ actions assuming everything they do is right or acceptable. If a child sees his guardian disrespecting the elderly by insulting or not providing the adequate care then there is a high probability that the kid will forge it to the mind to be applied in the future. Hence, we can understand that improper parenting is one of the leading reasons to the decrement of level of respect.

    Children spend majority of their time at school where they will be exposed to both the compassion and rudeness of the world as it’s a place where many different backgrounds come together at. To be able to get past the rudeness like disrespecting others, one needs to be shaped by moral teachings. If there is no instrument or mechanism to gear such attitudes then the consequence will be severe.
    Making kids aware of what is right and wrong through moral teachings from an early age is monumental. Therefore investment should also be directed towards school curriculum.

    Being exposed to disrespect at an old age is mentally devastating as these age groups are vulnerable and look towards the young generation to take care of them. It will lead to feelings of uselessness and can further propagate to suicidal ideations. In addition, grand children will lose in touch with the immense knowledge, tradition and history they could have gathered from their grand-parents which will amount to a generation null of its past.

    In summary, even though it is everyone’s responsibility, the role mostly lies on parents and schools to advocate showing the utmost respect to our elders.

  3. Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

    It is stated by a school of thought that adolescents should participate in voluntary work in their spare time because it is advantageous for them and society. I agree that such activities can enhance teenagers’ social skills which are extremely helpful for their future; however, in my view, it should be optional and teenagers should not be forced to do non-paid work.

    On the one hand, adolescence is considered a formative period during which major moral developments occur, so experiences like volunteering may provide a sense of social responsibility as well as boost soft skills and self-confidence which are required for such development. For instance, when teenagers take part in voluntary programs such as community service, they can learn how to interact with other people from different walks of life with diverse characteristics which may help them to widen their social circle and strengthen their bonds with their fellow citizens that is beneficial for the community as well. Moreover, they understand what teamwork is, and how to share responsibilities in a team. Thus, doing voluntary activities have a positive impact on youngsters’ behavior.

    On the other hand, there are several reasons why voluntary programs should not be mandatory for all teenagers. For one, this can add pressure to students leading to mental and physical problems due to the fact that a number of adolescents are overloaded with their homework, and extra-curricular activities can become a burden on them and affect their health negatively. On the contrary, self-volunteering allows the youth to choose activities freely and according to their interests which results in a sense of joyfulness and satisfaction for younger ones. Furthermore, it can also benefit society because younger ones do such activities from their heart. So, they do their bests.

    In conclusion, although taking part in voluntary programs can have advantages for younger people, in my opinion, teenagers should be free to choose whether to do voluntary work or not.

    1. Score 7.5
      “…non-paid work” (unpaid work)
      run-on: “…fellow citizens that is beneficial…” (fellow citizens, and that is beneficial)
      no comma: “…what teamwork is, and how to share…” (what teamwork is and how to share)
      agreement: “…doing voluntary activities have…” (doing voluntary activities has) – gerunds are always singular because what you’re really saying is “the act of doing” – your verb agrees with ‘act’)
      adjective: “bests” (best) – adjectives can’t be plural

  4. The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    In light of the development of technology and the recent advances in nutritional science and the agriculture industry, new concerns have been raised in the case of food quality. Some people believe that these alterations are beneficial, whereas others argue that they have detrimental impacts on our health and environment. In my opinion, although such progress is advantageous in terms of improving farming methods and producing nutritious food, it has some probable drawbacks as well.

    First of all, our current methods of food production seem to be insufficient to meet the growing demand for food in the years ahead. There is no doubt that the recent technological and scientific advances can transform the entire food chain from production and processing to consumption as well as waste management. These improvements such as genetic engineering can help farmers to produce crops which are more resistant to pests, climate change, and can grow in less time. Moreover, these genetically modified crops can last longer and be more nutritious as a result of adding vitamins to them such as vitamin D. Thus, this development can be considered positive in the aforementioned aspects.

    On the other hand, the majority of individuals prefer to consume organic foods rather than those which are produced in laboratories. These new technologies may seem controversial to consumers due to the fact that their long-term impacts on the human body or the environment are still unknown. To explain, genetically modified crops may change the whole ecosystem and have harmful effects on the human body resulting in serious diseases such as cancers because chemicals are used in those processes. For example, to increase the shelf life of such foods, preservatives are used which have negative impacts on our health. Therefore, many people distrust such processed or modified foods.

    In conclusion, the recent advancements affect food production positively; however, in my view, clearer information is required to ensure people about the safety and health of such processed foods.

    1. Score 8.5 Lovely!
      parallel: “…more resistant to pests, climate change, and can grow in less time…” (more resistant to pests, climate change, and rotting) – it has to be something else that they’re resistant to.

  5. In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

    It is a common belief in numerous cultures that almost everything can be achieved by hard work and persistence. Although this message can boost willpower and confidence, it might have some detrimental impacts on mental well-being at the same time.

    The first and foremost benefit of sending this message to children stating that they will acquire whatever they want if they put effort into it is making children more motivated and encouraging them to be more hard-working in order to fulfill their dreams. This way, adults and parents can instill the value of effort and try hard in children in addition to increasing self-confidence and enhancing problem-solving skills due to the fact that those who believe working hard leads to reaching goals can be more successful in the future than those thinking success depends on a fixed level of intelligence or luck. Moreover, children can learn not to give up, practice more, and find alternatives to make their dreams come true. Thus, pushing youngsters to work towards their goals can be considered as the main advantage.

    On the other hand, this message may cause some mental problems such as depression or disappointment because putting too much pressure on children to work hard even beyond their capabilities can make them feel stressed or disappointed. To explain, children at younger ages do not have enough experience of what they should do, or what choice to make when they face difficulties or failures. For example, when children do not attain their goals despite doing their bests, it may affect their self-esteem negatively, or make them feel inadequate and doubt their abilities.

    In conclusion, encouraging children and pushing them forward to pursue their aims can be advantageous in terms of honing their decision-making skills and rising their confidence; however, losing confidence or being depressed can be mentioned as probable drawbacks.

    1. Score 8 – Loving those gerunds!
      missing commas: “…this message to children stating that they will acquire whatever they want if they put effort into it…” (this message to children, stating that they will acquire whatever they want if they put effort into it,)
      adjective: “…bests…” (best) Adjectives can’t be plural
      spelling: “…rising…” (raising)

  6. These days people pay more attention to artists (writers, painters and so on) and give less importance to science and technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    There is an argument which states that in today’s modern age, artists such as musicians, painters, actors, and so on grabbing much of people’s attention rather than scientific issues or technological advancements. Although artists have gained more popularity nowadays, in my view, individuals have become more aware of the significant role of science and technology in developing the world.

    To begin with, there are several reasons behind why art and artists have become more well-known compared to decades ago. For one, the majority of people find art more entertaining rather than science. For instance, due to hectic lifestyles and busy schedules, individuals tend to do something helping them get relaxed and wind down after work such as listening to music, watching a movie, or reading a book. Social media can be mentioned as another reason which plays a key role in increasing the popularity of artists, especially among the youth who follow their favorite celebrities’ pages on diverse platforms like Instagram and Facebook due to the fact that these artists are considered as role models by the youngsters.

    On the other hand, this century’s groundbreaking technological inventions such as smartphones, the internet, and computers have become more attractive than have been ever before. The role of such achievements in improving the quality of life cannot be ignored. To explain, mobile phones ease the way of life and help us to enjoy our lives through which we can take a photograph, send a message instead of writing letters, or order food online. The discovery of a smartphone, also, has changed how we keep in touch with others. Eventually, science and technology are extremely useful to people’s daily lives.

    In conclusion, both artists and scientists are also important for the development of the globe. Each of the fields brings advantages and special values for people.

    1. Score 6 Nice possessives and parallels, but it’s an opinion essay! Make sure you identify your two main ideas, ‘entertainment’ and ‘functionality’, in the introduction, and use an appropriate transition like ‘second’, for your second paragraph.

      simple present: “…grabbing…” (grab)
      duplicate comparison: “…art more entertaining rather than science…” (art more entertaining than science)
      noun + infinitive: “…do something helping them get relaxed…” (do something to help them relax)
      unnecessary verb: have become more attractive than have been ever before (have become more attractive than ever) or (have become increasingly attractive)
      word choice: “…Eventually, science and technology are extremely useful to people’s daily lives.” (Ultimately, science and technology are extremely useful to people’s daily lives.)

  7. Some people think that resources should be spent on protecting wild animals while others think those would be better used for the human population.
    Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    It is argued by a group of individuals that we should allocate resources to preserve wildlife, whereas there is another school of thought stating that using these resources for mankind should be given a priority. In my perspective, it seems possible to spend resources through a balanced approach in order to benefit animals and human beings because the Earth belongs to both of them.

    On the one hand, those claiming that it is a wiser choice to invest in human-related issues, stand out poverty and political instability in numerous parts of the world which require to be prioritized. For instance, in regions such as Africa or India, there are groups of people suffering from malnutrition or homelessness and are not able to meet their basic needs. Moreover, such developing countries usually have a poor economy which leads to limiting their budget so, they cannot manage all issues at the same time and have to choose based on priority. Consequently, solving such problems, which have a more vital role, is more crucial, at the first step.

    On the other hand, protecting wild animals and their habitat is one of human’s responsibilities due to the fact that they play a key role in ecological processes as well as the tourism industry. To explain, the extinction of each type of flora and fauna has a great impact on both the planet and human life. Take turtles as an example having a significant role in maintaining the health of coral reefs, seagrass beds, and other marine creatures. They indirectly affect the local people’s lives in several ways, as well. For one, wherever these rare species live, ecotourism increases which result in creating more job opportunities for local communities and boosting the economy. Therefore, it is worth putting money, time, and effort into wildlife conservation.

    In conclusion, to my mind, when endangered species benefit, people also benefit. Besides, work to save endangered wildlife helps eradicate poverty as well as promote sustainable development.

    1. Score 6.5 Nice one
      no article: “…given a priority.” (given priority) Phrase = give priority to something.
      Preposition: “…In my perspective…” (From my perspective)
      word choice/order: “… stand out poverty and political instability in numerous parts of the world which require to be prioritized…” (emphasize prioritizing the poverty and political instability in numerous parts of the world.)
      referent: “…homelessness and are not able to…” (homelessness who are not able to) “…Take turtles as an example having a significant role…” (Take turtles as an example that have a significant role)
      better:”…and have to choose based on priority…” (and have to prioritize them.)
      simple present “…which result…” (which results)
      gerund: “…work to save…” (working to save)

  8. Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

    In today’s modern age, technology is progressing far quicker than ever, so it is no secret that technology has significantly altered the world. There are several ways in which people’s interactions are revolutionized by technology. In my opinion, the impact of technology on individuals’ relationships comes as mixed baggage.

    Technological advancements have had great impacts on how people communicate. The first and foremost one is that thanks to the invention of the Internet, people are now able to talk to others without seeing them in person which is not only handy but also time-saving, especially in the business world due to the fact that speed and efficiency play a key role in businesses. Another positive aspect of technology is associated with making new friends through social media such as Instagram and Facebook. To explain, geographical distance has no meaning with the help of technology because individuals have this opportunity to connect with everyone they want whenever they want just through the Internet and their smartphones. Thus, video chats and social networking sites, for instance, make communication so easy and keep people in touch.

    On the other hand, technology has some drawbacks, as well. One of the detrimental effects of it is the lack of building relationships. In other words, these days, people are addicted to their phones that they do not know how to hold a normal conversation with someone. The majority of people spend their time scrolling websites and chatting with each other instead of having more face-to-face interactions. Teenagers, as an example, who are always hooked to social networking sites as opposed to their parents who are not interested in following such platforms as much as their children or even do not have enough time to do that, and this can lead to increasing the generations gap. Therefore, communication is missing this way.

    In conclusion, the development of technology has undoubtedly influenced our lives in almost every aspect and communication is no exception. Although this phenomenon has some negative impacts, logically thinking, the positive points of it cover up the negative points. To my mind, it all depends on how we use these means.

    1. Score 7.5. Super
      Missing conjunction ‘so … that’: “…people are addicted to their phones that they do not know how to hold a normal conversation with someone.” (people are so addicted to their phones that they do not know how to hold a normal conversation with someone)
      Alternative paragraph 2 example: (As an example, teenagers, hooked on social networking sites, may find they have even less to talk about with their parents who have neither the time nor interest in such platforms. The resulting generation gap can be a bitter pill to swallow.)
      missing comma: “…every aspect and communication…” (every aspect, and communication)
      phrase: “…the positive points of it cover up the negative points.” (the positive points make up for the negative points.)

  9. Governments should support care vs finance for retired people. While they should save money when they get older. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

    In this contemporary epoch, in light of the recent change in the public’s attitude towards citizens’ rights, new concerns have been raised in the case of whether governments are responsible to provide financial support and health services to elders, or each individual has to be financially prepared for his retirement himself. There is no doubt that individuals have a responsibility to set aside money for their future, although I firmly believe that elderly people should be supported by the state.

    On the one hand, providing adequate health services and sponsorships to improve older people’s lives is the most important government obligation. To explain, aged citizens, worked during their youth and regularly paid taxes for their income which was used for different purposes to promote society. Therefore, when they are retired, it’s the authorities’ turn to take care of their citizens and appreciate their efforts by supporting them through allocating monthly stipends or providing health care facilities as an example.

    On the other hand, there is another school of thought stating it is each person’s duty to save a sufficient amount of money for his future because they have had enough time to do this during the period when they were working. Furthermore, it is far more crucial to spend these budgets on other issues such as developing infrastructure, building schools and hospitals, or investing in industries to boost the economy rather than caring for old people. Thus, individuals should be responsible for financing their retirement.

    In conclusion, it seems to me that everyone should be forward-thinking and manage his or her future plans in order not to face unforeseen difficulties. However, this does not mean ignoring the responsibilities of governments to their citizens such as funding and providing efficient treatment systems.

    1. Score 7.5
      preposition + gerund “…responsible to provide…” (responsible for providing)
      no comma “…aged citizens, worked during ..” (aged citizens worked during)

  10. In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people.
    why might this be the case?
    do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

    Owning a home stems from human nature. So, in a number of countries, people prefer to purchase a house instead of renting it. Several reasons are behind making this decision including investment, a sense of freedom, and comfort; however, I believe that there is no one-size-fits-all approach to this issue because depending on each individual’s lifestyle and circumstances, it differs and can be both advantageous or disadvantageous.

    To begin with, several factors are associated with buying a house. For one, the majority of people, especially those living in developing countries, consider it as a form of investment for their future due to the fact that over time, it rises in value. Consequently, it would be a wise choice to spend money to buy a house. The feeling of belonging to a particular home can be mentioned as another notable reason. In other words, when one owns a house, he can make any alterations he wants and decorates or renovates his house freely, according to his desires and preferences, needless of a landlord’s permission. Therefore, these options make an individual feel more comfortable, satisfied, and free.

    On the other hand, purchasing a house may have negative impacts in terms of putting a burden on people having low income which causes them to get large loans to buy a house, and if they cannot repay it, they would struggle with both financial and mental issues. For instance, those individuals have to work more to pay their installments, and this may take a long time. Eventually, they are not able to enjoy their life and even the house they have bought. Nevertheless, if a person lives in a country with a strong economy in which stable jobs with proper incomes and suitable loans are offered by the governments, citizens can easily afford to buy a house. Thus, the economic conditions of a nation and individual’s situations play a significant role in considering this choice negatively or positively.

    In conclusion, factors such as investing money or a sense of belonging are involved in choosing to buy a house. To my mind, whether it is positive or negative depends on each person’s situation and the place where he lives.

    1. Score 7
      One way of avoiding all those mixed pronouns: “In other words, when one owns a house, he can make any alterations he wants and decorates or renovates his house freely, according to his desires and preferences, needless of a landlord’s permission. Therefore, these options make an individual feel more comfortable, satisfied, and free.” (In other words, with home-ownership comes the freedom to alter, re-decorate, and renovate as desires and preferences evolve, and those unfettered decisions leave individuals feeling more comfortable, satisfied, and free.)
      Conditional / referent: “…and if they cannot repay it, they would struggle with both financial and mental issues…” (and if they cannot repay them, they may struggle with both financial and mental issues)

  11. There is a school of thought that states it is impossible to help all the needy people around the world and we should focus on solving problems associated with our own nations. I totally disagree with this statement because as humans, we are responsible for each other and we need each other’s help to live on the earth.

    First of all, some groups argue that each country’s resources are limited which makes it quite hard to help both their citizens and other countries’ people. Financial aid, for example, may seem quite difficult for those living in developing countries because they themselves struggle with numerous issues which stem from unfavorable economic conditions. However, in my view, assistance is not just in the form of money. Take a teacher for instance, who can volunteer to teach in under-developed countries. Thus, there are various forms of helping other nations, ranging from donating money to other forms of services.

    Secondly, I believe that we are all part of a global village. As a result, to live and survive on the earth, we are dependent on each other. Moreover, a country’s activities, in different fields such as industries and the healthcare system, can have great impacts on other nations. To cite an example, during the recent pandemic, scientists from all over the globe put effort into finding a cure for Coronavirus. Eventually, it would have been unimaginable to produce a vaccine, in less than a year, if they had not assisted each other. Therefore, to enjoy a better life and preserve our environment, we are in need of each other.

    In conclusion, to my mind, giving help to anybody who needs it is considered as human nature and there are various types of providing aid for others. Besides, we have a responsibility to promote not only our community but also other countries due to the fact that we live on one planet and our activities have long-term effects on both ourselves and others.

    1. I am sorry. This is a question.
      We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    2. Score 7. Super possessives!
      appositive: “…because as humans, we are responsible…” (because, as humans, we are responsible)
      comma – coordinating conjunction with subject “… each other and we need each…” (each other, and we need each)
      incoherent connection: “…Eventually, it would have been unimaginable to produce a vaccine, in less than a year, if they had not assisted each other.” (Had they not assisted each other, producing a vaccine, in less than a year, would have been unimaginable)
      word choice: “…there are various types of providing aid for…” (there are various ways of providing aid to)

  12. Q:Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone.
    https://ieltsonlinetests.com/wot/result/writing-practice-test-1-631968

    It is agreed that the main purpose of team activities is debatable. The question is group activities an impactful factor in gaining skills for our life? In this essay, I am going to discuss my views and give supportive examples.

    I strongly agree with the idea of team activities for several reasons. Firstly, a lot of traits can be gained when you are working within a team. To illustrate, in teamwork, you will deal with many personalities and see other’s points of view and how they are dealing or working in this activity. So in this way, you will learn and take from them new skills for your life such as leading skills. Secondly, the most important thing that considers as a strong point of being in a group is communication and social skills. In group activities, you will get a chance to contact many people at all levels and through talking and discussion with them about everything and eventually, you will have many relationships and you will be socially active. Thirdly, team activities will give you a chance to shearing experience and ideas because each person has their own experience that the other person will get benefits from it.

    However, I disagree about doing activities by yourself without sharing with anyone else due to the sense of isolation. And nothing can earn from doing things alone.

    To conclude, Teamwork is one of the important things that could result in a great person who can deal with every experience he will live in the future.

  13. Many languages today are dying out due to the rise of languages like English. Is this a positive or negative development?

    In today’s modern age, in light of globalization, languages such as English have become more common as a worldwide language. As a result, a number of local languages are in danger of disappearing. Although this may have some advantages in some aspects, I believe that it has more negative impacts on our identity and cultural diversity.

    On the one hand, there is no doubt that English plays a key role as an effective communication tool, these days. The first and foremost reason why the majority of people tend to learn how to speak languages such as English, Spanish, or Arabic is to interact with more people around the world to develop their businesses. Furthermore, to pursue higher education abroad individuals need to learn a foreign language such as English due to the fact that a number of courses are taught in English at an array of top universities around the world. Thus, learning such universal languages is considered a necessity in this contemporary era.

    On the other hand, this trend has some drawbacks as well which, in my eye, outweigh its benefits. Firstly, local languages are a part of each nation’s identity so the most detrimental effect is associated with vanishing their traditions and cultures. To explain, each nation has its own folk music, poems, and literature through which they can express their deep thoughts and feelings. If they lose their local language, they would lose an important part of their cultural identity. Moreover, what makes this world more interesting and distinguishes countries from each other is cultural diversity. Without this feature, almost all regions would be the same and the world would become monotonous. Therefore, the significant role of local languages in preserving each nation’s values cannot be ignored.

    In conclusion, English as a universal language can ease interactions between nations and has positive effects in terms of boosting economies and providing up-to-date facilities for promoting education and careers. However, this development should not be formed at the expense of the disappearance of local languages; otherwise, its destructive effects on the culture and identity of each region cannot be compensated.

    1. Awesome! Score 8
      missing comma: “…education abroad individuals need…” (education abroad, individuals need) to =in order to = subordinating conjunction
      “…identity so the most detrimental…” (identity: so, the most detrimental) so = coordinating conjunction
      “… be the same and the world would…” (be the same, and the world would)

  14. Q: Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
    Do you agree or disagree?
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    There is no denying the fact that the main cause of obesity in children is debatable. The question is the government has a vital role in the rising obesity rate in children? In this essay, I will discuss my views about this problem.

    It’s agreed that the government has a huge role in decreasing the obesity rate, especially for kids for many reasons. Firstly, the government has the authority to establish new policies and implement them. To illustrate, they can forbid the family to buy fast food for their children or they could force schools to add an extra exercise class twice a week, and hence the rate of obesity will be dropped.

    In contrast with the previous idea, Some people think that the government has nothing to do about this issue and the main reason behind that is family.
    Due to the Family has the curial role on the rise in obesity in children. For example, parents can monitor their kids and their meals during the day. In addition, they can initiate a detailed plan to help and encourage them to lose weight. Also, mothers can cook healthy food and funnily presented it to the child so they can like what they are eating.

    To conclude, despite the government having a role in the rating of obesity, I believe that the family has the biggest impact on obesity in children. To solve this issue, we need to increase the awareness of families and explain the effects of obesity.

  15. Q: Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want.What is your opinion about this?
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    There is no denying the fact that the main need of retirement at older age is debatable. The qusetion are, should older adults be allowed to continue working for as long as they want? In this essay, I am going to discuss my veiw.

    I strongly disagree with this statement. The main reason given support this clime that the umeployment rate will increase. To illustrate, resently, many fresh graduate can not find a job becuase combanies have the most experinced and senior worker who has the knowledge and skill and they spent more than 30 years working for this combany. As a result, the community will not be able to utilize the energy of these young people. Moreover if combanies will work with same employer for long periode, the productivity of the combany will decreased. For examble aging has a huge impact on the older adult in many side and the most side that affect the combanies’s productivity is mental processe. On the other hand, in the meeting time older people can not be fouces and pay attinsion to all details that metion in the meeting deu to aging process. A recent reseach report that mental process will degenrate within years for old people.

    In coclusion, l strongly disagree with the idea becase this is will not be fair for youg adult people and eventualy they will loss thier chance in work enviroment.However, I wouldn’t mind to get benifets from the talented older people and allowe them to continue working for as long as they want.

  16. Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believes that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    What is the best way to get a good job is always a matter of debate among people. One group argues that to have a successful career, students should pursue higher education, whereas there is another school of thought that states it is a better idea to apply for a job right after finishing school. To my mind, there is no one-size-fits-approach to this issue because it depends on each individual’s demands and goals in his or her life.

    On the one hand, attending university is considered an essential requirement for those who would like to get high-ranking jobs at international companies, universities, or research institutions. To cite an example, if one wants to be a university professor, there is no way except to be educated to the university level. Moreover, in some fields, having a university degree can enable a person to earn a higher salary. Take lawyers or doctors, for instance, who have high incomes right from the start at the law office or hospital. Thus, academic experience plays a key role in achieving superior positions at the higher professional level.

    On the other hand, there are an array of occupations in which the first and foremost capability is practical skills, not an academic degree. For example, to become a skilled mechanic, one needs some years of hands-on industry experience due to the fact that he can gain real-world experience in this field by repairing several cars in a real workplace rather than just studying related textbooks. Therefore, it seems a wiser choice to get a job right after school and save time for those who tend to involve in such careers.

    In conclusion, in my opinion, both these paths can lead to a successful career in the future. However, it depends on each individual’s aim and desire in his or her life to choose whether to land a job when finishing school or apply for a college and continuing education.

    1. Score – almost 7
      question/statement: “What is the best way to get a good job is always a matter of debate among people.” (What the best way to get a good job is is always a matter of debate among people.) – the first ‘is’ is part of your statement. This statement becomes the subject of the sentence. The second ‘is’ is the verb for the remainder of the sentence.
      phrase: “…no one-size-fits-approach…” (no one-size-fits-all approach)
      singular agreement: “…there are an array…” (there is an array) – because ‘array’ is singular
      subject agreement: “…due to the fact that he can gain real-world experience in this field by repairing several cars in a real workplace rather than just studying related textbooks…” (due to the fact that gaining real-world experience in this field, by repairing several cars in a real workplace, does a better job of preparing the individual than just studying related textbooks)
      adjective: “…to involve in…” (to get involved in)

  17. In some areas of US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.
    What is your opinion about this?

    Ans:
    The few parts of the United States have restricted the free movement of youth in late nights unless they are with the grown-up person. This essay would discuss the advantage and disadvantages of this curfew and my opinion how this is beneficial for the betterment of society.

    To begin with, teenage is rebellious age. They often make mistakes that cannot be amended in the later stage of their life. For instance, drink and driving, according to the statistics of the US 70 percent of the accidental case are of teenagers, who drive after taking a drink in their late-night gatherings. Hence, this is an efficient way to prevent accident cases. In addition, the younger person in social gatherings pressure and environment begin doing illegal activities such as, consuming drugs, night car racing, and harassing the other people. Therefore, this would be going to be a great initiative taken by the authority.

    Although the curfew has brought few benefits to the nation, its disadvantages also cannot be ignored. Nowadays, younger ones do not like it if anyone imposed restrictions on them. They would start making protests even against the government for making such rules, resulting in, the harmony in the country would be affected. Moreover, this kind of making objection would also affect the financial and political parameters of the country. Secondly, their movement to outside trips are start depending on the availability of their adults. Consequently, in case of emergencies like robbery, medical treatment, they would not be able to do anything for themselves or other persons.

    In conclusion, in my opinion, the government’s decision on imposing a curfew on teenagers’ late-night outdoor activities is good for the nation. This small movement would help the country in declining the crime rates in the younger generation.

  18. In future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. Do you agree or disagree?

    It has been frequently stated that paper books and newspapers will disappear in the near future as people can access data they want online without charge. I partially disagree with this statement because not all online resources are free of charge. Apart from that, printed books have their own place among particular groups of individuals.

    First of all, thanks to recent advancements in technology and the internet, nowadays, endless sources of information are accessible to the majority of people around the world. In other words, almost everybody is able to follow the news or search about the content he would like just by a few clicks on a wide variety of devices such as smartphones, tablets, or computers which makes it far more convenient and easier for the audience. However, such information is not always available for free. For instance, to access the authoritative articles of some popular newspapers and magazines, the audience should pay a membership fee. Thus, despite easy accessibility, a great number of online resources are not free of cost.

    On the other hand, a number of individuals such as seniors prefer to buy a physical book or newspaper rather than scrolling on the screen due to the fact that they find it difficult to adapt to up-to-date applications or learn how to work with computers. Meanwhile, for some other groups, regardless of age, the feel of a paper book, its smell, and its beautifully designed cover are considered integral parts of the enjoyment of reading. As a result, these features make a book an object of desire which encourages them to purchase it and have it on their shelves.

    In conclusion, although, in this contemporary epoch, e-books and digital publications have become more common because of easier availability, people cannot read anything they want online for free. Furthermore, leafing through a printed book provides more joy for a number of people than reading an online catalogue. Some aged groups also find working with computers and online websites more complicated.

    1. Score 7.5 – Excellent!
      useful expression: …free of cost… (free of charge)
      referrent: …a book an object of desire which encourages them to purchase… (a book an object of desire which encourages readers to purchase) – using the referent ‘them’ means that the books do the purchasing because ‘books’ is your closest subject.
      better alternative: …aged groups… (seniors)

  19. In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.
    Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

    These days, emphasizing stuff that differs from others in various methods is becoming more and more frequent by companies. There are several reasons behind this pattern and I firmly believe that it is a negative advancement.

    To begin with, highlighting special products is mainly to attract more customers. This is simply because people tend to be attracted by new products, rather than the old ones which they have fully understood. By advertising the new stuff, businesses could gain more attraction from the public, increasing sales figures for the short term. For instance, a fashion-conscious person has a desire to purchase new clothes-labeled instead of concerning past clothing trends. Thus, concentrating on introducing new distinctive stuff to others mostly to fulfill the buyers’ curiosity.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that this marketing strategy may be a negative development. The main reason is that aggravating the different features of the products could be a double-sword edge. Because of the public concern at that time, it is more likely for the products to be criticized if they are not well-developed enough. BPhone, a Vietnamese mobile phone brand, for example, provoked controversy after releasing bad quality smartphones, which they called the best ones on the Earth. This has resulted in deteriorating companies’ image toward other people. Therefore, emphasizing new products without carefully contemplating them could have numerous negative influences.

    In conclusion, attracting buyers to buy the new feature products is the main reason causing advertisements by companies. In this regard, it seems to me that it is a negative development.

    1. Score 6.5
      expression: …double-sword edge… (double-edged sword)
      Watch your conditionals. You need to use the zero conditional (present condition + present result) when talking about a fact or something that doesn’t change with time.

  20. Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    These days, it is sometimes argued that animal extinction would be the main environmental issue that occurs. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I firmly believe that pollution would be the most dangerous one.

    On the one hand, one may argue that losing species could have several negative consequences. The main one is that, without the appearance of some animals, the fauna and flora could suffer from diseases and become vulnerable. In China, for instance, the country’s government encouraged their citizens to hunt and kill the sparrow during the 1970s to increase the productivity of their crops. The plants, however, rely on that fauna to stay healthy and avoid being eaten by their natural predators. As a result, this hunting privacy led to crops failure and is the main factor contributing to the largest famine in the world, killing millions of ordinary people. Thus, humans would encounter detrimental impacts if we cannot protect other species.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that pollution could take a toll on many life’s aspects. This is simply because this threat could be seen in the short-term and long-term. Air pollution, for example, is mainly caused by toxic fumes released by vehicles and industrial processes. The contaminated gases deteriorate the air quality, as well as contribute to extending the Ozone zones, leading to more skin illness in the future, especially cancer. Additionally, soil contamination also decreases the space suitable for growing crops and planting trees. Subsequently, this plays a vital role in triggering famine and other consequences. Thus, I am convinced that pollution must be the most dangerous environmental issue.

    In conclusion, while the deterioration of animals’ quantity is serious, I believe that pollution would be the main threat from natural problems.

    1. Nice! Score 6.5
      word choice: …this hunting privacy led… (this hunting policy led), …crops failure… (crop failures)
      Watch your conditionals. You need to use the zero conditional (present condition + present result) when talking about a fact or something that doesn’t change with time.

  21. Q: task1 , The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.
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    This information provided in the double lines chart depicts the diffrences between global food and oil priceses in this periode. It is clear from the chart that food and oil priceses taking similar behavior ragarding the lines.

    According to what is shown,the food prices started with 90 points In 2000. Then the line palpitate between years of 2001-2004. After that, the prices gradually increased till reached 140 points in 2007. In 2008, the line dramatically icreased up to 220 points. The most prices that the food reach was 240 pointsin 2011.

    The oil line started with the same price of food which is 30$ in 2000 then the line slightly up lift till 120 $ in 2005. After that the line sharply increased in 2008 put the next year it is dropped till reach 50.

    To sum up, we could say that the food prices is much more than oil prices.

  22. Intelligence is the most important quality of the leader. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Intelligence is considered as the most vital feature for being a perfect leader by a school of thought; however, I believe that there are other essential factors involved in leadership such as interpersonal skills and decision-making power, although the key role of intelligence cannot be ignored in this regard.

    There is no doubt that intelligence is one of the required qualities to be a good leader because with the help of it, one can grow quickly in his field of work or study compared to others. For example, a smart student possesses this potential to become a head and helps other students in doing their homework due to when his teacher teaches a lesson for the first time, he completely understands it while others may need to repeat or practice more to fully understand that lesson. Thus, a clever person may have the ability to become a leader.

    Other aspects are also associated with what makes an individual a top leader. The first and foremost one is social skills such as how to communicate with others well. To cite an example, if a manager has the knowledge of interacting methods, she can create a more positive atmosphere in her workplace which allows employees to talk to her openly and raise their concerns. Eventually, such problems can be tackled in a more effective way. Making the right decision at a right time is another notable factor. To explain, when a leader is aware of the consequences of his decisions on his employees or followers, he tries to make more conscious choices and avoid hasty decisions. President Angela Merkel, for instance, succeeds to decrease the unemployment rate near zero in Germany by implementing proper policies and making the right decisions. As a result, Germany now places first in terms of economy in Europe.

    In conclusion, to be a successful leader, in my view, an array of skills is needed including communicating skills and how to decide wisely in each circumstance. Cleverness is important but it is just one of the necessities in this regard.

    1. Score 6.5 Great sentence variety!
      double action: …is considered as the most… (is considered to be the most)
      inconsistent subject: …one can grow quickly in his field of work or study compared to others. (one can grow quickly in one’s field of work or study compared to others.
      conjunction: …their homework due to when his teacher… (their homework since, when his teacher)
      comma: … understands it while others may… (understands it, while others may) you need a comma when ‘while’ means ‘whereas’.
      tense: …succeeds to decrease the unemployment rate… (succeeded in decreasing the unemployment rate)
      noun: …communicating skills… (communication skills)
      parallel: …including communicating skills and how to decide wisely in each circumstance… (including strong communication skills and wise decision-making capabilities tailored to each circumstance)

  23. Should government make a decision about people’s lifestyle or should people make their own decisions?

    Nowadays, in light of a recent change in public’s attitudes towards people’s lifestyles, it is argued by some groups that governments should decide how their people should live their lives, while there is another school of thought which considers that everyone has the right to make choices for his or her life. I believe that every single person should make life-related decisions himself; however, the significant role of the government in improving their citizens’ lives cannot be ignored.

    To begin with, individuals with diverse backgrounds possess different values, needs, and habits which shape their way of life. Thus, it seems neither possible nor wise for authorities to make decisions for an array of people with various preferences because this is a personal choice, differing from one person to another. For instance, if one chooses to have a sedentary lifestyle, smoke, and eat too much junk food, no matter how much the government passes laws or imposes fines. It cannot be very effective due to the fact that such choices are gradually formed over time and as a result of several factors such as economic, social, and cultural conditions.

    Although it may be impossible for governments to dictate how people should live, they play an important role in shifting their citizens’ interests in a way that leads them to have better choices affecting their lives more positively. To explain, by providing required facilities and proper policies, governments can ensure a healthier and far better lifestyle for their people. For instance, by educating and raising children’s awareness, from an early age, about the dangers of smoking or unhealthy diets and introducing better alternatives not only can governments change people’s attitudes to a great extent but also indirectly form individuals’ habits in a positive way without any interference.

    In conclusion, in my view, the choice of lifestyle is up to each person. Nevertheless, governments’ policies undoubtedly have a great impact on how people live, but governors can act wisely to lead their citizens to make better choices.

    1. Lovely Score 7
      incomplete conditional: For instance, if one chooses to have a sedentary lifestyle, smoke, and eat too much junk food, no matter how much the government passes laws or imposes fines. (For instance, if a person chooses a sedentary lifestyle of smoking and over-eating, the government’s laws and fines are unlikely to be effective because those choices are gradually formed over time and under the persistent pressure of economic, social, and cultural conditions.)
      missing commas – interruption: For instance, by educating and raising children’s awareness, from an early age, about the dangers of smoking or unhealthy diets, and introducing better alternatives, not only can governments change people’s attitudes to a great extent, but also indirectly form individuals’ habits in a positive way without any interference.

  24. In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

    Nowadays, in light of the fast-growing trend in industrialization around the world, new concerns have been raised about whether relocating these industries to more remote areas and suburbs is more beneficial or more harmful. Although there are some drawbacks associated with environmental degradation, this transfer is more beneficial and the disadvantages can be reduced by taking some measures.

    The first and foremost advantage of moving industries to rural areas is the reduction of pollution caused by industries due to the fact that industrial plants produce noxious emissions which threaten the health of city dwellers. Creating more job opportunities in regional areas can be mentioned as another benefit. To explain, setting up factories in rural areas not only does prevent migration of local people to cities to seek a job but it offers an affordable option for businesses because the land needed to develop industries in these areas is more and cheaper rather than in cities. Thus, locating industries far from cities seems logical.

    There are also some disadvantages in this regard. The most detrimental impact is that to provide proper infrastructure for constructing factories and developing transportation systems, more trees should be cut down. Moreover, factories can pollute air and water in those areas. These problems can be addressed by implementing stricter laws for industries which leads to declining such negative effects. For example, factories must have proper waste management and purify their sewage to cause the least damage to the natural environment.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the abovementioned merits and demerits, relocating businesses to the countryside can be more advantageous in terms of boosting local economies and reducing pollution in cities.

    1. Score 6.5
      referent: …whether relocating these industries… (whether relocating industries) In order to use a referent, what you’re referring to has to stated.
      inversion: …not only does prevent migration of local people to cities to seek a job but it offers an… (not only prevents the migration of local people to cities to seek a job, but also offers) The act of setting up factories does two things, so you don’t need a second subject, but you do need the ‘also’.
      missing adjective: … is more and cheaper… (more plentiful and cheaper)
      parallel: …proper waste management and purify their sewage…(proper waste management and sewage treatment facilities)

  25. Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym/health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Nowadays, new approaches have been introduced in the case of how to keep our body fit. Some groups believe that joining a gym or sports club is essential to stay in shape, while there is another argument that daily activities such as jogging are sufficient. In my opinion, both views can be applied depending on each person’s goals and circumstances including age or profession.

    There is no doubt that gym membership possesses several advantages. For one, an individual can benefit from experienced trainers, nutritional experts, and up-to-date equipment under one roof which makes exercising more convenient and easier. For instance, the majority of people, these days because of their hectic lifestyles rarely find time to exercise themselves. Thus, going to the gym may give them the discipline to start workouts. Apart from that, regular exercise in the gym is considered as a necessity for a group such as professional athletes due to the fact that to achieve their aims including participating in international leagues or the Olympic, they have to stick to their vigorous exercise in addition to a strict diet under the supervision of a top coach.

    On the other hand, if a person only wants to be in a good shape, stay healthy, or get rid of excess body fat, he or she can meet this goal by some day-to-day activities which are an integral part of his or her life such as going for a walk in the park, cycling, or using stairs instead of lifts at work. Furthermore, a number of elderlies suffer from numerous diseases or disabilities which makes it difficult for them to join a sports club. Therefore, they can do gentle exercise in their home to preserve their physical health.

    In conclusion, to join a gym is not necessary for everyone. Individuals, in my eye, can choose between these two options according to their own priorities and targets.

    1. Score 7. Lovely. Watch your punctuation. Interruptions that add information to a sentence need commas front and back!
      1) For instance, the majority of people these days, because of their hectic lifestyles, rarely find time to exercise themselves.
      2) … aims, including participating in international leagues or the Olympics, they

      A useful expression for this types of essay is: one-size-fits-all – ‘There is no one-size-fits-solution/approach to this situation/problem/issue’

  26. Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays all over the world, people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits, TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

    Nowadays, in light of the fast-growing trend in globalization, more countries around the world have become broadly similar in characteristics such as people’s lifestyles, eating habits, and recreational habits. Although globalization has an array of merits which leads to improving life’s quality, in my view, it needs to be controlled. Otherwise, its negative impacts will increase.

    To commence with, globalization is undoubtedly both an unstoppable trend and the need of today’s modern age which has several benefits. For one, it decreases the gap between developed countries and developing nations by providing more equal opportunities. Thanks to the advancement in technology and the internet, these days, the majority of students around the globe have free access to up-to-date resources, superior facilities, and tutors which result in increasing both the awareness of people in each society and countries improvement. Booming industries can be considered as another advantage because with the help of rich countries including investing in the third world’s industries, providing upgrade facilities, or sharing knowledge and experts, not only is the economy of both countries expanding, but this is also beneficial to poorer countries in terms of the availability of more job opportunities as well as high-quality goods.

    However, there are some detrimental effects as well, such as the disappearance of different cultures, customs, and languages. Take the youth as an example, who are far more influenced by social media and tend to follow the latest fashion or speak an international language to communicate with more people which may lead to undermining local cuisines or speaking in local dialects as there are fewer tendencies in such sectors. Thus, countries lose an important part of their identity which makes them distinguished from other countries.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the advantages and drawbacks, I believe that this growing trend can be extremely helpful provided that it adapts itself to the specific characteristics of each region like linguistic and cultural issues. Its disadvantages, this way, will be significantly reduced.

    1. Score 6.5
      parallel: “…people’s lifestyles, eating habits, and recreational habits” (people’s lifestyles, eating habits, and recreational activities/interests)
      parallel: “…up-to-date resources, superior facilities, and tutors…” (up-to-date resources, superior facilities, and experienced tutors)
      simple present: “…free access … which result…” (…free access … which results…)
      semi colon: “… of rich countries including investing…” (of rich countries; including investing)
      simple present: “…not only is the economy of both countries expanding…” ( not only does the economy of both countries expand)
      efficiency: “…which makes them distinguished from other countries…” (which distinguishes them from other countries)
      second conditional – suggestion (In conclusion, having weighed up the advantages and drawbacks, I believe that this growing trend could be extremely helpful provided that it adapts itself to the specific characteristics of each region like linguistic and cultural issues. Its disadvantages, this way, would be significantly reduced.

  27. In the last century, the first man to walk on the moon said it was “a giant leap for mankind”. However, some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Moon landing for the first time, undoubtedly, has been mentioned as one of the most groundbreaking space explorations which, from my perspective, has revolutionized our lives in more ways than one such as developing everyday products or preserving our planet; however, it is argued by some others that its influence on our daily lives is not noteworthy.

    First of all, space explorations play a key role in protecting our environment. To explain, with the help of information provided by satellites we can be aware of how the earth is changing or make climate projections. This leads to not only developing innovative solutions to mitigate or better adapt to the detrimental effects of climate change but also helping us predict natural disasters such as floods and hurricanes. Another advantage associated with protecting wild animals and their habitats due to the fact that by data derived from satellites we are able to monitor the earth’s ecosystems and promote the preservation of natural resources.

    Secondly, recent advancements in space technology have improved our day-to-day lives. To cite an example, telecommunications is one of the most popular uses of satellites which is made possible through televisions, smartphones, and the internet for almost all humans to connect with each other from different parts of the world. Furthermore, as a result of spacecraft studies and experiments, scientists have developed technologies that have a great impact on our daily lives such as the use of robotic technologies or materials used in spacecraft that are now used in aircraft structures.

    In conclusion, although, from some group’s views, investing in such space programs may seem money-wasting at the first glance, I believe that space exploration was an inspiring achievement and its vital role in uplifting human life cannot be ignored.

    1. Score 7
      “Moon landing for the first time” – (‘The first moon landing…’ would be better)
      missing comma:”…by satellites we…” (by satellites, we)
      missing comma:”…climate change but also…” (…climate change, but also…)
      missing comma: “…inspiring achievement and its vital role in…” (inspiring achievement, and its vital role in …)
      parallel: “This leads … but also helping…” (This leads … but also helps…)
      inappropriate conjunction: “…their habitats due to the fact that…” (…their habitats is that data derived from satellites enables us to monitor the earth’s ecosystems and promote the preservation of natural resources.)
      plural possessive: “…some group’s views” (some groups’ views)

  28. Q:
    To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    A:
    There is no doubt that these days eating insects becoming one of the popular type of food in some countries. The question is eating insects as food are considerd a healthy or unhealthy habit? I am going to mention the advantages and disadvantages of eating edible insects that includes a couple of examples.

    In terms of benefits, eating insect could have some benefits. The main reason to support this claim is some of the poor populations do not have any food al all, or they may suffer with the shortage of healthy or regular food. Therefore, they need to eat anything in front of them to stay alive, so eating insects considered something beneficial to them. Moreover, recent studies shows that some insects could have organic materials and vitamins that would be healthy for humans.

    On the other hand, eating insects may have a dark site. The critical reason to support this statement is that insects usually living in dirty environments, so eating them as food could bring a lot of infectious diseases to humans. For the unwealthy population, they could face another problem that need to be treated in hospitals which could not fond easily. In other words, eating insects may lead to a huge impact to our health and lives.

    In conclusion, we could say that eating insects have a positive and negative sides. Countries should make spiecial regulation of using insects as food. Also, we need to make sure that the insects and edible and cooked well in high tempereture.

  29. Q:
    The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place.
    https://ieltsonlinetests.com/sites/default/files/2021-12/269704450_907912243230665_4756790605758235412_n_0.jpg

    A:
    This map below depicts the percentage of a couple of countries that their willingness to eat insect products are high. It is clear from the map that there are 5 countries (showed in yollow boxes) that have a high proportion of acceptence to eat food made by insect, and they are ( Mexico, PERU, Brazil, China, and Thailand )

    According to what is shown, Mexico has a high proportion indecate their willingness to digest insect based products with (71 per cent). PERU comes secondly with ( 58 per cent ), then Thailand with ( 56 per cent). In addition, the last two countries that have less percentage of acceptence to eat food made by insect are Brazil ( 45 % ) and China (44 % ).

    To sum up, we could say that Mexico considered the highest proportion of acceptence to eat food made by insect, and China is the lowest one among them.

    1. Score 6. Make sure you focus on 2 trends:
      Paragraph 1 – the countries with the highest percentage of insect eaters are … + details
      Paragraph 2 – the countries with the lowest percentage of insect eaters are … + details

  30. Q:
    Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    A:
    There is no doubt that these days advertisements could impact our choices in all aspects of our lifes. The question is, could advertisements affect our preferences ? I am going to explore this issue with all of the possible reasons.

    In terms of influencing, we can not deny that advertisements could change our preferance toward somthing. The main reason to support this claim is that ads play critical role in our lifes, and with ads we can see different things that could by interested to us, so we can take a deeper look on any products features, after that we can compare it with other products that we used to buy before, all the process will be made effortlesslly.

    On the other hand, ads are spreading around the world, and what they make them smart is that they can know all of your preference only through your browser. For example, what do you like and dislike, what are the products that you buy very often, and which company you prefer to buy from the most. Therefore, consumers need to be smart and compare the advantages and disadvantages of any product before buy it, so they can choice the sutible product for them. In addition, ads should be done under specific roles and regulation.

    To sum up, we can not deny that ads changed our vision. However, every thing in the world has a bright and dark site so in ads. Therefore, the client must be aware and protect themselves from the drawbacks particularly.

    1. Score 6.5
      Choose 2 main ideas and identify them in you introduction.
      Watch your adjectives – the ‘ed’ ending describes a feeling, the ‘ing’ ending describes a situation.
      I am interested (person’s feeling). The book is interesting (situation’s appeal)

  31. Q:
    The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
    Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
    https://iotcdn.oss-ap-southeast-1.aliyuncs.com/2018-06/mt2017april-pt2-1.png

    A:
    This bar chart depicts various employment status by male and female and the amount of their enjoyable free time. The employment status that shows in this chart are ( employed full time, employed part time, unemployed, retired, and housewives ) and this statistic was taken between 1998-1999. It is clear from the graph that men had more leisure time than woman.

    According to what is show, both genders have less leisure time particularlly when they were full time employed. In contrast, unemployed and retired people have more free time, about 80 hours per week for men, and about 70 hours per week for female. For housewives they spend more than 40 hours per week. Also female get 40 free hours per week when they were employed part time.

    To sum up, we could say that woman had less free time to enjory in a typical week comparing to man regardless their employment condition.

  32. Early technological developments helped ordinary people and changed their lives more than recent developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Technological advancements during centuries have transformed the way of humans’ life significantly. There is a school of thought that asserts developments of technology in earlier ages possessed a greater impact on people’s lives compared to those of today’s modern era. Although the considerable role of initial technologies and inventions cannot be ignored, from my perspective, recent technologies are more beneficial.

    First of all, it is quite hard to imagine how our civilization would have been without inventions such as the wheel, the telephone, and the light-bulb. Take the wheel as an example which eventually led to the construction of early chariots and cars. At that time, this invention was considered among the most groundbreaking ones played an important role in improving the transportation systems as well as trade between nations due to the fact that until then, such facilities were not available for people to travel and move goods.

    However, the latest technologies have made our life far easier than it used to be. The internet can be mentioned as one of those impressive inventions by which the way people live, study, and conduct business have vastly changed. To cite an example, thanks to the internet, almost all individuals around the globe have access to an inexhaustible source of information and communicate with each other regardless of where they live. Another available technology that has become an integral part of our lives, these days, is the smartphone which is a multi-functional gadget giving us the opportunity to do plenty of our tasks ranging from setting an alarm to ordering a portion of food almost wherever and whenever we want just through one portable object.

    In conclusion, both previous and current technologies, in my view, have influenced our lives tremendously. Nonetheless, contemporary inventions are more helpful for two reasons: more accessibility of these technologies for the public and more diversity of such technologies in numerous fields.

    1. Score 7.5 Lovely
      plural – … humans’ life significantly… (lives – they all have one)
      missing connection – …groundbreaking ones played an… (…groundbreaking ones and played an…)
      plural – …made our life far easier… (made our lives far easier)
      present perfect …the way people live, study, and conduct business have… (the way people live, study, and conduct business has – the way…has)

      1. Thanks a million.
        I made a mistake about doing reduction by omitting “which” in ( groundbreaking ones (which) played an…). It should not be omitted here. Moreover, your suggestion (and) seems better here.

  33. It is right that university graduates should earn more money than less well-educated people, but they should pay the full cost of their education.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    There is a school of thought that asserts university degree holders should receive more income compared to those who do not have an academic education; however, university students have to pay all of the tuition fees themselves which I totally disagree with. Moreover, the role of higher education in increasing the chance of earning top salaries cannot be ignored but, in my view, other aspects should be taken into consideration in this regard.

    To begin with, apart from a university degree, some other factors are involved in proving an individual’s capability to get a career. Practical skills, for instance, are considered as an essential feature in almost every occupation in addition to theoretical knowledge. To explain, in today’s age, a number of people are educated so, a majority of employers tend to hire the most qualified person who is completely meet that job’s requirements. Thus, as a fresh graduate to win in the face of keen competition, one should possess both academic and needed experimental skills. Besides, someone who has not got a university degree but is an expert in his or her job, also, deserves a high income because he or she puts time and effort into gaining experience and being skillful in that job.

    Regarding the education costs, I am of the opinion that free education is one of the primitive rights of each individual. Therefore, the governments should invest in the education system and make it accessible for their citizens due to the fact that not only does education play an important role in improving society but also free education provide the opportunity for those talented students who do not have enough money to apply for their favorite field.

    In conclusion, although those having a university degree are eligible for generous salaries, in my view, other measures should be taken into account when it comes to the capability of a person. Furthermore, it is the authorities’ duty to provide free education for their people.

    1. Score 6.5
      simple present – …who is completely meet… (who completely meets)
      simple present – …free education provide… (free education provides)
      word choice – …needed experimental skills… (needed experience)
      inversion comma/plural/repetition – …not only does education play an important role in improving society but also free education provide the opportunity for those talented students who do not have enough money to apply for their favorite field.
      (not only does education play an important role in improving society, but also, when free, provides the opportunity for those talented students who do not have enough money to apply for their favorite fields.)
      alternative …however, university students have to pay all of the tuition fees themselves which I totally disagree with… (however, I totally disagree that that they should bear the full brunt of tuition fees.)

  34. Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    There is no doubt that the key role of higher education in today’s modern era cannot be ignored. A number of people stated that university students should concentrate more on their courses, while another school of thought advocates the idea of extracurricular activities. Although studying should be the main concern of students, in my view, they have to spend some time doing other activities which are vital for their future life.

    First of all, those who argue that students should focus on their studies stands out that if students excel at their field, there would be more opportunities for them in the job market due to the fact that to get a high-rank career with a top salary, having a university degree is one of the most essential requirements. Furthermore, students are heavily loaded with learning tasks such as preparing for exams or lectures as well as doing plenty of research. Thus, they do not have enough time to do extra activities.

    On the other hand, I am of the opinion that adding stress and pressure to students is not healthy for them and they require some free time to regain energy so they should be allowed to choose their favorite activity like music or sport. Moreover, to enjoy a happy and fulfilling life, students should gain competence in a wide range of skills from interpersonal skills to social skills which are considered an integral part of each individual. To cite an example, to succeed in a profession, one must know how to interact with his or her colleagues. Therefore, team working and problem-solving as practical skills are needed in addition to academic knowledge.

    In conclusion, it is important for students to stay concentrate on their courses; however, to my mind, there are other necessary skills associated with their future life such as communicating with others. Hence, doing some extra activities can be beneficial in this case.

    1. Score 6.5. Nice one. Good structure.
      present perfect: number of people (have) stated
      missing words: stand out (in their belief) that if…
      conditional: if students excel (in) their field, there (will) be more opportunities (You’re talking about a timeless belief.)
      comma: for them(,) and they require
      adjective: students to stay (concentrated) on

  35. Q:
    Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    A:
    There is no doubt that these days finding any piece of informations are easy than in the past. The question is, why some people see that some of the critical information should not be shared to the public freely, while the others see that sharing information is somthing great to the community? In this essay I am going to clearify both opinions with examples, and at the end I will give my own view.

    To begain with, some people see that information should be shared regardless how improtant is it. The main reason to support this point of view is that those people see that no improvement will be occurd in researches or business without sharing the information with each other. That is why many companies prefer to hire someone with lots of work experience to share his konwledge and experinses with other employees, so the company will improved.

    On the other hand, some people see that crucial information should not be shared priceless. Maybe because they spent a lot of hard time and huge effort to get such valuable information, and they want other individuals to spent the same effort to gain any information or rather they will ask for money.

    In conclusion, people has different opinions about sharing critical information for free. In my point of view, I see that if I has important information, or even a great profesional experiense to share about somthing, I am responsible to share it with others, therefore, the information become more valuable and benefical rather than when I keep it to myself.

    1. Score 6.5 Watch your sentence variety and prepositions.
      uncountable noun/comparison “…piece of informations are easy…” (piece of information is easier)
      prepositions: “…be shared (with) the public regardless (of)…” “(From) my point of view…” “I am responsible (for) (sharing)…” preposition + gerund
      voice “…will be occurd in researches..” this shouldn’t be passive (will occur)
      infinitive: to spent (to spend)
      plural: people has (people have)

  36. Q:
    The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period.

    Table pic : https://iotcdn.oss-ap-southeast-1.aliyuncs.com/2018-06/mt2017april-pt1-1.png

    A:
    This table depicts the waste production number of the following countries ( Ireland, Japan, Korea, Poland, Portugal, and United States ) form the period 1980-2000. The measurment are taken in millions of tonnes. It is clear from the graph that US has the highest amount of waste production comparing to the others.

    Accourding to what is shown, from the period 1980 to 2000, the countitiy of hazardous production in Ireland, Japan, Poland, Portugal, and United States are dramatically raised. For example, the amount of hazardous production in US was 131 millions of tonnes in 1980, and it raised to 192 millions of tonnes in 2000, as in Japan it was 28 millions of tonnes and in 2000 it becomes 53 millions of tonnes.

    On the other hand, Korea was the only of which that their the countitiy of hazardous production are declined over years.

    To sum up, we could say that all of the 6 countries have different amount of waste production, however, Ireland and Portugal are considred the lowest hazardous production countries.

    1. Score 6.5. Super structure, but watch your reductions and articles. Unless you say America, it’s “the US!
      spelling/Plural: “The measurements are…”
      articles: “The US…” “…and the United States…”
      passive reduction: “…compared to the others.”
      spelling: “countitiy” quantity
      tense: “…raised…” rose

  37. In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday_
    Do you agree or disagree?

    Ans:
    Breakthroughs in the tourism industry have already brought about tremendous changes in all walks of human life, the world over. The attractive and affordable holiday packages are the key points while selecting the holiday country by tourism’s lovers. In my opinion, after a few years, people would prefer to travel to their home country rather than travelling to the other country, because of the cost and time aspect.

    To begin with, there are a few reasons why people choose to go on a vacation in their home country. Firstly, they do not have to face a language barrier, they can use their native language to communicate with each other in their nation. Secondly, the abroad trip requires planning and advance arrangement of a few months before going on a vacation. Nowadays the younger generation does not have sufficient time to do this task, and they have to appoint agents, which will increase their spending budget. In contrast, their nation trip is much more affordable and does not require planning, resulting in their time and cost is saved.

    Moreover, today’s generation is more inclined towards exploring their own culture. Therefore, the government’s initiative to promote their tourism industry, by showing their states culture, picturesque views and the benefit of travelling are successfully attracted the youth. These results in, people started choosing different states in their own country for their next vacation. The other reason for the change in views is because of spreading COVID-19 disease. Due to the COVID, numerous countries have put either a ban on travelling or restricted their travelling visas. The people also want to safeguard their money, for instance, if the booked flight is banned by their destination country on an emergency basis, their money will be gone, and they would face huge losses for this arrangement.

    To recapitulate, the various advantages and circumstances have changed the views of the people in selecting their vacation country in the near future. In my opinion, the more people would prefer to go on a trip in their home country, and the culture and money aspects would be the key point while choosing the trip’s destination point.

    1. Score 6.5. Watch your sentence variety and punctuation.
      no comma: “…other country, because of…” (other country because of)
      no comma: “…tourism industry, by showing…” (…tourism industry by showing…)
      tense: “… which will increase…” (use the present tense to describe a routine ‘timeless’ action – which increases)
      tense: “… successfully attracted the youth…” (simple present “…successfully attracting the youth…”
      tense: “…These results in…” (simple present – These result in)
      passive: “…time and cost is saved.” (cost being saved)

  38. The average person’s diet is becoming increasingly unhealthy and some people believe that advertising of fast food is a major cause of this problem. How can advertising practices be changed to improve this situation?

    The eating habits of the public may be influenced adversely by advertising; however, its impact could be countered by a stronger promotion of healthy eating, reduced encouragement by celebrities, and increased regulation of the advertising industry.

    One way of combating this issue would be to launch mass media campaigns publicizing the benefits of a balanced diet while bringing attention to the bad consequences of eating processed food on a regular basis. It could be emphasized that a person’s fitness and health depend on the regular intake of protein, fiber, vegetables and fruit, while the excessive consumption of high calorie, low-nutrient snacks, and sugary drinks may give rise to obesity and other related diseases.

    Another way would be to discourage celebrities from promoting these products as they have their own influence on viewers which have often tempted people to buy impulsively without analyzing their damaging results. It is worth mentioning that not only do these eateries offer cholesterol and sugar rich meals, but also dietary recipes, such as, fish and salad; therefore, they should promote these items more.

    Lastly, advertisers should be bound by law to declare the side effects of the excessive use of food. Additionally, they should only be allowed to advertise their products after children’s viewing times because many fast food chains target the youth through promotional gift schemes and massive discounts; thus, luring them to consume junk food excessively.

    To conclude, a shift in the media’s projections underlining the drawbacks of unhealthy foodstuff, coupled with the introduction of certain regulations, could help in developing a diet conscious society.

    1. Score 7.5
      Nice inversion. Great parallel. Super conditional!
      Unrelated content: This section is not part of the three main ideas you defined in your introduction! “… It is worth mentioning that not only do these eateries offer cholesterol and sugar rich meals, but also dietary recipes, such as, fish and salad; therefore, they should promote these items more…” You would have done better to elaborate on the celebrities with an example, or connect this idea to the previous one by mentioning the ‘eatery’ where they make this choice.

  39. What factors do you think are important in promoting a higher standard of education? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Focus areas for enhancing the quality of education in developing countries revolve mostly revolve around funding and the use of unethical means. While in developed countries, it is more about the declining interest in post graduate science studies.

    In developing countries, the dilapidated condition of education is primarily due to insufficient funds, making it difficult to acquire and train high caliber teaching staff. This could be managed to some extent by inspiring the voluntary participation of highly qualified retired educators. Moreover, budget constraints have not only prevented the building and maintaining of world-class research facilities, but have also deprived students access to academic journals and other library resources. That is why the number of research papers, a barometer of the education level, published in the third world is negligible, though their population outnumbers the first world overwhelmingly.

    Another problem which has plagued the education system of the third world is the culture of cheating and plagiarism. This is the most difficult matter to deal with and requires collective action by all stake holders, such as parents and teachers, in rewarding those who follow ethical practices and strictly punishing violators.

    On the other hand, the declining enrollment in medical and other disciplines of sciences is a worrisome trend in developed nations. This could be dealt with by introducing a host of actions including financial support during education and a guarantee of work for bright students.
    To summarize, the actions for uplifting education vary from region to region and therefore need a tailor-made solution.

  40. In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

    Modes of transport and which one is worth investing in have always been a matter of debate. A number of people state that a huge amount of money should be spent on high-speed trains and railways while it is argued by other groups that it is crucial to set the budget for upgrading the present public transport system. Although at first glance, the advantages of the railway system seem greater, I believe that both play an important role in the transportation system, so it is far wiser to allocate a balanced budget to both.

    To begin, the train is considered as the safest and most stress-free mode of transport due to the fact that compared to private vehicles or buses, the accidents rate is significantly lower when it comes to railway lines. Another beneficial aspect is that not only are trains more environmentally friendly than cars and buses but they also connect more major cities which leads to both preserving the environment as well as saving time. To explain, efficient train services encourage more people to choose this type of commuting rather than their own cars which can reduce the gridlock and carbon emissions.

    On the other hand, citizens cannot only depend on railways because those are not available whenever and wherever they need to commute from one place to another in addition to that most of the trains possess limited and particular schedules and are not consistently accessible. Apart from that, there are several regions, especially in rural areas, which do not have access to trains or even public transport and can be reached just by car.

    In conclusion, fast trains would be advantageous in some aspects such as safety and positive effects having on our environment. Thus, from my perspective, authorities could give railways priority; however, enhancing other types of transportation should not be ignored.

    1. Score 6.5
      Lovely inversion!
      missing commas: “… transport, and which one is worth investing in, have always…” (interruption – it wouldn’t change the sentence’s meaning if you took it away)
      “… high-speed trains and railways, while it is argued…” (When ‘while’ means ‘whereas’ you need a comma. When it means time, you don’t need a comma)
      “…another; in addition to that, most of the trains…” (conjunctive adverb)
      “accident rate” (accident is an adjective; therefore, no s)
      missing noun : …possess limited __________ and particular…”
      Timeless: “In conclusion, fast trains can be advantageous in some aspects such as safety and have some positive effects on our environment.”

  41. Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    Advertising is considered a well-known method of promotion that guarantees the turnover rate of goods. Some groups claim that advertising is not as effective as it used to be to grab our attention while others state that it still has the power to convince us to purchase an array of goods. I am of the opinion that the advertising industry is succeeding in selling products; however, in today’s era, a more difficult task lies ahead.

    To commence with, advertising as a powerful industry has made great strides in improving selling methods. Numerous researches have been made by several companies to recognize public demands and this information helps them offer more up-to-date services and manufacture goods to meet such needs. To cite an example, in today’s fast-paced world, the majority of individuals do not possess enough time for cooking meals due to their hectic lifestyles and busy schedules. Thus, various types of processed foods or half-cooked meals are offered by diverse food factories in advertisements which state that buying such foods leads to saving both time and money. This way, more people are encouraged to consume these products.

    On the other hand, nowadays, as a result of advancements in technology and the internet, people have access to data, so that they become more aware and can distinguish what adverts create artificial wants, they then ignore them. Furthermore, advertising the same items and replaying commercials many times on several platforms ranging from television and newspapers to social media and websites not only do undermine their uniqueness but also seem annoying to audiences. Therefore, sizable groups do not pay attention to such adverts.

    In conclusion, although, these days, being creative to represent novel approaches in the advertising industry may be challenging, I believe that despite the rising level of public awareness, we are still influenced by advertisements due to the fact that they update themselves according to our needs.

    1. Score 6.5
      “…grab our attention, while others state that it …” (When ‘while’ means ‘whereas’ you need a comma. When it means time, you don’t need a comma)
      ” Much research has been done” (research is uncountable)
      missing comma “…demands, and this information helps…”
      missing commas “…platforms, ranging from television and newspapers to social media and websites, not only… (interruption – it wouldn’t change the sentence’s meaning if you took it away)
      inversion “…not only undermines their uniqueness, but also annoys audiences.”
      “…being creative about representing novel approaches…”

  42. Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

    There is no doubt that to live a happy and fulfilling life is one of the great desires every human possesses. What makes it difficult to describe is the fact that there is no exact measurement to determine it while several factors are involved in achieving joyfulness such as money, health, and family.

    To begin with, why the definition of happiness is challenging stems from people’s perspectives, lifestyles, and circumstances in life that differ from one person to another. Moreover, people from diverse cultural and social backgrounds have different values and needs. Money, for instance, could be considered as an integral part of a happy life but how much money is enough depends on each individual according to their demands as well as their goals. To explain, for a section of society, the average income by which they can provide the basic necessities of life makes them happy; however, for others, having a luxurious life, traveling abroad, and enjoying up-to-date facilities leads to satisfaction and happiness.

    Apart from the money which is mentioned before, there are other reasons leading joy. For one, to be healthy could be raised as one of the most essential factors because losing health can be the source of unhappiness. Take people suffering from serious diseases as an example, who lose the chance of spending time with their loved ones or doing whatever they want such as traveling or tasting their favorite foods. Another factor would be having family and friends to share one’s experiences with as humans are social creatures. As a result, they cannot live in isolation, so social interactions play an important role in enjoying a joyful life.

    In conclusion, happiness seems to be a complex issue to define according to each individual’s personality and situation. Nonetheless, there would be numerous reasons involving joyfulness such as having a healthy life, adequate income level, and strong family ties.

    1. Score 7.5 Lovely parallel!
      missing comma “…a happy life, but how much money…”
      Tense – ‘Nonetheless, there are numerous contributors to joyfulness such as having a healthy life, adequate income level, and strong family ties.” (Your statement is timeless – equally true for the past, present , and future; so the simple present is best here.)

  43. Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow any exercise routine. Why do you think it is happening? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

    There is no doubt that exercise is essential if one would like to live a healthy and fulfilling life into old age. It has been frequently stated by healthcare professionals that elderlies should do regular sports; however, the majority of them are reluctant to exercise every day. In my perspective, there are several reasons behind this issue associated with fear of injury and lack of sports facilities which can be alleviated to motivate older generations to do sports regularly.

    To begin with, there are two main factors why older people do not tend to exercise. For one, the more the age, the weaken the body, due to the fact that as we age, our body’s physical condition naturally changes. For example, bones shrink in size which results in becoming more physically vulnerable. Thus, a number of older groups are afraid of being injured while doing sports because of the diseases they suffer from such as Arthritis. Another reason may be the lack of proper sports facilities. To cite an example, most citizens live in apartments or small suites these days not having access to equipped outdoor space, and they have to commute long ways to go to the park or join a gym to work out.

    The first measure that can be taken is to help older ones and accompany them in doing sports which leads them to overcome the fear of injury. For instance, younger ones can guide seniors on how to exercise correctly or use fitness equipment in a public park. Exercising with their peers in facilitated parks or gyms can be mentioned as another step because most aged live alone and such opportunity can act as a motivation for them to make friends and work out together. Another option may be to ease the accessibility of all citizens to sports facilities, especially elderlies.

    In conclusion, reluctance to exercise stems from fear of injury or unavailability of proper facilities that can be tackled by accompanying peers or the youth with the elderly and providing more sports facilities.

    1. Nice. Super punctuation! Score 7 (elderlies = seniors)
      Use your noun to advantage! “Healthcare professionals have frequently stated that seniors should do regular sports…”
      “From my perspective (not “in”)
      comparative “the more they age, the weaker their bodies get…”
      Efficiency -“For example, bones shrink in size making us more physically vulnerable.”
      2nd conditional – you’re making a suggestion – “…could be alleviated…could be taken would be to help…would lead them….could guide”

  44. Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep.
    What problems can lack of sleep cause?
    What can be done about lack of sleep?

    In the Modern era, human beings often complain about not having proper sleep, which results in their health are deteriorating speedily. A few steps like a healthy lifestyle would help people to overcome this difficulty. This essay would discuss the problems and measures we need to take on lack of sleep.

    To begin with, technologies such as Mobile Phones, Computers, and Internet are some of the main reasons for sleeping disorders. People often spent their time on social websites like Facebook, Instagram, and WhatsApp to interact with other ones even late at night, resulting in they did not getting enough sleep. This habit is affecting their health and lifestyles. For instance, psychology says, the younger generation who did not sleep well, mostly found not having enough concentration on work, and their performance is also affected. Moreover, they easily get frustrated and take wrong decisions in anger. Additionally, poor lifestyles are one of the causes to have early diseases, for example, nowadays mostly younger ones are having heart attacks, stress, and anxiety attack.

    Despite having knowledge of the sleeping disorder, people are not taking much effort to improve this habit. There are a few measures people need to take to get enough sleep. Firstly, a healthy lifestyle is a key to overcoming the sleeping problem. They need to adapt the routine to wake up early in the morning, do some physical exercise, and sleep early in the night. Secondly, they start balancing their social and personal life by less using social platforms and start spending their time with family.

    To recapitulate, sleeping habits are the main part of our lifestyle. It can easily improve or affect the health of people. By restricting the usage of social platforms can help us to overcome this difficulty.

    1. Super! Score 6
      Identify your main ideas in the introduction.
      Stay focused on the the question you’re answering – not relevant – “Additionally, poor lifestyles are one of the causes to have early diseases, for example, nowadays mostly younger ones are having heart attacks, stress, and anxiety attack.”
      Watch your tenses

  45. Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of the museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Museums, in which diverse kinds of preserved artifacts are kept, are considered wonderful places playing a key role in enhancing the public’s knowledge about the cultural values of each nation. These days a debate is what the real purpose of museums is. Whether they should educate or entertain people. In my point of view, it would be far more advantageous if museums fulfill both purposes.

    On the one hand, it is argued by some groups that the main goal of museums is to elevate people’s awareness about historical and cultural values. Besides, there are a number of amusement parks, cinemas, and other types of recreational activities by which people can entertain. Thus, museums should focus on the educational aspect and how to teach visitors about something that they did not have any information about, and to achieve this aim, an array of museums use guidebooks, brochures, or offer tours with expert guides.

    On the other hand, there is another argument that museums should add some new edutainment options to their space in addition to their informative goal in order to not only do not seem boring to visitors but also attract more visitors ranging from children to academic experts. In my opinion, time is changing for this industry. Nowadays, museums have to compete with plenty of entertainment options that did not exist a generation ago. Furthermore, this new dual-purpose of museums could be beneficial for a wide range of guests if it is balanced due to the fact that entertainment can act as an effective tool that can make education more enjoyable.

    In conclusion, there is no doubt that the main role of museums is to educate people but they can offer more interesting experiences to visitors by providing some entertainment.

    1. Score 6.5
      2nd conditional past + would/should/could – “From my point of view, it would be far more advantageous if museums fulfilled both purposes.”
      “…this new dual-purpose of museums could be beneficial for a wide range of guests if it was balanced…”
      punctuation – prepositional phrase + comma – “These days, there is much debate over what the real purpose of museums is.”
      commas – interruption (it needs commas because you could take it away without changing the meaning of the sentence) – “On the other hand, there is another argument that museums should add some new edutainment options to their space, in addition to their informative goal, in …”
      “in order to not only appear to be more interesting to visitors but also attract more visitors ranging from children to academic experts.”

  46. Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    There is no doubt that everyone should have identical rights to education, but it has been frequently stated that women should make up an equal share as compared to men at universities in any field. I do not agree with this view because of several reasons, two of which will be explained further.

    First of all, in my perspective, what should be considered as the first and foremost factor to accept an application by universities is the capabilities of an applicant and not gender. In other words, it would be unfair if selecting candidates is only based on sexes due to the fact that this way qualified and skillful students, who work hard to achieve good grades and gain needed competence, lose the opportunity to enter the course they want and reject as a result of such unwise decision. Take a female student as an example who wishes to enroll in her preferred subject but despite having all asked requirements, does not successful just because half of the seats are reserved for male students.

    Secondly, each individual has got his or her preferences and interests when it comes to choosing a subject at university. Actually, there are numerous courses which are more popular among women such as art, fashion, interior design, or becoming a teacher as opposed to men tending more to study subjects including mechanics or electronics, for instance. Therefore, equal proportions would be neither practical nor logical.

    In conclusion, although both girls and boys should have the same opportunities to select their field of study that plays a key role in making their future, I believe selecting candidates for each course should be based on their academic achievements and essential skills and not on the gender.

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  47. The money given to help poor countries does not solve the problem of poverty, so rich countries should give other types of help instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    These days, new concerns have been raised in the case of whether donating money to developing countries is beneficial to tackle the problem of poverty or it can be more effective for these countries to be supported by other forms of assistance. In my opinion, it would be far more essential as well as helpful for poor countries’ improvements if richer nations invest in industries there or provide facilities associated with education and healthcare.

    On the one hand, financial aid seems to be a short-term solution due to the fact that the majority of developing countries suffer from severe problems in important sectors such as the healthcare system and education which require long-term planning to improve. Thus, wealthier countries by providing facilities to develop infrastructure in these areas can help poorer countries more effectively. For example, they can participate in constructing more equipped schools and hospitals or providing opportunities for younger generations in such countries to travel to developed countries in order to study at higher levels and benefit from up-to-date educational facilities. This way, these educated individuals can return to their countries and share their valuable knowledge and experiences with others.

    On the other hand, there is a risk in the case of giving money to governments of poor nations because they may misuse the budget they are given. For example, due to a lack of up-to-date knowledge, experts, and facilities in the industrial sector, they may not be able to use financial aid properly, but it will be much more effective if developed countries can help train specialists in this field or provide new devices. Moreover, more job opportunities may be created by investing in developing countries’ industries which leads to boost their economy.

    In conclusion, I believe that richer countries can help poorer nations more effectively by practical assistance in vital sectors such as health, education, and industries rather than donating money.

  48. Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. Discuss both the view and explain which climate you prefer.

    Weather conditions not only do affect the way people feel but also have a great impact on their lifestyles. Some groups love to live in countries with warm climates while living in colder areas can be more appealing to others. Both of these climates have got their pros and cons but if I were to choose, I would prefer to live in countries with temperate climates.

    First of all, people living in tropical countries may have more opportunities to do outdoor activities which lead them to be more productive and possess a healthier lifestyle due to the fact that as long as the weather is clear and sunny, people are more inclined to work or have fun outside the home. For example, there are diverse kinds of activities citizens can do ranging from shopping and doing workouts to going to the beach and doing water sports, having a barbeque, or just relaxing and having a sunbath. However, the main concern with living in most tropical countries is the risk of some allergies and diseases such as malaria as a result of hot and humid climates.

    On the other hand, life in cold countries can be interesting in some aspects. For instance, individuals who live in such states can enjoy winter sports such as skiing in the snowy mountains. Moreover, colder temperatures can help reduce both allergies and inflammation. In terms of the disadvantages of living in cold climates, restricting mobility can be mentioned because people have to put on layers of cloth to keep themselves warm. Besides, in cold weather and low temperature, people rarely have a chance to go out and do outdoor activities which can affect their mood and make them feel depressed.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the benefits and drawbacks of each climate, I prefer to live in a place with a temperate climate that has fresh summers and wet winters with mild weather.

  49. Q: The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking.
    To what extend do you agree or disagree?

    A:

    There is no doubt that these days cell phones considered one of the important devises for communication purposes. The question is should mobile phones be prohibited in some places ? In this essay I am going to mention the reasons behind that cell phones should not be treated as somking.

    In terms of positive side, cell phones should be allowed every where. The main reason to support this claim is that nowadys with the digital revelation, phones are a necessary device in our lifes in different ways. To illustrate, in 2022 and with the Covid-19 pandamic, we can not access any place without showing them the application that Saudi Arabia use ” tawaklna ” to check the amunazation status. Other example, when we inter any resturant in these days, we can see the manu only through scanning the QR by our own phone. In other words, somking should be banned in organized places because it is harmful the person’s health and it may contribute to multiple problems for olders or kids when the exposed to the smoke every where.

    On the other hand, the statment ” mobile phone should be banned ” could have great effect. For instance, using cell phones 24 hours could make huge issues to health and also it could lead to be less socialized to people. Even when you were out with friends, your focus will be on your phone screen all the time.

    In conclusion, although mobile phones could lead to anti-socialization. However, we can not deny how necessity they are in our life.

  50. Q: Studying the English language in an English-speaking country is the best but not the only way to learn language.
    Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    A:

    There is no doubt that these days the English language considered as one of the easiest and common languages in the world. The question is the only method to learn the English language will be by studying? In this essay, I am going to explore some of the other ways to learn the English language rathar than studying in an English-speaking country.

    In terms of other methods to learn the English language, we could learn english not only by studying it. The main reason given to support this claim is that overall learning the English language particularly in an English country considered an easiy way. To illustrate, meeting multiple of a native speakers is a common method to learn the English, because you can practice with them the language at any time of the day for free. In other words, practicing any language in the world is the important way that lead you to speak fluently. In addition, since you are in an English-speaking country, obviously you will be forced to read every thing that written in English. For example, reading a newspapers, subway stations board, and the Tv news.

    On the other hand, learning the English language by studing it will be the best method. Because you will learn the basics of the language including the grammar, correct word sentences, and how to write in professional manner.

    In conclusion, although styding English is the best way to learn it. However, I believe that only with studying the language without practicing everyday would not be enough for learning.

  51. Q: Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch tv. 

    To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?  

    A: 

    There is no doubt that these days everyone may watch television. The question is, why watching Tv considered a harmful thing? In this essay, I am going to explain why I agreed or disagreed with the given opinion. 

    In terms of the side effect, Tv is dangerous. The main reason given to support this claim is that by watching tv most of the time, you will be lonely with less social and communication skills. To illustrate, when we compare 2 people, the first one setting and watching tv most of the day without any contact with others. The other person spends less time watching tv, instead, he or she hangs out and meets new people most of the day. In other words, as long as you are watching tv all day, social life will get down. Secondly, watching tv regularly could lead to eye weakness due to the infrared violet light that appears from the tv’s screen. 

    On the other hand, watching television could be beneficial, in other words, through watching we could improve our learning skills to various things. For instance, learning new languages, about the cultures differences, or cooking recipes, etc. 

    In conclusion, although people may agree or disagree about watching tv. Therefore, I believe that watching purposeful tv shows for a short period and making the rest of the day for family and meeting people would be the best thing to do

  52. Shubham kathiriya

    Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

    Ans.
    In this contemporary era, technologies changed the method of working and studying. Pupils are more dependent on computers. This essay will discuss the problems associated with this trend and justify the measures to solve in the ensuing paragraph.

    There are numerous problems to more relying on computers. The biggest problem is that, it is not beneficial for students health. To expand, eye related damage can be increased due to the over usage of computer and it seems hazardous to students. For example, in this recent time more than a half of the pupils wear glasses because of the computer UV rays which are create an impact on our eyes. To cap it all, learners can not improve their writing skill. To explain, although parents know the disadvantages of computer writing, yet they do not provide a guidance about how writing is useful for us. Moreover, students are not only improve their writing ability but also they are not learn spelling because of auto-correction software in computers.

    There are some remedies to solve this problems. The first and foremost solution is to take written examination in the school, it can improve the writing ability in in the pupils and they can rise their interest on themselves rather than the computer softwares. Besides this, parents should set a screen time in a computer so that learners can spent less time on computers.

    To conclude, a number of problems occurs due to the computer despite this there are also have some disadvantages of depend on computers by students.

  53. Q: The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.

    A: These two pie chrarts show that how Korea, Sweden, and United Kingdom deal with harmful waste products. It is clear from the graph that we have different methods to deal with dangerous products waste in each country.

    According to what is shown, Korea destroing (69 per cent) of their waste by recycling, underground Comes the second by ( 22 per cent ), then by incineration which means that the products waste destroyed by fire.

    In Sweden, they use the underground as the first option to deal with their waste by (55%), then recycling come next by (25%), and (20%) by incineration.

    Moreover, the major method applying by United Kingdom to destroy their product waste is by underground by (82 percent), after that they use both chemical treatment and dumping at sea similarly and that accounting (8 percent for each ), the last useible method is by incineration ( 2 percent).

    To sum up, we could say that the most popular method in each counrty are ( Korea = recycling, Sweden = underground, United Kingdom = underground ).

  54. Q: Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
    https://ieltsonlinetests.com/wot/result/writing-practice-test-2-588699

    A:

    This map below ilustrate village close to London called ( Chorleywood ) and how the population raised constantly from middle of 19th centry. It is clear from the graph that the village develped and getting more people over decads.

    According to what is shown in the map, in the period from 1868-1883 the Chorleywood village was empty , it only had main roads and they still present over years. To begain with, the village developed particularly in the ealy of 19th centry than before, it had a Railway that bulit in 1909, that showed in yallow color in the map, in addition, the horizontal black line represnet Motor Way that built in 1970.

    To sum up, we could say that the Chorleywood village shows rapid development in 19th decade more than in previous years.

  55. Q: The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
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    A:

    This table depicts two primary schools in 2005 and 2015 with the issuses that occuring by children. It is clear from the table below that there are comparison between school A and B and the various problems that children faced.

    According to what is shown in school A that there are slight diffierences with the percentage of children in many problem areas in 2005 and 2015 exept the concentration in lessons the number of children decline from ( 40 per cent ) to be ( 18 per cent ) in 2015, Also in following instructions the percentage was 42 % and it decresed to 18% by the year 2015.

    On the other hand, school B children with problems percentage raised with the years exept 2 issuses remain steady Like handwriting (7%), and concentration in lessons(15%).

    To sum up, we could say that the percentage of children with issuses get down over years in school A, in contrast it raised in school B by 2015.

  56. Q: The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.
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    A:

    This line graph depicts the local food and oil prices changes through the years from (2000, 2001, 2002, 2004, 2004, 2005, 2006, 2007, 2008, 2009, 2010, and 2011). Food prices scale measured by (points ), and the average oil prices measured by ( per barrel). It is clear from the graph that the world food and oil prices had dramaticlly increasing in price between 2007 to 2009.

    According to what is shown, the prices got constant steps throught the years from 2000 to 2004, then the prices mildly raised after 2004. However, the changes in global food and oil prices decline in 2009 with (40$) for oil prices and (140 point ) for food prices, moreover, the line start to increased gradullay after 2009.

    To sum up, we could say that the international food and oil prices lines graph have been increasing gradually over the years from 2000 to 2011.

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  57. Q:Write about the following topic.
    Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.
    Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
    You should write at least 250 words.

    Online shopping has become a boon to the people these days. Shopping from the online websites, apps for thing like books, flight tickets and household items for say groceries, furniture, etc. has become a escalating trend. This essay with depict the advantages outweighing the disadvantages for the same.

    Firstly, online shopping has helped many of us for buying things or services without even stepping out of the house and at our convenience. There are many websites and applications in the internet helping the customers getting everything at their doorsteps, making lives easy. I surely believe that there are considerably many pros over cons on purchasing things over Internet.

    In my perspective, online shopping is very useful and has helped me a lot. Due to my highly-packed schedule, I merely get a chance to go shopping. At times, I had to wear repeated clothes for functions because I had no time to spend for shopping. Online platforms like Amazon, Flipkart, Myntra are making people’s lives much easier. Now I happliy shop from my house and I dont have to waste time for it. It is very much convinient for people who are lazy enough to go out every week for groceries and other housing supplies. There is everything for every need just one click away like a cake walk.Perhaps , every great innovation has it’s loop hole. Similarly, online shopping do posses some, for example online frauds, money scams, and many more. Sometimes, the customers may also perform misconducts like using the item and returning it, returning old item and keeping the new ones.

    To conclude, in the era of hectic works and swamped lives, online purchasing has been playing a vital role in everyones’ lives. Though there are a few disadvantages of it, but they can be overcomed by taking neccessary precautions for instance, never sharing passwords or OTPs with others and not disclosing bank details to an unsecure site, and so on might keep us safe. The advantages however touches the sky when compared to the disadvantages, which makes our stressfull living a little comfortable.

  58. Advances in science, technology, and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

    Over the last century, scientific discoveries and technological breakthroughs had detrimental impacts on shaping our lifestyles and raising our life span. Therefore, it is a common belief that this is the most ideal time to live. I strongly agree with this notion due to several reasons.

    Firstly, advents in all fields benefit our lifestyle, especially in communicating habits. For instance, Messenger, the software that is well-known for sending messages and calling videos online, is used by billion of users every day. The main reason for this is that unlike in the past, when people had to write a letter or travel long distances in order to meet face-to-face, the app’s function allows people to have conversations online via the Internet, without worrying about geographical barriers and time-consuming. Thus, this example illustrates a good explanation of how technological advancement contributes to modernizing our method of interacting.

    Secondly, these breakthroughs are essential to lengthen the average lifespan. The main reason is that scientific investigation helps patients and doctors to treat dangerous diseases. HIV, for example, had killed hundreds of million people in the 1980s. However, its impact can be slower with fast diagnosis and MRNA medicine these days. This saves millions of patients every year, which directly contributes not only to decreasing the mortality rate but also fosters economic growth as more people are recovered from critical conditions. Therefore, life expectancy would continue to rise thanks to society’s developments.

    In conclusion, 100 years of evolution have postponed the aging process and changed our living ways. While some people contend that there is another era containing the best living conditions, I firmly believe that these days are the most suitable time to be alive.

  59. Fewer people today visit museums than in the past. Why is it? What can be done to encourage more people to visit museums in the future?

    Ans:

    The importance of museum which was always debatable has now become more controversial as many people claim that it is an important part of our lives while others reject this notion. The substantial influence of this trend sparked controversy over the potential impact in recent years. This essay will further elaborate on my views and relevant examples from my own knowledge and experience.

    To commence with, in today’s scenario there is a wide choice of entertainment on the internet which is very easy for people. They can search for anything on the internet for their enjoyment. People watch various types of videos what they want. However, in the past, there were not many people who use technical sources that is why visiting museums become one of their leisure activities. But, in these days people choose easy way for their entertainment as well as learn about history. To exemplify, a survey conducted by the United States census bureau in 2019 revealed that 90%of people use the internet for their entertainment and knowledge.

    To increase attendance, museums should promote their collection on the internet. As well as owners upload some videos of their museum. Nowadays, people spend their maximum time on the internet. They watch many videos on YouTube. That is why uploading content of museums online is the best way to encourage people to visit museums. For example, the National Gallery can make some videos, many people are inspired by these videos, and they visit this gallery to learn about art.

    To recapitulate, according to the discourse aforementioned above, the main reason of avoid museums by people is the internet. To solve this problem museums can use the internet as an advantage and post some videos to publicize their works.

  60. Some think increasing business and cultural contact between nations is positive. Others think it leads to the disappearance of the national identity. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

    Nowadays, new concerns have been raised associated with this argument that increased interaction between countries in the domains of business and culture can either strengthen or undermine the identities of countries involved. To my mind, contacting other nations seems to be a more positive trend because of several reasons, two of which will be discussed further.

    On the one hand, by growing interaction between countries, national identity may be at risk of fading out. The main reason can be related to the influence of this trend on altering local cultures. To explain, as a result of globalization, these days, more and more people are interested in modern lifestyles, especially the youth. For example, they tend to learn foreign languages in order to contact other businesses to develop their work or study abroad. Besides, tasting new foods and following the latest fashion are highly appealing for younger generations. These may lead to the loss of local traditions.

    Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I am of the opinion that there are several positive consequences associated with increasing international businesses. For one, this way, countries can share their knowledge and budgets which results in a higher quality of life for their citizens. For instance, developed countries can help developing countries financially in terms of promoting industries and providing modern facilities which not only does create great opportunities for both workers and experts to hone their skills but also can help reduce environmental problems due to the fact that by using up-to-dated facilities, water usage in industries or agriculture sector can be decreased significantly or larger amount of waste can be recycled. Developing holidaymaking can be mentioned as another benefit because tourism can firstly boost local economies by providing more job opportunities in fields such as hotel services, tour guides, travel companies and secondly, make indigenous cultures known to the world by learning the local customs, cuisines, and languages.

    In conclusion, although this trend may have minor negative impacts in some aspects, in my view, it would be more beneficial in terms of improving the life quality and preserving national identities if governments are aware and proper policies are adopted.

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      Score 7.
      inversion confusion – “…which not only creates great opportunities…” ( inversion = “…industries and providing modern facilities; not only does this create great opportunities for both workers and experts to hone their skills, but also helps to reduce…)
      phrase – “… up-to-date facilities…”
      gorgeous parallels! – just one miss – “…by providing…by making…

  61. As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

    There is no doubt that a feeling of fulfillment from a job plays a key role in living a happy and healthy life due to the fact that a great number of individuals spend a large portion of their lives working. Since several factors consisting of both intrinsic and extrinsic ones such as personal abilities and working environment conditions are involved in job satisfaction, it seems unrealistic for everyone to be satisfied with their work.

    To begin with, work-related skills can be considered as one of the most significant intrinsic factors associated with job satisfaction. When people are able to accept carriers well-matched to their studies, skills, and abilities, they can fully engage in their work. Thus, they enjoy what they do as well as hone their skills practically. In terms of extrinsic factors contributing to employee satisfaction, workplace atmosphere and relationships with colleagues should be mentioned provided that if one feels respected in the workplace and appreciated for the quality of his or her work, not only one is motivated, but it also improves the productivity.

    However, almost everyone seeks job satisfaction, unfortunately not many people are fortunate enough to achieve it. To explain, the majority of individuals have to work in fields completely unrelated to their skills, studies, or interests just because they need money to meet their basic needs. Take an array of graduate students as an example that because of the rising unemployment rate as a result of a recent pandemic or fierce job competition cannot find a suitable occupation matching their studies and capabilities which leads them to accept any available job as they are in need of money.

    In conclusion, depending on numerous factors, including workplace environment and personal abilities, job satisfaction has different meanings from one person to another. Nevertheless, few people have the chance to find it.

    1. Score 8. Make sure you hit the examiner over the head with your response to both questions (See below)!
      inversion – “…not only is one motivated, but productivity is also improved.”
      spelling – carriers = careers
      referent/commas – “…students as an example who, because of the rising unemployment rate as a result of a recent pandemic or fierce job competition, cannot find a suitable occupation that matches their studies and capabilities. Ultimately this may lead them to accept any available job as they are in need of money. For employees in this or similar situations, any expectation of job satisfaction would be unrealistic.”

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  62. Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Nowadays, in light of the recent change in the public’s attitude towards citizens’ rights, new concerns have been raised in the case of whether governments are responsible to provide financial and health support to elders, or this is each individual’s duty to be prepared for his or her retirement. There is no doubt that individuals have a responsibility to set aside money for their future, although I firmly believe that elderly people should be supported by the state.

    On the one hand, providing facilities and opportunities to improve society is the most important government’s obligation. To explain, aged citizens, worked during their youth, regularly paid taxes for their income which was used for different purposes to promote the society. Therefore, when they are retired, it’s the authorities’ turn to take care of their citizens and appreciate their efforts by supporting them through allocating monthly stipends or providing health care facilities as an example. It is worth mentioning that providing safe and suitable conditions for studying and employment, by which a person could save enough money for her /his future and even unforeseen difficulties, is another duty of governments.

    On the other hand, there are other groups claiming support senior citizens is a waste of money because they have had enough time to save money for the future when they were working. Furthermore, it is far more crucial to spend these budgets on other issues such as developing infrastructure, building schools and hospitals, or investing in industries to boost the economy rather than caring for old people.

    In conclusion, I accept that everyone should be forward-thinking and manage his or her future plans, but this does not mean ignoring the responsibility of governments to their citizens.

    1. Score 6.5
      Nice parallel- “…such as developing infrastructure, building schools and hospitals, or investing in industries…”

      You identify two main ideas in the introduction: “individuals have a responsibility to set aside money for their future” and “elderly people should be supported by the state.” These are the only two ideas you need to develop in your paragraphs. You don’t have time to go into the governments’ other obligations. Maybe try again with this in mind because you’ve got the makings of a 7.5.

      A couple of clumsy sentences –
      “…responsible for providing financial and health support to elders, or whether being prepared for retirement is each individual’s duty.”
      “..aged citizens, worked and paid taxes during their youth which were used to promote society.”
      “…there are other groups who claim that supporting senior citizens is a waste of money…”

  63. Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
    Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

    These days, the public concern regarding tourist attractions is increasing. Therefore, it is sometimes argued that museum owners should implement new rules about charging fees to enter there. While there are several positive consequences, I strongly believe that these are outweighed by their negative impacts.

    On the one hand, one may argue that requiring payment to get the accessibility to museums promotes equipment and customer service’s quality. For example, the Women exhibition, which charges visitors 2 dollars for an entrance ticket, is well-known for its latest gadgets and friendly staff. Meanwhile, other free entry venues are constructed in old buildings with obsolete equipment, which are usually ignored by ordinary people as well as visitors. Thus, charging people for the accessibility of museums has a detrimental impact on raising customers’ experience via modern infrastructures.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that admission’s charging policy would have an adverse bearing on restricting access to traditional and historical education aspects. For instance, the Vietnamese war museum used to be famous among residents and guests for informing people about Vietnam’s history. However, the number of visitors has decreased dramatically since the government implemented a must-have payment policy for the youth. Consequently, this not only forces the museum to close forever but also deteriorates young people’s knowledge in terms of the past, which can pose various serious threats, especially cultural loss.

    In conclusion, forcing people to pay fees for entering museums is always a controversial topic. In this regard, it seems to me that the disadvantages are more significant than their advantages.

    (255 words)

    1. Score 6.5. Watch your tenses.
      Your referent needs to be closer to its subject, otherwise it’s the equipment that people ignore:) “Meanwhile, other free entry venues, which are usually ignored by ordinary people as well as visitors, are constructed in old buildings with obsolete equipment.”

  64. In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular.
    Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular?
    What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

    Ans:
    In today’s era books and serials on crime are more famous. The interest of the people has been changed, and it started inclined toward the thriller genre. They prefer to watch and read things, which maintain their interest in them. This essay will discuss the reason for this change in preferences and my view in favor of them.

    To begin with, people’s preferences have been changing dramatically from watching and reading romantic movies, books to crime ones. One of the reasons, they cannot easily analyze the storyline, so their interest will continue throughout the episodes. For example, the documentary release of Byomkesh Bakshi, one of the famous Indian detective films, gets quite a popularity in or outside India, because no one in the audience while watching it can analyze, what would be going to happen in the next coming part. Therefore, their attention keeps going in the picture. The other reason, this kind of genre can be watched by the family together. People often feel uncomfortable while seeing intimate scenes or scared in horror one. This will avoid both parts.

    According to my view, there are a few advantages of crime fiction and dramas. Firstly, they are based on real-life incidents. The moral of their story helps us to take some precautionary measures against crime such as knowing human tendencies beforehand. The other benefit is that they teach some basic laws and regulations to society. For instance, every person, whoever watched thrilled dramas knows that if any person commits the crime of theft, then they have to face 7 years of jail under section 320 of the Indian Penal Code. Therefore, this category helps us to learn something from them.

    To conclude, People’s eagerness to see new content has the reason for the popularity of crime fiction and dramas. In my opinion, after a few years, more people would be inclined toward this genre instead of watching some romantic one.

  65. Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the Internet for no charge.
    To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

    These days, with the advent of technological breakthroughs, file sharing is more and more widely used. Therefore, it is sometimes argued that this has a significant contribution in installing copyrighted songs and books without paying fees. While there are several negative impacts, I firmly believe these are outweighed by their positive influences.

    On the one hand, one might argue that freely verified documents installation poses serious threats regarding property disagreements. For example, the Vietnamese national song, which is used to be played on numerous occasions. However, due to the lack of strict rules imposed by the government, some companies have bought the song’s right to generate more income. Despite explaining reasons to the public, this topic has raised people’s awareness about the risk of no charge documents. Thus, capturing music and books has an adverse bearing on its owners.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that being able to download music and books on websites plays a vital role in education and entertainment aspects. For instance, Google Drive, which is famous for file sharing via the Internet, is used by billion of users monthly worldwide. This is because they use this in order not only to fulfill their self-study purposes but also to escape from the hustle and bustle of their life by watching and listening to their favorite songs. This example illustrates a good explanation of how a free downloading source helps users to study and relax.

    In conclusion, technological advents have a great impact on downloading free stuff on the Internet, especially music and books. In this regard, it seems to me that these advantages are more significant than their disadvantages.

    1. Score 9. Take advantage of the inversion potential. “Not only is this used to fulfill their self-study purposes, but also to escape from the hustle and bustle of their life by watching and listening to their favorite songs.”

  66. Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.
    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    It is sometimes argued that tertiary learners should be forced to just focus on promising science-based and technology-based subjects. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that these students should have the right to choose their major.

    On the one hand, enrolling in intensive core subjects provides them more opportunities to get a competitive salary job. Due to the lack of educated workforces working in scientific and technological fields, employees in these areas are often paid much higher than other jobs. As a result, they have the motivation to generate more income and contribute more to their society, which not only fosters economic growth but also promotes the public good via technological breakthroughs. In Vietnam, for instance, doctors and developers, who play a crucial role in almost every aspect, are paid several times higher than other blue-collar workers.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that it is essential to encourage undergraduates to decide their subjects. The main reason is that by having the freedom to choose subjects themselves, their academic performance will obviously increase as they have already had their interests regarding these subjects. Meanwhile, if tertiary students decide their future major based on the current trend, they might suffer from stress and boredom whenever working tendencies change, deteriorating their academic results. Furthermore, social progress can not happen by just relying on some fields such as technology or science instead of job diversity.

    In conclusion, while some maintain that subjects’ choices for college students should be limited, I firmly believe it is better for them to make their decisions freely.

  67. Countries are becoming more and more similar because people can buy the same products anywhere in the world.
    Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

    It is sometimes argued that it is difficult to distinguish the difference between nations due to the same product accessibility all over the world. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this tendency, I would believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.

    On the one hand, the ability to access the same products would have an adverse bearing on locally-produced items. Because of globalization, worldwide companies have a desire to sell their products in other countries. This leads to fierce competition among businesses, which results in restricting the accessibility to traditional goods. For instance, Vietnamese young people accept to pay lots of money for Gucci or Chanel products while refusing to pay less money for a traditional dress such as Ao dai. Thus, producing the same products in all countries may take a heavy toll on the development of local companies.

    Nevertheless, I would contend that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. The main reason is that it can enhance ordinary people’s living standards. By having the accessibility to wide ranges of products from numerous shops, customers would have more opportunities to be exposed to quality products, regardless of geographical barriers. Hence, these people could find worthwhile items. People living in developing countries, such as Cambodia, can consider choosing their suitable smartphones from several brands to meet their demands. As a result, this not only fosters economic growth but also promotes the public good.

    In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of accessing the same range of products in every part of the world are more significant than its disadvantages.

  68. TASK 2
    1). Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive.
    Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Music has changed dramatically over the years and new types of music are constantly appearing. The older generation and most of the people feels that the popular music styles at the moment such as rap are just noise and cannot be considered as proper real music unlike the older styles such as classical songs and country music.

    If I talk about the music types that is present in today’s world are pop, kpop(Korean pop songs which is really popular among the younger generation at the moment) , rock, hip hop, Latin, alternative rock and many more types of music styles and genres. Even more than the past, old music we had, there are many sings that focuses on emotions such as happiness, sadness, depression and most of the feelings and emotions like this. If I explain the negative effects on this, Sad songs had being trend over the past 30 years, which means those who listens to them, mostly the younger ones, they are being attracted to them especially because, the songs that express sadness has much more of a beautiful rhythm and a music more than the songs that gives us a feeling of happiness.

    Well, if I’m talking about the younger generation, most of them love the modern music because it can make the specific person feels happy according to the situation of his or her. In the modern world, most of the people especially the teens , the younger generation has really changed, for example, people nowadays release their sadness, happiness and much more feelings like this through sad or happy songs. Some people always gets positively charged according to the song they are listening, people with problems, some kind of sadness or mostly for depression listens to the songs that gives negative effects which makes the sad feeling go away, so we must understand and what kind of a situation he or she is without stopping her or him to listen to the modern music which older generation doesn’t like.

    The tastes and opinions of the people are very important too, many people listen to the music types that they prefer, no one can control another person’s tastes or opinions. For the rising generation, the pop, rock and most of the popular music is an important aspect of identity, sharing an interest in music with their peers brings a sense of stability or belonging. These young people would even argue that the songs and even the lyrics to the songs they prefer reflects or talks about the modern reality also these songs are really better and sound really good than the old classical.

    In conclusion, people will always prefer their tastes and certain type of music. Most the people will always be unsure of new things, which may not understand, and this can be the main case with music. However, we cannot stop the change and we should not try to, instead we should encourage new styles of music as all music adds to the wealth our culture.

    1. Your essay would score 6.5. Watch your simple present ‘s’, your punctuation, and your use of subordinating conjunctions for a solid 7.

      A little too long. Aim for 280 max and spend any left-over time making improvements.

  69. 1).Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want.
    What is your opinion about this?

    The best part about retirement is spending time with the grand kids. Being a pensioner at the age of 60 or 65 or more, doesn’t mean that the old age parents have stopped at the end of the road, they have just begun riding on the highway.

    Retirement Planning is the process of determining retirement income goals and the actions primary to achieve those goals. It includes identifying the sources of retirement income, estimating future retirement expenses, managing the assets and implementing a savings plan. A future cash flow statement is prepared to determine whether the goals can be achieved or not.

    In my opinion I would tell that if people still like to work without getting retired, if they are not becoming stressful, or if they won’t get tired by doing so much work, i agree to that point. But also getting retired at that specific age has advantages for themselves too, for example: they get spend there time with family and friends. People get retired in their lives to take a big break from their busy lives, every person has a dream always that they want to achieve somehow in their lives, they can start to live their dreams and they can improve their health.

    In conclusion, i cannot exactly give my agreements to one opinion because its the choice of that specific person, to spend their times freely or to do their job as they wish, but i would tell that it’s okay to say goodbye to your tension and hello to pension

    1. Your essay would score 6.5. Watch your simple present ‘s’, your punctuation, and your use of subordinating conjunctions for a solid 7.

      ‘I’ as a pronoun is always capitalized! Nice length

  70. Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money.
    Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

    Nowadays due to globalization, there are more endangered languages that are at risk of disappearing as their speakers decrease day by day. Some groups believe that it is not worth preserving these languages while I strongly agree with another argument that governments should put effort and money into saving such languages.

    There are several reasons why such minority languages should be protected. The first and foremost one is the fact that losing a language means losing a culture. Since Language is considered as an important part of any society, it enables people to communicate and express themselves, their customs, and traditions. When a language dies out, future generations lose this vital part of the culture that is necessary to completely understand it. This makes language a vulnerable aspect of cultural heritage which makes the preservation and revival of these languages more important. For another, what makes our world more attractive is the rich diversity of cultures. Otherwise, the world will be homogeneous and there will be no factor distinguishing one country from another.

    However, those who argue that saving less spoken languages is a waste of money point out that if this amount of money allocates to some other necessary facilities such as the healthcare system or public transportation, it would be more beneficial because it is used for more people rather than a particular minority.

    In conclusion, while it might be true that saving local languages may need large investments, to my mind, it is worth preserving these languages because they represent humans’ history and culture.

    1. Excuse me. Would you please guide me about this essay? I know the third paragraph did not well developed because time was up and I could not continue. What grade would I get if such a situation arose in the exam?
      Thank you again.

      1. You’re not going to let that happen Naz!
        You’d have had enough time if you’d stuck to the two main ideas that you identified in the introduction. Don’t let yourself get too interested in the topic. You just need your statement -> explanation -> example for each main idea with lots of sentence variety (you’ve got that) and language efficiency (you’ve got that).
        You’d score 6.5 here, but that’s primarily based on a couple of convoluted sentences that reduce the flow and an idea, at the end of paragraph 1, that isn’t identified in your introduction.

  71. Q. Some believe that unpaid community service should mandatory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Some people think that we should make unpaid community service mandatory in high schools. They claim unpaid work can help both students and the community. It is true that students might get invaluable work experiences and improve their social skills by participating in these volunteer works. Nevertheless, I disagree with the idea that volunteer work should be compulsory for high school students. Forcing unpaid work is against freedom, and also can be very pressuring to teenagers.

    First of all, there are already a lot of pressure to high school students. They have loads of homework and lots of study to do. High school is a period where students have to study or practice something hard to achieve their dreams in adulthood. Therefore, teens in high schools are extremely busy. They often don’t have enough time to sleep. For instance, South Korean high school students only have about 5 hours of sleep each day on average. Also, the pressure to success is intense. In Singapore, teen suicide rate is the highest among all age groups due to their extreme levels of stress. With all these things high school students already have to face, mandatory volunteer work puts even more pressure to them. I believe this won’t be a good influence to students’ mental health.

    Secondly, forcing high school students to do something violates their freedom. Even though unpaid work may help students themselves, if they don’t want it, it’s wrong to push them to do it. After all, how’s it different from forced labor? This can just lead to resentment of young people, who would feel like they’re being used. Complaint against forced community service might actually develop the personalities and characters of teenagers in a negative way. Parents may also dislike it as many parents don’t want to be told how to raise their children. Currently, South Korean teens have to fulfill a certain amount of community service time, and I don’t think this is the best system.

    On the whole, it is evident that compulsory unpaid work in high schools have many problems. It can lead to negative influence to mental states and well-being of young people. Also, it is against the freedom of students to do what they want. Unpaid community service is called “volunteer work” because volunteers do it. Therefore, I firmly believe that teenagers should be able to choose to work for free, and that the society cannot make it mandatory.

  72. Women should have an equal role alongside men in both police and armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Nowadays, in light of the recent change in the public’s attitude towards women’s rights, it has been frequently stated that women should be allowed to work in the military and police forces as equal as men. I partially agree with this argument.

    On the one hand, those stating that working in police and armed forces is not suitable for women, stand out this aspect that such jobs are extremely physically demanding. To explain, the female body has naturally less physical strength compared to the male body, so that women may face difficulty involved in activities such as fighting, running, and carrying heavy weapons. However, there are always exceptional people like some women who are stronger than men. Another reason behind this statement is that because of the hazards and extreme conditions of these jobs, women may suffer emotionally.

    On the other hand, I believe that based on the concept of gender equality, female candidates should be considered for police or military placements due to the fact that each person has this right to choose her job freely, regardless of gender. Moreover, there are several factors associated with employing someone for such sort of jobs which are far more important rather than physical strength such as relevant skills and qualifications including teamwork and communication skills. Take a female officer as an example that in some occasions like body search in some countries possessing cultural and religious restrictions can perform more effectively compared to male officers in terms of touching a female convict.

    In conclusion, although according to some individuals, women are incompatible with police and military duties because of both high emotionally and physically demanding, to my mind, not only should both sexes enjoy equal opportunities but also there are some specific situations in which women’s role is crucial.

    1. Score 7
      word choice “…stand out this aspect that such jobs are extremely physically demanding.” = emphasize the job’s extremely physical demands.
      word choice “…sort of jobs…” = types of jobs
      interruption commas “…possessing cultural and religious restrictions…” = , possessing cultural and religious restrictions,

        1. Nice content. Score 6.5
          missing comma “…these languages, while I strongly…”
          2nd Conditional “…the world would be homogeneous and there would be no factor…”
          missing sentence ” Since Language is considered to be an important part of any society that enables people to communicate and express themselves, their customs, and traditions,” … (?)

  73. There seems to be an increasing trend towards assessing students through exams rather than continual assessment. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

    Nowadays, more schools have placed a premium on regular exams to evaluate students rather than the method of continuous assessment. Although exams are considered as a standardized way to assess students around the world which is beneficial, they might cause some drawbacks associated with pupils’ health and performance.

    To begin with, one of the significant advantages of regular exams is that results can be compared nationally or even internationally due to the fact that this is known as a standardized and controlled way of assessing students all over the world. Thus, all students would be judged fairly in this way. Take the IELTS exam as an example that its questions are reviewed by experienced exam makers so that scoring is simplified. Regularly analyzed feedbacks could be mentioned as another positive aspect of exams. This way, both teachers and students are able to improve their performance. To explain, teachers can monitor their teaching method throughout checking students’ mistakes and plan more effectively for further semesters. Students also can focus on their mistakes in order to prevent repeating them in the next exams.

    Despite the above-mentioned benefits, exams may have some disadvantages. Firstly, a person’s potential cannot be assessed in an exam because the process of one’s progress can be evaluated through continual assessments during the whole period of studying, not only by one final exam at the end of the term. For another, the majority of individuals suffer from stress during exams leading to performing worse than usual. Therefore, it is not fair to rate individuals’ abilities and knowledge just by one exam when they may not perform their best under such stressful conditions.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the pros and cons, it seems that generally, regular exams have far more benefits compared to minor drawbacks in terms of the stress level of students affecting their performance. In my view, the slight negative impacts could be decreased if schools combine these two methods.

    1. Score 7. Great sentence variety
      simple present – routine “Thus, all students can be judged fairly in this way… Regularly analyzed feedback can be…” (feedback is uncountable)
      a referent works better here “Take the IELTS exam as an example, where questions are reviewed by experienced exam markers to simplify scoring.”

  74. Some people think schools should group pupils according to their academic ability, but others believe pupils with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Nowadays, in light of the recent change in the public’s attitude towards children’s rights, new concerns have been raised in the case of streaming. Some people believe that students should be separated based on their academic skills while there is another argument, including mine, that objects to the former idea.

    On the one hand, those, who argue that streaming is beneficial, stand out the learning pace as the first and foremost reason. To explain, students can learn at the same pace when they are at the same level. This way, not only those who are weaker and need more time to understand the course are not left behind but also advanced-level students might have this opportunity to study more difficult and complicated lessons more quickly. Another factor is related to psychological effects in this regard. Grouping students according to their intelligence level could be advantageous for students with less ability because they do not feel inadequate which may result in strengthening their self-confidence.

    On the other hand, I am of the opinion that streaming would have more detrimental impacts on both pupils’ progress and their behavior. This kind of students labeling might make low-level students lose their interest and confidence to continue studying as well as their interpersonal skills. In contrast, when all students learn together in a mixed-ability class, smarter ones could both help lower groups and be the inspiration for them in order to encourage them to challenge themselves. As a result, the whole class level could be elevated. Moreover, students have this chance to hone their social skills such as helping others in addition to improving their academic skills.

    In conclusion, although streaming might be helpful in some aspects, in my view, the benefits of mixed-ability classes outweigh in terms of boosting both academic and social abilities which could prepare students better for their future.

    1. Score 6.5 – much better with the subordinating conjunctions, but your inversion and simple present have let you down.
      Inversion = “This way, not only are those who are weaker and need more time to understand the course not left behind but also advanced-level students might have this opportunity to study more difficult and complicated lessons more quickly.”
      Routine situation = simple present = “… that streaming has more detrimental impacts on both pupils’ progress and their behavior…smarter ones can both help…level can be elevated” (You would only use the second conditional here if you were being asked to support, or oppose a pending decision)

  75. Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both view and give and give your opinion.

    In today’s modern age, in light of recent revolution in technology, new concerns have been raised in the case of robotic systems which is used in array of fields. This technology has its pros and cons like any new technology. From some groups’ view, it would have some disadvantages; however, I mostly agree with another argument that points out the beneficial aspects of the robots.

    On the one hand, those claiming that robots may have more negative impacts, stand out unemployment as the most notable factor. To explain, due to the advancement in robotic science, more and more companies tend to use robots rather than human labors. Not only are robots cost efficient but they also have more efficiency compared to humans. For instance, companies’ expenditure could be dramatically decreased when they use robots as their workers. This way, factory owners do not have to pay for things such as staff salaries, food preparation, uniforms, and transportation services. Moreover, robots can work 24/7 without distraction or the need for rest. As a result, they could be considered as highly productive employees compared to humans.

    On the other hand, there are several reasons why robots would be more advantageous for future society. For one, in recent decades, with the help of robots, human beings are able to do a number of things that would be impossible before. For instance, thanks to robotic systems, space explorations are now available, or in the field of medical science, doctors now have this ability to cure more severe diseases, do more complex surgeries, and save more lives. Secondly, robots are more efficient and practical in some dangerous situations like natural disasters where humans cannot operate well such as fires, floods, and earthquakes.

    In conclusion, although using robots might raise concerns in some aspects, I firmly believe that the benefits of this technology outweigh its disadvantages especially in the field of medical and space sciences.

    1. Score 6.5
      Watch your woulds and coulds.
      You need a comma when connecting phrases with ‘not only… but also’ – “Not only are robots cost efficient, but they also have more efficiency compared to humans.” (no phrase, no comma – Not only do I love ice-cream but also chocolate.)

      1. Thank you so much dear Angela. I didn’t aware of using a comma when connecting phrases with ‘not only… but also’. I learn a new and useful thing.

  76. Dear Mr. Edward Smith,

    I recently read the news in our alumni newsletter of you retiring from the Harvard Management Institute in the coming fall season. I always wanted to formally express my gratitude for the immense contributions you have made to the students’ lives including myself.

    I always enjoyed your lectures, teaching pedagogy, and willingness to guide students through the nuances of operations management. Sir, your impeccable skills in handling case studies in a large group not only allowed everyone to learn the fine technicalities but also helped different people to present their viewpoints with ease.

    I could confidently tell you that I owe a significant portion of my success as a supply chain digital transformation leader to your teachings. For Instance, I could successfully apply the concepts of the strategic containment of supply chain bullwhip effect for various clients in the Consumer Packaged Goods industry, a primary focus of your thesis.

    It was my privilege to complete two different courses and a project under your guidance. I hope to keep in touch and will continue to seek your advice.

    Yours Sincerely,
    George Swann

  77. Despite improvements in vehicle technology, there are still large numbers of road accidents. Explain some of the causes of these accidents, and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem.

    Road accidents rate is on the rise these days, in spite of the significant advancement in the transportation systems and safe-driving technologies available for cars. There are several reasons behind this issue such as human errors and road conditions, but in my view, with the joint effort of both government and citizens, this problem could be tackled.

    There are two notable factors associated with car accidents. The first and foremost one is drivers’ negligence. To explain, some careless drivers use mobile phones when driving that causes distraction and this may lead to car crashes. Another mistake is driving while one is tired, sleepy, or drunk. In such a situation, they cannot focus on driving and therefore are not able to react properly in time which may result in accidents. Road and highways’ infrastructures could be mentioned as a second important factor. Improving visibility, appropriate signs, and road lightings have a great share in reducing accidents. For instance, placing appropriate and standard signs such as speed limit signs in the areas of schools and hospitals could prevent a number of road accidents.

    In order to decrease the car crashes figure, some measures could be taken by the governments. For one, authorities should put effort and money into standardizing roads by installing more speed cameras, signs, and proper lighting supplies. Moreover, governments could raise individuals’ awareness about safe-driving rules and methods. On the other hand, they could enforce stricter laws such as high fines for those who do not obey the rules as a possibly effective way to make them follow the rules and drive carefully.

    In conclusion, although car technologies are improved, road accidents are still at a high rank. A number of reasons such as the conditions of the roads and drivers’ mistakes would result in car accidents. However, this can be declined with the help of the government to raise public awareness, and improve roads and highways.

    1. Score 7 – “However, this can be mitigated with the help of the government to raise public awareness, and improve roads and highways.”
      comma- ” distraction, and this may lead to car crashes.”

  78. Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

    Nowadays, in light of the significant changes in people’s lifestyle, celebrating more costly and greater wedding ceremonies have become more common among the young compared to the past. There are several reasons behind this trend that two of which will be discussed further. In my opinion; however, it does have some positive aspects associated with creating job opportunities, its negative effects, which lead to financial issues and social tensions, are greater.

    On the one hand, the media and advertisements of wedding companies play an important role in spreading this trend. Firstly, these days, due to the technology development and the internet, almost all individuals around the globe have access to social media, share their experiences, and follow their favorite celebrities. This will raise people’s expectations to follow such luxurious lifestyles because they think it will make them socially superior. Another factor is the impact of wedding companies that offer a variety of services from choosing the location, designing the decoration, and preparing the food to sending the invitation card to the guests which could be mentioned as a positive aspect resulting in improving business contributing in these fields. The advertisements of such companies and the various packages they offer make people more willing to use these services to celebrate one of the most important days of their lives.

    On the other hand, one of the reasons why bigger and more expensive weddings are negative for society is the high cost of such ceremonies that not only does affect young couples but also their families financially. They are forced to borrow and pay installments for a long time, and this can lead to dissatisfaction between them. Another downside is the social tensions. For example, in a society where most people have a low income, seeing such luxury parties leads to more class differences and tensions.

    In conclusion, the media and wedding designers have a great impact on the popularity of this trend. Although such a trend has some advantages in terms of improving job opportunities in some related fields, in my view, the problems it creates financially and socially outweigh the positive aspects.

    1. Score 6.5. Gorgeous parallel, but your inversion should read:”…such ceremonies; not only does that affect young couples financially, but also their families.”
      Use more subordinating conjunctions.

  79. Shubham kathiriya

    Que.
    Some believe that because everyone need a place to live, governments should provide houses for those who are too poor to afford their own.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Ans.
    In this modern era, thousands of people are suffering from poverty and homelessness in the planet. Few people deem that numerous individuals like to live in their own house so higher-authority should provide houses to needy people who are in need and can not afford house. I partially agree with this notion.

    To start with, there are some advantages of providing a house to a non-wealthy people. The biggest merit is every human beings get their houses and the result of it poor can get a safer environment from accidents and other health ailments. Moreover, many needy individuals suffer from various health problems like obesity, diabetes, TB and so on because of uncleanliness of roads and areas. For instance, according to a report of New York Times, around 13% of total population in this globe does not have their own houses. The another Plus is that, plethora of people can not afford houses because of high price so government can provide a subsidies so they can purchase a home.

    There are also have some disadvantages of providing a house. The first and foremost demerit is poverty-stricken will not try to do a work because government supply every essential things which are useful for proper nutrition. For example, in many nations human beings do not do any work after getting good services from the local council. The last but not least, if government provide home to all poor people than they suffer from a lack of funds because a huge amount of citizens in some countries does not pay tex to a government.

    To conclude, there are several benefits and limitations of providing a house to poor people but the government try to give subsidies or other installment scheme so that it is beneficial for both regem as well as to local people.

  80. today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion .

    In previous generations , teenagers were having less stressful lives than the teenagers of generations of now a days . In the upcoming paragraphs I will discuss both sides of the argument as well as my opinion that inclines towards the latter .

    To commence with there are several reasons that can be attributed to the increased stressful lives of children of present generation . Firstly , children waste most of their time in playing with gadgets such as mobile phones , laptops and video games , as a result they become deprived of playing in natural environment with their fellow friends . Children have become isolated in their homes because of excessively involved in playing with technological gadgets as a result they are less mentally developed so , they get stressed easily . Secondly , now a days schools give increased amount of homework and project work on daily basis which makes children equipped with hectic schedule , as a result they do not get sufficient time for personal activities such as physical exercises due to which sometimes they become overweight and becomes more stressed .

    On the contrary, the stronger opinion is more considerable due to several factors . Primarily , teenagers of previous generations were more active in playing activities because at that time there was no technological advancement , so student spent most of their time in playing ground which helped in their social development and mental development due to which they did not get stressed . Secondly , schools at that time did not gave excessive homework and assignments on daily basis due to which teenagers were not deeply concerned with educational activities as a result they had sufficient time for personal work such as physical exercises and other creative activities which helped in their overall development which helped them to never get stressed out .

    In conclusion , although the teenagers of present generation have more stressful lives because of excessively engrossed in technological gadgets and because of increased homework that is given by school teachers to the students are legitimate in any perspective

    1. Score 6.5. Watch your tenses.
      There shouldn’t be space before commas and periods. “…they did not get stressed. Secondly, schools at…”

  81. Que.
    Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy thing. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.
    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    Ans.
    In this competitive epoch, ads plays a crucial role. Few individuals told that adverts are extremely successful to forcing human beings to purchase a goods while rest of the people believe that person’s avoid to watch an advertising. The primary reason why I deem that ads provide a greater source of information about products. This essay will discuss both these considerations in the ensuring paragraphs.

    There are many reasons why individuals support Adverts. The biggest reason is it provides numerous data about material. To expand, it acquires a contains about nutritious and ingredients when they compare goods. Another advantage is citizens can not only learn about company’s product but also the price of the other firms for the same items. For example, according to the report of New York Times, around 70% of world’s population watch advertisement and compare prices of various industries. Last but not least, a good deal of mankind got employment in advertising or marketing sectors.

    On the flip side, dozens amount of people does not like ads and strive to avoid. The first and foremost cause is that, now Adverts are in almost every places like in social media, Newspaper, radio, televisions and so on. So individuals frustrated from it. For instance, 26% of populations in the planet thanks ads seems to be boring. Finally, huge amount of adverts are mention wrong data regarding firm or for the things.

    To recapitulate, advertisement have more benefits than cons but it is totally dependent on people’s preferences and their requirements.

    1. Score 6. Watch your articles, and identify your main ideas in the introduction. This sentence, “This essay will discuss both these considerations in the ensuring paragraphs.”, tells the examiner you haven’t planned your essay.

  82. What are the benefits and drawbacks of immigration and multicultural societies?

    Nowadays, in light of the fast-growing trend in immigration, we witness the presence of multiculturalism in a number of big cities around the world. Although multicultural societies might have numerous advantages in terms of more lifestyle options and open-mindedness, there are still some problems related to this concept such as social tensions and loss of cultural identity.

    The greater the cultural diversity, the richer the society. To explain, people living in cross-cultural countries will learn to respect other people’s beliefs. Children will also understand that all individuals are equal regardless of what religion they have or where they are from. Thus, the world would become more peaceful as a result of improving people’s awareness about other cultures. Another major benefit of living in a multicultural society is that different ideas, values, and habits can help people increase their quality of life. For example, when it comes to deciding how you want to live, what to eat, and what to wear, there is a wide range of opportunities to explore.

    Despite the above-mentioned advantages of multiculturalism, there are still some disadvantages associated with it. One problem would be different cultural backgrounds that can lead to tensions between people because some groups are narrow-minded, intolerant, and think that their way of life is the only valid one, so other people should follow their lifestyle. There is also another argument about losing the unique cultural identity of a community due to this diversity. Many immigrants, for instance, at the first stage of their life in a new country, are faced with merging into the new culture and learning a new language which may raise concerns about undermining identities.

    In conclusion, it seems that the further we go, the more multiculturalism develops, so the governments should put the effort into raising the awareness of their citizens about this case in order to get the most out of it.

    1. Score 6.5. You’re talking about a current benefits – realities, so there’s no need for the first or second conditional. It should read:
      “… people living in cross-cultural countries learn to respect other people’s beliefs. Children develop an understanding that all individuals are equal regardless of their religion or where they are from. Thus, the world becomes more peaceful as a result of improving people’s awareness about other cultures…

      …Despite the above-mentioned advantages of multiculturalism, there are still some disadvantages associated with it…

  83. Online shopping is increasing dramatically. How could this trend affect our environment and the kinds of jobs required?

    Nowadays, in light of the development of technology and the internet, online shopping as a fast-growing trend has become more common among people. This trend has both positive and negative effects on the environment and the job market that I will further mention two of them.

    Regarding the environment, one obvious benefit of such a trend is reducing air pollution which plays an important role in global warming. To explain, individuals can purchase whatever they need and whenever they want just by a click on an online website. Thus, the number of private car journeys to stores would be significantly declined which leads to less consumption of fossil fuels and reduction of exhaust fumes. On the other hand, shopping on the internet and pop-up advertisements might encourage more people to buy more products which result in more packaging and more waste in addition to more plastic and paper usage. This might be considered as this trend’s negative impact on the environment due to the mass production of plastic wastes that take a long time to recycle.

    The increasing popularity of online shopping provides more job opportunities such as web designing, cyber police, and delivery service. This can boost the economy. Moreover, it will lead to more advances in technology and the field of IT. However, on the flip side, many people might lose their jobs such as salespeople, cashiers, and shopping center guards due to the prevalence of e-shopping, and this way, unemployment rates will rise.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the above-mentioned pros and cons, online shopping is both beneficial and harmful for the environment and employment and in my opinion, in the long run, if it is not managed properly, its negative effects will increase.

    1. Score 6.5 Watch for little errors! For example
      missing article “…which leads to less consumption of fossil fuels and a reduction of exhaust fumes.”
      agreement “…to buy more products which results in more packaging…” (the ‘singular’ act of buying is what results in more packaging)
      uncountable noun “…mass production of plastic waste that take a long time to recycle.”

  84. ĐÀO MINH ĐỨC

    People who live in the big cities face a lot of problems in their daily life. What are the
    main problems people in the cities face and how can these problems be dealt with?
    Over the past few years, living in urban areas has become a broad issue to the general public. Some people think that there are challenges in their normal life. In this essay, I will introduce two main reasons for living in big cities, and also two solutions to address the above problems.
    One of the most obvious problems is traffic jams which not only causes stress and tiredness but also lowers work productivity. For instance, in Hanoi city, employees often have to spend between 30 minutes and an hour sitting in traffic on their way to and from work. To solve the above difficulties, the local government should encourage people using the public transports and invest in the quality of the road system. For example, the HaNol government built the Cat Linh-Ha Dong railway system with modern train and chip cost, this led to more and more people using urban transport to work.
    Another problem which people living in urban areas face is real estate. Nowadays, the price of rent in big cities has increased many times compared to before, so it is difficult for people with low incomes to buy it. For example, to buy a 100 square meter in Da Nang city, people spend over 2 billion dong. To solve the problem, local councils need to increase the supply of real estate which, according to the law of supply and demand, can put downward pressure on prices.
    In conclusion, various steps could be taken in order to solve traffic congestion and real property, which are the two main problems facing urban life.

  85. Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extend do you agree?

    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

    You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

    Breakthroughs in the entertainment industry have already brought about tremendous changes in all walks of human life, the world over. In today’s world, people can watch anything, anytime, anywhere. This probably saves time and cost. In this essay, I would discuss the advantage and effects of avoiding live performances and seeing it on other options like TV, Laptop, and Computer.
    In todays’ era, in terms of pastime, everyone’s priorities has been changed. They prefer to utilize their time on other things. This results in, people starting watching entertainment through other ways. It would help them to save their cost and time such as transportation time, saving money on food and traveling. They do not have to spare extra time to entertain themselves. For instance, nowadays people like to watch cricket matches with their friends at home, it would helps them to enjoy freely, cheer with them, and eat homely food. Moreover, they do not have to spend extra time to purchase tickets and entering venue a few hours early from the match. Therefore, younger generation now inclined toward electronic mean for seeing acts.
    Information technology has been changing dynamically in last few decades. Human beings adapting these changing and habitual to it. They want to more and more familiarise themselves with modern ways of living and shows their status in society as well as maintain social symbol. In addition, entertainment providers has been launching their new programs on TV, so that, more audience can be attracted and more money can be earned.
    In conclusion, as per my point of view, watching entertaining acts through screen play is a better way to save money and hours on it. This method helps us to enjoy these acts while doing other work, example, traveling to work, doing household chores.

  86. The world should have one government rather than a national government for each country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

    It is argued by some groups that the world should be governed by a unified government; however, there is another argument stating that each country should have its own authority. Although the former view would be beneficial in some global aspects, in my perspective, it might give rise to more problems in terms of the independence and freedom of each country.

    To begin with, the first and foremost advantage of a central government is that in some large-scale global issues such as climate change, it can act more effectively. To explain, when the world has only one global government enacting laws, all countries have to obey those rules. As a result, the united power could better protect the environment. Take global warming as an example, which is a controversial issue these days in every region in the world. If there is a rule that bans using fossil fuels in each country or even supports all nations to use more environmentally-friendly resources, such global issues would be tackled in a more effective way.

    Nonetheless, in reality, it might be impossible to manage the whole world by only one government due to the fact that this globe consists of diverse nations, each of which has its unique ideologies, cultures, and beliefs. These features make an area distinguish from others. Therefore, to correctly govern each nation, people who are aware of the specifics of that country are needed. So, one global government may never be able to understand all these differences. On the other hand, the control of the whole world by a single power can destroy the independence and freedom of any country because each country and its citizens have their own unique habits, customs, and lifestyles. Thus, not everyone can be forced to follow a certain procedure. This way they lose their freedom.

    In conclusion, the unified power may have some benefits in protecting the globe through the joint effort of all nations, but in my point of view, in the real world, this may not be possible in addition to creating risks in terms of the loss of unique features of each country.

    1. Score 6.5. Use the second conditional when you, personally, don’t control the outcome: “If there was a rule that bans using fossil fuels in each country or even supports all nations to use more environmentally-friendly resources, such global issues would be tackled in a more effective way.

  87. The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree?
    Differences between generations sometimes bring out a controversy, these are about how the elderly people expect younger ones act and live. They think tradition lifestyle should preserve and it is the best for people to live in. On the other hand there are a group of people who I totally agree with them, they believe that traditional believes are not useful anymore for modern life. I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
    On the one hand, in the past there were some behaviors considered as ethically although nowadays they are very strange and not reasonable. As communities are thriving and they have changed their legally rules, I believe ethically rules will change too. For instance; my ancestors believed guests are sacred people and so our tradition insist if a stranger knock your door and want to be your guest you should invite him the give the best of everything you have in your home. In the modern world these kind of behavior not even is not ethical, it is not logical too. If the younger people decide to act like elderly which moral was their primary goals, perhaps they will put their lives into a big troubles.
    On the other hand, there are so many behaviors that even some people like them and want to keep them completely but the modern lifestyle does not let them. While some behavior are desirable for everyone they are totally related to the nature of humans, new society force people to do against them. Take cooking as a simple example; it is not like before at all, there are so many couple that they have to work all day long, therefore, they may choose different options for their meals instead of traditional meals which took so many hours to cook. All in all, people have to choose between make a progress in modern life or living with traditional rules which they enjoy of them.
    In conclusion, some people from past generations wanted to persuade youngers to behave and live as the as them. I believe it is not possible anymore because some of the traditions are not reasonable and others even though they are fascinating, does not worth it.

  88. An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments.
    What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

    You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

    Breakthroughs in education services have brought about tremendous changes in the lives of all people, the world over. The Education department introduced new change by study with an electronic means such as computer, laptop, tablet, to avoid carrying heavy books by students to school. Even though this trend has many advantages, but also has some disadvantages like a health issues. In this essay, I would discuss both aspects.

    In today’s era, everyone wants to adopt modern technology and amend their living status according to it. These trends help pupils and teaching methods in many ways. Firstly, they do not have to carry heavy-loaded books to school and their shoulder would not be affected by it. Secondly, electronic means help students to share books, study materials, easily, anywhere, without any major mistake in them. For instance, in the COVID-19 situation in India, the government has started a facility of online teaching, whereas every student can access the online portal of school, and their teachers would take classes on an everyday basis, likewise offline schools. This trend helps them to achieve this goal easily without affecting the study of the children and save their time.

    Even this technique has many benefits, one cannot deny the fact that this also has many problems. The biggest problem is the health of the younger generation has been deteriorating on a daily basis, as they have to focus on their computer for hours, without resting, resulting in, weak eyesight, cervical, and backbone issues. In addition, it is not a reliable method to conduct exams. The faculty as well as a junior are not taking the exam seriously. The younger ones can easily access the answers in Google or the other sites, resulting, scores that are not according to their capability.

    In conclusion, this trend has many pros and cons, in my opinion, we have to adopt new technology and methods of teaching. This would help education departments as well as the nation to be on par with other countries.

  89. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

    Some people believe that economically developed nations are supposed to distribute their earnings amongst countries that are starving for basic necessities, while many others assume that it is the responsibility of the latter’s government to take care of their subjects themselves. In my opinion, a balanced mix of both actions will result in enabling people of the respective countries to lead better lives.

    Economically stable countries are one in which people already lead a comfortable lifestyle. People of those nations have access to every human need and are advanced in terms of technology, medicine, education. The facilities found are so much in abundance that they don’t have a situation of scarcity. During such scenarios, these richer countries should turn around to check the status of developing nations, reach out to those in need to create a balance. The bureaucrats of the developed nations should conduct regular meetings and conferences with the leaders of under-developed and developing nations, to talk about their needs and allocate money and infrastructure accordingly. Such discussions will enable the upliftment of education, technology, and other facilities in the poorer nations.

    Though the aforementioned looks very promising and helpful to enhance those nations, there is a possibility of dependency getting created. Once a country has received money or structural enhancements, the leaders might consider this as an opportunity to loot the wealthier nations of their money, facilities, food supply, etc. Moreover, this will also encourage laziness amongst the poorer governments, and also their citizens, thus killing innovation and the drive for change.

    To conclude, the countries facing economic crises and becoming poorer should be helped in a balanced nature by the wealthier countries. Richer counterparts should provide suggestions and room for improvements, but restrict themselves from completely providing all the opportunities, money, education, and technological needs, so as not to make the poorer nations handicapped.

    1. Score 7. Super. Watch your use of will. If the situation you’re describing is always true, you should use the simple present.

  90. Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Due to the development of technology and the internet in recent years, it has been frequently stated that people can easily access detailed information about other nations through online sources instead of traveling to those countries. There is no doubt that the internet brings about numerous benefits in expanding our knowledge about other countries; however, in my perspective, such information is not adequate to completely understand a foreign lifestyle, cultures, and traditions.

    First of all, it is generally thought that the information resources available on the Internet enable everyone to discover the world from their homes, but it is worth mentioning that all online documents are not correct and reliable. Moreover, most of the time, these resources only cover certain areas and do not provide a complete picture of that country. Take Iran as an example consisting of diverse groups of individuals who have different religions, customs, dialects, and even foods. Nonetheless, on the Internet, only the most well-known sections are covered and little information is available from the rest.

    Secondly, in my opinion, traveling is much more than just a simple visual experience. Full HD images cannot be compared to a real experience of meeting new people and visiting new places in person. Such first-hand experiences can only be gained through travel. In other words, we could learn more about other nations when we spend time with them. For instance, tasting a new food or attending to those nations’ celebrations cannot replace just seeing the picture or reading about those foods or celebrations.

    In conclusion, all the content available online is neither true nor enough to understand how other nations live. Therefore, I believe that visiting foreign countries is necessary if one would like to find out more about their customs, traditions, and lifestyles.

    1. Lovely. Score 7.5
      Watch your parallel – These should all be plural “…foreign lifestyles, cultures, and traditions”
      Watch your connections “…are neither correct nor reliable.”

  91. Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    In today’s modern world, in light of the significant advances in science and technology, new arguments have been raised among people in the case of technological effects on the quality of life. Some groups believe that these advancements lead to widening the gap between the poor and the rich while others have a different view. In my opinion, there are far more important factors involved in such an issue than technological development such as government policies and economic conditions.

    First of all, although technology brings about numerous benefits to human life, there are a number of up-to-date products which are limited to wealthy people because of high costs. For instance, top-class gadgets, smartphones, and computers are highly costly so that they might be available only to high-income groups. Modern medical technologies and producing new and more effective drugs could be mentioned as other examples due to the fact that providing such facilities requires huge investments. Thus, the provided services are also expensive and there is no guarantee for those with low income to access these services even if they spend all of their savings and earnings which could result in increasing the gap between social classes.

    On the other hand, thanks to the internet, which is accessible in almost all regions in the world, these days, more individuals could benefit from the latest information and products, regardless of they are in developing countries, rural areas, or developed urban areas. Take e-learning opportunities as an example which provides equal opportunities all around the world for every person. Online shopping facilities could be mentioned as another positive impact of technology. Not only because of creating more job opportunities but also for raising the standard of living as a result of accessibility to more high-quality products for everyone leading to decreasing the class differences.

    In conclusion, apart from some types of modern and expensive facilities, which are not accessible to all individuals, I firmly believe that if authorities implement appropriate policies in order to provide needed infrastructures for new technologies, economic situations could be improved in addition to bridging the gap between wealthy and poor people.

    1. Score 7
      missing comma “…between the poor and the rich, while others have…”
      “… are highly costly, so they might be available only to high-income group…”
      missing connection “…regardless of whether they are in developing countries, rural areas, or developed urban areas
      missing gerund “Acquiring modern medical technologies and producing new and more effective drugs…”

  92. Do the benefits of tourism outweigh the drawbacks?

    Nowadays, due to the fast-growing trend in the tourism industry, new concerns have raised in the case of its pros and cons. Although international holiday-making might have some disadvantages, it seems to me that economically and culturally its positive effects would outsmart the negative ones if it is well-managed.

    First of all, to the majority of tourists, culture and history are what they first consider when choosing a destination. To explain, culture can differentiate one country from others and attracts foreign visitors which leads to high income. This could be considered as another advantage due to the fact that not only does tourism provide economic incentives for local people, in terms of creating more job opportunities in different areas such as hotels and entertainment, but it also can make an indigenous culture known to the world that undermining of the countries’ identities, in this way, could be prevented.

    On the other hand, the above-mentioned benefits from another perspective could be a source of problems if there is no proper policy and organized plan. For instance, when a historic site is accessible to the public, visitors from all over the world flock there. As a result, historical buildings might be damaged by a large number of tourists. Another negative impact of the tourist trade is associated with environmental problems. Take nature and picturesque landscapes as an example that are destroyed at the cost of building more hotels and other needed infrastructures for tourists. Loss of traditional jobs can be mentioned as another drawback because local people tend to work in the tourist industry.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the benefits and negative sides of tourism, in my opinion, by appropriate management, the advantages of it consisting of economic and cultural growth can outweigh the disadvantages.

    1. Super. Score 6.5
      Some of your sentences are getting a bit long – the longer the sentence the greater the risk of errors.

      “This could be considered as another advantage due to the fact that not only does tourism provide economic incentives for local people, in terms of creating more job opportunities in different areas such as hotels and entertainment, but also increases awareness of indigenous cultures and prevents the undermining of countries’ identities.” (When you use the “not only…but also…” connection, there’s no second subject (it).

  93. Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success, others believe that there are other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    Happiness is difficult to define due to the fact that it is different for each person depending on their personality, perspective, and circumstances in life. Some people argue that money is the most important factor to achieve happiness while there is another argument that raises other aspects of life associated with joy which I agree with the latter view and further, will mention two reasons supporting my opinion.

    First of all, there is no doubt that money plays a vital role in living a happy life, although it is different according to one’s situation and lifestyle. Take low-income groups as an example who might feel happier when they can meet their basic needs such as a safe place to live or some food to eat, but this would be altered for those who are wealthy because buying expensive cars or some branded gadgets, for instance, may bring them a sense of joy.

    On the other hand, a number of individuals including me believe that there are numerous reasons involving happiness such as having a family and being healthy. Firstly, an individual experiences a more enjoyable life when he has the support of his family and loved ones and spends his money for their happiness. Health is considered as another notable factor which leads to a more joyful life because losing health can be a source of unhappiness. To explain, if you get sick, you cannot enjoy the simple pleasures of life, such as tasting delicious food, exercising, traveling, and having fun with your loved ones, in addition to having to spend more money to regain your health.

    In conclusion, the importance of money to have a happier life cannot be ignored; however, from my point of view, it depends on each person how he finds happiness in his life because there are an array of factors such as health and family which leads to more joyfulness.

  94. It has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalization outweigh its drawbacks?

    Nowadays, due to the development of technology and recent advances in science, it has been frequently stated that we live in a globalized world in which it is far easier to communicate and trade between countries. Although globalization has some benefits, there might be more disadvantages associated with this trend.

    To begin with the positive sides, globalization can lead to economic growth through foreign trade and create more job opportunities. Big companies, for instance, tend to set up new branches in developing countries where cheaper raw materials and labor are available. Moreover, the developing nations are given a chance to develop their countries through the help of developed countries in diverse fields such as medical, education, and transportation.

    Despite the above-mentioned advantages, I am of the opinion that globalization might have more destructive effects. Eliminating local cultures and languages could be considered as the first and foremost drawback. To explain, with the advent of a new culture and lifestyle, people, especially the younger ones, tend to follow it. Take the way they dress, talk and even celebrate, as examples that may result in the loss of many native languages or traditional cuisines around the world. Another disadvantage contributes to environmental problems in less-developed countries which are caused as a result of a huge amount of toxic, and non-recyclable waste products in addition to natural resources consumption by chain companies.

    In conclusion, there is no doubt that globalization might bring a number of benefits, but in the absence of the necessary infrastructure and monitoring and control over how this process is done, it might result in devastating effects on societies, especially developing countries, in terms of removing their unique culture and local customs.

  95. Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Nowadays, in light of the recent change in the public attitude towards the needs of children, it has been frequently stated that in addition to the regular curriculum, some programs in order to learn practical skills need to be offered by schools. I would agree with this view for two reasons which I will discuss further.

    First of all, in my perspective, practical skill subjects help school-going children how to make informed decisions, solve problems, and communicate effectively in their real life. Take young people graduating from school as an example that they possess excellent scores but do not know how to manage their lives, build healthy relationships, or handle their financial issues. These are too common problems that to solve, parents and schools should play an active role in preparing children for the future. For example, how to effectively manage money could be taught in math and economics classes alongside the core course.

    Secondly, it is generally thought that Learning life skills helps the youth understand who they are and what they want out of life. Since Life is a series of decisions, ranging from big ones like who to spend your life with, or what career to choose to small ones, it is important for students to learn how to make confident and well-informed decisions. Moreover, improving these skills also boosts their self-confidence.

    In conclusion, due to the above-mentioned reasons in terms of developing essential life skills which lead to developing children’s character to have a better future, I agree with the opinion that teaching practical skills in schools is beneficial.

  96. Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.

    These days, due to the recent change in the public’s attitude towards animals’ rights, new concerns have been raised in the case of keeping animals in zoos. Some people are of the opinion that keeping animals in captivity at the zoo is not morally right while there is another argument that zoos can be beneficial in some aspects.

    First of all, those who are against caging animals in zoos point out some drawbacks. For one, they argue that holding animals in captivity is wrong because not only are the cages often too small for animals but also zoos are artificial environments that restrict an animal’s natural behavior. Some animals, besides, suffer cruelty at the hands of some zookeepers or visitors, and following this way, people do not learn to respect animals if they are held behind bars.

    On the other hand, it might be true that there are some disadvantages associated with zoos but they have a number of benefits. Firstly, zoos provide a safe environment for endangered species as well as some rehabilitation programs for animals going back to the wild due to the fact that as a result of deforestation, overhunting, and poaching an array of animals are in danger of extinction these days. Secondly, zoos provide opportunities for people to have contact with wild animals. Take scientists as an example who would be able to study animals behaviour more easily which help them to protect various types of animals in addition to saving time and money.

    In conclusion, keeping animals in zoos could be considered as a benefit in terms of protecting endangered animals and providing studying opportunities, whereas some groups disagree with such a view.

    1. Nice. 7.5
      Corrections
      “…deforestation, overhunting, and poaching, an array of animals are…”
      “…who would be able to study animals behaviour more easily which would help them to protect…”

  97. many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

    It is true that an array of habitual criminals tend to commit crimes repeatedly after punishment. This might be because of the difficulty finding a job when they are released and the negative effect of other offenders in prison. However, this issue could be addressed by the joint effort of the public and governments.

    To begin with, among numerous reasons leading to recommitting crime, two factors stand out most. First would be the fact that people with a criminal record are often not accepted by society. In other words, not many companies or employers are willing to employ ex-convicts which makes finding a job more difficult and they are unable to find paid employment to meet their basic needs. On the other hand, in prison, offenders mix with other criminals who can have a negative influence especially on younger law-offenders or those who are imprisoned for petty crimes. Those criminals, as a result, are involved in breaking laws again.

    Nevertheless, there are several feasible solutions to this problem. In order to reduce the crime rate, firstly, rehabilitation programs in prisons should be offered by governments. For example, prisons could provide educational and vocational training for offenders to learn new skills which help criminals not only to return to the community but also to make the right choices in life. Secondly, the authorities by adopting appropriate policies to raise public awareness about different aspects of any crime and its punishments in addition to rise supervision on released criminals can prevent people to commit crimes.

    In conclusion, it is clear that any ex-criminal has the potential to re-offend but if governments implemented the above-mentioned solutions, this problem would decrease significantly.

    1. Score 7. Watch your punctuation:
      – “Secondly, the authorities, by adopting appropriate policies to raise public awareness about different aspects of any crime and its punishments in addition to rise supervision on released criminals, can prevent people to commit crimes.
      – In other words, not many companies or employers are willing to employ ex-convicts which makes finding a job more difficult, so they are unable to find paid employment to meet their basic needs.

  98. People these days watch TV, films and other programmes alone rather than with other people. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

    Nowadays, in light of the significant changes in an individual’s recreational habits, watching movies and other TV shows alone without a group of friends and family has become more common among people. In my opinion, this trend has an overall negative effect in spite of the benefits it may offer.

    First of all, watching films by oneself might bring about a sense of convenience and more flexibility to a person as an advantage because one feels free to choose the appropriate genre which interests one the most instead of having to consider everyone’s opinions. To explain, age and gender could be considered as two important factors involving different preferences when it comes to selecting the content to watch. Take males as an example who tend to mostly watch sports games, or follow news on TV in contrast to dramas, or cooking shows which are highly preferred by females.

    Despite the above-mentioned beneficial side of this trend, in my point of view, the drawbacks could outnumber the positive aspects. One detrimental effect of watching TV programs lonely would be declining social interactions which may result in depression and also weakening bonds between family members, or friends. The reason is that humans as social creatures need to improve their communication skills by interacting with each other in order to make friends and broaden their horizons to better understand each other which such an opportunity could be provided by gathering to watch a film. Another negative impact of seeing films alone regarding children is the inappropriate content of some programs that might be harmful to them. Therefore, when parents accompany their children to watch a film not only do they keep an eye on what their child watches but also both have this chance to spend more time together leading to strengthening their family bonds.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the pros and cons, although watching TV shows alone has benefits in terms of personal choice, the disadvantages related to social interaction and morally pernicious effects make it a negative on the whole.

  99. More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country.
    Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

    A tendency to study abroad for higher education has been increased among an array of students in recent years. Although there are some disadvantages to this decision, I am of the opinion that its advantages outweigh its drawbacks.

    On the one hand, studying in a foreign country might lead to creating some problems such as the lack of family support and culture shock. A number of students may feel homesick when living far from their home and miss their beloved ones resulting in negative effects on their study process. Moreover, not all students especially youngsters, who are highly dependent on their parents, can thrive away from their home and family support. Another disadvantage that students may suffer from is struggling to adapt to a new culture and learning a new language which brings about difficulties for newcomers associated with finding accommodation, obtaining medical care, and even finding a part-time job to cover their living expenses.

    On the other hand, one major benefit of continuing studying overseas is that students have access to superior facilities and tutors that not only lead to providing higher career opportunities in the future but also broadening their international connections while having the opportunity to meet people that could turn into life-long friends. A sense of independence could be considered as another beneficial side of choosing to study in a foreign country due to the fact that students have to overcome the challenges of living in another country and gain a greater understanding of the world.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the pros and cons, it seems to me that the benefits of studying abroad, in terms of higher-ranking universities, great opportunities for future careers, and also broadening one’s horizon do outnumber the drawbacks.

    1. Gorgeous! Score 8. Lovely parallels.
      Things to watch:
      Your first sentence should be present perfect continuous, not passive – “has been increasing among…”
      misplaced comma – “not all students, especially youngsters who are highly dependent on their parents, can thrive… (the commas surround the portion of the sentence that you can remove)

  100. Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

    Nowadays, in light of the significant changes in people’s lifestyles, new concerns have been raised in the area of human activities that lead to environmental problems such as the production of toxic and non-recyclable waste and deforestation. However, these issues can be addressed by a joint effort of both government and individuals.

    There are numerous factors which contribute to harming the environment but cutting down trees and the massive volume of waste could be mentioned as two main threats. The more world’s population growth, the more agricultural lands are needed that will be obtained at the cost of destroying forests. Moreover, excessive consumption of consumer goods leads to the production of more waste resulting in polluting the earth and oceans.

    The government can effectively participate to solve these problems. To explain, cutting down jungles needs to be banned by the governments and introducing better farming methods to preserve these valuable resources instead. Enforcing more effective laws regarding the proper disposal of waste for industries and also informing people about the importance of recycling in addition to how properly segregating their waste could be considered as other steps taken by the governments.

    Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the environment. Firstly, they can use those kinds of products having less packaging, or made from recycled characteristics. Secondly, they can replace plastic bags with cloth bags when shopping. Markets and malls, as another example, could promote the use of paper or cloth bags among their customers.

    In conclusion, humans are causing severe damages to the earth. Nevertheless, the above-mentioned problems could be effectively tackled if the authority and general populace play their respective role properly.

    1. Score high 6.5
      Things to watch:
      missing comma – “…harming the environment, but cutting down trees…”
      smoother with a parallel – “…leads to the production of more waste resulting in the pollution of the earth and oceans.
      clarity “To explain, cutting down jungles needs to be banned by the governments who should instead introduce better farming methods to preserve these valuable resources.
      parallel “… informing people about the importance of recycling and properly segregating their waste…”

  101. What are the benefits and drawbacks of immigration or multi-cultural societies?

    Nowadays, in light of the fast-growing trend in globalization, immigration has become more common among people all over the world which results in making more cross-cultural societies. This matter brings a number of advantages to a nation especially in terms of broadening individuals’ horizons and economic growth; however, it also has some disadvantages associated with Integration difficulties and loss of identity.

    To begin with, one of the major benefits of multi-cultural countries can be providing the opportunity to give individuals a broader picture of diverse cultures and lifestyles which leads to a more interesting life. To explain, various cultures generate diverse viewpoints and ideas which help people to better understand the world. Those from different cultural backgrounds not only contribute to the society in more creative ways but also help the multi-cultural society to boost its economy in terms of the tourism industry, or sharing knowledge and services.

    Despite the previously mentioned advantages, one notable disadvantage would be experiencing the culture shock when immigrants moving to a new country. Many of them, at the first stage of their life in a new place, are faced with merging into the new culture and are at crossroads whether to blend in with local culture or to cherish their own cultural heritage. Besides, it might not easy for all newcomers to observe the laws and social norms of their adopted country. The Language barrier could be considered as another challenge for immigrants because it affects the ability to communicate with others, which is vital for survival. It can create problems for newcomers, such as difficulty finding work, getting an education, obtaining medical care, and finding housing.

    In conclusion, having weighed up the pros and cons, since the migration rate has rising these days, if people know how to deal with the issues, it will be way helpful for both immigrants and locals to live a better world.

    1. Score high 6.5. Gorgeous parallel & sentence variety!

      but a couple of errors to watch for:
      agreement -“… which lead to a more interesting life.”
      tense – “when immigrants move…”
      agreement – “many of them, at the first stage of their lives in new places,…”
      tense – “…since the migration rate has been rising”
      conditional (zero conditional – statement of fact) – if people know… it is a more helpful way…”

      1. Dear Angela,
        Thank you so much for your detailed information.

        Would you please guide me in this agreement ” can be providing the opportunity to give individuals a broader picture of diverse cultures and lifestyles which leads to a more interesting life”? I thought that “which leads” related to “a broader picture” but as you mentioned that ” which lead” was the correct statement. Here, I guess it should relate to “diverse cultures and lifestyles” Am I right?

        1. Yes, that’s right. It’s the “diverse cultures and lifestyles which lead to (result in) a more interesting life.
          If “leads” was a little closer to “benefits” your meaning would be clearer – “To begin with, one of the major benefits of multi-cultural countries, which leads to a more interesting life, is the provision of opportunities that give individuals a broader picture of diverse cultures and lifestyles.

  102. What problems do children face in today’s world? What should we do to address or solve these problems?

    The conditions of today’s modern age make children more vulnerable and have created problems for them such as the dangers of the internet and the lack of parental attention; however, some measures could be taken to tackle these difficulties by parents and schools.

    Inappropriate games and websites on the Internet that negatively affects children’s behavior can be mentioned as the most serious problem. Children who are victims of cyberbullying, for example, may fall into severe depression. Computer games are also addictive, in addition to the violent content of some of them that might have a negative effect on children and cause them to neglect their homework. Another issue would be both parents working which leads to a lack of parental guidance. Most parents, these days, have to work full-time to make a better life for their family, so do not have the time available to care for their children sufficiently. As a result, they are less involved in their children’s upbringing.

    Raising children’s awareness of how to use the Internet properly and also its dangers by both parents and schools could be considered as a solution to decrease the negative impacts of the internet. Firstly, parents need to keep an eye on their children’s online activities and talk openly to them about the dangers involved in using the internet. Secondly, online safety should be taught in every school to help children recognize and report inappropriate online behaviors. The next step to make up for inadequate parental care is allocating much more time to younger ones by their parents. Children, indeed, need to have positive role models such as their parents and teachers. Thus, youngsters feel more comfortable and free to talk to their parents when they spend as much time as possible together engaging in diverse activities.

    In conclusion, today’s children’s issues such as the online risks and insufficient parental support will be solved if both parents and schools pay more attention to children and put effort into increasing their awareness.

  103. Some people say television contributes more than other modern inventions to the quality of life of ordinary people. Do you agree or disagree?

    It is said that Television plays important role in the life of ordinary people, while modern electronic gadgets does not contribute much for poor. I completely agree that TVs the basic need for the common people in society.

    Firstly, Television is extremely useful for the Family to get latest news updates. In an ordinary family, all members usually sit together on dinner table while watching television and enjoy the time. They cannot afford modern expensive mobile phones to get news update well Television gives them the cheapest mode of communication which is easily available to common people. Therefore, TV contributes to their knowledge of what is going on in the country and improves their life.

    Secondly, Television also contributes to the individual who wants to spend time watching various TV series. Family can enjoy this time together watching web series on television and can have their personal or business discussion as well. While it is costly to watch web series using mobile phones since that requires a smart phone with high-speed internet. They can save money by choosing television over modern technical products like Smart Watch, Smart Phones and Play station. Ordinary family cannot afford to buy those expensive products, although they can buy a Television at a very small price. And thus, television contributes to the life of common people in our society.

    In conclusion, we can say that Television is extremely useful invention for poor and ordinary people of society. Television being affordable compared to modern devices that are only used by rich people, there by contributes much to the life of every individual.

  104. Shopping habits depend more on your age group than anything else. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Shopping has become an integral part of everyone’s life. It is argued that age is playing a key role in this habit rather than other aspects; however, gender, money, and lifestyle, in my opinion, are as important as the age group people belong to.

    To begin with, there are numerous reasons behind an individual’s shopping habits. One of those would be age. Take children as an example who prefer purchasing toys such as dolls, cars, or high-tech equipment which are more popular among adolescents. Adults, in contrast, tend to buy more necessary things such as a house, a car, and also home appliances. These are viewed as an investment because elders are more provident than youngsters. On the other hand, different sexes possess diverse tendencies and priorities when shopping. To explain, females’ shopping range is mostly about necessities for the kitchen, cosmetics, and the demands of children like clothes and books, whereas males give priority to shop for things related to their job, and their own products such as vehicles. Thus, the age and interests of both genders influence their decision.

    Of the other factors which, in my view, play the greater role, money and lifestyle stand first. This is evident that everyone goes shopping in order to meet basic needs like food, clothes, and others, but people on a low income or middle-class ones focus more on vital demands while driving in a luxury car, shopping for expensive products, and famous brands are limited to certain groups leading a luxurious lifestyle and high income. So it is almost apparent that age is not the most notable matter.

    In conclusion, despite the differences in people’s tastes which stems from their age as well as gender, from my perspective, financial and social conditions affect far more the individual’s purchasing patterns.

        1. In a parallel, all list items start the same way. In this sentence, two of your items start with gerunds while the third starts with an adjective.
          “…while driving in a luxury car, shopping for expensive products, and ______ famous brands is limited to certain groups leading a luxurious lifestyle and high income.”

          By inserting ‘purchasing’, you get a smoother sentence:
          “…while driving in a luxury car, shopping for expensive products, and purchasing famous brands is limited to certain groups leading a luxurious lifestyle and high income.”

  105. In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problem will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging populations.

    In today’s modern world, humans’ lifespan has significantly increased than before due to many factors including improvement in education, economy, and public health. Although This trend has created some issues both for governments and the older population, possible steps could be taken to overcome these problems.

    On the one hand, many developed countries are dealing with burdens from their aging populations which have detrimental effects on the economy. This is because governments will have to spend most of the budget on the medical care of these people. To clarify, the older people get, the more physical and mental problems they have. Thus, governments need to allocate more human and financial resources to care for the elderly. Age increasing will also create problems for the elderly themselves as they often find it difficult to keep up with the latest technology. An automated banking system to pay bills, for example, requires computer knowledge and the use of the Internet.

    However, many solutions could be considered to solve these problems. Firstly, some educational programs should be designed for the older people and encouraged by the governments to help them how to use the internet and up-to-date technology that can benefit the aged population in their day-to-day life. Secondly, raising public awareness about the importance of health and exercise can prevent many diseases, as well as increase people’s productivity to lead a healthier lifestyle. With this procedure, less pressure is put on the economic system to provide health budgets.

    In conclusion, the growth of average life expectancy in developed countries is creating some problems for the nations and for the elderly themselves; however, if better preparation plans are made by governments for individuals, the negative impacts of these problems can be reduced.

    1. Score 7. The structure here is better. You could have outlined your solution in the introduction for a higher score.

  106. Thị Hằng Kiều

    It is thought that non-academic subjects are necessary for pupils at school. Others claim that they are just time-consuming. I agree that they may not help us much, we should not neglect them either. On one hand, I accept that art isn’t very helpful.

    Firstly, companies are now trying to seek for skilled employees who know well about science and linguistics, such as Maths, Literature, and English. So those subjects should be compulsory. My school can be an example for this. In my school, academic subjects are required and non-academic ones are optional. Secondly, good knowledge in natural science and social science is undoubtedly essential. Everyday tasks need them and art can’t help solve those tasks. My father is another good example. He’s a mathematician. And thanks to his competence in Maths, he manages to solve a lot of everyday problems.

    Despite so, I still believe that art is not to be counted out. For one thing, they help us develop social skills. Now, companies are not just trying to find someone competent in Maths for example, they also find people with good collaboration and confidence. These social skills can undeniably be improved through art lessons rather than a Literature lesson in a classroom. I had experienced something like that. Once, I was very shy, but through PE lessons, I gradually improved my shyness and finally it has gone away without my knowing it. Furthermore, subjects such as Music and Arts should be compulsory. If a school decides to remove them out of the must-study list, some students good at them will be denied their talent, and will not have any chances to develop their talent. For instance, if art had been abolished, we would never have the fortune to hear Mozart’s songs or see some amazing pictures from Picasso.

    In short, I accept that art may not be very helpful to us, it should not be neglected by any means.

  107. Behavior in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

    A complex issue which both schools and families face these days is a tendency to misbehave among school-going children. I think this is mainly due to the lack of trained staff, and family environment. However, there are measures that could be implemented to tackle these issues.

    The major factor contributing to pupils’ misconduct is the lack of awareness of up-to-date teaching methods among most teachers. There is no doubt that advanced technology and the internet are becoming integral parts of everyone’s life, nowadays. To explain, youngsters spend much of their time using smartphones, tablets, and computers which results in discouraging students in schools where lecturers deliver lessons with the help of a board and a pen. Thus, Investing more money by schools to provide high-tech equipment such as smart boards, and projectors helps to create a more engaging learning environment for students as well as teachers. Moreover, re-training should be offered to teachers how to teach content in a way that is more interesting to pupils.

    Another reason which plays an important role in the misbehaviour of students is inappropriate parenting. Since most of the parents are busy working, they do not spend enough time with their children to show them how to behave properly in schools. In other words, not only do parents need to monitor children, but they should also sometimes punish to make pupils realize that the way in which they behave is not appreciated. They would, therefore, understand their mistakes.

    In conclusion, poor behaviour in schools often stems from old-fashioned teaching styles and bad parenting. Nevertheless, modernizing schools and teaching techniques can solve the former issue, and the latter can be addressed by keeping watch on the way children behave by parents.

    1. Score 7. Watch your punctuation.
      Typically, the structure for a cause-effect essay is to discuss the cause in the first paragraph and the solution in the second paragraph, but I like what you’ve done here.

      1. Wow! score 7 is unbelievable. Thank you, dear Angela. I hope I can get such an amazing score on my test.

        Would you please guide me about punctuation? and mention which part had a problem?

        1. In this sentence, “I think this is mainly due to the lack of trained staff, and family environment.” there shouldn’t be a comma. (No subject, no comma when you use coordinating conjunctions)

  108. Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
    In today’s world where the sport is an integral part of each society, talking about sports stars and the amount of their income have been debated by many people. It is argued by some groups that high salaries are what professional athletes deserve, while this creates a feeling of unfairness among others. I agree with the first group to some extent.
    On the one hand, the individuals who do feel that sports professionals’ earning is fully justified, putting their point forward to indicate that being a top sportsperson is not as easy as it seems. To explain, it takes lots of time and requires hours of practice as well as the health risks involved to become a sports icon. Ali Daei, for instance, started playing football at the age of 18 and was injured several times during games. He underwent several surgeries and finally ended his professional life at the age of 30. This example supports the view that Top athletes also have to end up their careers in their early thirties. When considering the efforts they make, in my opinion, it is reasonable to receive a huge amount of money in such a short period to support their future life.
    On the other hand, there is no doubt that athletes’ roles are not as vital as some other professions such as engineers, teachers, and nurses in society. In fact, society can not live without the latter, whereas we could all live happily without football as an example of a professional game. Take teachers as an example whose average salaries at present are greatly lower than professional athletes, while their role is far more important and their working hours are longer compared to athletes.
    In conclusion, I take the view that it would be fair for the best athletes to more earning regarding their hard work. However, other professionals who are impacting society in a positive way must be rewarded proportionally.

    1. Score 6.5. Your response is nicely argued, but strictly speaking, you should start with the negative and follow it with the positive – ie your paragraphs should be reversed. Be sure to leave a line space between paragraphs.

  109. Some think that fathers should have time off from work after the birth of a child.
    To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    It is argued that companies should allow fathers to take paternity leave. This essay is in total agreement with this suggestion because it favors both fathers and mothers. This essay will initially throw light on how paternity leave positively affects an individual’s married life and then discusses how the employees, as well as the employers, gain from this trend.

    To begin, paternity leaves can prove to be advantageous for both parents. Dads who take time off of work after childbirth often have better relationships with their partners. For instance, research has shown a connection between men who take paternity leaves and increased marital stability. Moreover, this will make them happier at work, which is good for the business too. To illustrate, in a recent study it was found that paternity leaves builds employee loyalty and plays an important role in attracting and retaining talent. Joyous employees are more engaged and that can have a halo effect on their colleagues.

    Furthermore, it promotes gender equality in the workplace. Men should be given an equal amount of perks as female employees. The responsibility of parenting can’t be confined to one gender, nor should a company’s parental leave benefits; they must include paternity leave.

    In conclusion, it is necessary for fathers to be able to take time off after childbirth, as it not only helps them preserve their marriage but also boosts them to perform well in their professional lives, which will be lucrative for the company. Many employers have already realized this and started encouraging their workers to take paternal leaves. In the future, we will certainly have more organizations taking this route.

    1. Score 6.5. Watch your sentence variety
      paragraph 1 – “Moreover, this makes them happier at work – routine = simple present
      paragraph 2 – “Furthermore, paternity leave promotes gender equality…” You need to state what you’re referring to in each paragraph before you refer to it.
      Conclusion – childbirth as it not…” (No comma) (… have started)

  110. Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies.
    To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements?
    What measures can be taken to protect them?

    Nowadays, many renowned companies have resorted to persuading people into buying unnecessary things with a number of bulletins. This essay strongly addresses the problems with compelling adverts and also proposes relevant remedies to control them.

    To begin with, the general public is subtly coaxed by the adverts to acquire things that are not of an immediate necessity for them. People are exploited to buy things only because of the image of power, success, and glamour associated with them; for example, in order to attract customers, celebrities with a huge fan following are made to endorse products such as unhealthy food, fairness creams, and so on. Moreover, advertisement companies target children, who cannot make out the difference between reel and real, by including their favourite animated characters. For instance, photos of cartoon characters are used on the cover of junk food items, namely, chips, food containing high amounts of sugar, etc.

    To face these issues, there are appropriate solutions that can favour to overcome the arising problems due to misuse of the endorsements. One possible way is for the government’s intervention, they should implement strict laws and regulations to reduce advertisements related to unhealthy food, video games, and questionable pharmaceuticals. Furthermore, adverts using characters that are loved by the children should be banned. Subsequently, actors and actresses should be made aware of the negatives a certain bulletin can have on common people.

    To summarize, this essay reinstates that there are problems that can arise with excessive advertisements but solutions are available too. Commercials make use of public figures in an effort to allure adults and children into purchasing products. However, implementing laws with strict rules and regulations could progressively reduce this problem further.

          1. Glad you find my comments helpful. I’d give you a lot more feedback and sentence variety examples if you used my essay correction service.

  111. Most people today have computers, laptops and telephones so they can work from home.
    Do you think working from home has more advantages or disadvantages?

    With the advent of the internet and advancements in technology, working virtually has now been made simpler. This form of employment provides women an opportunity, who were not able to physically be present at their workplaces, due to several responsibilities posed upon them and gives an opportunity for people who are curious to explore the world, to work remotely. Despite the numerous benefits, there are an equal number of drawbacks that need to be taken into consideration; less exercise, limited interaction with the team members are some of the compelling issues that come along with it. I shall elaborate on these views and discuss a few other aspects on this topic in the forthcoming paragraphs.

    My views on this topic are strengthened by a few experiences in my personal life. For instance, one of my friends was forced to quit her job after she got married and the reason behind taking this huge step was the number of problems she was facing in order to manage both work and her personal life. But later on, when she started to work for companies that allow work from home, her life significantly changed for the better, as it not only assists in following her passion but also permits her to be present for her family. Moreover, individuals who are constantly on the move prefer employment options that allow them to work virtually. In addition to this, working remotely aids mankind in saving money and fuel required for travelling purposes which can prove to be good for our environment.

    In deep contrast to views (expressed above), there are a couple of demerits that should be discussed. Working from home can lead people to have a sedentary lifestyle, which will add up to the already increasing cases of obesity but this can undoubtedly be handled by enforcing discipline and exercising regularly. Furthermore, reduced contact with the team mates will adversely affect the overall performance, and it will be difficult to get instant support when a problem arises. However, an efficient management can effortlessly sort these problems out.

    Based on the elaborate discussion in the paragraphs above, we can conclude that advantages of working from home weigh more than the disadvantages. Many employers have already realized this and started encouraging their workers to work from home. In the future, we will certainly have more organizations taking this route.

    1. Score 6.5. Watch your word order and punctuation ie. “This form of employment provides people who are curious to explore the world and women, unable to be physically present at their workplaces due to several responsibilities posed upon them, an opportunity to work remotely.”

      1. Thank you so much for the suggestions.

        As per your advice, I edited the essay, will it still get a 6.5?

        With the advent of the internet and advancements in technology, working virtually has now been made simpler. This form of employment provides people who are curious to explore the world and women, unable to be physically present at their workplaces due to several responsibilities posed upon them, an opportunity to work remotely. Despite the numerous benefits, there are an equal number of drawbacks that need to be taken into consideration: less exercise, limited interaction with the team members are some of the compelling issues that come along with it. I shall elaborate on these views and discuss a few other aspects on this topic in the forthcoming paragraphs.

        My views on this topic are strengthened by a few experiences in my personal life. For instance, one of my friends was forced to quit her job after she got married and the reason behind taking this huge step was the number of problems she was facing in order to manage both work and her personal life. But later on, when she started to work for companies that allow work from home, her life significantly changed for the better, as it not only assists in following her passion but also permits her to be present for her family. Moreover, individuals who are constantly on the move prefer employment options that allow them to work virtually. In addition to this, working remotely aids mankind in saving money and fuel required for travelling purposes which can prove to be good for our environment.

        In deep contrast to views (expressed above), there are a couple of demerits that should be discussed. Working from home can lead people to have a sedentary lifestyle, which will add up to the already increasing cases of obesity but this can undoubtedly be handled by enforcing discipline and exercising regularly. Furthermore, reduced contact with the teammates will adversely affect the overall performance, and it will be difficult to get instant support when a problem arises. However, efficient management can effortlessly sort these problems out.

        Based on the elaborate discussion in the paragraphs above, we can conclude that the advantages of working from home weigh more than the disadvantages. Many employers have already realized this and started encouraging their workers to work from home. In the future, we will certainly have more organizations taking this route.

  112. Question: Some parents believe that their children should do educational activities during their free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

    It is sometimes argued that the youth need to take part in studying exercises in their leisure time. While this is valid to a certain extent, I believe that forcing kids to do academic actions after school would have an adverse bearing on their emotions and physically.

    To start with, there are many compelling reasons why it is essential for children to do educational activities such as math problems. First, on the emotional level, studying will benefit them dramatically. For a pupil, for instance, trying to improve their marks in school. Extra study will not only retain their knowledge but also help them to understand the lesson easier. As a result, children studying in their leisure time tend to outperform their peers. Second, on the physical level, numerous advantages are immediately seen from attending extracurricular educational programs. It is because children who learn new things instead of playing games will reduce the incidence of health problems such as obesity or high blood pressure.

    Despite these benefits, children will suffer from stress if their parents seem to want them to engage in studying too long. The main one is that the lack of time for relaxation causes more mental health problems. In this day and age, high expectations are carried by the kids, who must have been doing whatever they like. This plays a vital role in growing up more pressure on the youth, which leads to isolation and suicidal thoughts. Furthermore, young pupils who are forced to enrol in extra classes may become more fed up than the ones who study naturally. According to recent research, the rate of dropping out of school in hardworking students is increasing more and more, illustrating the potential threats to the global future.

    In conclusion, while some maintain that children should attend extracurricular activities, I believe that it is better to allow them to do their hobbies in their own time.

  113. Question: Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days. The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners.
    How far do you agree or disagree with this view?

    It is sometimes argued that the assessments not only limit the trainers but also make young pupils feel more anxious as the tests’ role has been increasing dramatically. While this thinking is valid to a certain extent, I believe that evaluation systems also have numerous advantages on both teachers and the youth.

    On the one hand, there are many compelling reasons why testing young learners has numerous negative impacts on the learning process. Firstly, teachers’ performance and ability to teach would be affected if we always focus on providing competition. For instance, the lecturers just need to fulfill the parents’ expectation by teaching test-based knowledge to provide higher academic results. As a result, less actual knowledge or life skills would be taught. Secondly, placing too much concentration on examinations would have an adverse bearing on young students. This is due to the fact that they do not have enough time to develop other skills, except cramming for the exams. Moreover, assessments always make them feel anxious and pressure, which increases the rate of dropping out of school.

    Despite these above benefits, I would contend that tests are still essential for teachers and children. On the lecturers’ level, this plays as a formative assessment, which illustrates the students’ weakness and strength. By estimating the young learners more frequently, the teachers would know which aspects do their children understand or not. This plays a vital role for tutors to suggest to young peers the most suitable job career. Furthermore, on the children’s level, assessments also have a number of effects. According to a recent survey, most of the interviewers said that they just learned when the exam was getting close. Hence, the evaluation motivates the youth’s inspiration, which makes them to focus on learning and pass other bad habits

    In conclusion, while some maintain that there is no need to provide the assessment due to its impact on teachers as well as young learners, I believe that it is better to estimate their knowledge regularly by providing tests.

  114. Question-Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be shut down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

    Zoos have always been a place that were a collection of animals for exhibition purposes and to showcase their exotic being themselves. But to what extent do they deliver any meaningful aspect? A section of the public opposes animals of the wild to be held captive while the other portion stands by the fact that protection is provided by these wildlife parks. This essay will be an analysis of the statement given and overview of my opinion.

    Numerous footages in online media have been encountered of the mistreatment suffered by the wild creatures at the zoos. They are such as, handling of the animals and nutrition that they consume. Some caretakers used force and harsh management to bath and clean the captives in order to get their work done on time. Moreover, they should be overly gentle to the pregnant animal mothers in addition to their younglings. Secondly, the food provided is synthetic and supplied out of natural process, that is, hunting. Identically, some spectators tease the poor animals with prohibited foods or actions that result in serious outcomes.

    On the other hand with pouchers illegally capturing wild beasts for the expensive body parts is a cause for incentive to keep these creatures in the wildlife parks. The rise in extinction rates have posed a threat on these critters and if no action is taken to safe them, the mother nature might loose them forever. Hence, zoos are considered for animal breeding and population increment and also to safeguard from the evil hunters.

    In my opinion, an animal must be in its home like any human being would want to, where they have freedom to explore, hunt and mostly far from being objects for display. The government should rather impose stricter rules on the pouchers and shield the depleting forests.

    Zoos do have its pros and cons, but it is the human conscience that will help to make better decision. If only the people were more humanely, the animals would have been fine just anywhere else.

  115. good day, I Submitted like twice but my Essay keeps disappearing. I’ll try one more time, hopefully it will remain

    QUESTION online shopping is becoming more and more popular, however, there are issues of identity theft.
    Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

    ANSWER
    Whether shopping on the internet has more benefits than drawbacks, has sparked contrasting opinions amongst the public. It is felt that this trend’s positives are glaring as compared to it’s negatives. Analyzing how it brings about varieties of items as well as discount rate on it’s products will prove this

    To begin, online malls has wide range of products. Looking at the Jumia online store as an example, this app is known to have numerous brands(Zara, Addidas, Nike e.t.c), as a typical Nigeria knows, these brands are not easily available in shopping malls due to the nation’s current security threat. As a result of this app, people do not need to travel far and beyond to get what they want, they can get it just by a click of a button. Through this lens, it is evident that the benefit of online shopping can be seen.

    In addition to this, online stores reduces prices on certain items occasionally. For example, the Apple app, who lowers the fees of some of their old gadgets to attract buyers. By doing so, customers get what they desire for a cheaper fee and the manufacturers creates space for their latest technology. As this offer is only available online, the advantage of this arrangement is clearly visible.

    To conclude, seeing how internet shopping provided varieties of options and decreases the fee of certain products, has shown that this trend has more pros than cons. It is hoped that online shopping will remain popular in the foreseeable future

  116. QUESTION: online shopping is becoming more and more popular, however, there are issues of identity theft.
    Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

    ANSWER
    Whether shopping on the internet has more benefits than drawbacks, has sparked contrasting opinions amongst the public. It is felt that this trend’s positives are glaring as compared to it’s negatives. Analyzing how it brings about varieties of items as well as discount rate on it’s products will prove this

    To begin, online malls has wide range of products. Looking at the Jumia online store as an example, this app is known to have numerous brands(Zara, Addidas, Nike e.t.c), as a typical Nigeria knows, these brands are not easily available in shopping malls due to the nation’s current security threat. As a result of this app, people do not need to travel far and beyond to get what they want, they can get it just by a click of a button. Through this lens, it is evident that the benefit of online shopping can be seen.

    In addition to this, online stores reduces prices on certain items occasionally. For example, the Apple app, who lowers the fees of some of their old gadgets to attract buyers. By doing so, customers get what they desire for a cheaper fee and the manufacturers creates space for their latest technology. As this offer is only available online, the advantage of this arrangement is clearly visible.

    To conclude, seeing how internet shopping provided varieties of options and decreases the fee of certain products, has shown that this trend has more pros than cons. It is hoped that online shopping will remain popular in the foreseeable future

  117. maryam _ doustmehraban

    Intelligence is the most important quality of a leader to what extent do you agree or disagree?…

    These days’ leadership is a very sophisticated skill consequently being smart is the major factor for a good leader, in my opinion, it can be extremely essential but it is not the most one.

    On one hand, organizing people and lead them to goals which are planed, need an intelligent person who can persuade and guide all the crowd for doing their best, for example, when someone wants to explain a road map, the first step is himself good understanding of the concept and situation or group abilities, nevertheless, this is the stage that the head must think and decide with cleverness. Also, the situation of every single person in the group or the way in which per individual communicate with others must be understood, and intelligence is the road light, for example, when you want to choose someone for a mission not only you must know about his personal capacity but also your information about his relationship can be determining and give you this assurance that you choose the right one.

    On other hand, perfect leadership demands vary of specialty and it’s not constricted to intelligence. A super leader needs a charismatic personality to convenience the crowd to follow him, to give you an idea whatever you have golden mind the ability to influence people with your words and manners is the key to connecting them to your aims.

    In conclusion, have a sharp mind can make you a good leader but there is more to become an excellent one.

  118. Que: Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Essay:
    There is no doubt that universities nurture students and prepare them to work in society. While some people believe that university students should study according to their interest, some argue that they should study subjects that will be useful in the future. I wholeheartedly concur with the former argument and in the following paragraph, I will present both arguments for and against the proposition.

    First and foremost, for those who advocate that university students should study something that will be useful, they think that students cannot contribute to society if they study subjects that are not useful. When students study subjects like science, technology or health-related subjects, they can contribute to society considerably as society needs a lot of people studying in these sectors. Studying subjects that are not useful in the future will put students into awkward predicament as they may cannot find a job, they cannot earn money.

    On the flip side, university students should study any subjects they like. Different students have different interest, some students hate subjects that are useful. No one should not confine students to only choose subjects that are useful. If students are forced to study certain subjects, some of them will lose interest in studying and they will not be motivated to study. As a consequence, their academic results suffer. In extreme cases, students may quit university. Furthermore, society is composed of different types of people working in different sectors. Some subjects such as acting or music may be regarded as not useful for somebody. However, we should not overlook that society needs people to act and perform music to entertain us.

    Having looked at both sides of the argument, although students may cannot contribute to society significantly if they study subjects that are not useful, I believe that students should study subjects at their will.

    1. Super. It would score 7. Use ‘can’ in the present, ‘could’ in the past, and ‘be able to’ everywhere else. ie. …although students may not be able to contribute…

  119. Question: It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

    Essay:
    There is no doubt that it is decisive for children to learn the difference between right and wrong. While some people believe that punishment is necessary to help children distinguish between right and wrong, others argue that punishment is not necessary. I strongly agree with the latter argument and in my opinion, parents and teacher should not punish children in any means.

    First and foremost, punishment leads to repercussions. Not only will punishment lead to rebellious behaviour of children, but they can also continue to do the wrong things. When parents punish their children such as hitting them or scolding them when they misbehave, they may become rebellious. Children will not listen to their parents anymore and they will continue to misbehave to show that they are rebellious. If parents educate their children what is right and what is wrong, children will accept and change their behaviour. They will not become rebellious.

    Secondly, punishment disrupt family harmony. When parents punish their children, children will be discontent with the punishment. Children may even argue with their parents and shout at them. They then do not communicate with each other and the atmosphere will be tense. As a consequence, family harmony will be seriously affected. Children may even leave home to prevent parents from punishing them. Take me as an example, once I did something wrong and my dad hits and curses me. Then, I shout at him and leave home. Punishment is useless in educating children. If parents communicate with their kids rather than punishing them, kids can learn what they are wrong and the atmosphere will be palliated.

    In conclusion, punishment lead to rebellious behaviour of children and disrupted family harmony. Therefore, I believe that under no circumstances should parents and teachers punish their kids in order to aid children to distinguish between right and wrong.

  120. Question: Some people think that governments should hold responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women, while others think that society is at fault. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Passage:
    There is no doubt that job opportunities for men and women are not equal. While some people think that government should bear the responsibility on this, others argue that society is at fault. I firmly agree with the latter argument, and in this essay I will discuss both sides of the argument.

    First and foremost, the side that advocate governments should shoulder responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women think that government as the promoter should educate the public to create equal job opportunities. For instance, the government can launch campaigns and advertisement to educate the public that men and women are equal. Women can also work on a variety of jobs. If the government do not educate the public, the phenomenon of job inequality between men and women continues to exist.

    However, in my point of view, I think that society should bear the responsibility because some people in society think that men should be the breadwinner while women should do housework at home. To illustrate, my dad works outside but my mum is a housewife. My dad always says that my mum should stay at home. It is the responsibility for society to change their views on women and to embrace women in working environment. If society do not change their norms towards women, equal job opportunities for men and women is insurmountable.

    Having looked at both sides, I wholeheartedly believe that society should hold responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women.

  121. Public college tuition should be free.

    Majority of colleges nowadays are very expensive. As a consequence a lot of students can’t afford it and therefore are not available to get their education. So I think that tuitions should be free for everyone for several reasons. Firstly, as I’ve said public colleges are far from free. The poor can’t educate because of it. Everyone must have the opportunity to learn. Although there are scholarships and similar things, it is still unfair to a significant number. An equality is needed. Our wealth and money don’t represent us as people. Our minds and soul are the essential thing. If there are these boundaries that limit some then there it wouldn’t be fair. Someone really smart with great potential won’t be able to expand its potential and develop something unique, just because of lack of money.
    Secondly, I think as a society we are gaining negative effects this way. By not allowing everyone to learn we are decreasing our chances of going forward. Throughout the history there were many great people that had amazing ideas but just weren’t able to develop them because they were poor. This way we are losing potential geniuses and great people. We are limiting our own progress. Furthermore, some students that pay their tuition aren’t as a smart and capable as some that don’t. World will have a smarter unit if colleges are free.
    All in all, colleges should be free and their tuition should be available for all. This will have only positive effects in the future. Both individuals and society will benefit from it.

  122. Que: A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

    People can receive worth from their status in society and properties. Society do not see outdated values, such as honour, kindness and trust, as essential at the present.
    In my opinion, this thought is completely true. First, people who can purchase goods from the world’s biggest and most renowned companies are seen as quite important person. Moreover, other people who see them as a big gun respect these guys rather than those working for a charity or are a scientist. Even younger people like pupils consider having a status as wealthiness. At the school, these students want to be friend with those who have expensive things. Almost nobody doesn’t care being a good person.
    The world is changing day by day and dependable people are disappearing. Furthermore, the less there are people whom you can trust, the more crimes do increase. In the future world, people may not feel safe themselves. If people did not see nobody whom they can trust, they would not want to give birth. Yet, this circumstance can change, of course. Still, there are a number of them whom we can believe. If we can save kind people, we can also save our world. The first step that we must take is changing our way of thinking. That is, people must judge a person’s worth, according to his kindness or truth. Eventually, the world will be a more peaceful place that we can live safely.
    As a consequence, a tiny problem might cause an enormous problem. And we can solve this problem from the beginning if we want. A person which has honour worths more respect, not a person which has material possessions.

  123. Some people say that ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree .

    Over the past decade, With a plethora of developments and innovations in various fields, it has become extremely essential to be up to date with the current affairs. While humans still have the habit or reading newspapers and magazines every day, it is believed by a few people that e-books and modern technology would replace it completely over time. This essay will discuss both the aspects.
    To be honest, E-Books and other present day techniques have made life much easier for the public. This is owing to the fact that preferences have changed with the upcoming generations. For example, carrying heavy books to school is no longer preferred by students. The office going people are comfortable carrying soft copies in a hard disk rather that printing it and travelling with hard copies. This would save abundant storage space and time too. In addition, it would help in reducing deforestation. Globally, millions of trees in the forests would be protected from being cut down and processed into paper which would be used for publishing magazines.
    On the contrary, certain groups in the society especially the elder community are facing numerous difficulties with this current practice of reading online. They believe that it does more harm than good. Firstly, the harmful radiations emitted from the electronic devices like computers and tablets would affect vision in the long run. Secondly, it also affects sleeping patterns in individuals. A recent study showed that majority of the individuals studying online tend to sleep late at night which would affect the health of the person. Thirdly, reading newspapers every morning has become habitual for the older generation which they find it hard to give up. Moreover, it is more affordable to buy them as they come at an extremely low price.
    In conclusion, despite the fact that newspapers and magazines are preferred by the older generations and that e-books and modern technologies carry their own merits and demerits, I strongly believe that this age old tradition needs replacement. This is in light of the fact that it is an efficient way in the recent times to save trees and making life more convenient for the public.

    1. Another nice one! Develop your ideas fully by sticking to the “statement -> explanation -> example” paragraph structure. Leave a line space between paragraphs and watch your use of the conditional! Score 6.5

  124. People think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to the modern buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    It is often believed by many that new buildings should be constructed replacing the existing old ones.I agree with this statement because it is one of the best ways to ensure the safety of the people and due to the changing trends.
    First of all, the construction of new buildings after demolishment of the old ones will improve the safety of the neighbourhood.This is owing to the fact that over time, due to various weather conditions including heavy rainfall the buildings would have become weak causing damage to the walls which is evident by the cracks in them.Furthermore, there are high chances of it collapsing anytime.For example,last year in New Delhi, the collapse of the an old house lead to the death of three people leaving a 10 year old child as an orphan.
    Secondly, the old buildings are no more liked by the people due to the changing trends . In addition, they have lost popularity due to poor infrastructure . Everyone desires to live in a dreamhouse of their own with all the advanced interiors ,facilities and designing.For example, a recent survey revealed that in the past decade, approximately half of the population have demolished their old houses and built new homes for their family.
    In conclusion, for the betterment of the society and due to the upcoming trends I firmly believe that old buildings should be knocked down paving way for the modern buildings.

    1. Your response would score 6.5 – fantastic organization! Watch your punctuation and word forms. Leave a line space between paragraphs!

  125. Question: Some people think that governments should hold responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women, while others think that society is at fault. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Passage:

    There is no doubt that job opportunities for men and women are not equal. While some people think that government should bear the responsibility on this, others argue that society is at fault. I firmly agree with the latter argument, and in this essay I will discuss both sides of the argument.

    First and foremost, the side that advocate governments should shoulder responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women think that government as the promoter should educate the public to create equal job opportunities. For instance, the governemnt can launch campaigns and advertisment to educate the public that men and women are equal. Women can also work on a variety of jobs. If the governemnt do not educate the public, the phenomenon of job inequality between men and women continues to exist.

    However, in my point of view, I think that society should bear the responsibility because some people in society think that men should be the breadwinner while women should do housework at home. To illustrate, my dad work outside but my mum is a housewife. My dad always says that my mum should stays at home. It is the responsibility for society to change their views on women and to embrace women in working environment. If society do not change their norms towards women, equal job opportunities for men and women is insurmountable.

    Having looked at both sides, I wholeheartedly believe that society should hold responsibility for not creating equal job opportunities for men and women.

    1. Super essay. Your response would score 6.5. Watch your simple present ‘s’ and strengthen your introduction & conclusion by identifying your main ideas.

  126. Quest: Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
    You should write at least 250 words.

    Many people believe that the way someone presents himself in terms of his appearance is more important than the work he does. This essay will examine which opinion outweighs the other and provide a logical conclusion.

    On the one hand, a person’s outfit reveals a lot about the body language and how serious he is about that particular thing. For instance, when there are board meetings taking place in a big company, the members generally suit up to emphasize the gravity of the meeting. Also, there are lot of job roles, for example, sales executive, which requires suitable clothing to connect with the client and it directly influences the chances of the deal getting through.

    On the other hand, for many organizations the standard of work delivered by an individual is far more crucial. Given the current circumstances of the pandemic, a lot of work has shifted to virtual modes which don’t require connecting with people face to face. Hence, a major chunk of the focus has moved from the dressing aspect to quality of work. A good example of this is the IT companies, where the performance is solely decided on the criteria of the grade of work done throughout the year. Moreover, giving employees the flexibility to dress accordingly gives them more freedom leading to higher productivity.

    To conclude, both the opinions have pros and cons depending on the industry. Even though, presenting oneself properly has advantages in terms of the intent shown towards an event, I strongly believe that quality of work supersedes it because of the freedom it provides and the situation we are currently in.

  127. It is irrefutable to say that citizens who live in the urban society have to face lot of consequences in their day to day life. perhaps, their are problems which emerge due to poor performance in academics, healthy issues roses due to the hectic as well as sedentary lifestyle and not able to take up pressure from the society. Furthermore, government need to take this as challenge and provide these people with good consultancy and not to encourage them to move to rural places. This essay will elaborate the problems in details before providing with the solutions.

    Firstly, individuals who are living in the metro cities have to face tons of problems that they encounters in their day to day life. especially, middle class families who are willing to sacrifice their health unorder to make better future for their infants. since, they do not wish the same life that they experienced in their infancy. so, working hard in the hazardous environment and following every instructions even they reluctant to do. not only those people even leper class people have to go through a lot struggle from getting to paid to surveying the entire day. For instance, lot of studies as well as journals have been published on the relevant topic as to give awareness about the present situation. furthermore, a surge in the death case have been reported in 2017 particular in leper class since, society not willing to provide enough jobs opportunities.

    on the other hand, people who are unable to resists the pressure they are moving to the rural areas due to this many companies are losing industrious citizens and the growth rate of industries demising day by day. however, bureaucrats noticed this sudden fall and implemented a policy as every person need to work on their flexible times which inturn benefitting to many people. suppose take north Korea as an example a decade ago the turn over of the country is low, but now due to change policies the country which are benefitted as well as encourage people to work harder and now country had reached to the top tier.

    To sum up, government should show special concern to the people by providing certain policies. nonetheless, people suffered a lot of problems every day by due interference of government problems may be minimized.

    1. question: People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems?
      Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

    2. Hi Praneeth – great content but watch your capitalization, punctuation, and organization. Your essay would score 6

  128. On valuing a person’s personality , we ought to provide him a fortificated status by looking not only upon the prosperity and the fame but also upon his charity and morality. Indeed , the loot we possess can be lost by robbery or anything else , so ; it is not crucial . Nothing cannot be purchased free so people suppose that it is very imperative . The other , the social position , should be one of the factors how well he can interact flexible with his environment . It , nevertheless , cannot be the ruler of a person ‘s aptitude because companions can be numerous if he has paramount money. In a very strange way , the admiration, beautiful heart and trust never come too easily and it takes even a decade .Some sort of people actually imagine that if they possess a crave to marry a plutocrat , they will be the standard persons amidst the others’ views .
    They can purchase everything they wish and everyone will give O a respect and belabour the words , ‘ After you ‘ . Of course , wealth and the luxuries will glow our fame colors and expedite our good news to the whole world .
    Unless we think deeply and wisely , our fame is fresh only when we are prosperous or we are still alive . Furthermore , the social status is not weighty ; the fellows will leave us if we have some quarrelling issues among us . Not a soul will cheer you if we are in the trough of business . The above twos will gift us the opportunities and suave life at most twenty years . Nonetheless , diametrically , they establish our superior news in the world more than the old-fashioned ones : labour and so forth. No time is necessitated to construct them . I would be repeated that the trust and our pity mind ‘ s manufactures need plethora years . We have a must to only say the right speeches and we should lend a pair of helpful and cherished hands . Kindness , a commodity which will polishes our personality , is built by aiding the weaks as the God admonished . The admiration from others is more difficult than the prior ones.Every perspective must incorporate into the pioneer one. In spite of the hardnees , the time which we will be still superior is untrammeled.We have to browse the biographies of Mother Trisa , Henry Dunas , Abraham Lincon , Michelle Obama , Daw Aung San Su Kyi and so on .
    To put in a nutshell , the wealth and the numbers of companions take ridiculously short time . As the things we receive very accessible fly away easily , we should ostracize them and try hard to own the respect , the cherished mind and the belife upon us . After they had been possessed , our prestige liberates freshly till to our down ancestries .

  129. Que: Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Family members are interconnected as an entity by Communication whereas, many people support the view that nowadays there is minimal Communication among them compared to old days. I completely agree with this opinion because most of their time is exploited by electronic devices and work-related matters.
    Firstly, increase the leverage of electronic devices, especially mobile phones reduce interaction among family member. This is because the technology advancements entice to go through various I entertainment available in such a kind. For instance, when each of the family members own a device, they spend most of their time discovering the main features of these appliances rather than being connected with the surrounding and it provides more choices to generate different aspects of the charismatic programme. These utterances kill time and occupy the mind constantly. Consequently, it deterred the person to think about surrounding and present situation, in addition to that, it erodes interest and concentration with other activities.
    Secondly, nowadays people do not get ample time to speak with family members due to their work conditions. Owing to the economic crisis and escalated prices both parents are working to cater to the basic needs of the family. When a mother works for twelve hours a day, for instance, she spends the remaining time on household chores and rest therefore other family members are also anticipated to do their own work. Inevitably this creates a dreary environment at home and youngsters incite to dwell on other detrimental actions. However, all those activities have a direct impact on family conversing with each other as in the past.

    In conclusion, nowadays families are not communicating themselves as merely as ancient days. I strongly agree due to the reason that they are forced to spend more time on gadgets and jobs indiscriminately.

    1. Gorgeous introduction and conclusion! You’d get full marks for organization, but your tense and punctuation inaccuracies would bring you down to 6.5

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