Free CELPIP Essay Correction

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Can I Get Free CELPIP Essay Correction?

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Yes! If you would like a free evaluation of your CELPIP writing task, put it in the comments box below. I will check it and provide a score.  CELPIP examiners look for coherence & organization, vocabulary & language efficiency, cohesion & grammar, and punctuation & completeness.

What is coherence & organization?

Coherence is the way that your writing forms a clean, neatly wrapped package. It has a strong introduction, paragraphs with developed topic statements, and a conclusion.

Organization is the way you lead your reader through your ideas developing your statements with details and examples.

What is cohesion & grammar?

Cohesion is the way you use cohesive devices to glue your ideas together and show how they are related.

Grammar is the tense, agreement, word order, conditionals, and article accuracy that makes your writing easy to read.

What is vocabulary & language efficiency?

Vocabulary is the range of words, synonyms, phrases and collocations that you use to express yourself.

Language efficiency is the way you combine words to express yourself concisely.

What is punctuation & completeness?

Punctuation is the length of the pause you want your readers to take in order to maximize their understanding of your writing.

Completeness is the attention you give to each part of the question.

 

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  1. You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City
    Museum shop during the holidays.
    You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
    • introduce yourself
    • explain what experience and special skills you have
    • explain why you are interested in the job

    Response:
    Dear Sir,
    My name is Soma Sarkar, a final year student of Ancient History of McCarthy college, would like to apply for the temporary position at City Museum.
    I started working in our high school library from an early age, which helped me pursue my career in the right direction. Since my early childhood, I have had immense influence by the greatest historians of the world and their fabulous work. I finally found my calling, and in college, I became the youngest library associate for the history section by the Head of the Department. In addition, winning the best student award on the unique project of cataloging the books is one of my significant accomplishments. I am confident, hardworking, possess excellent communication skills, am good at time-bound tasks, fast learner, and a fantastic team player.
    I am optimistic that I will gain a plethora of knowledge for my future endeavours from your reputable organization.
    I will be sincerely honoured to have an opportunity to work in your esteemed organization.
    Best Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

        1. You’re very welcome. You should feel very confident about writing generally, it’s just that you need a few extras for the examiners.

  2. You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by
    the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.
    Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter:
    • Say what the problem is.
    • Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting.
    • Ask the provider to solve the problem.
    Response:
    Dear Sir,
    I am writing this letter to express my extreme dissatisfaction with the provided arranged accommodation.
    According to my understanding, you promised me to offer a quiet and respectable living arrangement; unfortunately, it is not close to that. As per our agreement, my room was supposed to have an attached bathroom; however, upon arrival, I was astonished this apartment consists of three rooms with just one shared bathroom. The entire living space is stinky, and the kitchen area is filthy and not cleaned for several days. People are disrespectful, no personal space at all, and too loud to each other. On top of that, almost every night, other housemates have their guests coming and partying, causing tremendous sleep disturbance.
    Even though I liked the present accommodation’s location, I immediately need you to change it considering the reasons mentioned above. So this time, please stick to the agreed arrangement; otherwise, arrange for the full refund.

    Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

  3. You want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Volunteer Abroad, which organizes such travel.
    Explain why you want to volunteer.
    – State your skills and experience.
    – Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
    Response:

    Dear Sir,
    My name is Soma Sarkar, would like to apply for a volunteer position in your esteemed organization, where I can offer my service to any developing country. To begin with, I had a very rough childhood and gone through a lot of adversities. Since my childhood, I am deeply passionate about helping needy people. My own experience taught me to become an empathetic and patient human being.

    I completed my graduation in Social Science with several other certifications. Since my early school days, I always volunteer for many community activities and fulfilled all required commitments. In high school, I was the monitor for our “Girl Child Education” project and successfully raised $ 20,000 on behalf of our school. In addition, I organized a fundraising project for the victims of the Fort McMurray wildfire. I am associated with Red Cross Canada and have been working with them for the last three years.

    I am available for four months incoming fall season and can be placed in any country as per your organization’s requirement.

    I will be sincerely honoured to have an opportunity to render my service.
    Regards,
    Soma

  4. You are a volunteer at the local community theatre group. You have been asked whether the group should spend its money on costumes or storage.
    Which alternative do you support? Explain your position.
    Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    According to last year’s annual budget, we received a substantial spending amount for our drama group. In my opinion, we need to spend the fair share of the fund on our storage facility, if not the whole amount.

    Storage is a one-time expense, where we can keep the costumes yearlong, which will help us maintain the quality. In addition, we can always make a good deal on rent or lease with the real estate company, ensuring our long-term space. Finally, since every year we perform the same set of drama, we almost need to use a similar collection of costumes, and very seldom we change the character. Hence the storage option will be the best way to maximize the fund.

    On the other hand, spending money on the costume will only increase the expenses, unnecessarily all the old costumes need to be discarded. Moreover, after using the new ones, we will have to find out storage space too. Considering our drama pattern, we do not need to discard the old costumes if appropriately maintained.
    Although storage will initially cost us more, in the long term, it will help us out to save and spend for next year too. So, therefore, let us spend on storage.

    Thank you for giving me a chance to provide input on this issue.

  5. You are organizing a group trip to a museum.
    Write a letter asking for information about
    • upcoming exhibits,
    • local attractions, opening times,
    • and group rates

    To whom it may concern,

    I am writing in connection with a forthcoming trip to the city museum with our middle school science students. I wonder if it would be possible for you to provide some details regarding the below-mentioned particulars.

    We are looking for some detailed information on upcoming exhibits and opening times of the same. Other than the inside museum activity, if you could suggest any local attraction could be included within a ten-hour long itinerary. Additionally, anticipating the heavy traffic on the weekend, these suggestions will help us to plan a successful and crisp tour. Last time we were not able to finish on time due to the lack of planning.

    Since the individual ticket price is slightly higher, I wondered if any student discount or group rate will be available for the group size of 20 students. Furthermore, it will be appreciated if you could respond at the earliest so that the school authority could make a nice enjoyable trip for students.

    I Look forward to hearing from you soon.

    Regards,
    Soma Sarkar

  6. Your company is considering offering new fathers paternity leave. The company has sent you a survey asking for your opinion.
    Explain why you support or object to the suggestion.

    Thank you for including me in this survey and giving me a chance to provide input on this issue. Conspicuously parenting leave for new fathers is one of the most discussed topics in today’s modern world’s workplace. I completely support this idea as this needs serious attention.

    I passionately believe that both parents have an equal commitment and duty to their child, especially since the first few months are too hectic and strenuous for a new parent. Usually, the orthodox people think that for the newborn child mother is always needed chiefly. But on the contrary, a father requires to devote the same time as the mother. Thus, for example, a father needs to be present at the regular doctor’s check-up or continuously changing the nighttime routine with mom.

    So being a new father, this becomes almost impossible for them to cope with the pressure and maintain the balance between work and personal life. Additionally, in this process, they lose their productivity, and their performance intensely gets affected.

    Based on the above discussion, I strongly encourage the parental leave idea for new fathers; therefore, I vote in favour of this.

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