CELPIP Writing: Learn to use high-scoring structures.

CELPIP Writing Sample Answer

In the following CELPIP Writing Sample answers, you will see how you need to format your responses to tasks 1 and 2.

CELPIP Writing Task 1 Email Sample

The following CELPIP Writing Sample gives you an idea of the structure you need to follow for your task 1 email.

 

RE: Bank Loan Repayment Issues

To Whom It May Concern,

I am writing to inform you that I am currently facing a temporary delinquency issue with regard to my monthly loan payment.

I originally borrowed $10,000 to supplement my savings when my house was damaged during last year’s tornado. I needed the money to make extensive repairs and was very grateful to your bank for helping me out during this very difficult time.

The loan repayment schedule was structured, so I would only pay about $340/month, including a 3% interest rate, over a period of 30 months.

Unfortunately, this month I am unable to meet my repayment obligation. I have been under the weather for a full 3 weeks, and my employer has refused to pay me for my leave. This situation has reduced my salary to a fourth of what it should be; however, this is only a temporary setback, and I should be back on my feet soon and able to make my scheduled payments next month.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Regards,

Ann Willson

CELPIP Task 2 Survey Response Sample

The following CELPIP Writing Sample gives you an idea of the structure you need to follow for your task 2 survey response.

Your response does not have to be in a letter format, but if you choose a letter format, make sure your formatting is accurate.

 

February 5th, 2019

Mr. Sam Williams
FitReady Gym
Tuckson Drive
Saskatoon SK S7H 4E8

RE: Gym Services issues

Dear Mr. Williams,

I have been an active member of “FitReady Gym” for the last 2 months. I was initially impressed by the attractive, exclusive and distinguished facilities you appeared to be offering  including the personal trainer, sauna, pool, and Christmas special mentioned in the local newspaper.

To my utter disappointment, I have not been able to get the featured services. Despite multiple attempts to access a personal trainer, I haven’t been able to get hold of any, due, apparently, to insufficient staff. The unhygienic condition of the Sauna is deplorable, and the pool has been closed as a result of technical issues.

Needless to say, I am thoroughly disappointed. I have tried to bring my concerns to the local manager’s attention, but to no avail. He has made no attempt to rectify the situation and has added fuel to the fire with petty excuses. Had I known I would receive an ‘ordinary’ rather than ‘exclusive’ experience at your gym, I would have chosen something more inexpensive.

I suggest you look into this matter and make any necessary arrangements to provide the exclusive facilities mentioned in the advertisement. If this is not possible, please cancel my membership and refund the complete fees.

I really hope that you deal with these issues and take steps to provide the excellent customer service that I, as a member of your gym, deserve.

Regards,

Alan Dan

CELPIP  Writing Sample Answer Corrected

In the following CELPIP Writing Sample answers that were submitted for Writing Correction, you will get some ideas for improving your CELPIP Writing in tasks 1 and 2.

CELPIP Task 1 Email Sample Correction

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CELPIP Task 2 Survey Sample Correction

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27 thoughts on “CELPIP Writing: Learn to use high-scoring structures.”

  1. You recently returned from your honeymoon in Mexico. The staff at the resort really exceeded your expectations, providing you and your spouse with a number of complimentary services you didn’t anticipate.
    Write an email to the company in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:
    Describe the services received, and how they exceeded your expectations.
    Explain how the services affected your experience.
    Express your gratitude for the services received.
    Dear Manager,
    I’m Renata Dias, and I visited your resort in Cancun last month, it was an amazing experience for me and my husband, the service that your team provided was flawless, and I would like to point out the room service, the buffet menu and the outdoor activities were above and beyond my expectations.
    The room service and the buffet menu were the best that I have ever experienced. The room was cleaned every day, the towers were constantly changed for new ones, and the vase with fresh flowers from the gardener every morning was a special tough. The buffet menu on both breakfast and lunch were incredible, it was even a little bit hard to chose from the variety of food served.
    Also, I would like to specially thank you for the scuba diving class that the resort offered to us. I would never imagine myself doing this sport, so thank you so much for giving me this opportunity.
    Thank you once more, and I will recommend your resort to all my friends and in my social media as well.
    Best Regards,
    Renata Dias

  2. Write an email to the restaurant’s manager in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:

    State what problems you had with the food you ordered.
    Complain about the service.
    Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction.

    Dear Manager,

    I hope you are staying safe and healthy!
    Me and my family appreciate you and your team working hard to give great hospitality to us while at our recent visit in this. But I would like to share my experience in detail with you.

    I visited the restaurant on Friday evening to celebrate my daughter’s birthday! Many of our friends have recommended this place to us, hence birthday was just an excuse.
    We booked the reservation for 9 people, as soon as we entered the restaurant table was not ready and the host looked little unaware about the reservation, after dealing with her for 7-10 minutes she mentioned, she can find our reservations. Quite an embarrassing moment in front of every one! I would have ignored this, but then my one guest was served chicken soup instead of vegetarian soup. She was very upset about it as she is vegetarian.
    I would encourage you to ask workers to be more mind full while taking the reservation and check all the resources you have for the booking , so people like me not get embarrassed in front of the guest! I hope you understand!

    Again, thank you, I am looking forward to hear from you if there could be any service adjustment done for the inconvenience.

    Thanks,
    Tanvi Prajapat

  3. Dear Manager,
    I am writing this email with regard to the unfortunate experience I had while visiting your restaurant last Friday with my family. Also, I believe that these inconveniences can be avoided in the future if certain measures are taken.
    I had a dinner booking of six members prior to my visit. However, we were made to wait for about 7-8 minutes as the manager had to investigate the system to find our names. It was quite an embarrassing moment for us. Later, we ordered starters with both vegetarian and non-vegetarian choices, however, only the latter food items were served. Moreover, the soup was over-spicy, and the vegetables were rotten.
    The drinks were served very late as the staff members were captivated by the Soccer match on TV. I looked for a manager to address my grievance, but he was not present.
    Even though the food cost me an arm and leg, but I was highly disappointed by the unprofessional conduct of the staff and the substandard of the food.
    I would request you to train your staff to provide ethical services to valuable customers. In addition, there should be a complaint box available where the customers can provide negative feedback.
    I appreciate your time and I hope you would inspect this matter to avoid it happening again so that the reputation of your esteemed restaurant does not suffer.
    Regards,
    Kunal Maini

  4. Dear Sir,

    I am writing this letter to you to compliment as well as expressing my dissatisfaction regarding the college cafeteria.

    One important reason why I am a huge admirer of the cafeteria, it’s the different types of cuisine they provide, having said that, the complimentary shake is extremely delicious which is free of cost with the meal. Moreover what impresses me the most, how the chefs are so accurate and excellent when it comes to the taste as well as the warmth of the food when served.

    However, there are few things which need your attention. The current waiters don’t treat the customers well. To elaborate, most of the time they are inactive and ignore the customer’s request. Furthermore, many of them operate the mobile during working hours. Lastly, the seating capacity of the cafe is not adequate if we compare it to the customer’s visit per day.

    In my opinion, you should really send the current staff for the training and recruit the new staff. Moreover, you can add more seats in the cafeteria as this will resolve the problem of the long queues outside the cafe.

    I look forward to hearing from you.

    Regards,

    Steve

  5. Write an email to the restaurant’s manager in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:

    State what problems you had with the food you ordered.
    Complain about the service.
    Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction

    Dear Manager,
    I hope you are doing well and staying safe from Covid-19.
    Recently, I and my Wife visited your restaurant on the occasion of our 1st anniversary. we were very happy because we are going to have dinner in a world-renowned restaurant in our very memorable day. when I entered the restaurant I told them the reservation name but she didn’t recognize us, after standing there 15 minutes finally got our table.
    we ordered loaded cheese fries with no bacon as an appetizer, but we got our food with bacon on it. I was so embarrassed in front of my wife. our main entry food comes tip-top condition. we didn’t eat the appetizer because there was bacon on it, server didn’t ask us to make a new one with no bacon. we feel so bad about that, it ruined our special day.
    moreover, I suggest you put this issue in the front of the house staff knowledge to not happen again however, I feel you should refund the money for our appetizer or 2 free meal course
    Hoping, to hear back from you soon.
    kind regards
    Vikas

  6. Read the following information.

    Field Trip Transportation
    Your children’s grade 5 teacher likes to take children on field trips to museums or parks. Sometimes the teacher takes the children on public buses. Some parents are unhappy. They say the school should always use school buses even though it’s more expensive. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey.

    Choose the option that you prefer. Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.

    Option A: Public Transit: I think it’s okay for children to travel on public transit.
    Option B: School Buses: I would prefer children to only travel on school buses.

    personally, I feel the Education center should take the student on public buses. However, I understand why parents think school buses are safe for a school trip because they don’t want any mishappening to happen during the school trip with their kids.

    To begin with, I think if the school will take kids in public buses to the museum or parks they will know things that happen in our day to day basics. public bus experience will help in their future when they will graduate from school. it is safer for children to ride in public buses because one teacher will be with them additionally one assistant will be also with them to organise and watch the kids.
    secondly, children will learn how to line up properly in crowded public places and get on the bus sequence-wise. However, school kids will not learn this on the school bus because there will be only known schoolmates.
    last but not least, the school should think about the security of the children and create a security plan for this trip like giving an identity card to kids to keep in the pocket if they lost somewhere it will be helpful, identity card should consist of his name, school teacher phone number, parents telephone number and his home location.
    Thank you, for asking my opinion, However, I will agree with the decision what the school organization made.
    kind regards
    vikas

  7. Write an email to the restaurant’s manager in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things:

    State what problems you had with the food you ordered.
    Complain about the service.
    Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction.

    To Whom it Maybe concerned,

    I am writing to draw your attention to my terrible experience that I had in your restaurant on new year’s eve.

    I made a reservation at your restaurant 3 months ago. In the reservation, I requested a sea view table for two and prepaid for your famous dish — Roasted Chicken. However, we were told that there was no more sea view table upon arrival. We had to sit beside the washroom or otherwise wait for 2 hours. This was undesirable for us, yet we accepted the offer since we were starving.

    After we settled, I was informed the Roasted Chicken was sold out. I was furious because I did prepay for the dish, however, I got nothing back. I demanded to talk to the restaurant manager, yet my wish was not satisfied because you were not available at that time. At last, we decided to leave without ordering anything. However, your staff asked me to pay for a $300 bill for the service.

    Your restaurant is famous in the town, it is unbelievable that you allow this ridiculous experience to happen. I demanded a formal explanation and apologize, as well as a full refund from you.

    I hope this issue could be resolved to everyone’s satisfaction as soon as possible.

    Best regards,
    Yolanda

  8. Dear Caribbean Hotel Manager,

    My husband and I spent the las two weeks in your Hotel celebrating our honeymoon and I have to said it was the best experience ever. The staff were so polite and helpful making everything special for us.

    When we booked our honeymoon package at the Caribbean hotel, we got an idea about what it included. However, your team were above and beyond of our expectations. To begin with an amazing decoration in our suite with flowers and balloons that really made us feel so special. Also, We went to a romantic expedition to the island and when we got back they prepared an special dinner on the beach only for us. They always had the best table reserved for us at dinner time and they created a little sign that said “Mr&Mrs. Correa”, it definitely made our night!

    We are so glad that we choose your hotel to celebrate such as important days. We are going to be always grateful to all the staff that work hard to give us the best customer service experience ever. Thank you so much for the special treatment give to us and for having excellent people working at your facility. We definitely are going to celebrate our next anniversary there.

    Best Regards,

    Mitzha Correa

  9. Niranjan Kumar

    You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.

    Shopping Complex: This shopping mall would include restaurants, a large supermarket, and a movie theatre.

    I believe it’s time for our city to build a shopping complex on the vacant land which is in the Ramoji Nagar in the center of the city which is more flexible for commuters. I will articulate my opinion in the following passage.

    To begin with, Nowadays, malls are playing a key role in retail sales in terms of all aspects for their customer needs many malls are inducted with all brands under one building. Having many restaurants under one roof is feasible for guests, they can have different kinds of cuisine with their loved ones. For example, In Dubai emirates mall they have constructed a separate food court for the footfalls in the complex to enhance quality cuisine.

    Secondly, A huge supermarket can demonstrate various kinds of ingredients to fulfill the homemaker’s needs as well as to the chefs, instead of looking online this would be Magnificant, Although, theatre is the best platform to the family who wants to spend their quality weekend by watching a film.

    in conclusion, I Strongly believe Option A would be the best, and residents can freely do their shopping under one roof. I will support the city whatever the decision has taken.

  10. Anthar Sanchez

    Dear Manager,
    My name is Tharan Schweetz and I am a long-time loyal customer at this restaurant. I’ve always had excellent service and delicious food, however, last Friday when I was there with my husband around dinner time, we couldn’t be more disappointed. I had some questions about your new dishes, but the waiter was new at the job and had poor training on the menu offerings, so it was very confusing for us when he tried to clarify my doubts. On top of that, the food came later than what I’m used to waiting for it and it was cold, and so we had to send it back to the kitchen. Unfortunately, I can’t recall my server’s name for that night.
    I deserve compensation for the poor experience I had, and I would like a free meal for my husband and me. I hope you can train your employees better and get back to the outstanding service you usually provided.
    Best regards,
    Tharan Schweetz

  11. Scenario: You recently made reservations for dinner at a very famous and expensive restaurant in town. However, the meal and the service were terrible. The restaurant manager was not available to solve the problem, so you left without a resolution.

    Task: state what problems you had with the food you ordered, Complain about the service., Describe how you want the restaurant to resolve the problem to your satisfaction.

    Dear manager,

    I am writing to report problems and dissatisfaction regarding your meal and service during my visit to your restaurant.

    i arrived to the restaurant at the time mentioned when i was making the appointment. I expect a smooth flow from the front desk to my dining table. However the receptionist failed to locate my reservation which was made in advance a month ago. It took her around 15 minutes to sort things out. Even a regular restaurant has a better book-keeping ability when it comes to reservation arrangement.

    In regards to the meal provided during my visit, the food are not cooked properly and it contains human hair in the side dish, which disgusted myself and i lost my appetite after that. In addition, i requested a specific glass of wine during ordering. However, they provided me with another type of wine without letting me know in advance. These mistakes are not acceptable, especially from a well known fancy restaurant in town like yourself.

    All in all, the meal and service from your restaurant are far from expectation and i would like to request a compensation from you due to my negative experience. Another thing i would suggest is providing training to the kitchen crew and server crew. I would hate to see others have to experience what i been through.

    Fell free to contact me and looking forward to hearing from you soon.

    Best regards,
    Angus

  12. Dear Manager,

    I am writing this email to express my dissatisfaction with the customer service that I got from your restaurant. It was my younger sister’s birthday, last week and I made a reservation for dinner at your restaurant for 6 people. At first, when we arrive there our reserved table was not got ready and your staff made us wait for 6-7 minutes which was very disappointed for me.

    Later on, we ordered our food from your waiter for both vegetarian and non-vegetarian guests. However, we got our food after a long wait and all the food items were too spicy and overcooked. None of us liked that food and we decided to complain about it to you but unfortunately, you were not present there. Therefore, I approached your staff to complain to them but nobody paid attention to my words which is another impressive reason for my frustration towards restaurant and staff behavior.

    I would appreciate it if you look forward to this matter and provide me a refund of the money that I have had spent there. Furthermore, I want to suggest that, you should provide proper training to your staff for table sitting along with effective customer service skills.

    I hope you will consider my opinion to improve your service quality.

    Regards,
    Raj

  13. Niranjan Kumar

    You are going on a short training course at a college in Toronto, Ontario. You need somewhere to live while you there.

    write an email to the accommodation officer at the college in about 150-200 Words. Your email should do the following things;

    * explain your situation
    *describe the accommodation you require
    * say when you will need it

    Dear Sir/Madam,

    My Self Ramu Alla, I have enrolled in 3 months course in food processing in your college. I would like to make an inquiry about the accommodation in your campus availability. Since I am new to the city I am not aware of the locality and I don’t have any known person in this city, It would be fruitful if you could arrange suitable accommodation for.

    I would like to live in a peaceful environment, I am looking for a single bedroom which is close to college, grocery and public transportation. Also, I need a chef who can cook delicious cuisine for my lunch and dinner. Next, I would like to know how much it would cost me from July to September.

    As per the admission application, my first class will begin in the 1st week of July. However, I am planning to land in Toronto on 27 June 2021. It would be magnificent if you confirm my shelter requirement by 15 of this month.

    I look forward to hearing from you,

    Yours Sincerely,
    Ramu

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